I'd like to get this up to WP:FL standard so please be brutal. James086 Talk | Email 12:24, 6 December 2007 (UTC)
- I don't have too much experience with this type of list, but here are some thoughts:
- The lead needs work. It doesn't flow well and contains some grammatical errors.
- The "Date in-universe" column would be better as "In-universe date", and needs en dashes for date ranges instead of hyphens. I'm not sure about this column, though. I think the list might be better without it.
- I've changed the title of the column and the hyphens to
–I will wait and see what others think before removing the column, but if it is decided that it's not appropriate then it can go. James086 Talk | Email 02:40, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
- I've changed the title of the column and the hyphens to
- Why is Halo PC listed instead of Halo: Combat Evolved? Halo PC is not its title, correct?
- Good point, I changed it to "Halo: Combat Evolved (PC port)" and I corrected the name of Halo 2 PC aswell.
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- Rather than say "PC game", you should specify the actual platform (Windows 95, etc.) Pagra shtak 16:22, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
- Good point, I changed it to "Halo: Combat Evolved (PC port)" and I corrected the name of Halo 2 PC aswell.
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02:40, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
- I don't think you want to say "Currently in development hell". Rephrase in plain English.
- I see you've explained it, but I would avoid the phrase altogether. Pagra shtak 16:22, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
- The description "Ostensibly a beekeeper's personal site, the server appeared to have been taken over by an unstable A.I." is too in-universe.
- The rewording is still in-universe. Pagra shtak 16:22, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
- I think I have addressed the last 2 points raised, if it isn't really any better please say so. Diff of the changes so far. I'll work on the lead section a bit later. Thanks a lot for the quick review, I was expecting to wait days for a review, not a few hours! James086 Talk | Email 02:40, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
- I prefer the model of List of Kingdom Hearts media (and a corresponding rename of the article to List of Halo media or List of Halo series media). Not only does it divide the article into its respective sections, thus making it more organized, the tables used look much better. If you prefer, the tables at List of Final Fantasy media or List of Castlevania titles are also available, but it's up to you. Cheers, Sephiroth BCR ( Converse) 04:49, 18 December 2007 (UTC)
I think you might find that lists are very boring to read. I hope that you will realize that actual text is more fun and engaging to read... Historybuffc13 ( talk) 01:56, 24 January 2008 (UTC)
- However, Wikipedia does have lists and that is unlikely to change. See Wikipedia:Lists and Wikipedia:Featured lists. Do you have a comment to help improve the list? Pagra shtak 06:03, 24 January 2008 (UTC)
I'd like to get this up to WP:FL standard so please be brutal. James086 Talk | Email 12:24, 6 December 2007 (UTC)
- I don't have too much experience with this type of list, but here are some thoughts:
- The lead needs work. It doesn't flow well and contains some grammatical errors.
- The "Date in-universe" column would be better as "In-universe date", and needs en dashes for date ranges instead of hyphens. I'm not sure about this column, though. I think the list might be better without it.
- I've changed the title of the column and the hyphens to
–I will wait and see what others think before removing the column, but if it is decided that it's not appropriate then it can go. James086 Talk | Email 02:40, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
- I've changed the title of the column and the hyphens to
- Why is Halo PC listed instead of Halo: Combat Evolved? Halo PC is not its title, correct?
- Good point, I changed it to "Halo: Combat Evolved (PC port)" and I corrected the name of Halo 2 PC aswell.
James086
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Email
02:40, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
- Rather than say "PC game", you should specify the actual platform (Windows 95, etc.) Pagra shtak 16:22, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
- Good point, I changed it to "Halo: Combat Evolved (PC port)" and I corrected the name of Halo 2 PC aswell.
James086
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Email
02:40, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
- I don't think you want to say "Currently in development hell". Rephrase in plain English.
- I see you've explained it, but I would avoid the phrase altogether. Pagra shtak 16:22, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
- The description "Ostensibly a beekeeper's personal site, the server appeared to have been taken over by an unstable A.I." is too in-universe.
- The rewording is still in-universe. Pagra shtak 16:22, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
- I think I have addressed the last 2 points raised, if it isn't really any better please say so. Diff of the changes so far. I'll work on the lead section a bit later. Thanks a lot for the quick review, I was expecting to wait days for a review, not a few hours! James086 Talk | Email 02:40, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
- I prefer the model of List of Kingdom Hearts media (and a corresponding rename of the article to List of Halo media or List of Halo series media). Not only does it divide the article into its respective sections, thus making it more organized, the tables used look much better. If you prefer, the tables at List of Final Fantasy media or List of Castlevania titles are also available, but it's up to you. Cheers, Sephiroth BCR ( Converse) 04:49, 18 December 2007 (UTC)
I think you might find that lists are very boring to read. I hope that you will realize that actual text is more fun and engaging to read... Historybuffc13 ( talk) 01:56, 24 January 2008 (UTC)
- However, Wikipedia does have lists and that is unlikely to change. See Wikipedia:Lists and Wikipedia:Featured lists. Do you have a comment to help improve the list? Pagra shtak 06:03, 24 January 2008 (UTC)