You are very welcome to comment on this article. Is it already mature enough to promote it towards FA-candidate-procedure? Lear 21 13:47, 6 November 2006 (UTC)
It generally is very good. I like the design and there are plenty of images to prevent it being too wordy. I'd say the two major issues are length and citations. At 69kb it is very long, sections may need to get their own subpages and be summarised - I don't think I'm qualified to judge which sections though. The citations also aren't particularly numerous. As much as I dislike judging an article on citations per word count (since it can and should vary depending on the article in question), there aren't a huge number. (Admittedly, it is one of those articles where almost every sentence could require a citation). Three examples (first 3 I found) where a cite is needed to support the claim:
*"Anyone who does not produce a valid ticket is given a 40-euro fine." FIXED
*"Core and fast-growing sectors are communications...and medical engineering." FIXED
*"Berlin is noted for its numerous cultural institutions, many of which enjoy international reputation. " (by whom) FIXED
Everything needed is there, just needs knocking into shape.
Trebor 22:15, 6 November 2006 (UTC)
Wikipedia Article | Total size | References | # Words |
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Seattle, Washington | 85K | 58 | |
Detroit, Michigan | 87K | 101 | |
San Francisco, California | 87K | 92 | |
Boston, Massachusetts | 68K | 25 | |
Hong Kong | 70K | 20 | |
Berlin | 73K | 72 |
Thanks for the comment Lear 21 23:06, 6 November 2006 (UTC)
**In addition, Babelsberg Studios and the important production company UFA are located just outside Berlin in Potsdam. - Important according to whom? Adjective probably should be stricken... FIXED
**Last part of "Performing arts" could use some touch-up. Ending paragraph is only 1 sentence. Last part of those orchestras reads like a list. FIXED
**Picture of the mayor could use a better caption. Also, may want to identify him as the one on the right :). FIXED
**Captions in general need expansion. (MyFest in Kreuzberg?) FIXED
Thanks for comment Gzkn ! That was very helpful. Some of the weak points are solved now. Thanks a lot Lear 21 12:05, 7 November 2006 (UTC)
What bothers me a bit is that some parts of it read a bit like a brochure you'd find at a travel agency. Take the second and third paragraph of the lead section for example: it's just a listing of reasons one should visit or move one's business to the city. The poverty in the city (although, even in the economy section only the unemployment is mentioned) should, for example, be mentioned. Also: the most cited source in this article seems to be something similar to the brochure I mentioned. Although there's certainly nothing wrong with citing this source, using it to find information about Berlin is definately POV.
I also think the fact that Berlin and Germany wer divided after WWII should be explicitly mentioned in the lead section, since this is a very important event in the history of the city and readers, who don't know anything about German history, may wonder what East Berlin is supposed to be.(Done)--
Carabinieri 10:22, 11 November 2006 (UTC)
The fact sheet is an official and credible source, even though it is published for the World Cup. It also cites facts and figures in majority.The lead text is positively exposing the city´s character, citing very credible and recently published sources; UNESCO, New Tork Times, IHT, Newsweek. It reflects the international image of the city, which has been developed in the last 10 years. Lear 21 11:57, 11 November 2006 (UTC)
I didn't say that the fact sheet wasn't credible, I just think that if you use it you have to be aware of the fact that it's POV and you have to compensate that.
As to the lead text: I did not deny that the facts there are false or that they are not cited; I'm just saying that the point of this article should not be to tell how good Berlin is, but rather to give a balanced depiction of the city. And the article is not balanced right now IMHO. Another example for this is the quotes section. They are all complementing Berlin. I'm sure there are quotes by just as notable people making fun of/criticizing/etc Berlin.-- Carabinieri 16:46, 13 November 2006 (UTC)
You are very welcome to comment on this article. Is it already mature enough to promote it towards FA-candidate-procedure? Lear 21 13:47, 6 November 2006 (UTC)
It generally is very good. I like the design and there are plenty of images to prevent it being too wordy. I'd say the two major issues are length and citations. At 69kb it is very long, sections may need to get their own subpages and be summarised - I don't think I'm qualified to judge which sections though. The citations also aren't particularly numerous. As much as I dislike judging an article on citations per word count (since it can and should vary depending on the article in question), there aren't a huge number. (Admittedly, it is one of those articles where almost every sentence could require a citation). Three examples (first 3 I found) where a cite is needed to support the claim:
*"Anyone who does not produce a valid ticket is given a 40-euro fine." FIXED
*"Core and fast-growing sectors are communications...and medical engineering." FIXED
*"Berlin is noted for its numerous cultural institutions, many of which enjoy international reputation. " (by whom) FIXED
Everything needed is there, just needs knocking into shape.
Trebor 22:15, 6 November 2006 (UTC)
Wikipedia Article | Total size | References | # Words |
---|---|---|---|
Seattle, Washington | 85K | 58 | |
Detroit, Michigan | 87K | 101 | |
San Francisco, California | 87K | 92 | |
Boston, Massachusetts | 68K | 25 | |
Hong Kong | 70K | 20 | |
Berlin | 73K | 72 |
Thanks for the comment Lear 21 23:06, 6 November 2006 (UTC)
**In addition, Babelsberg Studios and the important production company UFA are located just outside Berlin in Potsdam. - Important according to whom? Adjective probably should be stricken... FIXED
**Last part of "Performing arts" could use some touch-up. Ending paragraph is only 1 sentence. Last part of those orchestras reads like a list. FIXED
**Picture of the mayor could use a better caption. Also, may want to identify him as the one on the right :). FIXED
**Captions in general need expansion. (MyFest in Kreuzberg?) FIXED
Thanks for comment Gzkn ! That was very helpful. Some of the weak points are solved now. Thanks a lot Lear 21 12:05, 7 November 2006 (UTC)
What bothers me a bit is that some parts of it read a bit like a brochure you'd find at a travel agency. Take the second and third paragraph of the lead section for example: it's just a listing of reasons one should visit or move one's business to the city. The poverty in the city (although, even in the economy section only the unemployment is mentioned) should, for example, be mentioned. Also: the most cited source in this article seems to be something similar to the brochure I mentioned. Although there's certainly nothing wrong with citing this source, using it to find information about Berlin is definately POV.
I also think the fact that Berlin and Germany wer divided after WWII should be explicitly mentioned in the lead section, since this is a very important event in the history of the city and readers, who don't know anything about German history, may wonder what East Berlin is supposed to be.(Done)--
Carabinieri 10:22, 11 November 2006 (UTC)
The fact sheet is an official and credible source, even though it is published for the World Cup. It also cites facts and figures in majority.The lead text is positively exposing the city´s character, citing very credible and recently published sources; UNESCO, New Tork Times, IHT, Newsweek. It reflects the international image of the city, which has been developed in the last 10 years. Lear 21 11:57, 11 November 2006 (UTC)
I didn't say that the fact sheet wasn't credible, I just think that if you use it you have to be aware of the fact that it's POV and you have to compensate that.
As to the lead text: I did not deny that the facts there are false or that they are not cited; I'm just saying that the point of this article should not be to tell how good Berlin is, but rather to give a balanced depiction of the city. And the article is not balanced right now IMHO. Another example for this is the quotes section. They are all complementing Berlin. I'm sure there are quotes by just as notable people making fun of/criticizing/etc Berlin.-- Carabinieri 16:46, 13 November 2006 (UTC)