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Reviewer: Johannes Schade ( talk · contribs) 09:04, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
Good day
Gerda Arendt. I propose to review your GA nomination
Rachel Yakar. We have met before, and I want to take the occasion to thank you again for the kind welcome you put on my talk page when I debuted in Wikipedia on 13 July 2018. Admittedly, I am still an apprentice-reviewer and no subject-matter expert in opera singers. I will propose corrections and suggest optional improvements. The corrections rely on the GA criteria (WP:GACR).
You nominated Rachel Yakar on 3 July 2023. I wonder whether you were aware of the changes to Criterion 2b that came into effect on 2 July 2023 and often result in a need for additional citations. I only became aware of this change yesterday by chance.
Some of my corrections and suggestions are tentative. Please tell me whenever you disagree with a correction. I am probably wrong. You can ignore my suggestions. They have no effect on the article's promotion. I will start with the preliminaries and then go through the article’s sections, sometimes returning to previous sections when needed.
Best regards, Johannes Schade ( talk) 09:04, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
Most of the remarks below are only suggestions, which you can ignore. They just reflect what I think would be "nice", especially for people who read the code.
|image=
" – The image looks blurred. It would of course be nice to find the same or a similar one in a higher resolution. It also is under copyright. I am not an expert on image rights, but user
User:Storye book", who uploaded it", seems to know what he is doing. It has not been deleted to date, so it is probably fine.|caption=
" – I suggest to omit all empty infobox parameters. Some editors take such entries as an invitation to fill them in, leading to bloated infoboxes.|birth name=
" – I suggest to omit all empty infobox parameters.|organizations=
" – I believe each entry in an infobox should stand up separately. I would therefore repeat the link to "Paris Conservatoire" in the "organizations" parameter. MOS:REPEATLINK allows to do so in infoboxes.
I feel the lead is fine. It complies with MOS:LEADLENGTH as leads of articles with "Fewer than 15,000 characters" do not need more than a single paragraph. The wikilinks are sufficient and well-chosen and avoid the MOS:SEAOFBLUE problem, despite the quite high density of links.
... received international attention ...– I wondered whether you would prefer "earned international acclaim".
This section's subdivisions will be treated separately below ignoring the structure.
<ref name="Kutsch/Riemens" /><ref name="Oxford" />– Is there a reason to avoid the {{ R}} usually employed in list-defined references? I believe {{R|Kutsch/Riemens|Oxford}} would be shorter and more elegant. I feel you would do well to replace "<ref name=REFNAME>" with "{{R|REFNAME}}" in all your inline citations. The enhancement in readability is especially notable when the citations are in the middle of paragraphs and when several citations appear together.
<ref name="Kutsch/Riemens" />– This reference refers to the article on Rachel Yakar in the Großes Sängerlexikon. The definition gives the two pages over which this article stretches. However, the article is in fact quite long due to the small fontsize. I estimated about 700 words. I find that it quite often becomes difficult for the reader of reviewer to identify the relevant passage in the source. WP:PAGENUM prescribes with regard to books "Specify the page number or range of page numbers." I would either give two Refnames (e.g. Kutsch5116 and Kutsch5117 or use {{ R}} with the "p" parameter.
Best regards, Johannes Schade ( talk) 13:49, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
... Jewish family ...– This information is not in the Großes Sängerlexikon and needs to be verified by citing another source. As you put citations at the end of each sentence in this paragraph (which is perhaps needless), one would expect this additional citation at the end of the first sentence.
... Eurydike in Gluck's Orpheus und Eurydike ...– I do not see why "Eurydike" and "Orpheus und Eurydike" (in German) when the language of the original libretto was Italian.
... such as ...– The long list of roles, operas, and composers should follow an understandable logic. I would say: role in opera (by composer), e.g. Euridice in Orfeo ed Euridice (by Gluck). I would repeat the composer even if already mentioned to avoid disturbing the order. I would keep "Contessa" and not translate it to "countess".
She also appeard as ...– I suppose this differs from the 2nd sentence because these roles are minor. If this is indeed so, I would advise to make that explicit. I would apply the same logic as in the 2nd sentence. Besides, "Gounod" is mispelled as "Gouod".
Beiing French but part of a German ensemble, "International" is perhaps a bit confusing in Yakar's case. I would perhaps say "Performances elsewhere".
... as the composer ...– I feel that "as the Composer" (with an uppercase C) would make it clearer that the Composer is indeed a role to be sung in this opera.
... Gilda ...– Getting here, I had forgotten all about Gilda in Rigoletto. Perhaps remind the reader that Gilda is in Rigoletto.
... internationally ...– Perhaps "outside of the Deutsche Oper am Rhein".
... Incoronazione ...– The present description practically gives nothing more than what is already stated in the lead. The treatment in the text should normally be more detailed. What was said about her performance?
Best regards, Johannes Schade ( talk) 20:47, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
... in Lyon ...– I found that more precisely she was born in Lyon in the 7th arrondissement. The reference for this is here. Yakar is a Jewish firstname for boys. here It means "precious". In Hebrew it is represented by the three Hebrew letters Yod (Y, 10th letter of the Hebrew alphabet), Qoph (Q, 19th letter of the Hebrew alphabet) and Resh (R, 12th letter of the Hebrew alphabet), but the Q is usually translitterated as K in English and in French. As Hebrew is written from right to left these three Hebrew letters appear of course in inverse order in the dictionary. Any Hebrew-English dictionary may be cited for yakar=precious. For example Shiloh Dictionary, here. As Yakar is a boy's name, it appears in old Jewish patronymic names such as Yaakov ben Yakar and Judah ben Yakar. As a surname Yakar is common among Sephardic Jews as can be shown by a search of the Central Database of Shoah Victims. [1]
Yakar was born in the 7th Arrondissement of [[Lyon]]<ref name=Lyon /> on 3 March 1936 to a Jewish{{Efn|name=Jew}} family of Greek-Turkish origin.<ref name="Kutsch/Riemens" />. So I add 7th Arrondissement , the Efn and the final citation, which is there to make the citations clearer, but is perhaps not needed.
More to follow, Johannes Schade ( talk) 14:17, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
She then studied voice ...– Yes, according to Kutsch, but the source "Bayreuth" contradicts this with "10 Jahre Klavier in Paris ...". According to the latter source she might have started studying voice only when she became a pupil of Lubin after her studies at the Conservatoire. This has a ring of truth: life sometimes leads us through strange detours. Perhaps there is a source somewhere that lists students and teachers of the Conservatoire that could tell us what she studied and who her teacher was?
... Eurydike in Gluck's Orpheus und Eurydike ...– I now understand why you cite this opera's name in German after your explanation, but I do not think the general reader can understand. You would have to explain this also to the general reader and it would require a citation that supports the claim that Rachel sang it in German. That all probably goes to far. I would think it were much simpler to cite the opera by its original Italian name.
She also appeared there ...– The previous sentence gives a long list of composers, roles and operas ordered by some chronological criterion. One might expect that the 3rd sentence continues this list but the chronological order seems to have been abandoned in this list or is not recognisable. It appears haphazard to me. Perhaps the criterion could be mentioned explicitly and followed rigourously. Maybe I just do not understand.
Under this title one could have expected an appreciation of Rachel's performance in roles of various composers, ages and styles. As this section stands here, it adds some other roles that have not been mentioned before. I wonder a bit why a section Repertoire is needed. I feel the section could simply be incorporated into the previous one.
Her repertoire included Mozart roles ...– The first sentence uses an Oxford comma, whereas until now you never used it. Please standardise on the one or the other.
Best regards, Johannes Schade ( talk) 19:35, 10 August 2023 (UTC)
Dear Gerda thanks for telling.
Reference Alexandre Ivan A. Alexandre (see "Ivan A. Alexandre" in the French Wikipedia); Just to state this explicitly: the first parameter should not be "A. van", but "Ivan A.". Alexandre regularly writes the column "La Chronique" in the magazine Diapason. This periodic exists on paper and online but seems to be safe behind its paywall and would be inaccessible to you and me, were it not for the "à la une" feature on the website, which you cite and which contains an obituary for Rachel. This obituary does not mention a number of the Diapason Magazine. The latest number is No 274, Été 2023, with Maria Callas on the cover. Perhaps this obituary has not yet been published in the magazine and will appear in the No 725? Probably impossible to know and so we cannot fille the paramer ïsse".
Reference Braun Here as well the issue and page seem to be ubknown.
Best regards, Johannes Schade ( talk) 20:15, 11 August 2023 (UTC)
I believe, the reference definitions should be ordered alphabetically by refname.
The author is indicated as Gary Hoffman at the top, but at the bottom the articles is signed "Jan Neckers". I do not understand. Do you? As this uses the template Cite web, should it not rather use the parameter "website" than "work"? (see Template:Cite web)
This reference is a book that contains many articles each about an opera and the disks recording the presentations of this opera. I would therefore use the template "Cite encyclopedia" with parameters "title=Les Indes galantes" and "encyclopedia=Opern-Diskographie" in the description of the book in the source list, and the following entry in the refernce definitions:
<ref name=Steiger>
{{Harvnb|Steiger |2011 |p=[https://books.google.com/books?id=Zk9HSVAUarkC&pg=PA383 383]}}
</ref>
As this uses the template Cite web, it should use the parameter "website" rather than "work". The same is valid for all the other "Cite web" reference definitions that follow.
The template "Cite encyclopedia" would suit the GSL better than "Cite book".
Best regards, Johannes Schade ( talk) 20:37, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
Since you have changed the citations to use Sfn and removed the definitions in Reflist, you must also replace the "Use list-defined references" with "Use shortened footnotes" near the beginning before the infobox. As you are by far the predominant contributor of the article I would thnk that you do not need to ask for permission to change the citation style as preconised in WP:CITEVAR.
Best regards, Johannes Schade ( talk) 19:25, 16 August 2023 (UTC)
Dear Gerda, thanks for your latest corrections and for your patience we me. I have reread what we have and feel we are quite close to passing this as GA. Do you agree or are there still things you would like to add or to improve? The following are still outstanding as I understand it:
... Eurydike in Gluck's Orpheus und Eurydike ...– If you find it important that Orpheus und Eurydike was performed in German and want share this with the reader than it would have to be much more explicit and would need a citation. I doubt you want to go that far. You keep "Najade" and "Ariadne auf Naxos" in German, even if it was probably performed in French at Aix-en-Provence. So, I would think, change it to "Euridice" and "Orfeo ed Euridice" as it appears in the linked article.
I stll feel this heading does not reflect the content of the section. As already said: Under this title one could have expected an appreciation of Rachel's performance in roles of various composers, ages and styles. As this section stands here, it adds some other roles that have not been mentioned before. I wonder a bit why a section Repertoire is needed. I feel the section could simply be incorporated into the previous one.
... From 1990 Yakar taught opera at the Paris Conservatoire, to 1997.– It sounds awkward to separate the "from" so far from the corresponding "to". I propose: "From 1990 to 1997 Yakar taught ...'.
Conductor Minkowski thanked her ...– You have already mentioned Marc Minkowski at the end of the section "Performances in Europe", but I must admit I had forgotten about it when I encountered him here again. I feel he should be called "Marc Minkowski" here like it was further up. To me "Conductor Minkowski" sounds as if you introduce him here for the first time. Why does he appear here? Was his tribute in an obituary? If so perhaps say so. It would explain why he appears here.
I feel the "Cite web"-sources should have "archive-url"-parameters in addition to the "url"-parameter to fight link rot. See Help:Using the Wayback Machine.
Before "and" there should be a comma when the "and" links two complete sentences (see Grammarly https://www.grammarly.com/blog/comma-before-and). For example your sentence "She was a member of the Deutsche Oper am Rhein from 1964 to 1991, and appeared also in Paris, at the Royal Opera House in London and at festivals including Bayreuth and Glyndebourne." should not have a comma before "and appeared" because the part starting with "and appeared" does not have its own subject. There are quite a few such superflous commas in your text. Please remove them.
Please read the Wikipedia article about the " Oxford comma". It is well explained and not complicated at all. Your sentence "She appeared at the Bayreuth Festival in 1975 and 1976 as Freia in Das Rheingold, Gerhilde in Die Walküre, and a Flower Maiden in Parsifal." uses an Oxford comma before "and a Flower Maiden". You must decide: either you use the Oxford comma in all your enumerations or in none. German and French do not use a comma before the final "and" of an enumeration. In English some texts do and some texts don't."
I think that is all that remains to do. Best regards, Johannes Johannes Schade ( talk) 17:49, 23 September 2023 (UTC)
... Eurydike in Gluck's Orpheus und Eurydike ...
I thought we had agreed on Eurydike -> Euridice, but there is still a Eurydike left. Please change it.
Yakar was regarded as a "sculptor of words ...The closing quotation mark is missing.
Her students included ...You cite a single student: Patricia Petibon. Your sentence ("with included") appears unsuitable for that case. I would propose "Patricia Petibon was one of her students" or similar.
Hopefully this is now all that remains to do. With thanks and best regards, Johannes Schade ( talk) 08:39, 29 September 2023 (UTC)
@ Gerda Arendt: Thanks for the note :) my thought was that is that the scene belongs in an article about the performance if it's not more relevant to Yakar than "she was in it". theleekycauldron ( talk • she/her) 22:49, 16 November 2023 (UTC)
Cite error: There are <ref group=lower-alpha>
tags or {{efn}}
templates on this page, but the references will not show without a {{reflist|group=lower-alpha}}
template or {{notelist}}
template (see the
help page).
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Reviewer: Johannes Schade ( talk · contribs) 09:04, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
Good day
Gerda Arendt. I propose to review your GA nomination
Rachel Yakar. We have met before, and I want to take the occasion to thank you again for the kind welcome you put on my talk page when I debuted in Wikipedia on 13 July 2018. Admittedly, I am still an apprentice-reviewer and no subject-matter expert in opera singers. I will propose corrections and suggest optional improvements. The corrections rely on the GA criteria (WP:GACR).
You nominated Rachel Yakar on 3 July 2023. I wonder whether you were aware of the changes to Criterion 2b that came into effect on 2 July 2023 and often result in a need for additional citations. I only became aware of this change yesterday by chance.
Some of my corrections and suggestions are tentative. Please tell me whenever you disagree with a correction. I am probably wrong. You can ignore my suggestions. They have no effect on the article's promotion. I will start with the preliminaries and then go through the article’s sections, sometimes returning to previous sections when needed.
Best regards, Johannes Schade ( talk) 09:04, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
Most of the remarks below are only suggestions, which you can ignore. They just reflect what I think would be "nice", especially for people who read the code.
|image=
" – The image looks blurred. It would of course be nice to find the same or a similar one in a higher resolution. It also is under copyright. I am not an expert on image rights, but user
User:Storye book", who uploaded it", seems to know what he is doing. It has not been deleted to date, so it is probably fine.|caption=
" – I suggest to omit all empty infobox parameters. Some editors take such entries as an invitation to fill them in, leading to bloated infoboxes.|birth name=
" – I suggest to omit all empty infobox parameters.|organizations=
" – I believe each entry in an infobox should stand up separately. I would therefore repeat the link to "Paris Conservatoire" in the "organizations" parameter. MOS:REPEATLINK allows to do so in infoboxes.
I feel the lead is fine. It complies with MOS:LEADLENGTH as leads of articles with "Fewer than 15,000 characters" do not need more than a single paragraph. The wikilinks are sufficient and well-chosen and avoid the MOS:SEAOFBLUE problem, despite the quite high density of links.
... received international attention ...– I wondered whether you would prefer "earned international acclaim".
This section's subdivisions will be treated separately below ignoring the structure.
<ref name="Kutsch/Riemens" /><ref name="Oxford" />– Is there a reason to avoid the {{ R}} usually employed in list-defined references? I believe {{R|Kutsch/Riemens|Oxford}} would be shorter and more elegant. I feel you would do well to replace "<ref name=REFNAME>" with "{{R|REFNAME}}" in all your inline citations. The enhancement in readability is especially notable when the citations are in the middle of paragraphs and when several citations appear together.
<ref name="Kutsch/Riemens" />– This reference refers to the article on Rachel Yakar in the Großes Sängerlexikon. The definition gives the two pages over which this article stretches. However, the article is in fact quite long due to the small fontsize. I estimated about 700 words. I find that it quite often becomes difficult for the reader of reviewer to identify the relevant passage in the source. WP:PAGENUM prescribes with regard to books "Specify the page number or range of page numbers." I would either give two Refnames (e.g. Kutsch5116 and Kutsch5117 or use {{ R}} with the "p" parameter.
Best regards, Johannes Schade ( talk) 13:49, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
... Jewish family ...– This information is not in the Großes Sängerlexikon and needs to be verified by citing another source. As you put citations at the end of each sentence in this paragraph (which is perhaps needless), one would expect this additional citation at the end of the first sentence.
... Eurydike in Gluck's Orpheus und Eurydike ...– I do not see why "Eurydike" and "Orpheus und Eurydike" (in German) when the language of the original libretto was Italian.
... such as ...– The long list of roles, operas, and composers should follow an understandable logic. I would say: role in opera (by composer), e.g. Euridice in Orfeo ed Euridice (by Gluck). I would repeat the composer even if already mentioned to avoid disturbing the order. I would keep "Contessa" and not translate it to "countess".
She also appeard as ...– I suppose this differs from the 2nd sentence because these roles are minor. If this is indeed so, I would advise to make that explicit. I would apply the same logic as in the 2nd sentence. Besides, "Gounod" is mispelled as "Gouod".
Beiing French but part of a German ensemble, "International" is perhaps a bit confusing in Yakar's case. I would perhaps say "Performances elsewhere".
... as the composer ...– I feel that "as the Composer" (with an uppercase C) would make it clearer that the Composer is indeed a role to be sung in this opera.
... Gilda ...– Getting here, I had forgotten all about Gilda in Rigoletto. Perhaps remind the reader that Gilda is in Rigoletto.
... internationally ...– Perhaps "outside of the Deutsche Oper am Rhein".
... Incoronazione ...– The present description practically gives nothing more than what is already stated in the lead. The treatment in the text should normally be more detailed. What was said about her performance?
Best regards, Johannes Schade ( talk) 20:47, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
... in Lyon ...– I found that more precisely she was born in Lyon in the 7th arrondissement. The reference for this is here. Yakar is a Jewish firstname for boys. here It means "precious". In Hebrew it is represented by the three Hebrew letters Yod (Y, 10th letter of the Hebrew alphabet), Qoph (Q, 19th letter of the Hebrew alphabet) and Resh (R, 12th letter of the Hebrew alphabet), but the Q is usually translitterated as K in English and in French. As Hebrew is written from right to left these three Hebrew letters appear of course in inverse order in the dictionary. Any Hebrew-English dictionary may be cited for yakar=precious. For example Shiloh Dictionary, here. As Yakar is a boy's name, it appears in old Jewish patronymic names such as Yaakov ben Yakar and Judah ben Yakar. As a surname Yakar is common among Sephardic Jews as can be shown by a search of the Central Database of Shoah Victims. [1]
Yakar was born in the 7th Arrondissement of [[Lyon]]<ref name=Lyon /> on 3 March 1936 to a Jewish{{Efn|name=Jew}} family of Greek-Turkish origin.<ref name="Kutsch/Riemens" />. So I add 7th Arrondissement , the Efn and the final citation, which is there to make the citations clearer, but is perhaps not needed.
More to follow, Johannes Schade ( talk) 14:17, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
She then studied voice ...– Yes, according to Kutsch, but the source "Bayreuth" contradicts this with "10 Jahre Klavier in Paris ...". According to the latter source she might have started studying voice only when she became a pupil of Lubin after her studies at the Conservatoire. This has a ring of truth: life sometimes leads us through strange detours. Perhaps there is a source somewhere that lists students and teachers of the Conservatoire that could tell us what she studied and who her teacher was?
... Eurydike in Gluck's Orpheus und Eurydike ...– I now understand why you cite this opera's name in German after your explanation, but I do not think the general reader can understand. You would have to explain this also to the general reader and it would require a citation that supports the claim that Rachel sang it in German. That all probably goes to far. I would think it were much simpler to cite the opera by its original Italian name.
She also appeared there ...– The previous sentence gives a long list of composers, roles and operas ordered by some chronological criterion. One might expect that the 3rd sentence continues this list but the chronological order seems to have been abandoned in this list or is not recognisable. It appears haphazard to me. Perhaps the criterion could be mentioned explicitly and followed rigourously. Maybe I just do not understand.
Under this title one could have expected an appreciation of Rachel's performance in roles of various composers, ages and styles. As this section stands here, it adds some other roles that have not been mentioned before. I wonder a bit why a section Repertoire is needed. I feel the section could simply be incorporated into the previous one.
Her repertoire included Mozart roles ...– The first sentence uses an Oxford comma, whereas until now you never used it. Please standardise on the one or the other.
Best regards, Johannes Schade ( talk) 19:35, 10 August 2023 (UTC)
Dear Gerda thanks for telling.
Reference Alexandre Ivan A. Alexandre (see "Ivan A. Alexandre" in the French Wikipedia); Just to state this explicitly: the first parameter should not be "A. van", but "Ivan A.". Alexandre regularly writes the column "La Chronique" in the magazine Diapason. This periodic exists on paper and online but seems to be safe behind its paywall and would be inaccessible to you and me, were it not for the "à la une" feature on the website, which you cite and which contains an obituary for Rachel. This obituary does not mention a number of the Diapason Magazine. The latest number is No 274, Été 2023, with Maria Callas on the cover. Perhaps this obituary has not yet been published in the magazine and will appear in the No 725? Probably impossible to know and so we cannot fille the paramer ïsse".
Reference Braun Here as well the issue and page seem to be ubknown.
Best regards, Johannes Schade ( talk) 20:15, 11 August 2023 (UTC)
I believe, the reference definitions should be ordered alphabetically by refname.
The author is indicated as Gary Hoffman at the top, but at the bottom the articles is signed "Jan Neckers". I do not understand. Do you? As this uses the template Cite web, should it not rather use the parameter "website" than "work"? (see Template:Cite web)
This reference is a book that contains many articles each about an opera and the disks recording the presentations of this opera. I would therefore use the template "Cite encyclopedia" with parameters "title=Les Indes galantes" and "encyclopedia=Opern-Diskographie" in the description of the book in the source list, and the following entry in the refernce definitions:
<ref name=Steiger>
{{Harvnb|Steiger |2011 |p=[https://books.google.com/books?id=Zk9HSVAUarkC&pg=PA383 383]}}
</ref>
As this uses the template Cite web, it should use the parameter "website" rather than "work". The same is valid for all the other "Cite web" reference definitions that follow.
The template "Cite encyclopedia" would suit the GSL better than "Cite book".
Best regards, Johannes Schade ( talk) 20:37, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
Since you have changed the citations to use Sfn and removed the definitions in Reflist, you must also replace the "Use list-defined references" with "Use shortened footnotes" near the beginning before the infobox. As you are by far the predominant contributor of the article I would thnk that you do not need to ask for permission to change the citation style as preconised in WP:CITEVAR.
Best regards, Johannes Schade ( talk) 19:25, 16 August 2023 (UTC)
Dear Gerda, thanks for your latest corrections and for your patience we me. I have reread what we have and feel we are quite close to passing this as GA. Do you agree or are there still things you would like to add or to improve? The following are still outstanding as I understand it:
... Eurydike in Gluck's Orpheus und Eurydike ...– If you find it important that Orpheus und Eurydike was performed in German and want share this with the reader than it would have to be much more explicit and would need a citation. I doubt you want to go that far. You keep "Najade" and "Ariadne auf Naxos" in German, even if it was probably performed in French at Aix-en-Provence. So, I would think, change it to "Euridice" and "Orfeo ed Euridice" as it appears in the linked article.
I stll feel this heading does not reflect the content of the section. As already said: Under this title one could have expected an appreciation of Rachel's performance in roles of various composers, ages and styles. As this section stands here, it adds some other roles that have not been mentioned before. I wonder a bit why a section Repertoire is needed. I feel the section could simply be incorporated into the previous one.
... From 1990 Yakar taught opera at the Paris Conservatoire, to 1997.– It sounds awkward to separate the "from" so far from the corresponding "to". I propose: "From 1990 to 1997 Yakar taught ...'.
Conductor Minkowski thanked her ...– You have already mentioned Marc Minkowski at the end of the section "Performances in Europe", but I must admit I had forgotten about it when I encountered him here again. I feel he should be called "Marc Minkowski" here like it was further up. To me "Conductor Minkowski" sounds as if you introduce him here for the first time. Why does he appear here? Was his tribute in an obituary? If so perhaps say so. It would explain why he appears here.
I feel the "Cite web"-sources should have "archive-url"-parameters in addition to the "url"-parameter to fight link rot. See Help:Using the Wayback Machine.
Before "and" there should be a comma when the "and" links two complete sentences (see Grammarly https://www.grammarly.com/blog/comma-before-and). For example your sentence "She was a member of the Deutsche Oper am Rhein from 1964 to 1991, and appeared also in Paris, at the Royal Opera House in London and at festivals including Bayreuth and Glyndebourne." should not have a comma before "and appeared" because the part starting with "and appeared" does not have its own subject. There are quite a few such superflous commas in your text. Please remove them.
Please read the Wikipedia article about the " Oxford comma". It is well explained and not complicated at all. Your sentence "She appeared at the Bayreuth Festival in 1975 and 1976 as Freia in Das Rheingold, Gerhilde in Die Walküre, and a Flower Maiden in Parsifal." uses an Oxford comma before "and a Flower Maiden". You must decide: either you use the Oxford comma in all your enumerations or in none. German and French do not use a comma before the final "and" of an enumeration. In English some texts do and some texts don't."
I think that is all that remains to do. Best regards, Johannes Johannes Schade ( talk) 17:49, 23 September 2023 (UTC)
... Eurydike in Gluck's Orpheus und Eurydike ...
I thought we had agreed on Eurydike -> Euridice, but there is still a Eurydike left. Please change it.
Yakar was regarded as a "sculptor of words ...The closing quotation mark is missing.
Her students included ...You cite a single student: Patricia Petibon. Your sentence ("with included") appears unsuitable for that case. I would propose "Patricia Petibon was one of her students" or similar.
Hopefully this is now all that remains to do. With thanks and best regards, Johannes Schade ( talk) 08:39, 29 September 2023 (UTC)
@ Gerda Arendt: Thanks for the note :) my thought was that is that the scene belongs in an article about the performance if it's not more relevant to Yakar than "she was in it". theleekycauldron ( talk • she/her) 22:49, 16 November 2023 (UTC)
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