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The page Chandralekha_(1948_film) won a Featured Article status (the highest quality on Wikipedia). Perhaps we can pick up some tips from there for developing this page? Kautilya3 ( talk) 19:17, 17 November 2014 (UTC)
I think the word Mart doesn't seem to fit in rightly....surely that's doesn't denote the true meaning of the title...as far as my knowledge goes....any suggestions? Cheers, ƬheStrike Σagle 13:25, 30 December 2014 (UTC)
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Will review within a couple of days.♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:16, 13 March 2015 (UTC)
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Looks OK for GA I think, although still might benefit from another copyeditor. I don't think it has featured article potential at this stage though, and unless more detail can be found on production and themes I don't think it'll ever go beyond GA, but I may be proved wrong!♦ Dr. Blofeld 09:23, 16 March 2015 (UTC)
Congratulations on making it to today's listing on the "Did You Know..." section of Wikipedia Main Page. The process of making it the listing takes a bit of effort and involves the quick cooperation of many editors. All involved deserve recognition, appreciation, thanks and applause.
In response to a request for a copy-edit of Mayabazar at Wikipedia:WikiProject Guild of Copy Editors/Requests, I have just finished going through the article. I think it's in good shape now, but I wanted to say something about the plot summary. It is well written, and not too long, but for anyone not familiar with either the movie or the Krishna stories, the plot summary doesn't help a reader get a mental picture of the film's story. It's composed mostly of names. The second and third paragraphs are all right, but perhaps the addition of just a few details would make the first paragraph clearer. Here is the first paragraph of Mayabazar#Plot as it is now:
(a) In this sentence: "Krishna, furious at an action of Dussasana that has insulted Draupadi, saves Draupadi", I already changed "her" at the end of the sentence to "Draupadi". Someone not familiar with these names would have no idea which one was female. However, "an action of Dussasana that has insulted Draupadi" is awfully vague. Perhaps the action could be briefly described. What kind of action?
(b) Also, that same sentence constitutes an awfully abrupt change from the previous sentence. There seems to be no connection at all between the two sentences. How about adding a transitional word or phrase. "Meanwhile,..."? In another location? At the same time?
(c) In the third sentence, you describe the dice game that the Pandavas have lost to the Kauravas. (Who, or what, is Sakuni?) Then, two sentences later ("Balarama teaches the Kauravas a lesson...") you come back to the Kauravas, but bring in Balarama, who was not mentioned in the third sentence. Who, or what, is Balarama, and why does he teach the Kauravas a lesson? Is there any connection to the dice game? Also, what is "Hastinapuram"? A house? A town? A village? A castle? An ashram? And why was he traveling?
(d) In the next sentence, you write, "Sakuni and Duryodhana respect Balarama; after manipulating him..." Who are Sakuni and Duryodhana? If they respect Balarama, why would they manipulate him? Isn't that a disrespectful thing to do? Also, they intend to "force Balarama" to do something – another disrespectful thing to do.
I am not recommending that this paragraph be a whole lot longer. I am just suggesting the addition of a few details that would create a clearer picture in the mind of readers not familiar with the stories. If you don't think identifying the characters belongs in a plot summary, perhaps you could have a small section on the characters (before the plot section) to explain who they are, what their relationship is to each other, and which ones are taken from Hindu mythology/religion, and what, if any, symbolic role they play in the mythology. Corinne ( talk) 17:03, 2 November 2015 (UTC)
This article had a peer review, but it is missing from the talk page banner: Wikipedia:Peer review/Mayabazar/archive1. BollyJeff | talk 15:23, 3 December 2015 (UTC)
Warum hat es kein Themes section? — Preceding unsigned comment added by 2A02:8108:30BF:B168:3DF2:CFBC:DD61:F240 ( talk) 20:56, 22 February 2016 (UTC)
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The page Chandralekha_(1948_film) won a Featured Article status (the highest quality on Wikipedia). Perhaps we can pick up some tips from there for developing this page? Kautilya3 ( talk) 19:17, 17 November 2014 (UTC)
I think the word Mart doesn't seem to fit in rightly....surely that's doesn't denote the true meaning of the title...as far as my knowledge goes....any suggestions? Cheers, ƬheStrike Σagle 13:25, 30 December 2014 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld ( talk · contribs) 10:15, 13 March 2015 (UTC)
Will review within a couple of days.♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:16, 13 March 2015 (UTC)
GA review – see
WP:WIAGA for criteria
Looks OK for GA I think, although still might benefit from another copyeditor. I don't think it has featured article potential at this stage though, and unless more detail can be found on production and themes I don't think it'll ever go beyond GA, but I may be proved wrong!♦ Dr. Blofeld 09:23, 16 March 2015 (UTC)
Congratulations on making it to today's listing on the "Did You Know..." section of Wikipedia Main Page. The process of making it the listing takes a bit of effort and involves the quick cooperation of many editors. All involved deserve recognition, appreciation, thanks and applause.
In response to a request for a copy-edit of Mayabazar at Wikipedia:WikiProject Guild of Copy Editors/Requests, I have just finished going through the article. I think it's in good shape now, but I wanted to say something about the plot summary. It is well written, and not too long, but for anyone not familiar with either the movie or the Krishna stories, the plot summary doesn't help a reader get a mental picture of the film's story. It's composed mostly of names. The second and third paragraphs are all right, but perhaps the addition of just a few details would make the first paragraph clearer. Here is the first paragraph of Mayabazar#Plot as it is now:
(a) In this sentence: "Krishna, furious at an action of Dussasana that has insulted Draupadi, saves Draupadi", I already changed "her" at the end of the sentence to "Draupadi". Someone not familiar with these names would have no idea which one was female. However, "an action of Dussasana that has insulted Draupadi" is awfully vague. Perhaps the action could be briefly described. What kind of action?
(b) Also, that same sentence constitutes an awfully abrupt change from the previous sentence. There seems to be no connection at all between the two sentences. How about adding a transitional word or phrase. "Meanwhile,..."? In another location? At the same time?
(c) In the third sentence, you describe the dice game that the Pandavas have lost to the Kauravas. (Who, or what, is Sakuni?) Then, two sentences later ("Balarama teaches the Kauravas a lesson...") you come back to the Kauravas, but bring in Balarama, who was not mentioned in the third sentence. Who, or what, is Balarama, and why does he teach the Kauravas a lesson? Is there any connection to the dice game? Also, what is "Hastinapuram"? A house? A town? A village? A castle? An ashram? And why was he traveling?
(d) In the next sentence, you write, "Sakuni and Duryodhana respect Balarama; after manipulating him..." Who are Sakuni and Duryodhana? If they respect Balarama, why would they manipulate him? Isn't that a disrespectful thing to do? Also, they intend to "force Balarama" to do something – another disrespectful thing to do.
I am not recommending that this paragraph be a whole lot longer. I am just suggesting the addition of a few details that would create a clearer picture in the mind of readers not familiar with the stories. If you don't think identifying the characters belongs in a plot summary, perhaps you could have a small section on the characters (before the plot section) to explain who they are, what their relationship is to each other, and which ones are taken from Hindu mythology/religion, and what, if any, symbolic role they play in the mythology. Corinne ( talk) 17:03, 2 November 2015 (UTC)
This article had a peer review, but it is missing from the talk page banner: Wikipedia:Peer review/Mayabazar/archive1. BollyJeff | talk 15:23, 3 December 2015 (UTC)
Warum hat es kein Themes section? — Preceding unsigned comment added by 2A02:8108:30BF:B168:3DF2:CFBC:DD61:F240 ( talk) 20:56, 22 February 2016 (UTC)