I would like some general feedback and copy-edits. I'm not sure if the tone is OK or if the clarifications are understandable. Constructive citicism is appreciated. Thanks. :) Gflores Talk 19:53, 1 March 2006 (UTC)
Pretty good job, but 1) yes, what are those numbers about? 2) make sure to ilink phrases like symptomatology 3) lead is too short, consider merging it with overview section 4) history usually goes first, not last 5) don't dumb down, but instead read the great Howard S. Becker's book on how to write for social sciences and be undestood by your readers :) -- Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus Talk 23:57, 1 March 2006 (UTC)
Comorbidity - There is a high degree of comorbidity with other psychiatric disorders. Social phobia is highly comorbid with low self-esteem and major depression, due...
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Comorbidity - Social phobia often counteracts with other psychiatric disorders such as low self-esteem and major depression, due...
-- PopUpPirate 00:21, 2 March 2006 (UTC)
I would like some general feedback and copy-edits. I'm not sure if the tone is OK or if the clarifications are understandable. Constructive citicism is appreciated. Thanks. :) Gflores Talk 19:53, 1 March 2006 (UTC)
Pretty good job, but 1) yes, what are those numbers about? 2) make sure to ilink phrases like symptomatology 3) lead is too short, consider merging it with overview section 4) history usually goes first, not last 5) don't dumb down, but instead read the great Howard S. Becker's book on how to write for social sciences and be undestood by your readers :) -- Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus Talk 23:57, 1 March 2006 (UTC)
Comorbidity - There is a high degree of comorbidity with other psychiatric disorders. Social phobia is highly comorbid with low self-esteem and major depression, due...
to
Comorbidity - Social phobia often counteracts with other psychiatric disorders such as low self-esteem and major depression, due...
-- PopUpPirate 00:21, 2 March 2006 (UTC)