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Hello!
Thanks for your help over at Draft:Alex_Gilbert. This article needs working on, I think it is not written correctly hence to why it was removed last time. If you can please give me your advice etc that would be much appreciated. There are a few secondary sources there yes which is reliable. The article over here is a good example - http://www.nzherald.co.nz/northern-advocate/news/article.cfm?c_id=1503450&objectid=11310534 . Thanks again for your help :-) -- DmitryPopovRU ( talk) 11:08, 27 February 2015 (UTC)
Yoshyhwh ( talk) 06:09, 28 February 2015 (UTC)
Hey Kikichugirl,
Could you please point out where I used peacock terms in the YHWH OUR RIGHTEOUSNESS article so that I can make corrections?
Kind Best
Yisrael
Hi Jonathan Gabay here What do you need for submission of the wiki article?
JJG 12:16, 28 February 2015 (UTC) — Preceding
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Hello, I would greatly appreciate if you would review the Terri Abney article for me. I believe the articles subject is notable although another editor doesn't and has put it up for deletion. Thanks in advance. HipHopDoc ( talk) 09:47, 1 March 2015 (UTC)《
hi Kikichugirl, have just read your talk page and after reading all those article review issues would like to thank you for all your hard work and 'cutify' it with a kitten:)
Coolabahapple (
talk) 05:22, 2 March 2015 (UTC)
I am requesting a re-review because I have seen many articles like this one on wikipedia which are very similar and they are fine. For example if you search Jazzy B this article is similar to the one I am submitting? Also if you can advise how this can be edited/improved so it can be re-submitted?
thanks, kindest regards
164.39.56.205 ( talk) 17:01, 2 March 2015 (UTC)
I am hopeful you can clarify this or direct me to the appropriate parties. I do not understand the comment saying the article sounds like an advertisement. I looked up the information on the company and have tested the product. I do not work for the company nor do I work for any of the companies that have given STEALTHbits Technologies awards. I included sources linked to the awards/endorsements that they received. I am a soon to be Master's graduate and have been working in IT and IT Security for many years. I put in actual information. I am obviously new to writing on Wikipedia; however, I am not new to writing in general.
Thank you,
Crystal
Nerd2the3rd ( talk) 19:55, 2 March 2015 (UTC)
Hello, Kiki. Thanks for taking interest in mining subjects. Sorry for delay in my response as my IP was blocked due to some other reasons.
I have added some information on mining method called VRM and electrical LHD being used for handling the muck. May I know the reasons behind your apprehension that the article look better without them?-- Sanjaysingh12 ( talk) 03:49, 2 March 2015 (UTC)
Thanks, Kiki.-- Sanjaysingh12 ( talk) 13:22, 4 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi,
I have edited an article: /info/en/?search=Draft:CHI_Limited and re-submitted but I saw that it was declined again. I read wiki articles on writing new articles and also took the advice of the previous editor by removing brand names in the first paragraph. I have also added competitor brands and cited sources. I also made sure there were no exaggerations. Kindly advise on what you think I can do to make this right. Thanks. Teepro ( talk) 08:50, 5 March 2015 (UTC)
Teepro ( talk) 08:50, 5 March 2015 (UTC)
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Hello This is the second time this article ( /info/en/?search=Draft:Mohammad_Zahoor) has been declined, but for different reasons, the first was due to citing a publication that the subject owned, which I have removed - but now it is written too much like an advert. Please can you give me an example of the kind of sentence you would like me to remove? Then I can rewrite to your specification and resubmit. Thank you
87.115.46.236 ( talk) 13:30, 3 March 2015 (UTC) 87.115.46.236 ( talk) 13:30, 3 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi Kikichugirl, thank you for taking the time to read and review my revised article submission
Draft:Harris_CapRock_Communications. After chatting with Hell in a Bucket, the original reviewer, he advised that I remove the hours of operation and promotional language. I tried my best to do so, but I might not have done it well enough since the reason you've given for declining my resubmission is the same feedback. I'm fairly new to this and would love your specific advice on what I need to do to improve this article submission. Could you give me a few examples or pointers related to this article? Thank you so much for taking the time to help!
Jennger ( talk) 21:45, 2 March 2015 (UTC)
They asked for references. Here is a direct link to PNX NEWS. It is a You tube DIY comedy News channel. https://www.youtube.com/channel/UC7E74eJ_gtD4OPDUFTiBuAA Please let me know what else I can do to get the Wiki page approved. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Badbyrd777 ( talk • contribs) 05:25, 7 March 2015 (UTC)
This article certainly meets the criteria of NPOV, notability and non-promotional language and is, at least, a start class article. I recommend moving it to mainspace.
Hi Kikichugirl, thank you for checking my new article. Your comment about the draft: Holger Walter: "You're really only referring to three sources here. That's not really enough... " I read. This is my first article in english. On the german Wiki-article all that information about the artist are mentioned. [ Holger Walter]. The problem is that there are not so many english sources available. Just the english Website: [ Walter]. So do you think it's not possible to accept it because of the german Wiki-site ? Sorry for my simple english... I get きき ("kiki"...) bye,bye !-- Unburden ( talk) 15:49, 8 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi Kikichugirl.
I thought I had edited out anything that sounded like an advertisement on the article I submitted entitled "Kendall Almerico." I went back and read it again and I am really not sure what section (or sections) sound like an advertisement at this point. I have cited everything I wrote about to an independent source and linked to the source of the material in every place needed, I believe. Can you tell me the exact parts to fix that you feel sound like an ad and I will do my best to fix those and resubmit? I have read a lot of Wikipedia articles before I created this one, and I tried to write this the best I could to sound like other articles. Obviously, I am missing something and would appreciate your help fixing it.
Thank you for your help. I am new at this and plan to submit more articles, but I want to be sure I learn from my errors on this one.
Trentaaronsilver ( talk) 15:50, 8 March 2015 (UTC)
Thanks so much for your help with the info on WikiTools! Twofingered Typist ( talk) 20:41, 8 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi,
Can you point out some areas of the article where it doesn't have a formal tone? Thanks.
Trancemaester ( talk) 15:10, 6 March 2015 (UTC)
Oh sorry, it's this page /info/en/?search=Draft:Assurant_Solutions — Preceding unsigned comment added by Trancemaester ( talk • contribs) 20:28, 6 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi! Saw your message. It was really comforting. You should try this game.Animal Jam - Animal Jam - Meet friends, adopt pets, and play games! Try it! I bet you'll like it.
Thanks, awsome81672 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Awsome81672 ( talk • contribs) 23:53, 7 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi kikichugirl, Thank you for your help by reviewing my article [
[1]]. I think I have provided citations properly but they may not fulfill the request as suggested. The article is about an event in 1984 and the text is an amalgamation of news paper articles I collected as the event unfolded (except for the last entry). The reporters cited in the article are the news paper writers, but they are no longer employed at the news paper. I have recently attempted to contact the news paper offices, offering my contact information to the reporters, and asking for help with the articles, only to have no response. I was a participant in the event, and if I can ever figure out how to get my images from wikicommons to the article I think it would add some substance. Please reconsider your review. I'm new at creating a page in wiki, learning as I go, and I appreciate all the help I can get. Thanks, Alucivanoitnga
Alucivanoitnga (
talk) 05:47, 8 March 2015 (UTC)
Alucivanoitnga (
talk) 05:47, 8 March 2015 (UTC)
Dear Reviewer [Kikichugirl],
First of all, thank you for your voluntary efforts.
I added a little more content and some general references to the page on the subject of global optimization, before writing very concisely about the LGO software.
I wish to mention that I am not "only" a software developer, but also a recognized scientific authority in the field of global optimization: book author / editor, journal editor / society officer etc. for some of the top scientific publishers (Kluwer, Springer) and organizations (INFORMS, EURO).
Please let me know if you have any questions / comments / suggestions. I am willing to add a bit more content to the webpage, but only if this is really necessary. There exist dozens of other webpages, hundreds of books, and thousands of scholarly articles devoted to global optimization. A few of these books and articles have been written by
Yours truly,
Janos D. Pinter, PhD, DSc Proprietor & Research Scientist Pinter Consulting Services, Inc., Canada http://www.pinterconsulting.com janos.d.pinter@gmail.com
Google Scholar Citations http://scholar.google.ca/citations?user=iHrfmDEAAAAJ&hl=en&oi=ao
Linkedin http://www.linkedin.com/pub/janos-d-pinter/10/9/676
Past Chair, EUROPT Managing Board The Continuous Optimization Working Group of EURO http://europt.iam.metu.edu.tr/
Co-Editor, SpringerBriefs in Optimization http://www.springer.com/series/8918 22:48, 8 March 2015 (UTC)22:48, 8 March 2015 (UTC)22:48, 8 March 2015 (UTC)~ — Preceding unsigned comment added by Janos D. Pinter ( talk • contribs)
Hi Kikichugirl,
I am really having trouble getting this page [ [2]] and it is super important to me that I get it up. Can you please advise? I know there a a couple of errors in the code, as I am not really very experienced with it.
Please and thank you! Tegalex ( talk) 03:01, 9 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi there! Hope this is the right format. I am at a loss to understand why my article "Draft:KBUU Radio Malibu" was rejected. The rule on notability states "If a topic has received significant coverage in reliable sources that are independent of the subject, it is presumed to be suitable for a stand-alone article or list." I had posted three links to newspaper articles about this new radio station, I now add a fourth, and I have posted links to FCC files. These sources are significant, independent, reliable. The presumption under your policy must therefore be that this subject is suitable for a standalone article. Thank you for your attention. Hans Laetz — Preceding unsigned comment added by Hanslaetz ( talk • contribs)
Signed,
Hello,
Thank you for reviewing my draft ( Draft:The Dark Would). I note that you requested that the article should have a more formal tone, be neutral, and should reference published sources.
Could you please indicate an example of informal tone and non-neutral language in the article? I'm afraid that I don't see any examples, so any guidance is much appreciated.
I also note that you request that we reference more independent published sources, which I will add forthwith. We have based our article on Open-space Learning or OSL, which was also created by my academic department, but I notice that this article only has two references., but does link to seven other wikipedia pages within the article. Is this a valid way to increase the reliability of the article according to your metrics?
Thank you!
Thedarkwould ( talk) 07:27, 9 March 2015 (UTC)
Thedarkwould ( talk) 07:27, 9 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi Kikichugirl. Thanks for your feedback on User:Dbx2/sandbox. I have rewritten to address your concerns that this sounded like an advertisement - changing some language and structure, removing some references to current company and all but the most noteworthy awards. Would welcome your thoughts and any further advice. Thanks Dbx2 ( talk) 00:53, 9 March 2015 (UTC)
kindly let me know the reasons of the rejected article /info/en/?search=Draft:Jenan_%28poet%29 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Tanurasunny ( talk • contribs) 09:52, 9 March 2015 (UTC)
I got some more references for Suraj Gowda and the popular news channels had covered his story on their portal. So, plz have a look on article article and suggest if is there any changes need.
Nakulmehra ( talk) 11:26, 9 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi Kikichugirl -
I appreciate you taking the time to review my submission and give feedback.
My initial draft was rejected by another user, and on that submission, I received comments similar to yours. On my second revision, I went back and added additional sources to impartial sites, but unfortunately, the result was the same.
If it's not too much trouble, could you please elaborate on what you would like to see added (or omitted) from the article to make it worthy of inclusion? I realize this film resides in a bit of a gray area, in that many of the stars are unestablished. However, several behind-the-scenes players (notably the editor and sound mixer) have a laundry list of credits to their name. Additionally, the film has played four festivals, won accolades at two, and received favorable write-ups in two of the world's biggest horror-themed publications (Fangoria and Dread Central).
The only reason for my query is that I see many films included in Wikipedia with far fewer references and much less visibility than the one noted in this article. Any insight you could give toward what would make it worthy of inclusion would be more than helpful.
/info/en/?search=Draft:The_Badger_Game — Preceding unsigned comment added by Badgerfilms ( talk • contribs) 16:57, 9 March 2015 (UTC)
Thanks,
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Hi there,
Thanks for all your help. Two reviewers have checked out [ [3]] aka Draft:Ross_Cohen and they have changed format stuff but no one will review it! It has been 7 days or so. It was rejected as Twitter, Imdb and Youtube are not reliable sources. I moved them to the external links section and replaced them with reliable sources (multiple) and sources that show the person is notable. If you can help I would appreciate it greatly.
Thanks
Johnsonsinclare ( talk) 00:04, 10 March 2015 (UTC)Johnson
Peace be upon you For the last few days I am working on a Wikipedia page /info/en/?search=Draft:Farman_Nawaz It is declined thrice. The fact is that I have prepared this page keeping in few another Wikipedia page ( /info/en/?search=Ansar_Abbasi. You will not believe but it is a fact that the references of Ansar Abasi page are irrelevant. It is requested that apply the same rules on Ansar abbasi page. you will find that my page is more authentic than Ansar Abassi page. It is not a challenge but a request for comparison. I hope that my request will be taken as positive. when I compare these two pages then your comments did not fit into my logic. Regards
Snehahurrain ( talk) 05:24, 10 March 2015 (UTC)
Hello KiKichugirl, I tried removing all the peacock words as mentioned and suggested by you. But I am failing to understand the exact expectation you have.
Can you please help me edit the article?
Manjeetcare ( talk) 04:55, 10 March 2015 (UTC)
Hello!
Can you please let me know about the sources I have added on for Draft:Alex Gilbert. One is from the Library of Congress and the Vancouver Library in Canada. Thank You!
-- DmitryPopovRU ( talk) 20:49, 7 March 2015 (UTC)
Thank You! I would like a more experienced reviewer to comment first, but what will be will be! :-) -- DmitryPopovRU ( talk) 05:24, 9 March 2015 (UTC)
Dilrubakhan ( talk) 09:09, 8 March 2015 (UTC)
I have prepared the page " /info/en/?search=Draft:Farman_Nawaz" keeping in view the language and contents of other Wikipedia pages about Pakistani journalists/ columnists. I deleted few sections and rearranged the contents. The sources are mainly from the published work of Farman nawaz or references of his work. Would you like to review the page again?
I went in and added some more references to the article. I hope this is sufficient. There aren't many print/magazine references for it as it's very much a web-based medium.
/info/en/?search=Draft:The_Projection_Booth_Podcast — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cashiers ( talk • contribs)
user name: Yatin Rewale article: /info/en/?search=Draft:Jayantilal_Gada Hello - I've just seen that My article I submitted for review Draft:Jayantilal Gada has been rejected following your review, with the feedback that read more like an advertisement than an entry in an encyclopedia and need to be written from a neutral point of view I was wondering if you could offer more specific feedback as to which parts you feel do not meet the guidance and look like Advertisement. The feedback seems very general and I would like to amend and resubmit, but would like more specifics in order to do so.Please help me to get this article accepted. thank you (Yatin Rewale (talk) 11:55, 10 March 2015 (UTC)) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Yatin Rewale ( talk • contribs)
I do not understand why you have said my sources in
Poole People are unreliable. A previous reviewer has said they were ok from a verification perspective but did not meet the notability test. I have addressed this by referencing to other pages where Poole People is mentioned.
MarkfromPoole (
talk) 08:07, 10 March 2015 (UTC)
MarkfromPoole ( talk) 08:07, 10 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi user:Kikichugirl - thanks for reviewing my article ( draft:Suzanne Arms) so quickly. I wasn't expecting to receive a response that fast! Obviously you felt that it needs more work and I took note that the tone needs to be addressed (including peacocking). I'd like to focus on the right areas and so would be grateful for any guidance on specifically which parts should be changed. Thanks in advance. Fbell74 ( talk) 05:04, 24 February 2015 (UTC)
This is in reference to my Article /info/en/?search=Draft:Neeraj_Mehta . Thanks for your fast review. I have updated my submission. I would appreciate if you have a look — Preceding unsigned comment added by Neeraj Mehta123 ( talk • contribs) 09:27, 11 March 2015 (UTC)
I see that you're busy, just wanted to let you know I made the changes you requested to my AfC submission Draft:Bill Carrothers. Thanks for your input! Sunspot Soldier ( talk) 14:22, 10 March 2015 (UTC)
Hello @ Kikichugirl:, Could you help me understand which part of my article reads like an advertisement or promotional? I've re-written my article several times trying to be as descriptive as possible and making sure I have as much information about the company through the sources referred within my draft. I've not mentioned any praises, famous brands they sell nor have I stated any locations of the showrooms - all better stated in their websites so I've been told.
I really would like to publish my article and your assistance would be greatly appreciated.
Thank you, Krystel Espiritu ( talk)
An organization is generally considered notable if it has been the subject of significant coverage in reliable, independent secondary sources. Going through the sources one by one, the first source looks good, the second is primary and therefore doesn't count towards notability, ditto for the third, fifth, and seventh, I can't find where it mentions "Hassan's" in the forth and sixth, the eighth looks to be an interview and therefore primary and does not count towards notability, and ditto for the ninth. Cheers, -- L235 (alt / t / c / ping in reply) 18:57, 11 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi! I'm writing to ask about the submission decline of the draft in my sandbox.
I have edited the introduction as suggested by the previous reviewer. I'm still not sure why it is seen as an advertisement. All I hoped for is to make an English version of the French article here:
https://fr.wikipedia.org/wiki/Stibo_Systems
Could you tell me which parts you think should be edited again?
JasH23 (
talk) 12:39, 10 March 2015 (UTC)
/info/en/?search=Draft:TINA_(program)
Hi Kikichugirl
Following your suggestions, I've added more and new up-to-date references, extended the text and tried to improve the Info box. May I ask what your opinion is about my article now?
Best regards
Tengelic Tengelic ( talk) 13:32, 10 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi --
I'm responding to your review of Draft:Arthur_Obermayer (I hope I did the link correctly for you). You commented that you felt it read more like an advertisement. Without understanding specifically why you made tht comment, I have reworked much of the submission. Does this comply? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Blsolbjor ( talk • contribs) 14:28, 11 March 2015 (UTC)
He has had a leading role in activities related to small high-tech businesses, government policy, international relations, family and community history, internet strategies, and technological innovationscreams "promotion" to me. Vague, subjective terms such as "leading role" and PR words such as "innovation" are definitely no-nos, and at this point, if I were the reviewer, I'd probably have declined the submission without reading further. However, I'm going to continue with my observations.
Hi there,
I was hoping to get more information about my recent submission: Draft:Smarsh
External link: https://en.wikipedia.org/?title=Draft:Smarsh&direction=next&oldid=650201036
You cited the need for more third-party sources as the reason it was declined. Can you specify which references aren't third-party? Portland Business Journal, Oregon Business, Inc.com and Deloitte are independent publications and aren't associated with Smarsh.
Thanks much! Lisa Peyton — Preceding unsigned comment added by Lisapeyton ( talk • contribs)
If a topic has received significant coverage in reliable sources that are independent of the subject, it is presumed to be suitable for a stand-alone article or list. Being listed in a top 100 list or similar is not considered "significant coverage", and therefore you need more and better sources. Thanks, -- L235 (alt / t / c / ping in reply) 19:28, 11 March 2015 (UTC)
Dear Kikichugirl,
I wrote a short article yesterday. The link is below: [4]
You may also look at another page which already exists in wiki: fujita conjecture
Compare these two, you will find I have provided a very exhaustive description on this theorem. And two references are also given.
In general, no people will watch my page (contraction theorem) except someone really interested in this field. Like the Fujita conjecture I support to you, we don't need to give some context you required, since the one will watch this page won't need to any context, one just want to know what exactly the Castelnuovo's contraction theorem is.
The motivation is [5].
Thanks and best regards,
rationalcurve Rationalcurve ( talk) 11:20, 10 March 2015 (UTC)
Fujita's conjecture is a problem in the theories of algebraic geometry..., while your draft does not provide any such context. Also, the article you mentioned as an example is a poor example at best. You may want to take a look at Wikipedia's best articles and base your draft on those. Before resubmitting, be sure you're aware of Wikipedia's general notability guideline. Thanks. -- L235 (alt / t / c / ping in reply) 19:36, 11 March 2015 (UTC)
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Hello!
Thanks for your help over at Draft:Alex_Gilbert. This article needs working on, I think it is not written correctly hence to why it was removed last time. If you can please give me your advice etc that would be much appreciated. There are a few secondary sources there yes which is reliable. The article over here is a good example - http://www.nzherald.co.nz/northern-advocate/news/article.cfm?c_id=1503450&objectid=11310534 . Thanks again for your help :-) -- DmitryPopovRU ( talk) 11:08, 27 February 2015 (UTC)
Yoshyhwh ( talk) 06:09, 28 February 2015 (UTC)
Hey Kikichugirl,
Could you please point out where I used peacock terms in the YHWH OUR RIGHTEOUSNESS article so that I can make corrections?
Kind Best
Yisrael
Hi Jonathan Gabay here What do you need for submission of the wiki article?
JJG 12:16, 28 February 2015 (UTC) — Preceding
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Hello, I would greatly appreciate if you would review the Terri Abney article for me. I believe the articles subject is notable although another editor doesn't and has put it up for deletion. Thanks in advance. HipHopDoc ( talk) 09:47, 1 March 2015 (UTC)《
hi Kikichugirl, have just read your talk page and after reading all those article review issues would like to thank you for all your hard work and 'cutify' it with a kitten:)
Coolabahapple (
talk) 05:22, 2 March 2015 (UTC)
I am requesting a re-review because I have seen many articles like this one on wikipedia which are very similar and they are fine. For example if you search Jazzy B this article is similar to the one I am submitting? Also if you can advise how this can be edited/improved so it can be re-submitted?
thanks, kindest regards
164.39.56.205 ( talk) 17:01, 2 March 2015 (UTC)
I am hopeful you can clarify this or direct me to the appropriate parties. I do not understand the comment saying the article sounds like an advertisement. I looked up the information on the company and have tested the product. I do not work for the company nor do I work for any of the companies that have given STEALTHbits Technologies awards. I included sources linked to the awards/endorsements that they received. I am a soon to be Master's graduate and have been working in IT and IT Security for many years. I put in actual information. I am obviously new to writing on Wikipedia; however, I am not new to writing in general.
Thank you,
Crystal
Nerd2the3rd ( talk) 19:55, 2 March 2015 (UTC)
Hello, Kiki. Thanks for taking interest in mining subjects. Sorry for delay in my response as my IP was blocked due to some other reasons.
I have added some information on mining method called VRM and electrical LHD being used for handling the muck. May I know the reasons behind your apprehension that the article look better without them?-- Sanjaysingh12 ( talk) 03:49, 2 March 2015 (UTC)
Thanks, Kiki.-- Sanjaysingh12 ( talk) 13:22, 4 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi,
I have edited an article: /info/en/?search=Draft:CHI_Limited and re-submitted but I saw that it was declined again. I read wiki articles on writing new articles and also took the advice of the previous editor by removing brand names in the first paragraph. I have also added competitor brands and cited sources. I also made sure there were no exaggerations. Kindly advise on what you think I can do to make this right. Thanks. Teepro ( talk) 08:50, 5 March 2015 (UTC)
Teepro ( talk) 08:50, 5 March 2015 (UTC)
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Hello This is the second time this article ( /info/en/?search=Draft:Mohammad_Zahoor) has been declined, but for different reasons, the first was due to citing a publication that the subject owned, which I have removed - but now it is written too much like an advert. Please can you give me an example of the kind of sentence you would like me to remove? Then I can rewrite to your specification and resubmit. Thank you
87.115.46.236 ( talk) 13:30, 3 March 2015 (UTC) 87.115.46.236 ( talk) 13:30, 3 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi Kikichugirl, thank you for taking the time to read and review my revised article submission
Draft:Harris_CapRock_Communications. After chatting with Hell in a Bucket, the original reviewer, he advised that I remove the hours of operation and promotional language. I tried my best to do so, but I might not have done it well enough since the reason you've given for declining my resubmission is the same feedback. I'm fairly new to this and would love your specific advice on what I need to do to improve this article submission. Could you give me a few examples or pointers related to this article? Thank you so much for taking the time to help!
Jennger ( talk) 21:45, 2 March 2015 (UTC)
They asked for references. Here is a direct link to PNX NEWS. It is a You tube DIY comedy News channel. https://www.youtube.com/channel/UC7E74eJ_gtD4OPDUFTiBuAA Please let me know what else I can do to get the Wiki page approved. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Badbyrd777 ( talk • contribs) 05:25, 7 March 2015 (UTC)
This article certainly meets the criteria of NPOV, notability and non-promotional language and is, at least, a start class article. I recommend moving it to mainspace.
Hi Kikichugirl, thank you for checking my new article. Your comment about the draft: Holger Walter: "You're really only referring to three sources here. That's not really enough... " I read. This is my first article in english. On the german Wiki-article all that information about the artist are mentioned. [ Holger Walter]. The problem is that there are not so many english sources available. Just the english Website: [ Walter]. So do you think it's not possible to accept it because of the german Wiki-site ? Sorry for my simple english... I get きき ("kiki"...) bye,bye !-- Unburden ( talk) 15:49, 8 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi Kikichugirl.
I thought I had edited out anything that sounded like an advertisement on the article I submitted entitled "Kendall Almerico." I went back and read it again and I am really not sure what section (or sections) sound like an advertisement at this point. I have cited everything I wrote about to an independent source and linked to the source of the material in every place needed, I believe. Can you tell me the exact parts to fix that you feel sound like an ad and I will do my best to fix those and resubmit? I have read a lot of Wikipedia articles before I created this one, and I tried to write this the best I could to sound like other articles. Obviously, I am missing something and would appreciate your help fixing it.
Thank you for your help. I am new at this and plan to submit more articles, but I want to be sure I learn from my errors on this one.
Trentaaronsilver ( talk) 15:50, 8 March 2015 (UTC)
Thanks so much for your help with the info on WikiTools! Twofingered Typist ( talk) 20:41, 8 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi,
Can you point out some areas of the article where it doesn't have a formal tone? Thanks.
Trancemaester ( talk) 15:10, 6 March 2015 (UTC)
Oh sorry, it's this page /info/en/?search=Draft:Assurant_Solutions — Preceding unsigned comment added by Trancemaester ( talk • contribs) 20:28, 6 March 2015 (UTC)
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Thanks, awsome81672 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Awsome81672 ( talk • contribs) 23:53, 7 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi kikichugirl, Thank you for your help by reviewing my article [
[1]]. I think I have provided citations properly but they may not fulfill the request as suggested. The article is about an event in 1984 and the text is an amalgamation of news paper articles I collected as the event unfolded (except for the last entry). The reporters cited in the article are the news paper writers, but they are no longer employed at the news paper. I have recently attempted to contact the news paper offices, offering my contact information to the reporters, and asking for help with the articles, only to have no response. I was a participant in the event, and if I can ever figure out how to get my images from wikicommons to the article I think it would add some substance. Please reconsider your review. I'm new at creating a page in wiki, learning as I go, and I appreciate all the help I can get. Thanks, Alucivanoitnga
Alucivanoitnga (
talk) 05:47, 8 March 2015 (UTC)
Alucivanoitnga (
talk) 05:47, 8 March 2015 (UTC)
Dear Reviewer [Kikichugirl],
First of all, thank you for your voluntary efforts.
I added a little more content and some general references to the page on the subject of global optimization, before writing very concisely about the LGO software.
I wish to mention that I am not "only" a software developer, but also a recognized scientific authority in the field of global optimization: book author / editor, journal editor / society officer etc. for some of the top scientific publishers (Kluwer, Springer) and organizations (INFORMS, EURO).
Please let me know if you have any questions / comments / suggestions. I am willing to add a bit more content to the webpage, but only if this is really necessary. There exist dozens of other webpages, hundreds of books, and thousands of scholarly articles devoted to global optimization. A few of these books and articles have been written by
Yours truly,
Janos D. Pinter, PhD, DSc Proprietor & Research Scientist Pinter Consulting Services, Inc., Canada http://www.pinterconsulting.com janos.d.pinter@gmail.com
Google Scholar Citations http://scholar.google.ca/citations?user=iHrfmDEAAAAJ&hl=en&oi=ao
Linkedin http://www.linkedin.com/pub/janos-d-pinter/10/9/676
Past Chair, EUROPT Managing Board The Continuous Optimization Working Group of EURO http://europt.iam.metu.edu.tr/
Co-Editor, SpringerBriefs in Optimization http://www.springer.com/series/8918 22:48, 8 March 2015 (UTC)22:48, 8 March 2015 (UTC)22:48, 8 March 2015 (UTC)~ — Preceding unsigned comment added by Janos D. Pinter ( talk • contribs)
Hi Kikichugirl,
I am really having trouble getting this page [ [2]] and it is super important to me that I get it up. Can you please advise? I know there a a couple of errors in the code, as I am not really very experienced with it.
Please and thank you! Tegalex ( talk) 03:01, 9 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi there! Hope this is the right format. I am at a loss to understand why my article "Draft:KBUU Radio Malibu" was rejected. The rule on notability states "If a topic has received significant coverage in reliable sources that are independent of the subject, it is presumed to be suitable for a stand-alone article or list." I had posted three links to newspaper articles about this new radio station, I now add a fourth, and I have posted links to FCC files. These sources are significant, independent, reliable. The presumption under your policy must therefore be that this subject is suitable for a standalone article. Thank you for your attention. Hans Laetz — Preceding unsigned comment added by Hanslaetz ( talk • contribs)
Signed,
Hello,
Thank you for reviewing my draft ( Draft:The Dark Would). I note that you requested that the article should have a more formal tone, be neutral, and should reference published sources.
Could you please indicate an example of informal tone and non-neutral language in the article? I'm afraid that I don't see any examples, so any guidance is much appreciated.
I also note that you request that we reference more independent published sources, which I will add forthwith. We have based our article on Open-space Learning or OSL, which was also created by my academic department, but I notice that this article only has two references., but does link to seven other wikipedia pages within the article. Is this a valid way to increase the reliability of the article according to your metrics?
Thank you!
Thedarkwould ( talk) 07:27, 9 March 2015 (UTC)
Thedarkwould ( talk) 07:27, 9 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi Kikichugirl. Thanks for your feedback on User:Dbx2/sandbox. I have rewritten to address your concerns that this sounded like an advertisement - changing some language and structure, removing some references to current company and all but the most noteworthy awards. Would welcome your thoughts and any further advice. Thanks Dbx2 ( talk) 00:53, 9 March 2015 (UTC)
kindly let me know the reasons of the rejected article /info/en/?search=Draft:Jenan_%28poet%29 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Tanurasunny ( talk • contribs) 09:52, 9 March 2015 (UTC)
I got some more references for Suraj Gowda and the popular news channels had covered his story on their portal. So, plz have a look on article article and suggest if is there any changes need.
Nakulmehra ( talk) 11:26, 9 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi Kikichugirl -
I appreciate you taking the time to review my submission and give feedback.
My initial draft was rejected by another user, and on that submission, I received comments similar to yours. On my second revision, I went back and added additional sources to impartial sites, but unfortunately, the result was the same.
If it's not too much trouble, could you please elaborate on what you would like to see added (or omitted) from the article to make it worthy of inclusion? I realize this film resides in a bit of a gray area, in that many of the stars are unestablished. However, several behind-the-scenes players (notably the editor and sound mixer) have a laundry list of credits to their name. Additionally, the film has played four festivals, won accolades at two, and received favorable write-ups in two of the world's biggest horror-themed publications (Fangoria and Dread Central).
The only reason for my query is that I see many films included in Wikipedia with far fewer references and much less visibility than the one noted in this article. Any insight you could give toward what would make it worthy of inclusion would be more than helpful.
/info/en/?search=Draft:The_Badger_Game — Preceding unsigned comment added by Badgerfilms ( talk • contribs) 16:57, 9 March 2015 (UTC)
Thanks,
Tom — Preceding unsigned comment added by Badgerfilms ( talk • contribs) 16:25, 9 March 2015 (UTC)
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Hi there,
Thanks for all your help. Two reviewers have checked out [ [3]] aka Draft:Ross_Cohen and they have changed format stuff but no one will review it! It has been 7 days or so. It was rejected as Twitter, Imdb and Youtube are not reliable sources. I moved them to the external links section and replaced them with reliable sources (multiple) and sources that show the person is notable. If you can help I would appreciate it greatly.
Thanks
Johnsonsinclare ( talk) 00:04, 10 March 2015 (UTC)Johnson
Peace be upon you For the last few days I am working on a Wikipedia page /info/en/?search=Draft:Farman_Nawaz It is declined thrice. The fact is that I have prepared this page keeping in few another Wikipedia page ( /info/en/?search=Ansar_Abbasi. You will not believe but it is a fact that the references of Ansar Abasi page are irrelevant. It is requested that apply the same rules on Ansar abbasi page. you will find that my page is more authentic than Ansar Abassi page. It is not a challenge but a request for comparison. I hope that my request will be taken as positive. when I compare these two pages then your comments did not fit into my logic. Regards
Snehahurrain ( talk) 05:24, 10 March 2015 (UTC)
Hello KiKichugirl, I tried removing all the peacock words as mentioned and suggested by you. But I am failing to understand the exact expectation you have.
Can you please help me edit the article?
Manjeetcare ( talk) 04:55, 10 March 2015 (UTC)
Hello!
Can you please let me know about the sources I have added on for Draft:Alex Gilbert. One is from the Library of Congress and the Vancouver Library in Canada. Thank You!
-- DmitryPopovRU ( talk) 20:49, 7 March 2015 (UTC)
Thank You! I would like a more experienced reviewer to comment first, but what will be will be! :-) -- DmitryPopovRU ( talk) 05:24, 9 March 2015 (UTC)
Dilrubakhan ( talk) 09:09, 8 March 2015 (UTC)
I have prepared the page " /info/en/?search=Draft:Farman_Nawaz" keeping in view the language and contents of other Wikipedia pages about Pakistani journalists/ columnists. I deleted few sections and rearranged the contents. The sources are mainly from the published work of Farman nawaz or references of his work. Would you like to review the page again?
I went in and added some more references to the article. I hope this is sufficient. There aren't many print/magazine references for it as it's very much a web-based medium.
/info/en/?search=Draft:The_Projection_Booth_Podcast — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cashiers ( talk • contribs)
user name: Yatin Rewale article: /info/en/?search=Draft:Jayantilal_Gada Hello - I've just seen that My article I submitted for review Draft:Jayantilal Gada has been rejected following your review, with the feedback that read more like an advertisement than an entry in an encyclopedia and need to be written from a neutral point of view I was wondering if you could offer more specific feedback as to which parts you feel do not meet the guidance and look like Advertisement. The feedback seems very general and I would like to amend and resubmit, but would like more specifics in order to do so.Please help me to get this article accepted. thank you (Yatin Rewale (talk) 11:55, 10 March 2015 (UTC)) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Yatin Rewale ( talk • contribs)
I do not understand why you have said my sources in
Poole People are unreliable. A previous reviewer has said they were ok from a verification perspective but did not meet the notability test. I have addressed this by referencing to other pages where Poole People is mentioned.
MarkfromPoole (
talk) 08:07, 10 March 2015 (UTC)
MarkfromPoole ( talk) 08:07, 10 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi user:Kikichugirl - thanks for reviewing my article ( draft:Suzanne Arms) so quickly. I wasn't expecting to receive a response that fast! Obviously you felt that it needs more work and I took note that the tone needs to be addressed (including peacocking). I'd like to focus on the right areas and so would be grateful for any guidance on specifically which parts should be changed. Thanks in advance. Fbell74 ( talk) 05:04, 24 February 2015 (UTC)
This is in reference to my Article /info/en/?search=Draft:Neeraj_Mehta . Thanks for your fast review. I have updated my submission. I would appreciate if you have a look — Preceding unsigned comment added by Neeraj Mehta123 ( talk • contribs) 09:27, 11 March 2015 (UTC)
I see that you're busy, just wanted to let you know I made the changes you requested to my AfC submission Draft:Bill Carrothers. Thanks for your input! Sunspot Soldier ( talk) 14:22, 10 March 2015 (UTC)
Hello @ Kikichugirl:, Could you help me understand which part of my article reads like an advertisement or promotional? I've re-written my article several times trying to be as descriptive as possible and making sure I have as much information about the company through the sources referred within my draft. I've not mentioned any praises, famous brands they sell nor have I stated any locations of the showrooms - all better stated in their websites so I've been told.
I really would like to publish my article and your assistance would be greatly appreciated.
Thank you, Krystel Espiritu ( talk)
An organization is generally considered notable if it has been the subject of significant coverage in reliable, independent secondary sources. Going through the sources one by one, the first source looks good, the second is primary and therefore doesn't count towards notability, ditto for the third, fifth, and seventh, I can't find where it mentions "Hassan's" in the forth and sixth, the eighth looks to be an interview and therefore primary and does not count towards notability, and ditto for the ninth. Cheers, -- L235 (alt / t / c / ping in reply) 18:57, 11 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi! I'm writing to ask about the submission decline of the draft in my sandbox.
I have edited the introduction as suggested by the previous reviewer. I'm still not sure why it is seen as an advertisement. All I hoped for is to make an English version of the French article here:
https://fr.wikipedia.org/wiki/Stibo_Systems
Could you tell me which parts you think should be edited again?
JasH23 (
talk) 12:39, 10 March 2015 (UTC)
/info/en/?search=Draft:TINA_(program)
Hi Kikichugirl
Following your suggestions, I've added more and new up-to-date references, extended the text and tried to improve the Info box. May I ask what your opinion is about my article now?
Best regards
Tengelic Tengelic ( talk) 13:32, 10 March 2015 (UTC)
Hi --
I'm responding to your review of Draft:Arthur_Obermayer (I hope I did the link correctly for you). You commented that you felt it read more like an advertisement. Without understanding specifically why you made tht comment, I have reworked much of the submission. Does this comply? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Blsolbjor ( talk • contribs) 14:28, 11 March 2015 (UTC)
He has had a leading role in activities related to small high-tech businesses, government policy, international relations, family and community history, internet strategies, and technological innovationscreams "promotion" to me. Vague, subjective terms such as "leading role" and PR words such as "innovation" are definitely no-nos, and at this point, if I were the reviewer, I'd probably have declined the submission without reading further. However, I'm going to continue with my observations.
Hi there,
I was hoping to get more information about my recent submission: Draft:Smarsh
External link: https://en.wikipedia.org/?title=Draft:Smarsh&direction=next&oldid=650201036
You cited the need for more third-party sources as the reason it was declined. Can you specify which references aren't third-party? Portland Business Journal, Oregon Business, Inc.com and Deloitte are independent publications and aren't associated with Smarsh.
Thanks much! Lisa Peyton — Preceding unsigned comment added by Lisapeyton ( talk • contribs)
If a topic has received significant coverage in reliable sources that are independent of the subject, it is presumed to be suitable for a stand-alone article or list. Being listed in a top 100 list or similar is not considered "significant coverage", and therefore you need more and better sources. Thanks, -- L235 (alt / t / c / ping in reply) 19:28, 11 March 2015 (UTC)
Dear Kikichugirl,
I wrote a short article yesterday. The link is below: [4]
You may also look at another page which already exists in wiki: fujita conjecture
Compare these two, you will find I have provided a very exhaustive description on this theorem. And two references are also given.
In general, no people will watch my page (contraction theorem) except someone really interested in this field. Like the Fujita conjecture I support to you, we don't need to give some context you required, since the one will watch this page won't need to any context, one just want to know what exactly the Castelnuovo's contraction theorem is.
The motivation is [5].
Thanks and best regards,
rationalcurve Rationalcurve ( talk) 11:20, 10 March 2015 (UTC)
Fujita's conjecture is a problem in the theories of algebraic geometry..., while your draft does not provide any such context. Also, the article you mentioned as an example is a poor example at best. You may want to take a look at Wikipedia's best articles and base your draft on those. Before resubmitting, be sure you're aware of Wikipedia's general notability guideline. Thanks. -- L235 (alt / t / c / ping in reply) 19:36, 11 March 2015 (UTC)