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I suspect some of the images on this page could do with cropping, except I have genuinely no idea how to do this. Laun chba ller 12:20, 12 February 2023 (UTC)
I could use some clarification here. Given the context, that sounds like it is supposed to be a complement, but I'm genuinely unsure how to interpret it as one. — Compassionate727 ( T· C) 19:27, 26 March 2023 (UTC)
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I was wondering what the WP:IPA is for froge.mp3 (per piri & tommy: Student Radio Class of 2023, it rhymes with rogue). Laun chba ller 06:42, 14 April 2023 (UTC)
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There appears to be a glitch at the top of piri#2023–present: "Feel It", "updown", and "fumble"; on my netbook, no text wraps around the image.-- Laun chba ller 18:58, 20 May 2023 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Sammi Brie ( talk · contribs) 17:15, 8 July 2023 (UTC)
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I feel like the lead section is too much "they released X on Y, Y on Z, Z on A..." Pull back the lens a little bit with a better summary lead that wraps up the article's contents.
I choose about 10 percent of the references to randomly be spot-checked.
Addressing this, piri has placed a short video online, confirming the “amicable” break-up and insisting that they remain friends.The two plan to release previously recorded music, and still intend to work together in the future.
A general comment for the future: please remember to add author names where appropriate to citations.
Found this article via Wikipedia:Peer review. My only comment is about the use of the word "sex worker." Is this phrase supported by any reliable sources? Is there another way to convey this using wording that more closely mirrors what is said in these sources? Happy editing! Uri24 ( talk) 18:44, 26 July 2023 (UTC)
@ Launchballer: as promised, I'll have a look at the article and will provide commentaries on prose and structure.
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More to come. Pseud 14 ( talk) 21:09, 29 August 2023 (UTC)
1999–2020: Early life
Sophie Leigh McBurnie was born on 14 March 1999 and grew up in Rochdale. Her mother, a xxx manager, was a fan of R&B and hip-hop, while her father, a xxx manager, was a fan of rock and guitar-based music, and neither could stand the others' tastes.Also maybe tweak the second instance of was a fan of so it isn't repeated.
she frequently listened to tech house...
2020–2022: "Soft Spot", "Beachin", and "Words"
After the success of "Soft Spot", McBurnie and Villiers were both nervous to release "Beachin"
2022: "On & On", Froge.mp3, and "Unlock It"
2023–present: "Updown", "Fumble", and "Nice 2 Me"
Artistry
Personal life
Awards
Discography
That's about it. Nice work and a very interesting read as well. Pseud 14 ( talk) 20:24, 31 August 2023 (UTC)
I have edited this as part of the current backlog elimination drive drive. I picked the article out of the list of requests at random, read it and thought it looked interesting. I had not heard of Piri before but I will try to listen to some of her work now. I should say that although I love music of many different kinds I am a sad oldie who sometimes jokes that I gave up listening to pop music in 1979 as very little of it impresses me. I hope that this has not affected the quality of my edits and I hope I haven't obscured any facts because of my ignorance. I have two questions, the answers to which may enable me or others to improve the article: 1) The article uses the word "liquid" three times--twice in the phrase "liquid drum and base." Is this a technical term in which case it should stay or is it a term of approval and therefore a matter of opinion, such as might appear in a newspaper article about .a Bach fugue as for example "He played the fugue on the organ showing great liquidity not only with both hands but his feet?." If the latter we need to know whose this opinion is and we need a source. 2) She told the Times she earnt various sums of money in dollars ($) I presume this means US dollars but they could be Canadian, Australian or money from various other places. As she was an English woman living in England talking to an English newspaper did she actually give the figures in British Pounds (£.). As I don't have a subscription to the on line editions of the Times and my paper copy was given to the dustbin man within a fortnight of publication I cannot check what she said. Can the original editor assist or was he or she perhaps reading a foreign edition. I could make a re-calculation based on current values but this might not be right. Note the instruction when editing this article says use British English and this usually means use British money values as well as spelling and language (although a US or Australian equivalent might be given in brackets) Spinney Hill ( talk) 21:46, 16 January 2024 (UTC)
I don't know the subject, but a Ctrl+F for the name of that service didn't really support the lead paragraph assertion that she has been praised for this. The nearest I could find was a quote in which she was praised for being open about having OF. This isn't really the same thing. If another person was praised for being open about experiencing human trafficking or domestic violence, they're not being praised for having experienced it. Unknown Temptation ( talk) 07:24, 14 March 2024 (UTC)
Piri ( final version) received a peer review by Wikipedia editors, which on 2 April 2024 was archived. It may contain ideas you can use to improve this article. |
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Piri article. This is not a forum for general discussion of the article's subject. |
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Find sources: Google ( books · news · scholar · free images · WP refs) · FENS · JSTOR · TWL |
Piri is a former featured article candidate. Please view the links under Article milestones below to see why the nomination failed. For older candidates, please check the archive. | ||||||||||||||||||||||||||||
Piri has been listed as one of the Music good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it. | ||||||||||||||||||||||||||||
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I suspect some of the images on this page could do with cropping, except I have genuinely no idea how to do this. Laun chba ller 12:20, 12 February 2023 (UTC)
I could use some clarification here. Given the context, that sounds like it is supposed to be a complement, but I'm genuinely unsure how to interpret it as one. — Compassionate727 ( T· C) 19:27, 26 March 2023 (UTC)
This help request has been answered. If you need more help, you can , contact the responding user(s) directly on their user talk page, or consider visiting the Teahouse. |
I was wondering what the WP:IPA is for froge.mp3 (per piri & tommy: Student Radio Class of 2023, it rhymes with rogue). Laun chba ller 06:42, 14 April 2023 (UTC)
This help request has been answered. If you need more help, you can , contact the responding user(s) directly on their user talk page, or consider visiting the Teahouse. |
There appears to be a glitch at the top of piri#2023–present: "Feel It", "updown", and "fumble"; on my netbook, no text wraps around the image.-- Laun chba ller 18:58, 20 May 2023 (UTC)
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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Reviewer: Sammi Brie ( talk · contribs) 17:15, 8 July 2023 (UTC)
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
(Criteria marked are unassessed)
I feel like the lead section is too much "they released X on Y, Y on Z, Z on A..." Pull back the lens a little bit with a better summary lead that wraps up the article's contents.
I choose about 10 percent of the references to randomly be spot-checked.
Addressing this, piri has placed a short video online, confirming the “amicable” break-up and insisting that they remain friends.The two plan to release previously recorded music, and still intend to work together in the future.
A general comment for the future: please remember to add author names where appropriate to citations.
Found this article via Wikipedia:Peer review. My only comment is about the use of the word "sex worker." Is this phrase supported by any reliable sources? Is there another way to convey this using wording that more closely mirrors what is said in these sources? Happy editing! Uri24 ( talk) 18:44, 26 July 2023 (UTC)
@ Launchballer: as promised, I'll have a look at the article and will provide commentaries on prose and structure.
Lead
Life and career
More to come. Pseud 14 ( talk) 21:09, 29 August 2023 (UTC)
1999–2020: Early life
Sophie Leigh McBurnie was born on 14 March 1999 and grew up in Rochdale. Her mother, a xxx manager, was a fan of R&B and hip-hop, while her father, a xxx manager, was a fan of rock and guitar-based music, and neither could stand the others' tastes.Also maybe tweak the second instance of was a fan of so it isn't repeated.
she frequently listened to tech house...
2020–2022: "Soft Spot", "Beachin", and "Words"
After the success of "Soft Spot", McBurnie and Villiers were both nervous to release "Beachin"
2022: "On & On", Froge.mp3, and "Unlock It"
2023–present: "Updown", "Fumble", and "Nice 2 Me"
Artistry
Personal life
Awards
Discography
That's about it. Nice work and a very interesting read as well. Pseud 14 ( talk) 20:24, 31 August 2023 (UTC)
I have edited this as part of the current backlog elimination drive drive. I picked the article out of the list of requests at random, read it and thought it looked interesting. I had not heard of Piri before but I will try to listen to some of her work now. I should say that although I love music of many different kinds I am a sad oldie who sometimes jokes that I gave up listening to pop music in 1979 as very little of it impresses me. I hope that this has not affected the quality of my edits and I hope I haven't obscured any facts because of my ignorance. I have two questions, the answers to which may enable me or others to improve the article: 1) The article uses the word "liquid" three times--twice in the phrase "liquid drum and base." Is this a technical term in which case it should stay or is it a term of approval and therefore a matter of opinion, such as might appear in a newspaper article about .a Bach fugue as for example "He played the fugue on the organ showing great liquidity not only with both hands but his feet?." If the latter we need to know whose this opinion is and we need a source. 2) She told the Times she earnt various sums of money in dollars ($) I presume this means US dollars but they could be Canadian, Australian or money from various other places. As she was an English woman living in England talking to an English newspaper did she actually give the figures in British Pounds (£.). As I don't have a subscription to the on line editions of the Times and my paper copy was given to the dustbin man within a fortnight of publication I cannot check what she said. Can the original editor assist or was he or she perhaps reading a foreign edition. I could make a re-calculation based on current values but this might not be right. Note the instruction when editing this article says use British English and this usually means use British money values as well as spelling and language (although a US or Australian equivalent might be given in brackets) Spinney Hill ( talk) 21:46, 16 January 2024 (UTC)
I don't know the subject, but a Ctrl+F for the name of that service didn't really support the lead paragraph assertion that she has been praised for this. The nearest I could find was a quote in which she was praised for being open about having OF. This isn't really the same thing. If another person was praised for being open about experiencing human trafficking or domestic violence, they're not being praised for having experienced it. Unknown Temptation ( talk) 07:24, 14 March 2024 (UTC)