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Hi. As requested on my talkpage, here is the copyedit:

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  • "Brave Story (ブレイブ·ストーリー, Bureibu Stōrī) is a Japanese novel written by Miyuki Miyabe. The novel is available in the English language by Viz Media. The story follows high-school student Wataru Mitani as he stumbles upon "Vision", a fantasy world, after his mother's horrific traffic accident." Lets hear about the Japanese light novel first. Try "Brave Story (ブレイブ·ストーリー, Bureibu Stōrī) is a Japanese light novel written by Miyuki Miyabe. The two volumes of Brave Story were published by Kadokawa Shoten from March 2003 to ..."
  • "The story follows high-school student Wataru Mitani as he stumbles upon "Vision", a fantasy world, after his mother's horrific traffic accident." What is his goal in Vision? To get out of the place and return to his world?
  • After the one/two sentence plot summary, then add that "Brave Story is licensed for English language release in North America by Viz Media. It published Brave Story from ... to ...."
  • "The novel was adapted into a manga by Yoichiro Ono. It was serialised in Shinchosha's Weekly Comic Bunch. Shincosha released the manga's twenty bound volumes between April 9, 2004 and May 9, 2008." Try "The novel was adapted into a manga by Yoichiro Ono and serialised in Shinchosha's Weekly Comic Bunch. Shinchosha collected the chapters of Brave Story in twenty tankōbon volumes and released them from April 2004 to May 2008."
  • Warner Bros. adapted the novel into an animated film on July 8, 2006. The film was nominated for "Animation of the Year" at the 2007 Japanese Academy Awards. The film was internationally released in Australia, the United Kingdoms, France, Taiwan and Germany." Maybe "* Warner Bros. adapted the novel into an animated film, which premiered on July 8, 2006. The film was nominated for "Animation of the Year" at the 2007 Japanese Academy Awards and also released in Australia, the United Kingdom, France, Taiwan and Germany."
  • The novel was loosely adapted into three video games. They were: Sony Computer Entertainment's PSP game, Brave Story: New Traveler; Namco Bandai's Nintendo DS game, Brave Story: My Dreams and Wishes and Sony Computer Entertainment's PlayStation 2 game, Brave Story: Wataru's Adventure." Try "The novel was loosely adapted into three video games: Sony Computer Entertainment's PSP game, Brave Story: New Traveler; Namco Bandai's Nintendo DS game, Brave Story: My Dreams and Wishes and Sony Computer Entertainment's PlayStation 2 game, Brave Story: Wataru's Adventure."

Plot:

  • "At school, Wataru Mitani, a meek and unassertive boy, notices Mitsuru Ashikawa for his over-politeness and Kaori Daimatsu, whom Wataru['s " crush"] has a crush on."
  • "One day, Wataru's parents divorce and his father runs off, leaving Wataru and his mother behind." That's out of the blue. Does the father run off with the stepmom? Is there a reason why he ran off?
  • "Wataru's stepmother has an argument with his mother over who his father really loves." Where did the stepmom come from?
  • dewikilink "fantasy world". Already wikilinked in the lead.
Will finish looking over article in a little bit. It's really interesting. :) Kaguya-chan ( talk) 19:54, 7 July 2009 (UTC) reply
  • "Without Mitsuru knowing, Wataru follows him through a portal in a reputedly haunted house to a fantasy world called Vision." Is the haunted house part really necessary?
  • "There, Mitsuru's status as a traveller is revealed. It is also shown that Mitsuru's reason for becoming a traveller is to revive his dead sister." Combine the two: "There Mitsuru is revealed to be a traveller, who wishes to resurrect his sister."
  • "Mitsuru and Wataru overcome an ambush by another traveller and Wataru is granted status of traveller." Who grants Watasu the status of traveller?
  • "Mitsuru tells Wataru to go out of Vision because of its dangers, revealing his vicious nature." How is that vicious?
  • "Wataru has to battle Mitsuru to find the fifth gemstone. Each stone had different qualities: charity, bravery, faith, grace and the power of darkness and light. Wataru and his friends have to collect all of these gemstones to get to the Tower of Destiny, where the Goddess grants each Traveler one wish. During Wataru's adventures, he meets friends and foes." Okay, definitely not making any sense now. Try only if it's the correct order of events "Wataru and his friends have to collect five gemstones to go to the Tower of Destiny, where the Goddess grants each Traveler one wish. Each stone has a different quality: charity, bravery, faith, grace, and the power of darkness and light. During Wataru's adventures, he encounters friends and foes. Unfortunately, Wataru has to battle Mitsuru to find the fifth gemstone." Traveller is capitalized here. Is it capitalized in the novel?
  • How does it end?
I'm sorry if the comments sound mean. I just don't understand the plot. :(
  • Haven't finished the novel and it was borrowed so yeah...

Novel:

  • Not sure you have to mention the translator

Manga:

  • "The manga alternate retelling of the novel by Yoichiro Ono was inspired by the novel's winning of the Batchelder Award." Try "The manga adaption of Brave Story by Yoichiro Ono came about after the novel won the Batchelder Award."
  • "The manga serialization in Shinchosha's Weekly Comic Bunch ended on March 14, 2008." When did the serialization begin?
  • Can't find any info about when the manga started serialization.
  • "The individual chapters were published into 20 tankōbon volumes, which were released between April 9, 2004 and May 9, 2008.[15][16] The manga is licensed and published in English by Tokyopop,[17] which released the first tankōbon volume of the manga on June 12, 2007.[18] It is also licensed in France by Kurokawa.[19]" Try "Shinchosha collected the individual chapters into 20 tankōbon volumes, and released them from April 9, 2004 to May 9, 2008.[15][16] Tokyopop licensed the manga for an English language release in North America.[17] The first Brave Story volume was published on June 12, 2007.[18] Brave Story is also licensed in French by Kurokawa.[19]"

Film:

  • Any way to work the cast list into the paragraph? Maybe "The cast featured Takako Matsu as Wataru Mitani, Eiji Wentz as Mitsuru Ashikawa, Yo Oizumi as Ki-kima, and Miki Imai as the Goddess of Destiny.
  • "The film's cast should be in list format and cover only the major characters" as per the peer review.

Soundtrack CDs

  • Maybe renaming the title to either "Soundtracks" or "CDs", but not both.
  • "On July 5, 2006, Sony Music Entertainment released an animation soundtrack CD for Brave Story. Its songs are composed by Juno Reactor." Try: "On July 5, 2006, Sony Music Entertainment released an original soundtrack for Brave Story; Juno Reactor composed the songs."
  • "On November 29, 2006, Avex Trax released a soundtrack of Brave Story, which was sung by TRF using the lyrics of Tetsuya Komuro and Takahiro Maeda." Try: "On November 29, 2006, Avex Trax released a Brave Story soundtrack, which featured lyrics composed by Tetsuya Komuro and Takahiro Maeda, and sung by TRF."
  • "On September 3, 2008, Universal Music released a soundtrack CD of Brave Story, which was sung by Rice using the lyrics of Yuki Sakurai" Try :"Another soundtrack CD of Brave Story was released by Universal Music on September 3, 2008, that had lyrics written by Yuki Saurai and was sung by Rice."
Almost finished copyediting. :) Kaguya-chan ( talk) 22:58, 8 July 2009 (UTC) reply

Reception:

  • "The publisher of the Brave Story novel received Batchelder Award in 2008." Maybe a note that the Batchelder Award is for publishers, not books?
  • " Mania.com's Dani Moure compares the film's "old-fashioned" character designs to those of Studio Ghibli's."
  • Maybe try paraphrasing some of the quotes?

Images:

  • Expand the cover caption to explain that the picture is the English cover, not the original Japanese.

Hope the comments are helpful. Kaguya-chan ( talk) 13:27, 10 July 2009 (UTC) reply

Film production credits

Transcribed from the UK DVD cover as requested (names all in CAPS on the inlay but I hate typing in caps):

  • Executive producer Chihiro Kameyama
  • Animation Production by Gonzo
  • Music by Juno Reactor ("The matrix" series)
  • Theme by Aqua Timez "The morning with determination" (Epic Records Japan)
  • Co-excutive producers Kazuyoshi Seki, Hidehiko Koike, Shoji Murahama, Aigo Wana, Soichi Akiyama, Junichi Watanaba
  • Produced by Hiroyoshi Koiwai, Koji Kajita, Daisuke Sekiguchi
  • Screenplay by Ichiro Okouchi
  • Character Created by Takuhito Kusanagi
  • Character Creation & Design/Chief Animation Director Yuriko Chiba
  • 3D Direction by Hiroshi Shirai
  • Director of Photography Hiroo Yoshioka
  • Edited by Takeshi Seyama
  • Sound Design by Tom Myers
  • Sound Direction by Yota Tsuruoka
  • Color Direction by Hiromi Uchibayashi
  • Art Direction by Makoto Kobayashi, Hitoshi Ueda, Toshiharu Murata, Akihiro Hirasawa
  • Design Collaboration by Yoshimitsu Ohashi, Hiroyuki Kanba
  • Animation Directors Tomihiko Ohkubo, Yukio Takahashi, Masato Bessho, Mahiro Maeda
  • Special Sponsor Kao Merit
  • Distributed by Warner Bros. Pictures

Shiroi Hane ( talk) 12:57, 11 July 2009 (UTC) reply

Another Film Festival

The movie will be featured at the Japan Film Festival in Lethbridge put on by the Japan Foundation and the Consulate-General in Calgary. The Festival will take place on October 19th 2013. More info can be found here. -- Aceman67 ( talk) 21:40, 17 September 2013 (UTC) reply

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Copyedit

Hi. As requested on my talkpage, here is the copyedit:

Lead:

  • "Brave Story (ブレイブ·ストーリー, Bureibu Stōrī) is a Japanese novel written by Miyuki Miyabe. The novel is available in the English language by Viz Media. The story follows high-school student Wataru Mitani as he stumbles upon "Vision", a fantasy world, after his mother's horrific traffic accident." Lets hear about the Japanese light novel first. Try "Brave Story (ブレイブ·ストーリー, Bureibu Stōrī) is a Japanese light novel written by Miyuki Miyabe. The two volumes of Brave Story were published by Kadokawa Shoten from March 2003 to ..."
  • "The story follows high-school student Wataru Mitani as he stumbles upon "Vision", a fantasy world, after his mother's horrific traffic accident." What is his goal in Vision? To get out of the place and return to his world?
  • After the one/two sentence plot summary, then add that "Brave Story is licensed for English language release in North America by Viz Media. It published Brave Story from ... to ...."
  • "The novel was adapted into a manga by Yoichiro Ono. It was serialised in Shinchosha's Weekly Comic Bunch. Shincosha released the manga's twenty bound volumes between April 9, 2004 and May 9, 2008." Try "The novel was adapted into a manga by Yoichiro Ono and serialised in Shinchosha's Weekly Comic Bunch. Shinchosha collected the chapters of Brave Story in twenty tankōbon volumes and released them from April 2004 to May 2008."
  • Warner Bros. adapted the novel into an animated film on July 8, 2006. The film was nominated for "Animation of the Year" at the 2007 Japanese Academy Awards. The film was internationally released in Australia, the United Kingdoms, France, Taiwan and Germany." Maybe "* Warner Bros. adapted the novel into an animated film, which premiered on July 8, 2006. The film was nominated for "Animation of the Year" at the 2007 Japanese Academy Awards and also released in Australia, the United Kingdom, France, Taiwan and Germany."
  • The novel was loosely adapted into three video games. They were: Sony Computer Entertainment's PSP game, Brave Story: New Traveler; Namco Bandai's Nintendo DS game, Brave Story: My Dreams and Wishes and Sony Computer Entertainment's PlayStation 2 game, Brave Story: Wataru's Adventure." Try "The novel was loosely adapted into three video games: Sony Computer Entertainment's PSP game, Brave Story: New Traveler; Namco Bandai's Nintendo DS game, Brave Story: My Dreams and Wishes and Sony Computer Entertainment's PlayStation 2 game, Brave Story: Wataru's Adventure."

Plot:

  • "At school, Wataru Mitani, a meek and unassertive boy, notices Mitsuru Ashikawa for his over-politeness and Kaori Daimatsu, whom Wataru['s " crush"] has a crush on."
  • "One day, Wataru's parents divorce and his father runs off, leaving Wataru and his mother behind." That's out of the blue. Does the father run off with the stepmom? Is there a reason why he ran off?
  • "Wataru's stepmother has an argument with his mother over who his father really loves." Where did the stepmom come from?
  • dewikilink "fantasy world". Already wikilinked in the lead.
Will finish looking over article in a little bit. It's really interesting. :) Kaguya-chan ( talk) 19:54, 7 July 2009 (UTC) reply
  • "Without Mitsuru knowing, Wataru follows him through a portal in a reputedly haunted house to a fantasy world called Vision." Is the haunted house part really necessary?
  • "There, Mitsuru's status as a traveller is revealed. It is also shown that Mitsuru's reason for becoming a traveller is to revive his dead sister." Combine the two: "There Mitsuru is revealed to be a traveller, who wishes to resurrect his sister."
  • "Mitsuru and Wataru overcome an ambush by another traveller and Wataru is granted status of traveller." Who grants Watasu the status of traveller?
  • "Mitsuru tells Wataru to go out of Vision because of its dangers, revealing his vicious nature." How is that vicious?
  • "Wataru has to battle Mitsuru to find the fifth gemstone. Each stone had different qualities: charity, bravery, faith, grace and the power of darkness and light. Wataru and his friends have to collect all of these gemstones to get to the Tower of Destiny, where the Goddess grants each Traveler one wish. During Wataru's adventures, he meets friends and foes." Okay, definitely not making any sense now. Try only if it's the correct order of events "Wataru and his friends have to collect five gemstones to go to the Tower of Destiny, where the Goddess grants each Traveler one wish. Each stone has a different quality: charity, bravery, faith, grace, and the power of darkness and light. During Wataru's adventures, he encounters friends and foes. Unfortunately, Wataru has to battle Mitsuru to find the fifth gemstone." Traveller is capitalized here. Is it capitalized in the novel?
  • How does it end?
I'm sorry if the comments sound mean. I just don't understand the plot. :(
  • Haven't finished the novel and it was borrowed so yeah...

Novel:

  • Not sure you have to mention the translator

Manga:

  • "The manga alternate retelling of the novel by Yoichiro Ono was inspired by the novel's winning of the Batchelder Award." Try "The manga adaption of Brave Story by Yoichiro Ono came about after the novel won the Batchelder Award."
  • "The manga serialization in Shinchosha's Weekly Comic Bunch ended on March 14, 2008." When did the serialization begin?
  • Can't find any info about when the manga started serialization.
  • "The individual chapters were published into 20 tankōbon volumes, which were released between April 9, 2004 and May 9, 2008.[15][16] The manga is licensed and published in English by Tokyopop,[17] which released the first tankōbon volume of the manga on June 12, 2007.[18] It is also licensed in France by Kurokawa.[19]" Try "Shinchosha collected the individual chapters into 20 tankōbon volumes, and released them from April 9, 2004 to May 9, 2008.[15][16] Tokyopop licensed the manga for an English language release in North America.[17] The first Brave Story volume was published on June 12, 2007.[18] Brave Story is also licensed in French by Kurokawa.[19]"

Film:

  • Any way to work the cast list into the paragraph? Maybe "The cast featured Takako Matsu as Wataru Mitani, Eiji Wentz as Mitsuru Ashikawa, Yo Oizumi as Ki-kima, and Miki Imai as the Goddess of Destiny.
  • "The film's cast should be in list format and cover only the major characters" as per the peer review.

Soundtrack CDs

  • Maybe renaming the title to either "Soundtracks" or "CDs", but not both.
  • "On July 5, 2006, Sony Music Entertainment released an animation soundtrack CD for Brave Story. Its songs are composed by Juno Reactor." Try: "On July 5, 2006, Sony Music Entertainment released an original soundtrack for Brave Story; Juno Reactor composed the songs."
  • "On November 29, 2006, Avex Trax released a soundtrack of Brave Story, which was sung by TRF using the lyrics of Tetsuya Komuro and Takahiro Maeda." Try: "On November 29, 2006, Avex Trax released a Brave Story soundtrack, which featured lyrics composed by Tetsuya Komuro and Takahiro Maeda, and sung by TRF."
  • "On September 3, 2008, Universal Music released a soundtrack CD of Brave Story, which was sung by Rice using the lyrics of Yuki Sakurai" Try :"Another soundtrack CD of Brave Story was released by Universal Music on September 3, 2008, that had lyrics written by Yuki Saurai and was sung by Rice."
Almost finished copyediting. :) Kaguya-chan ( talk) 22:58, 8 July 2009 (UTC) reply

Reception:

  • "The publisher of the Brave Story novel received Batchelder Award in 2008." Maybe a note that the Batchelder Award is for publishers, not books?
  • " Mania.com's Dani Moure compares the film's "old-fashioned" character designs to those of Studio Ghibli's."
  • Maybe try paraphrasing some of the quotes?

Images:

  • Expand the cover caption to explain that the picture is the English cover, not the original Japanese.

Hope the comments are helpful. Kaguya-chan ( talk) 13:27, 10 July 2009 (UTC) reply

Film production credits

Transcribed from the UK DVD cover as requested (names all in CAPS on the inlay but I hate typing in caps):

  • Executive producer Chihiro Kameyama
  • Animation Production by Gonzo
  • Music by Juno Reactor ("The matrix" series)
  • Theme by Aqua Timez "The morning with determination" (Epic Records Japan)
  • Co-excutive producers Kazuyoshi Seki, Hidehiko Koike, Shoji Murahama, Aigo Wana, Soichi Akiyama, Junichi Watanaba
  • Produced by Hiroyoshi Koiwai, Koji Kajita, Daisuke Sekiguchi
  • Screenplay by Ichiro Okouchi
  • Character Created by Takuhito Kusanagi
  • Character Creation & Design/Chief Animation Director Yuriko Chiba
  • 3D Direction by Hiroshi Shirai
  • Director of Photography Hiroo Yoshioka
  • Edited by Takeshi Seyama
  • Sound Design by Tom Myers
  • Sound Direction by Yota Tsuruoka
  • Color Direction by Hiromi Uchibayashi
  • Art Direction by Makoto Kobayashi, Hitoshi Ueda, Toshiharu Murata, Akihiro Hirasawa
  • Design Collaboration by Yoshimitsu Ohashi, Hiroyuki Kanba
  • Animation Directors Tomihiko Ohkubo, Yukio Takahashi, Masato Bessho, Mahiro Maeda
  • Special Sponsor Kao Merit
  • Distributed by Warner Bros. Pictures

Shiroi Hane ( talk) 12:57, 11 July 2009 (UTC) reply

Another Film Festival

The movie will be featured at the Japan Film Festival in Lethbridge put on by the Japan Foundation and the Consulate-General in Calgary. The Festival will take place on October 19th 2013. More info can be found here. -- Aceman67 ( talk) 21:40, 17 September 2013 (UTC) reply

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