Article promoted Hawkeye7 ( talk) 09:33, 16 August 2013 (UTC) reply
This is my penultimate article concerning an American Revolutionary War general from North Carolina. This one is short and sweet, as Sumner was frequently ill, bad-tempered, and subjected to administrative tasks more than combat. Let me know your thoughts - and thanks for reviewing!
Cdtew (
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COMMENTS ON NARRATIVE
This from a quick first reading. More later.
Georgejdorner ( talk) 01:21, 1 August 2013 (UTC) reply
To resume review:
I took the time to check all links; there are no ambiguities needing disambiguation.
Similarly, I checked cites and found none that could be improved or multi-reffed.
I can pick some minor nits with the writing. In the lead, the phrase "most well known" might more felicitously be rewritten as "best known". Also, in the first paragraph of the postwar section, the second sentence would be clearer if it read, "It appears that Sumner's wife died at some point between 1781 and 1784." The unwary reader might think the present death that of Mrs. Warren.
These are minor quibbles. The article is distinctly an A Class effort.
SUPPORT A Class.
Georgejdorner ( talk) 15:45, 5 August 2013 (UTC) reply
Comments - Dank ( push to talk)
Support Comments: only a couple of minor points from me:
Article promoted Hawkeye7 ( talk) 09:33, 16 August 2013 (UTC) reply
This is my penultimate article concerning an American Revolutionary War general from North Carolina. This one is short and sweet, as Sumner was frequently ill, bad-tempered, and subjected to administrative tasks more than combat. Let me know your thoughts - and thanks for reviewing!
Cdtew (
talk) 01:34, 29 July 2013 (UTC)
reply
COMMENTS ON NARRATIVE
This from a quick first reading. More later.
Georgejdorner ( talk) 01:21, 1 August 2013 (UTC) reply
To resume review:
I took the time to check all links; there are no ambiguities needing disambiguation.
Similarly, I checked cites and found none that could be improved or multi-reffed.
I can pick some minor nits with the writing. In the lead, the phrase "most well known" might more felicitously be rewritten as "best known". Also, in the first paragraph of the postwar section, the second sentence would be clearer if it read, "It appears that Sumner's wife died at some point between 1781 and 1784." The unwary reader might think the present death that of Mrs. Warren.
These are minor quibbles. The article is distinctly an A Class effort.
SUPPORT A Class.
Georgejdorner ( talk) 15:45, 5 August 2013 (UTC) reply
Comments - Dank ( push to talk)
Support Comments: only a couple of minor points from me: