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Another aviator. One of the lesser-known ones, but one who played an important part in the war in the South West Pacific theatre.
Hawkeye7 (
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00:13, 5 October 2014 (UTC)reply
the wording around "a minimum air force" is unclear, perhaps reword or expand the concept, my initial impression on reading it was that he was proposing that the airforce be kept to a minimum. What he was really proposing was a massive expansion of the airforce for protection against atomic airstrikes, to the detriment of the other services if necessary.
"When the P-38 Lightning fighter arrived in the theater in late 1942, Whitehead at last received a fighter that could match the Japanese A6M Zero." This is a little repetitive. Specifically "fighter" twice, perhaps consider rewording to something like: "When the P-38 Lightning fighter arrived in the theater in late 1942, Whitehead at last received an aircraft that could match the Japanese A6M Zero."
If there is no article explaining the Pan American Good Will Flight, I'd suggest adding a bit more detail. Also, what happened to Dargue in the collision? Was he injured?
Some of the phrasing seems a bit repetitive (for example, "the Japanese advanced steadily on Port Moresby. In the end, the Japanese turned back short of Port Moresby").
Image review -- I didn't see a dedicated image licensing check but the three pics appear unproblematic: two US-Gov and one pre-1945 Australian. Cheers,
Ian Rose (
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23:42, 12 December 2014 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
Another aviator. One of the lesser-known ones, but one who played an important part in the war in the South West Pacific theatre.
Hawkeye7 (
talk)
00:13, 5 October 2014 (UTC)reply
the wording around "a minimum air force" is unclear, perhaps reword or expand the concept, my initial impression on reading it was that he was proposing that the airforce be kept to a minimum. What he was really proposing was a massive expansion of the airforce for protection against atomic airstrikes, to the detriment of the other services if necessary.
"When the P-38 Lightning fighter arrived in the theater in late 1942, Whitehead at last received a fighter that could match the Japanese A6M Zero." This is a little repetitive. Specifically "fighter" twice, perhaps consider rewording to something like: "When the P-38 Lightning fighter arrived in the theater in late 1942, Whitehead at last received an aircraft that could match the Japanese A6M Zero."
If there is no article explaining the Pan American Good Will Flight, I'd suggest adding a bit more detail. Also, what happened to Dargue in the collision? Was he injured?
Some of the phrasing seems a bit repetitive (for example, "the Japanese advanced steadily on Port Moresby. In the end, the Japanese turned back short of Port Moresby").
Image review -- I didn't see a dedicated image licensing check but the three pics appear unproblematic: two US-Gov and one pre-1945 Australian. Cheers,
Ian Rose (
talk)
23:42, 12 December 2014 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.