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Reviewing this version. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 13:10, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply

SandyGeorgia, thank you a thousand times for all your work. You have uncovered some uncited history. I ordered two books and hope to have a cited history done in the next week. First they have to get here. Sorry for the delay. - SusanLesch ( talk) 22:56, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
SusanLesch Not to worry; there is no rush at FAR. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 23:34, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Thank you for your note. Everything's cited now but I still have a row to hoe with your review. - SusanLesch ( talk) 19:05, 8 November 2023 (UTC) reply
OK, let me know when it's time for me to re-engage. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 19:17, 8 November 2023 (UTC) reply
Will do. I'm sorry this will take more time. Wikipedia needs more Minnesota editors. - SusanLesch ( talk) 00:03, 14 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Dakota natives, city founded

  • The first sentence is material that is not contained in the next citation, and how do we know they were the "sole" occupants?
Good catch. Corrected.
  • The next two sentences are also uncited.
Corrected. Somehow I skipped over the fur trade. Now that's clear.
  • In 1805 Zebulon Pike negotiated with the Dakota for 100,000 acres of land where present-day Minneapolis resides in the first Treaty of St. Peters with the agreement a military fort could be built.
    present-day Minnesota does not reside in the first Treaty of St. Peters -->
    Zebulon Pike negotiated with the Dakota in the 1805 first Treaty of St. Peters for a 100,000 acres of land, with the agreement a military fort could be built there; present-day Minneapolis resides on that land.
Thank you, replaced. Added questionable in a footnote.
Yes, convert added (to 9 square miles).
  • In 1819, the US Army built Fort Snelling at the southern edge of present-day Minneapolis ... here, we are repeating present-day Minneapolis only one sentence later; the whole thing needs better integration from the start.
    Zebulon Pike negotiated with the Dakota in the 1805 first Treaty of St. Peters for a 100,000 acres of land, with the agreement a military fort could be built there; in 1819, the US Army built Fort Snelling on that land at the southern edge of present-day Minneapolis, to direct Native American trade away from British-Canadian traders, and to deter warring between the Dakota and Ojibwe in northern Minnesota.
    The mention of the Ojibwe here is part of why I question the "sole" in the first sentence. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 13:23, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
    Revising. Well done, SandyGeorgia.
  • The US government pressed the Dakota to sell their land ... More of their land? Different land than the Fort Snelling land ? How much more land? Where in relation to Minneapolis and Snelling ... As it reads now, it implies they never sold the Fort Snelling land-- is that the case? I'm confused.
The Mississippi divides the region. First they sold the east side, then the west. Your point is clarified now.
  • were negotiated by corrupt officials ... corrupt officials of/from (what?)
Added "Minnesota". Added Alexander Ramsey at two points.
  • their terms were rarely honored --> rarely honored by whom?
Added "US government". Some discussion of Congress's ratification added.
  • During the American Civil War, officials plundered annuities promised ... what officials (Minnesota, local, US government, a certain bureau)??
You're right, that's overstated. Reworded the sentence.
  • The Dakota were interned and exiled from Minnesota --> this is Minnesota-wide and the Dakota War centers on Southern Minnesota ... can we add a clause to somehow relate this to Minneapolis. How can we relate the whole Dakota War/expulsion which was more related to southwestern Minnesota back to Minnapolis Dakotans?
Difficult assignment but this proved to be possible! Greatly improved.
  • the toll bridge cost pedestrians three cents .. should have an inflation equivalent for today. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 13:38, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Thank you, added.

Done. - SusanLesch ( talk) 17:07, 25 November 2023 (UTC) reply

@ SandyGeorgia: Would you please check over only this section on the Dakota people and city founding? Sorry this took so long. Because of the uncited statements you found, I concentrated on criterion 1c, well-researched (now we have 60 citations and footnotes). See what you think. Hope this section makes a good first impression. Moving on to other sections until I hear from you. - SusanLesch ( talk) 16:55, 27 November 2023 (UTC) reply
Susan, I don't think I'll be able to get to this until Friday, SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 16:47, 29 November 2023 (UTC) reply
Thanks. With some luck this will be done on Friday. - SusanLesch ( talk) 19:52, 29 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Lumber, waterpower, and flour milling

  • Water power from St. Anthony's Falls led to the growth of the lumber and flour milling industies in Minneapolis and Minnesota; why isn't the section heading more logical, as in, Water power, lumber and flower milling? I can't decipher why the two industries would straddle the driver. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 13:41, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Section renamed.
  • Towns built in western Minnesota with Minneapolis lumber shipped their wheat back to the city for milling.[43] -->
    Towns built in western Minnesota with lumber from Minneapolis sawmills shipped their wheat back to the city for milling.[43]
Done.
  • Growing use of steam power freed lumbermen and their sawmills from the falls. --> ??? -->
    Growing use of steam power freed lumbermen and their sawmills from dependence on the falls.
Done.
  • Minneapolis riverfront describes the use of water power in ... well into the section, we find the first link to water power (which differs from the section heading, that uses the word as one); can the link be worked in earlier, and the heading should be water power as in the body.
Corrected placement. (The quotation has one word, but usage suggests two words are preferable. Kept two in the heading.)
  • 1893, fire spread from Nicollet Island to Boom Island to northeast Minneapolis where the Grain Belt Brewery stopped it. --> How does a brewery (building) stop a fire (ie, did people stop the fire, what about the brewery stopped the fire?)
Copyedited to include the wind.
  • valuable ($0.50 profit per barrel in 1871, increased to $4.50 in 1874), --> give at least one inflation equivalent in today's dollars.
Done.
  • Mention of Washburn-Crosby with no definition of who or what that is. One discovers a link, Washburn Crosby Company, that redirects to General Mills. Define Washburn-Crosby as whatever it is -- a precursor to General Mills? A company later acquired by General Mills? We have Washburn in the article, but no Crosby, and no idea what Washburn-Crosby is.
Mentioned John Crosby and explained Washburn-Crosby became General Mills.
  • Decades of soil exhaustion, stem rust, and changes in freight tariffs combined to quash the city's flour industry. ... Is that from Lass 238? Or is it a combo summary of multiple sources?
It's all from the same page in Lass. Added one citation.
  • Northern States Power bought the united mill companies in 1923, ... similar to the Washburn-Crosy situation, what are the "united mill companies"? Undefined at this point ... SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 14:12, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Sorry, I took the corner too fast. Copyedited and added a sentence.

Done but I would appreciate it if you can read through this section. - SusanLesch ( talk) 21:36, 2 December 2023 (UTC) reply

Critical industry

  • Having read this section, I cannot decipher what the critical industry is or why this section has this as a heading. It looks like it may want to be something like "Other industries develop". SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 14:13, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Good idea. Renamed.
  • Minneapolis Star humorist Don Morrison wrote that the city doubled, tripled, then quadrupled its population every decade, and in 1922, the city's assessed property value was $266 million, "nearly 10 times the price paid for the entire midcontinent in the Louisiana Purchase."[81] After the milling era waned, a "modern, major city"[81] surfaced in 1900, attracted skilled workers,[82] and learned from the university's Institute of Technology.[83]
    The humor aspect is lost on me; what am I missing?
"Is this funny?" from Chat GPT 3.5
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The humor in this statement lies in the exaggeration of Minneapolis's population growth and property value, creating a playful and absurd comparison to the Louisiana Purchase. The Louisiana Purchase was a significant historical event in which the United States acquired a vast territory from France in 1803. By suggesting that Minneapolis's assessed property value in 1922 was nearly 10 times the price paid for the entire midcontinent in the Louisiana Purchase, the humorist is using hyperbole to emphasize the city's perceived rapid and extravagant development. Whether someone finds it funny or not is subjective, but it seems to be crafted as a witty and exaggerated commentary on Minneapolis's growth.

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There are several reasons why the excerpt about Minneapolis's rapid growth and property value might be considered funny:

  1. Absurdity: The statement that the city doubled, tripled, then quadrupled its population every decade is inherently absurd. This kind of exponential growth is almost impossible and defies logic. This exaggeration adds a humorous element to the text.
  2. Hyperbole: Comparing the city's property value to the price of the Louisiana Purchase is a massive overstatement and uses hyperbole for comedic effect. It highlights the dramatic increase in wealth and emphasizes the city's perceived importance.
  3. Juxtaposition: The contrast between the historical event of the Louisiana Purchase and the modern city of Minneapolis creates a humorous incongruity. It suggests that Minneapolis, through its rapid development, has become economically comparable to a vast region of land acquired in a major historical transaction.
  4. Unexpected comparison: The seemingly unrelated comparison of population growth to land purchase adds a layer of surprise and absurdity to the humor. This unexpected connection makes the statement more memorable and impactful.
  5. Historical context: Considering the timeframe (1922), the rapid development of Minneapolis could be seen as a novelty and a source of local pride. This context adds a layer of nostalgia and historical charm to the humor.
  6. Audience: The humor is also likely to resonate more with readers familiar with the history and culture of Minneapolis. The shared understanding of the city's growth and local pride enhances the comedic effect.

It's important to note that humor is subjective, and what one person finds funny, another may not. However, the excerpt utilizes several techniques commonly found in humor, making it likely to be perceived as funny by many readers.

I will remove it if you wish but IMO the article will suffer.
  • How does a city (vs. people) "learn" from an Institute? What did it/they learn?
    If "modern, major city" can't be re-phrased, the quote should be attributed ... is this what is meant ... After the milling era waned, the 1900 beginnings of a modern city attracted skilled workers who learned at the university's Institute of Technology ?????
† "modern, major city" are Morrison's words in the same paragraph. And they're cited so I hope all right. By 1900 (the year, incidentally, that John Stevens died) Minneapolis had become a modern, major city. In a scant 50 years, its population had increased tenfold to more than 200,000, doubling, tripling and quadrupling every decade; its assessed property valuation in 1922 had mounted to $26,000,000--nearly ten times the price paid for the entire midcontinent in the Louisiana Purchase. [1]
† "learned" might have to change. Stipanovich is cited with loc, but maybe not well enough: Thus while Minneapolis began to lose jobs in the mills, it began to acquire other jobs in management, financial administration, advertising, market research, product research and design, and other mid-level management and administrative positions. The effect was to upgrade the workforce... and The university's role became more and more important as the 20th century rolled along.... He says on the next page, The University of Minnesota in Minneapolis also played a major role as its specialists contributed invaluable services to a variety of activities, including the Manhattan nuclear project, medicinal advances, military nutrition, and the development of new technology for weapons systems. (Then he describes the individual researchers/professors.) I think Stipanovich's intent was to say that large entities learned from the U, not only skilled workers.
Reworded that sentence to say the city depended on the university's expertise.
  • In 1888, a businessman found that itchy wool underwear could be covered in silk. His Minneapolis textile factory lasted a century known as Munsingwear, today as Perry Ellis,[85] and in 1923, was the world's largest manufacturer of underwear.[86]
    Was that businessman George D. Munsing ?
    the century was not known as Munsingwear.
    is this what is meant ???
    In 1888, businessman George D. Munsing found that itchy wool underwear could be covered in silk. His Minneapolis textile business—known then as Munsingwear, today as Perry Ellis—lasted a century[85] and in 1923, was the world's largest manufacturer of underwear.
Yes, thank you. Munsing's name is now in.
  • ] In 1922, an inventor founded Onan Corporation near downtown Minneapolis[87] that built and sold generators.[88] Prior to a Cummins buyout in 1986,[88] Onan brought electricity to midwestern markets before power lines covered the country, and supplied about half the generator sets the US military used during World War II ... same as above ...
    Is this businessman Cummins Onan ??
    downtown Minneapolis did not build and sell generators
    Is this what is meant ?
    In 1922, inventor Cummins Onan founded Onan Corporation (bought by Cummins in 1986), that built and sold generators in Minneapolis. Onan brought electricity to midwestern markets before power lines covered the country, and supplied about half the generator sets the US military used during World War II. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 14:32, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Thank you, that's better. (Cummins Onan is a brand name, not the inventor.)
  • Minneapolis-Honeywell built a south Minneapolis campus where their experience controlling indoor temperature earned them contracts controlling military servomechanisms like the secret Norden bombsight and the C-1 autopilot.
    controlling ... controlling ... vary wording.
Good point. I chose "regulate".
Over my pay grade but Britannica says, "automatic device used to correct the performance of a mechanism by means of an error-sensing feedback".

Almost done (except one †). - SusanLesch ( talk) 17:22, 25 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Social tensions

  • Should the section heading be singular? WP:MSH references article titles, and WP:SINGULAR says not to plural.
Right, thank you.
  • Historian Iric Nathanson writes that over the course of the 20th century, "Minnesota's major city was able to shed a stultifying social order that inhibited change and entrenched privilege."[104] In many ways, the 20th century was a difficult time of bigotry and malfeasance, beginning with four decades of corruption,[105] followed by attempts to overcome them.
Omitted the quote.
  • Corruption by whom:
    The first two sentences contradict each other, making the final clause then appear as original research. Is this the way to fix that (that is, is this what the passage means to say)?
    According to (someone), in many ways, the 20th century in Minneapolis was a difficult time of bigotry and malfeasance, beginning with four decades of corruption [by whom].[105] Historian Iric Nathanson writes that the city "was able to shed a stultifying social order that inhibited change and entrenched privilege" during the 20th century.[104] SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 16:00, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Instead I omitted the last clause of second sentence.
  • How do jump from Ames to the KKK in the same para; there's no transition, what's the connection? How does the rest of that paragraph relate to the topic sentence about a Maternity Hospital? Is the paragraph about crime or health?
Agree the para is an aggregation of thoughts. With the better topic sentence it should fly. See what you think now.
  • Is the four decades of corruption in the first paragraph the same as the four decades mentioned in the third paragraph? If so, the flow needs better merging.
Better without the quote from Nathanson, and without the maternity hospital.
  • The paragraph beginning with "With a Black population ... " gets a bit mangled wrt history. In 1948, the US Supreme Court held that racially restricted covenants were not enforceable. Although the chilling effects may have lingered, it is unclear what the last sentence (in 2021 the city gave residents a means to discharge them) means, since they were unenforceable anyway. What exactly changed in 2021 relative to the 1948 Supreme Court decision? SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 16:21, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Paragraph copyedited.
Record keepers for real estate titles have to be pack rats. Every word is carried forward, and every change must be agreed to by all living parties. (Once a lawyer served me papers for a house I owned in Saint Paul just to change one sentence.) In 2021, the city gave homeowners a means to formally disavow covenants that I imagine the pack rats still had in writing. I've never seen a resulting deed but trust that Mapping Prejudice has the wording solved.

Done. - SusanLesch ( talk) 17:29, 25 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Structural racism

I made these changes. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 16:43, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply

Neighborhoods

  • Something is off with the puncutation here: I don't know how to fix it since I can't tell what the sentence wants to say (is there a missing dash after neighborhoods?) :
    Reflected in the program's policy goals in 1990—that citizens know best the priorities of their own neighborhoods, the city set up the Neighborhood Revitalization Program (NRP), in which every one of the city's eighty-some neighborhoods participated.[177]
Off was right, thank you.
  • What expired in 2011? A UN Habitat adaptation or the actual program? but it expired in 2011 ... the "but" doesn't work ... they UN Habitat changed their mind that it was a good program because it had expired ??? I suspect this is what the sentences want to say, but unsure:
    Funded for 20 years with $400 million tax increment financing (TIF), the program caught the eye of UN-Habitat who considered it an example of best practices. The program expired in 2011 and was replaced (when ?) by The Neighborhoods 2020 program; the Neighborhood and Community Relations department took its place (when?) and was funded by city revenue. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 16:53, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Fixed.
  • In his budget proposal for 2024, the mayor ... this is the first mention of a mayor; he should be named here.
I'll remember this if Mayor Frey is removed from the lead.

Done. - SusanLesch ( talk) 22:18, 28 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Demographics

  • In 1910, there were approximately 2,500 Black residents, and by 1930, Minneapolis had some of the most literate Black residents in the nation.[235][236] ... WP:EXCEPTIONAL claims require multiple high quality sources. This claim has two pages from the same source, a local survey. And it's not a high-quality source: it's the Minnesota Historical Society. Without better sourcing, this claim should go-- we can't compare Minnesota to the entire nation with a local survey. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 17:14, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
No, that is sourced to David Taylor, who contributed a chapter in They Chose Minnesota. That is a high quality source.
The sentence now has four citations with quotes. One of them is for Minnesota overall but gives the reader the correct picture.
It took me a while to see the problem was my wording. Fixed.
  • As of 2019, over 20,000 Somalis reside in Minneapolis.[243] ... I am surprised there is not a newer than 2019 number on this. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 17:17, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Sorry, best I could do. Nobody measures Minneapolis when they can measure Minnesota, even the Star Tribune. The US Census tells me only that Hennepin County has 38,588 (October 2023). [2]

Done. - SusanLesch ( talk) 00:41, 29 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Religion

  • St. Mary's Orthodox Cathedral was founded in 1887; it opened a missionary school and created the first Russian Orthodox seminary in the US.[261] --> this kind of claim cannot be cited to self, needs an independent source. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 17:29, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Added another source and reduced the claim. The first in US could have been in Sitka, Alaska, while it was a territory; I don't have a date.

Done. - SusanLesch ( talk) 23:22, 28 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Economy

  • I don't think we need this sentence, not unique to Minnesota: Among the district's responsibilities are to supervise and examine member banks, examine financial institutions, lend to depository institutions, distribute currency and coin, clear checks, operate Fedwire, and serve as a bank for the US Treasury.[276]
Omitted.
  • The entire para on a Minnesota survey beginning with "The state department of Employment and Economic Development measured the metro area's quality of life compared to 44 metro areas in the US." is hard to understand (high-low vs good-bad), and it is primary sourced. I don't think a MN survey or MN relative to the rest of the country-- which no secondary sourcing-- should be in the article at all. To compare to the rest of the country it should have an independent source and a secondary source. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 17:40, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Entire paragraph omitted. It was there by request to support the lead saying "Despite its well-regarded quality of life...". Is the Atlantic citation enough?

Question. - SusanLesch ( talk) 19:55, 29 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Visual arts

  • Cited to self, and the Walker has its own article; this is not needed here. In 2023, the Walker said that together with the Minneapolis Sculpture Garden across the street, it received more than 700,000 visitors each year.[288]
Omitted.
  • Ditto; has its own article, and cited to self: Perhaps reflecting the ambitions of the founders, competition winner McKim, Mead & White designed a complex seven times the size of what opened in 1915.[291]
No, it's cited to the Society of Architectural Historians. Do you still want it out?

Question. - SusanLesch ( talk) 19:55, 29 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Sports

  • Can't cite this sort of claim to self: In the 2010s, the Lynx were the most-successful sports team in the city
Source replaced with The Athletic.

Done. - SusanLesch ( talk) 19:55, 29 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Parks and recreation

  • In the bestselling and often-parodied 19th-century epic poem The Song of Hiawatha, Henry Wadsworth Longfellow named Hiawatha's wife Minnehaha for the Minneapolis waterfall.[407] --> First, I find no other source that makes this claim. Second, this kind of claim should have a better source than a small regional museum. Third, I'm not convinced the source supports the text; the source says they share a name. I suggest removing this. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 18:05, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
OK. I think the section is better without 1) Longfellow, and 2) two claims to first and second. Omitted them all.
  • Has its own article, not needed here (and things like this only create an ongoing need for maintenance): Between 5,000 and 10,000 people per year visited the falls before 1889. Visitors increased to about that many per day after Minnehaha became a park.[408] In 2017, the park received over two million visitors.[409]
Thank you. Omitted.

Done. - SusanLesch ( talk) 23:46, 29 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Government

  • City Council has its own article; these (minor level) appointments will change often and don't need to be in this article: Seven political newcomers joined the council in 2022 ... Andrea Jenkins was unanimously elected as the president of the city council in 2022.[419]
Agreed, omitted.
  • Excess detail that will require constant updating and is not needed here: The organization had responded to more than three thousand 911 calls as of September 2022 and was proposed to continue through the 2023–2024 budget year.[429]
Extra detail omitted. (All we can say today is that city department is changing leaders, and the city council still needs to make a decision on Canopy.)

Done. - SusanLesch ( talk) 19:57, 29 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Health care

  • This seems to be excess detail, self-cited, and requiring ongoing maintenance, but we don't seem to have an article to move this to, so ... I guess it stays? In 2022, the Hennepin Healthcare safety net[531] counted 626,000 in-person and 50,586 virtual clinic visits, and 87,731 emergency room visits.[533]
I removed it because of the future maintenance needs you point out. We have an article about the hospital.

Done. - SusanLesch ( talk) 19:57, 29 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Done! Susanlesch I know this looks daunting, but work now saves work later. Once the article passes FAR, it's likely to be re-run at WP:TFA. Best regards, SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 19:01, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply

dying

tfa blurb

SusanLesch, below is my first attempt at a draft for the tfa blurb. note that none of this is set in stone. please feel free to mention any errors i have made, anything you think should be reworded, what you think should be included but was left out, or what you think doesn't really merit a mention. you are also welcome to edit the draft directly.

Downtown Minneapolis and the Mississippi River
Downtown Minneapolis and the Mississippi River

Minneapolis, nicknamed the " City of Lakes", is the US state of Minnesota's most populous city. Along with the adjoining state capital Saint Paul, Minneapolis is part of the Twin Cities metropolitan area, home to 3.69 million people. The site was originally inhabited by the Dakota. Europeans settled along the Mississippi River's only natural waterfall, which provided power for industrial activity. During the 19th century, the city was the lumber and flour milling capital of the world. It is the birthplace of General Mills, Pillsbury, and Target. Many of the city's public parks are connected by the Grand Rounds National Scenic Byway. Biking and walking trails run through the Mississippi National River and Recreation Area, and around several lakes and Minnehaha Falls. The city is home to the University of Minnesota's main campus, the Minneapolis Institute of Art, and four professional sports teams. Public transport is provided by Metro Transit, and an international airport serves the region. ( Full article...)

there are three additional points i think i should mention.

  • there is a limit of 1025 characters for tfa blurbs with images. this draft is currently deliberately a bit longer than that, at 1045 characters, because i think that the list of five recreation areas may be a bit long for the blurb, but i wasn't sure what i should remove.
  • i didn't mention the nightclub because i believe that other editors tend to prefer that commercial interests not be mentioned in tfa blurbs. however, i kept the mention of the three brands to quickly illustrate the city's impact on u.s. industry.
  • i'm admittedly not sure if the image was actually taken from the mississippi river. the infobox caption states so, but the image description states that it is a "View of the Minneapolis Skyline and the Mississippi River from North Minneapolis", which is why the caption i used here differs slightly from that in the infobox.

dying ( talk) 22:59, 4 December 2023 (UTC) reply

Dying, this looks wonderful. I'd suggest omitting the whole sentence "Biking and walking trails run through the Mississippi National River and Recreation Area, Lake of the Isles, Bde Maka Ska, Lake Harriet, and Minnehaha Falls." Will that bring you close to your character limit? The only other edit is U.S. is US in this article (which I did in place). Thank you very much. - SusanLesch ( talk) 00:26, 5 December 2023 (UTC) reply
One exception in this article is U.S. Bank. - SusanLesch ( talk) 13:53, 5 December 2023 (UTC) reply
Down to 1,004 characters. Dying, can you complete the lead in place please? Sandy has been away and it would be nice to be done when she gets back. Thank you. - SusanLesch ( talk) 14:40, 21 December 2023 (UTC) reply

HF

  • "the Dakota (also known as the Sioux)" - I don't think this is good phrasing. This phrasing implies the two groups are equivalent, but aren't the Lakota considered part of the Sioux as well?
  • Good catch. Fixed to say known as Sioux (not known as the Sioux) which is more accurate.
  • Changed this again to "a group of the Sioux" and moved "also known as" to Ojibwe.
  • CJLippert, can you help us word a sentence in the Minneapolis article? Hog Farm pointed out an error in an earlier version. I have searched the web for the correct way to say this: the Dakota (one tribe of the Sioux nation) and the Ojibwe (also known as Chippewa, one tribe of the Anishinaabe nations). (The words tribe, group, band, nation are interchangeable some places and not others.) Thank you in advance for your help. - SusanLesch ( talk) 18:19, 16 March 2024 (UTC) reply
Rewritten now, so no worries, CJLippert. Oncamera made some edits and told us about WP:Indigenous. - SusanLesch ( talk) 23:25, 31 March 2024 (UTC) reply
  • "and Minnesota "patent" flour was recognized at the time as the best in the world" - the source uses "finest bread flour"; I'd hew a bit closer to the source as the intention may have been to indicate that it was the best for breadmaking, but not necessarily the best of all types of flour
  • Changed to "best bread flour".
  • "The city reverted to its 2030 plan" - the 2030 plan in mentioned here but never seems to be explained unless I'm missing where the explanation is
  • My bad. "Decennial plan" is mentioned once later, but wasn't defined here. Changed to "The city reverted to its previous decennial plan for 2030." (I hope having decennial plans doesn't need any more explanation.)

Done. - SusanLesch ( talk) 13:34, 16 March 2024 (UTC) reply

Ready for the demographis section, will continue later. Hog Farm Talk 00:16, 16 March 2024 (UTC) reply

  • " and in 2015, it became the country's 46th largest city" - is this still true, and if so would it be more relevant to provide a ranking as of a more recent year?
  • Reworded. I would like to avoid perennial updates. At least we have US Census figures.
  • "Top 2023 publicly traded Minneapolis companies" - is Thrivent actually publicly traded though?
  • Fixed my copy/paste error (from Boston).

Done. - SusanLesch ( talk) 14:41, 17 March 2024 (UTC) reply

Ready for parks and recreation; more to come. Hog Farm Talk 23:45, 16 March 2024 (UTC) reply

  • "As of fall 2023, every Minneapolis public school student receives one free breakfast and one free lunch each school day." - source link is dead and not retrievable on the Internet Archive Wayback Machine
  • Replaced source.
  • "Other papers are Southwest Voices,[534] Streets.mn,[535]" - I think this came up earlier in the FAR but we do need an independent source to verify the significance of these. This applies to several other items in this section as well
  • Yes, earlier you wrote an independent source noting its existence; I've found that independent RS sourcing is usually a good test as to if mentioning something is due weight or not. These two are now sourced to reliable sources with Wikipedia articles.
  • Question Does this section look all right to you now? I removed the extra citations for publications that have a Wikipedia article. Cited everybody else, and removed a couple that now are published in Saint Paul.
  • Looking better - but now there's no source at all for Racket, MinnPost, or Minnesota Daily, and Rain Taxi doesn't seem to be supported by the referencing either. I'm less concerned about notability on those because they are blue links, but we do need a source tying them to Minneapolis somehow. Hog Farm Talk 17:21, 21 March 2024 (UTC) reply
  • Done. Restored everybody's citations. Thanks again, Hog Farm. - SusanLesch ( talk) 15:10, 22 March 2024 (UTC) reply

I think that's all from me; this has come a long ways. Hog Farm Talk 22:23, 19 March 2024 (UTC) reply

Delays

Folks, this FAR has been delayed for years, then postponed, over and over, and now my time is under threat. Sock protection is removed. Sandy and I entertained that sockpuppet farm ( archive) for a year before an admin finally protected the page. Beseeching you guys ( Z1720, Hog Farm, Buidhe, George Ho, who else is there?) to hurry up if you possibly can. - SusanLesch ( talk) 14:56, 18 March 2024 (UTC) reply

Sorry, for context. My first discussion of FAR was about 3 1/2 years ago, and Sandy first pinged you guys pre-FAR a year ago. -16:24, 18 March 2024 (UTC)
I hope to be able to finish my review today or tomorrow. Hog Farm Talk 16:36, 18 March 2024 (UTC) reply
Thank you much. - SusanLesch ( talk) 16:59, 21 March 2024 (UTC) reply
I'm curious if you other guys had ever been " beseeched" before. - SusanLesch ( talk) 13:36, 29 March 2024 (UTC) reply

Minneapolis has an RfC

Minneapolis has an RfC for possible consensus. A discussion is taking place. If you would like to participate in the discussion, you are invited to add your comments on the discussion page. Thank you. - SusanLesch ( talk) 02:41, 24 March 2024 (UTC) reply

  1. ^ Liebling & Morrison 1966, p. 29.
  2. ^ "Over Half of Those Who Reported Their Race as Black or African American Identified as African American, Jamaican or Haitian". US Census Bureau. Retrieved November 28, 2023.
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SG review

Reviewing this version. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 13:10, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply

SandyGeorgia, thank you a thousand times for all your work. You have uncovered some uncited history. I ordered two books and hope to have a cited history done in the next week. First they have to get here. Sorry for the delay. - SusanLesch ( talk) 22:56, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
SusanLesch Not to worry; there is no rush at FAR. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 23:34, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Thank you for your note. Everything's cited now but I still have a row to hoe with your review. - SusanLesch ( talk) 19:05, 8 November 2023 (UTC) reply
OK, let me know when it's time for me to re-engage. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 19:17, 8 November 2023 (UTC) reply
Will do. I'm sorry this will take more time. Wikipedia needs more Minnesota editors. - SusanLesch ( talk) 00:03, 14 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Dakota natives, city founded

  • The first sentence is material that is not contained in the next citation, and how do we know they were the "sole" occupants?
Good catch. Corrected.
  • The next two sentences are also uncited.
Corrected. Somehow I skipped over the fur trade. Now that's clear.
  • In 1805 Zebulon Pike negotiated with the Dakota for 100,000 acres of land where present-day Minneapolis resides in the first Treaty of St. Peters with the agreement a military fort could be built.
    present-day Minnesota does not reside in the first Treaty of St. Peters -->
    Zebulon Pike negotiated with the Dakota in the 1805 first Treaty of St. Peters for a 100,000 acres of land, with the agreement a military fort could be built there; present-day Minneapolis resides on that land.
Thank you, replaced. Added questionable in a footnote.
Yes, convert added (to 9 square miles).
  • In 1819, the US Army built Fort Snelling at the southern edge of present-day Minneapolis ... here, we are repeating present-day Minneapolis only one sentence later; the whole thing needs better integration from the start.
    Zebulon Pike negotiated with the Dakota in the 1805 first Treaty of St. Peters for a 100,000 acres of land, with the agreement a military fort could be built there; in 1819, the US Army built Fort Snelling on that land at the southern edge of present-day Minneapolis, to direct Native American trade away from British-Canadian traders, and to deter warring between the Dakota and Ojibwe in northern Minnesota.
    The mention of the Ojibwe here is part of why I question the "sole" in the first sentence. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 13:23, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
    Revising. Well done, SandyGeorgia.
  • The US government pressed the Dakota to sell their land ... More of their land? Different land than the Fort Snelling land ? How much more land? Where in relation to Minneapolis and Snelling ... As it reads now, it implies they never sold the Fort Snelling land-- is that the case? I'm confused.
The Mississippi divides the region. First they sold the east side, then the west. Your point is clarified now.
  • were negotiated by corrupt officials ... corrupt officials of/from (what?)
Added "Minnesota". Added Alexander Ramsey at two points.
  • their terms were rarely honored --> rarely honored by whom?
Added "US government". Some discussion of Congress's ratification added.
  • During the American Civil War, officials plundered annuities promised ... what officials (Minnesota, local, US government, a certain bureau)??
You're right, that's overstated. Reworded the sentence.
  • The Dakota were interned and exiled from Minnesota --> this is Minnesota-wide and the Dakota War centers on Southern Minnesota ... can we add a clause to somehow relate this to Minneapolis. How can we relate the whole Dakota War/expulsion which was more related to southwestern Minnesota back to Minnapolis Dakotans?
Difficult assignment but this proved to be possible! Greatly improved.
  • the toll bridge cost pedestrians three cents .. should have an inflation equivalent for today. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 13:38, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Thank you, added.

Done. - SusanLesch ( talk) 17:07, 25 November 2023 (UTC) reply

@ SandyGeorgia: Would you please check over only this section on the Dakota people and city founding? Sorry this took so long. Because of the uncited statements you found, I concentrated on criterion 1c, well-researched (now we have 60 citations and footnotes). See what you think. Hope this section makes a good first impression. Moving on to other sections until I hear from you. - SusanLesch ( talk) 16:55, 27 November 2023 (UTC) reply
Susan, I don't think I'll be able to get to this until Friday, SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 16:47, 29 November 2023 (UTC) reply
Thanks. With some luck this will be done on Friday. - SusanLesch ( talk) 19:52, 29 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Lumber, waterpower, and flour milling

  • Water power from St. Anthony's Falls led to the growth of the lumber and flour milling industies in Minneapolis and Minnesota; why isn't the section heading more logical, as in, Water power, lumber and flower milling? I can't decipher why the two industries would straddle the driver. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 13:41, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Section renamed.
  • Towns built in western Minnesota with Minneapolis lumber shipped their wheat back to the city for milling.[43] -->
    Towns built in western Minnesota with lumber from Minneapolis sawmills shipped their wheat back to the city for milling.[43]
Done.
  • Growing use of steam power freed lumbermen and their sawmills from the falls. --> ??? -->
    Growing use of steam power freed lumbermen and their sawmills from dependence on the falls.
Done.
  • Minneapolis riverfront describes the use of water power in ... well into the section, we find the first link to water power (which differs from the section heading, that uses the word as one); can the link be worked in earlier, and the heading should be water power as in the body.
Corrected placement. (The quotation has one word, but usage suggests two words are preferable. Kept two in the heading.)
  • 1893, fire spread from Nicollet Island to Boom Island to northeast Minneapolis where the Grain Belt Brewery stopped it. --> How does a brewery (building) stop a fire (ie, did people stop the fire, what about the brewery stopped the fire?)
Copyedited to include the wind.
  • valuable ($0.50 profit per barrel in 1871, increased to $4.50 in 1874), --> give at least one inflation equivalent in today's dollars.
Done.
  • Mention of Washburn-Crosby with no definition of who or what that is. One discovers a link, Washburn Crosby Company, that redirects to General Mills. Define Washburn-Crosby as whatever it is -- a precursor to General Mills? A company later acquired by General Mills? We have Washburn in the article, but no Crosby, and no idea what Washburn-Crosby is.
Mentioned John Crosby and explained Washburn-Crosby became General Mills.
  • Decades of soil exhaustion, stem rust, and changes in freight tariffs combined to quash the city's flour industry. ... Is that from Lass 238? Or is it a combo summary of multiple sources?
It's all from the same page in Lass. Added one citation.
  • Northern States Power bought the united mill companies in 1923, ... similar to the Washburn-Crosy situation, what are the "united mill companies"? Undefined at this point ... SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 14:12, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Sorry, I took the corner too fast. Copyedited and added a sentence.

Done but I would appreciate it if you can read through this section. - SusanLesch ( talk) 21:36, 2 December 2023 (UTC) reply

Critical industry

  • Having read this section, I cannot decipher what the critical industry is or why this section has this as a heading. It looks like it may want to be something like "Other industries develop". SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 14:13, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Good idea. Renamed.
  • Minneapolis Star humorist Don Morrison wrote that the city doubled, tripled, then quadrupled its population every decade, and in 1922, the city's assessed property value was $266 million, "nearly 10 times the price paid for the entire midcontinent in the Louisiana Purchase."[81] After the milling era waned, a "modern, major city"[81] surfaced in 1900, attracted skilled workers,[82] and learned from the university's Institute of Technology.[83]
    The humor aspect is lost on me; what am I missing?
"Is this funny?" from Chat GPT 3.5
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The humor in this statement lies in the exaggeration of Minneapolis's population growth and property value, creating a playful and absurd comparison to the Louisiana Purchase. The Louisiana Purchase was a significant historical event in which the United States acquired a vast territory from France in 1803. By suggesting that Minneapolis's assessed property value in 1922 was nearly 10 times the price paid for the entire midcontinent in the Louisiana Purchase, the humorist is using hyperbole to emphasize the city's perceived rapid and extravagant development. Whether someone finds it funny or not is subjective, but it seems to be crafted as a witty and exaggerated commentary on Minneapolis's growth.

"Why is this funny?" from Gemini 1.0
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There are several reasons why the excerpt about Minneapolis's rapid growth and property value might be considered funny:

  1. Absurdity: The statement that the city doubled, tripled, then quadrupled its population every decade is inherently absurd. This kind of exponential growth is almost impossible and defies logic. This exaggeration adds a humorous element to the text.
  2. Hyperbole: Comparing the city's property value to the price of the Louisiana Purchase is a massive overstatement and uses hyperbole for comedic effect. It highlights the dramatic increase in wealth and emphasizes the city's perceived importance.
  3. Juxtaposition: The contrast between the historical event of the Louisiana Purchase and the modern city of Minneapolis creates a humorous incongruity. It suggests that Minneapolis, through its rapid development, has become economically comparable to a vast region of land acquired in a major historical transaction.
  4. Unexpected comparison: The seemingly unrelated comparison of population growth to land purchase adds a layer of surprise and absurdity to the humor. This unexpected connection makes the statement more memorable and impactful.
  5. Historical context: Considering the timeframe (1922), the rapid development of Minneapolis could be seen as a novelty and a source of local pride. This context adds a layer of nostalgia and historical charm to the humor.
  6. Audience: The humor is also likely to resonate more with readers familiar with the history and culture of Minneapolis. The shared understanding of the city's growth and local pride enhances the comedic effect.

It's important to note that humor is subjective, and what one person finds funny, another may not. However, the excerpt utilizes several techniques commonly found in humor, making it likely to be perceived as funny by many readers.

I will remove it if you wish but IMO the article will suffer.
  • How does a city (vs. people) "learn" from an Institute? What did it/they learn?
    If "modern, major city" can't be re-phrased, the quote should be attributed ... is this what is meant ... After the milling era waned, the 1900 beginnings of a modern city attracted skilled workers who learned at the university's Institute of Technology ?????
† "modern, major city" are Morrison's words in the same paragraph. And they're cited so I hope all right. By 1900 (the year, incidentally, that John Stevens died) Minneapolis had become a modern, major city. In a scant 50 years, its population had increased tenfold to more than 200,000, doubling, tripling and quadrupling every decade; its assessed property valuation in 1922 had mounted to $26,000,000--nearly ten times the price paid for the entire midcontinent in the Louisiana Purchase. [1]
† "learned" might have to change. Stipanovich is cited with loc, but maybe not well enough: Thus while Minneapolis began to lose jobs in the mills, it began to acquire other jobs in management, financial administration, advertising, market research, product research and design, and other mid-level management and administrative positions. The effect was to upgrade the workforce... and The university's role became more and more important as the 20th century rolled along.... He says on the next page, The University of Minnesota in Minneapolis also played a major role as its specialists contributed invaluable services to a variety of activities, including the Manhattan nuclear project, medicinal advances, military nutrition, and the development of new technology for weapons systems. (Then he describes the individual researchers/professors.) I think Stipanovich's intent was to say that large entities learned from the U, not only skilled workers.
Reworded that sentence to say the city depended on the university's expertise.
  • In 1888, a businessman found that itchy wool underwear could be covered in silk. His Minneapolis textile factory lasted a century known as Munsingwear, today as Perry Ellis,[85] and in 1923, was the world's largest manufacturer of underwear.[86]
    Was that businessman George D. Munsing ?
    the century was not known as Munsingwear.
    is this what is meant ???
    In 1888, businessman George D. Munsing found that itchy wool underwear could be covered in silk. His Minneapolis textile business—known then as Munsingwear, today as Perry Ellis—lasted a century[85] and in 1923, was the world's largest manufacturer of underwear.
Yes, thank you. Munsing's name is now in.
  • ] In 1922, an inventor founded Onan Corporation near downtown Minneapolis[87] that built and sold generators.[88] Prior to a Cummins buyout in 1986,[88] Onan brought electricity to midwestern markets before power lines covered the country, and supplied about half the generator sets the US military used during World War II ... same as above ...
    Is this businessman Cummins Onan ??
    downtown Minneapolis did not build and sell generators
    Is this what is meant ?
    In 1922, inventor Cummins Onan founded Onan Corporation (bought by Cummins in 1986), that built and sold generators in Minneapolis. Onan brought electricity to midwestern markets before power lines covered the country, and supplied about half the generator sets the US military used during World War II. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 14:32, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Thank you, that's better. (Cummins Onan is a brand name, not the inventor.)
  • Minneapolis-Honeywell built a south Minneapolis campus where their experience controlling indoor temperature earned them contracts controlling military servomechanisms like the secret Norden bombsight and the C-1 autopilot.
    controlling ... controlling ... vary wording.
Good point. I chose "regulate".
Over my pay grade but Britannica says, "automatic device used to correct the performance of a mechanism by means of an error-sensing feedback".

Almost done (except one †). - SusanLesch ( talk) 17:22, 25 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Social tensions

  • Should the section heading be singular? WP:MSH references article titles, and WP:SINGULAR says not to plural.
Right, thank you.
  • Historian Iric Nathanson writes that over the course of the 20th century, "Minnesota's major city was able to shed a stultifying social order that inhibited change and entrenched privilege."[104] In many ways, the 20th century was a difficult time of bigotry and malfeasance, beginning with four decades of corruption,[105] followed by attempts to overcome them.
Omitted the quote.
  • Corruption by whom:
    The first two sentences contradict each other, making the final clause then appear as original research. Is this the way to fix that (that is, is this what the passage means to say)?
    According to (someone), in many ways, the 20th century in Minneapolis was a difficult time of bigotry and malfeasance, beginning with four decades of corruption [by whom].[105] Historian Iric Nathanson writes that the city "was able to shed a stultifying social order that inhibited change and entrenched privilege" during the 20th century.[104] SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 16:00, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Instead I omitted the last clause of second sentence.
  • How do jump from Ames to the KKK in the same para; there's no transition, what's the connection? How does the rest of that paragraph relate to the topic sentence about a Maternity Hospital? Is the paragraph about crime or health?
Agree the para is an aggregation of thoughts. With the better topic sentence it should fly. See what you think now.
  • Is the four decades of corruption in the first paragraph the same as the four decades mentioned in the third paragraph? If so, the flow needs better merging.
Better without the quote from Nathanson, and without the maternity hospital.
  • The paragraph beginning with "With a Black population ... " gets a bit mangled wrt history. In 1948, the US Supreme Court held that racially restricted covenants were not enforceable. Although the chilling effects may have lingered, it is unclear what the last sentence (in 2021 the city gave residents a means to discharge them) means, since they were unenforceable anyway. What exactly changed in 2021 relative to the 1948 Supreme Court decision? SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 16:21, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Paragraph copyedited.
Record keepers for real estate titles have to be pack rats. Every word is carried forward, and every change must be agreed to by all living parties. (Once a lawyer served me papers for a house I owned in Saint Paul just to change one sentence.) In 2021, the city gave homeowners a means to formally disavow covenants that I imagine the pack rats still had in writing. I've never seen a resulting deed but trust that Mapping Prejudice has the wording solved.

Done. - SusanLesch ( talk) 17:29, 25 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Structural racism

I made these changes. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 16:43, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply

Neighborhoods

  • Something is off with the puncutation here: I don't know how to fix it since I can't tell what the sentence wants to say (is there a missing dash after neighborhoods?) :
    Reflected in the program's policy goals in 1990—that citizens know best the priorities of their own neighborhoods, the city set up the Neighborhood Revitalization Program (NRP), in which every one of the city's eighty-some neighborhoods participated.[177]
Off was right, thank you.
  • What expired in 2011? A UN Habitat adaptation or the actual program? but it expired in 2011 ... the "but" doesn't work ... they UN Habitat changed their mind that it was a good program because it had expired ??? I suspect this is what the sentences want to say, but unsure:
    Funded for 20 years with $400 million tax increment financing (TIF), the program caught the eye of UN-Habitat who considered it an example of best practices. The program expired in 2011 and was replaced (when ?) by The Neighborhoods 2020 program; the Neighborhood and Community Relations department took its place (when?) and was funded by city revenue. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 16:53, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Fixed.
  • In his budget proposal for 2024, the mayor ... this is the first mention of a mayor; he should be named here.
I'll remember this if Mayor Frey is removed from the lead.

Done. - SusanLesch ( talk) 22:18, 28 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Demographics

  • In 1910, there were approximately 2,500 Black residents, and by 1930, Minneapolis had some of the most literate Black residents in the nation.[235][236] ... WP:EXCEPTIONAL claims require multiple high quality sources. This claim has two pages from the same source, a local survey. And it's not a high-quality source: it's the Minnesota Historical Society. Without better sourcing, this claim should go-- we can't compare Minnesota to the entire nation with a local survey. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 17:14, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
No, that is sourced to David Taylor, who contributed a chapter in They Chose Minnesota. That is a high quality source.
The sentence now has four citations with quotes. One of them is for Minnesota overall but gives the reader the correct picture.
It took me a while to see the problem was my wording. Fixed.
  • As of 2019, over 20,000 Somalis reside in Minneapolis.[243] ... I am surprised there is not a newer than 2019 number on this. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 17:17, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Sorry, best I could do. Nobody measures Minneapolis when they can measure Minnesota, even the Star Tribune. The US Census tells me only that Hennepin County has 38,588 (October 2023). [2]

Done. - SusanLesch ( talk) 00:41, 29 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Religion

  • St. Mary's Orthodox Cathedral was founded in 1887; it opened a missionary school and created the first Russian Orthodox seminary in the US.[261] --> this kind of claim cannot be cited to self, needs an independent source. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 17:29, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Added another source and reduced the claim. The first in US could have been in Sitka, Alaska, while it was a territory; I don't have a date.

Done. - SusanLesch ( talk) 23:22, 28 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Economy

  • I don't think we need this sentence, not unique to Minnesota: Among the district's responsibilities are to supervise and examine member banks, examine financial institutions, lend to depository institutions, distribute currency and coin, clear checks, operate Fedwire, and serve as a bank for the US Treasury.[276]
Omitted.
  • The entire para on a Minnesota survey beginning with "The state department of Employment and Economic Development measured the metro area's quality of life compared to 44 metro areas in the US." is hard to understand (high-low vs good-bad), and it is primary sourced. I don't think a MN survey or MN relative to the rest of the country-- which no secondary sourcing-- should be in the article at all. To compare to the rest of the country it should have an independent source and a secondary source. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 17:40, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Entire paragraph omitted. It was there by request to support the lead saying "Despite its well-regarded quality of life...". Is the Atlantic citation enough?

Question. - SusanLesch ( talk) 19:55, 29 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Visual arts

  • Cited to self, and the Walker has its own article; this is not needed here. In 2023, the Walker said that together with the Minneapolis Sculpture Garden across the street, it received more than 700,000 visitors each year.[288]
Omitted.
  • Ditto; has its own article, and cited to self: Perhaps reflecting the ambitions of the founders, competition winner McKim, Mead & White designed a complex seven times the size of what opened in 1915.[291]
No, it's cited to the Society of Architectural Historians. Do you still want it out?

Question. - SusanLesch ( talk) 19:55, 29 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Sports

  • Can't cite this sort of claim to self: In the 2010s, the Lynx were the most-successful sports team in the city
Source replaced with The Athletic.

Done. - SusanLesch ( talk) 19:55, 29 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Parks and recreation

  • In the bestselling and often-parodied 19th-century epic poem The Song of Hiawatha, Henry Wadsworth Longfellow named Hiawatha's wife Minnehaha for the Minneapolis waterfall.[407] --> First, I find no other source that makes this claim. Second, this kind of claim should have a better source than a small regional museum. Third, I'm not convinced the source supports the text; the source says they share a name. I suggest removing this. SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 18:05, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply
OK. I think the section is better without 1) Longfellow, and 2) two claims to first and second. Omitted them all.
  • Has its own article, not needed here (and things like this only create an ongoing need for maintenance): Between 5,000 and 10,000 people per year visited the falls before 1889. Visitors increased to about that many per day after Minnehaha became a park.[408] In 2017, the park received over two million visitors.[409]
Thank you. Omitted.

Done. - SusanLesch ( talk) 23:46, 29 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Government

  • City Council has its own article; these (minor level) appointments will change often and don't need to be in this article: Seven political newcomers joined the council in 2022 ... Andrea Jenkins was unanimously elected as the president of the city council in 2022.[419]
Agreed, omitted.
  • Excess detail that will require constant updating and is not needed here: The organization had responded to more than three thousand 911 calls as of September 2022 and was proposed to continue through the 2023–2024 budget year.[429]
Extra detail omitted. (All we can say today is that city department is changing leaders, and the city council still needs to make a decision on Canopy.)

Done. - SusanLesch ( talk) 19:57, 29 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Health care

  • This seems to be excess detail, self-cited, and requiring ongoing maintenance, but we don't seem to have an article to move this to, so ... I guess it stays? In 2022, the Hennepin Healthcare safety net[531] counted 626,000 in-person and 50,586 virtual clinic visits, and 87,731 emergency room visits.[533]
I removed it because of the future maintenance needs you point out. We have an article about the hospital.

Done. - SusanLesch ( talk) 19:57, 29 November 2023 (UTC) reply

Done! Susanlesch I know this looks daunting, but work now saves work later. Once the article passes FAR, it's likely to be re-run at WP:TFA. Best regards, SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 19:01, 30 October 2023 (UTC) reply

dying

tfa blurb

SusanLesch, below is my first attempt at a draft for the tfa blurb. note that none of this is set in stone. please feel free to mention any errors i have made, anything you think should be reworded, what you think should be included but was left out, or what you think doesn't really merit a mention. you are also welcome to edit the draft directly.

Downtown Minneapolis and the Mississippi River
Downtown Minneapolis and the Mississippi River

Minneapolis, nicknamed the " City of Lakes", is the US state of Minnesota's most populous city. Along with the adjoining state capital Saint Paul, Minneapolis is part of the Twin Cities metropolitan area, home to 3.69 million people. The site was originally inhabited by the Dakota. Europeans settled along the Mississippi River's only natural waterfall, which provided power for industrial activity. During the 19th century, the city was the lumber and flour milling capital of the world. It is the birthplace of General Mills, Pillsbury, and Target. Many of the city's public parks are connected by the Grand Rounds National Scenic Byway. Biking and walking trails run through the Mississippi National River and Recreation Area, and around several lakes and Minnehaha Falls. The city is home to the University of Minnesota's main campus, the Minneapolis Institute of Art, and four professional sports teams. Public transport is provided by Metro Transit, and an international airport serves the region. ( Full article...)

there are three additional points i think i should mention.

  • there is a limit of 1025 characters for tfa blurbs with images. this draft is currently deliberately a bit longer than that, at 1045 characters, because i think that the list of five recreation areas may be a bit long for the blurb, but i wasn't sure what i should remove.
  • i didn't mention the nightclub because i believe that other editors tend to prefer that commercial interests not be mentioned in tfa blurbs. however, i kept the mention of the three brands to quickly illustrate the city's impact on u.s. industry.
  • i'm admittedly not sure if the image was actually taken from the mississippi river. the infobox caption states so, but the image description states that it is a "View of the Minneapolis Skyline and the Mississippi River from North Minneapolis", which is why the caption i used here differs slightly from that in the infobox.

dying ( talk) 22:59, 4 December 2023 (UTC) reply

Dying, this looks wonderful. I'd suggest omitting the whole sentence "Biking and walking trails run through the Mississippi National River and Recreation Area, Lake of the Isles, Bde Maka Ska, Lake Harriet, and Minnehaha Falls." Will that bring you close to your character limit? The only other edit is U.S. is US in this article (which I did in place). Thank you very much. - SusanLesch ( talk) 00:26, 5 December 2023 (UTC) reply
One exception in this article is U.S. Bank. - SusanLesch ( talk) 13:53, 5 December 2023 (UTC) reply
Down to 1,004 characters. Dying, can you complete the lead in place please? Sandy has been away and it would be nice to be done when she gets back. Thank you. - SusanLesch ( talk) 14:40, 21 December 2023 (UTC) reply

HF

  • "the Dakota (also known as the Sioux)" - I don't think this is good phrasing. This phrasing implies the two groups are equivalent, but aren't the Lakota considered part of the Sioux as well?
  • Good catch. Fixed to say known as Sioux (not known as the Sioux) which is more accurate.
  • Changed this again to "a group of the Sioux" and moved "also known as" to Ojibwe.
  • CJLippert, can you help us word a sentence in the Minneapolis article? Hog Farm pointed out an error in an earlier version. I have searched the web for the correct way to say this: the Dakota (one tribe of the Sioux nation) and the Ojibwe (also known as Chippewa, one tribe of the Anishinaabe nations). (The words tribe, group, band, nation are interchangeable some places and not others.) Thank you in advance for your help. - SusanLesch ( talk) 18:19, 16 March 2024 (UTC) reply
Rewritten now, so no worries, CJLippert. Oncamera made some edits and told us about WP:Indigenous. - SusanLesch ( talk) 23:25, 31 March 2024 (UTC) reply
  • "and Minnesota "patent" flour was recognized at the time as the best in the world" - the source uses "finest bread flour"; I'd hew a bit closer to the source as the intention may have been to indicate that it was the best for breadmaking, but not necessarily the best of all types of flour
  • Changed to "best bread flour".
  • "The city reverted to its 2030 plan" - the 2030 plan in mentioned here but never seems to be explained unless I'm missing where the explanation is
  • My bad. "Decennial plan" is mentioned once later, but wasn't defined here. Changed to "The city reverted to its previous decennial plan for 2030." (I hope having decennial plans doesn't need any more explanation.)

Done. - SusanLesch ( talk) 13:34, 16 March 2024 (UTC) reply

Ready for the demographis section, will continue later. Hog Farm Talk 00:16, 16 March 2024 (UTC) reply

  • " and in 2015, it became the country's 46th largest city" - is this still true, and if so would it be more relevant to provide a ranking as of a more recent year?
  • Reworded. I would like to avoid perennial updates. At least we have US Census figures.
  • "Top 2023 publicly traded Minneapolis companies" - is Thrivent actually publicly traded though?
  • Fixed my copy/paste error (from Boston).

Done. - SusanLesch ( talk) 14:41, 17 March 2024 (UTC) reply

Ready for parks and recreation; more to come. Hog Farm Talk 23:45, 16 March 2024 (UTC) reply

  • "As of fall 2023, every Minneapolis public school student receives one free breakfast and one free lunch each school day." - source link is dead and not retrievable on the Internet Archive Wayback Machine
  • Replaced source.
  • "Other papers are Southwest Voices,[534] Streets.mn,[535]" - I think this came up earlier in the FAR but we do need an independent source to verify the significance of these. This applies to several other items in this section as well
  • Yes, earlier you wrote an independent source noting its existence; I've found that independent RS sourcing is usually a good test as to if mentioning something is due weight or not. These two are now sourced to reliable sources with Wikipedia articles.
  • Question Does this section look all right to you now? I removed the extra citations for publications that have a Wikipedia article. Cited everybody else, and removed a couple that now are published in Saint Paul.
  • Looking better - but now there's no source at all for Racket, MinnPost, or Minnesota Daily, and Rain Taxi doesn't seem to be supported by the referencing either. I'm less concerned about notability on those because they are blue links, but we do need a source tying them to Minneapolis somehow. Hog Farm Talk 17:21, 21 March 2024 (UTC) reply
  • Done. Restored everybody's citations. Thanks again, Hog Farm. - SusanLesch ( talk) 15:10, 22 March 2024 (UTC) reply

I think that's all from me; this has come a long ways. Hog Farm Talk 22:23, 19 March 2024 (UTC) reply

Delays

Folks, this FAR has been delayed for years, then postponed, over and over, and now my time is under threat. Sock protection is removed. Sandy and I entertained that sockpuppet farm ( archive) for a year before an admin finally protected the page. Beseeching you guys ( Z1720, Hog Farm, Buidhe, George Ho, who else is there?) to hurry up if you possibly can. - SusanLesch ( talk) 14:56, 18 March 2024 (UTC) reply

Sorry, for context. My first discussion of FAR was about 3 1/2 years ago, and Sandy first pinged you guys pre-FAR a year ago. -16:24, 18 March 2024 (UTC)
I hope to be able to finish my review today or tomorrow. Hog Farm Talk 16:36, 18 March 2024 (UTC) reply
Thank you much. - SusanLesch ( talk) 16:59, 21 March 2024 (UTC) reply
I'm curious if you other guys had ever been " beseeched" before. - SusanLesch ( talk) 13:36, 29 March 2024 (UTC) reply

Minneapolis has an RfC

Minneapolis has an RfC for possible consensus. A discussion is taking place. If you would like to participate in the discussion, you are invited to add your comments on the discussion page. Thank you. - SusanLesch ( talk) 02:41, 24 March 2024 (UTC) reply

  1. ^ Liebling & Morrison 1966, p. 29.
  2. ^ "Over Half of Those Who Reported Their Race as Black or African American Identified as African American, Jamaican or Haitian". US Census Bureau. Retrieved November 28, 2023.
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