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Sargent Shriver ran for vice president in 1972. In the displayed picture, he is in front of a sign/map that says "Tanganika." Tanganika became Tanzania in 1964. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 144.160.5.25 ( talk) 18:19, 20 January 2011 (UTC)
This article describes Shriver as a "politician" first, and then as an activist. It seems odd to call someone who ran for elected office twice (both times unsuccessfully) a "politician", let alone to make that his first-mentioned occupation (he spent more time in the navy, for example, than running for office). In light of his many appointed government positions, including diplomatic, "statesman" might be a better overall description. Even "activist" seems a better description of his whole career. -- Piledhigheranddeeper ( talk) 22:06, 20 January 2011 (UTC)
I have removed the link to Head Start. I assume it was intended to be a link to Head Start Program but Shriver doesn't get a mention in that article. Head Start is not mentioned in the source cited.
Jobs Corps is also not mentioned in that source, so potentially that could be removed too... although Shriver does get a mention in the Job Corps article so I suspect he had some involvement there.
Yaris678 ( talk) 21:12, 21 January 2011 (UTC)
The article states that he was in the Navy and wounded at Guadalcanal. Which ship was he on? What was his position on the ship? —Preceding unsigned comment added by 68.60.53.12 ( talk) 03:18, 5 February 2011 (UTC)
His political service is covered in 239 words. His death is described in a far longer section--312 words.
I think the article has gone a little too "encyclopedic" on what he actually he did. That section could afford a little strengthening.
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He entered Yale as an undergrad in 1934. He presumably graduated in 1938, because he entered Yale Law in 1938. He would have completed Yale Law in 1941, and enlisted in the US Navy prior to Pearl Harbor at year end. He did not practice law before his military service. I am changing the content accordingly.-- FeralOink ( talk) 21:11, 22 February 2021 (UTC)
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Sargent Shriver ran for vice president in 1972. In the displayed picture, he is in front of a sign/map that says "Tanganika." Tanganika became Tanzania in 1964. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 144.160.5.25 ( talk) 18:19, 20 January 2011 (UTC)
This article describes Shriver as a "politician" first, and then as an activist. It seems odd to call someone who ran for elected office twice (both times unsuccessfully) a "politician", let alone to make that his first-mentioned occupation (he spent more time in the navy, for example, than running for office). In light of his many appointed government positions, including diplomatic, "statesman" might be a better overall description. Even "activist" seems a better description of his whole career. -- Piledhigheranddeeper ( talk) 22:06, 20 January 2011 (UTC)
I have removed the link to Head Start. I assume it was intended to be a link to Head Start Program but Shriver doesn't get a mention in that article. Head Start is not mentioned in the source cited.
Jobs Corps is also not mentioned in that source, so potentially that could be removed too... although Shriver does get a mention in the Job Corps article so I suspect he had some involvement there.
Yaris678 ( talk) 21:12, 21 January 2011 (UTC)
The article states that he was in the Navy and wounded at Guadalcanal. Which ship was he on? What was his position on the ship? —Preceding unsigned comment added by 68.60.53.12 ( talk) 03:18, 5 February 2011 (UTC)
His political service is covered in 239 words. His death is described in a far longer section--312 words.
I think the article has gone a little too "encyclopedic" on what he actually he did. That section could afford a little strengthening.
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He entered Yale as an undergrad in 1934. He presumably graduated in 1938, because he entered Yale Law in 1938. He would have completed Yale Law in 1941, and enlisted in the US Navy prior to Pearl Harbor at year end. He did not practice law before his military service. I am changing the content accordingly.-- FeralOink ( talk) 21:11, 22 February 2021 (UTC)