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can you please try to reword the first sentence of the lead, currently it sounds like the third engagement on the night of July 7-8, when you mean third engagement of the war.
This sentence appears to be missing a word: "However, the division was under strength, only two-thirds the size of its regular wartime size". I'd suggest adding "and was" after "strength";
some of the sentences are very short and stucatto, indeed it reads like a 2-3 round burst in places. An example is the last bit of the Outbreak of the war section. I'd suggest combining these two sentences;
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no dabs, alt text is present and ext links all work (no action required);
can you please try to reword the first sentence of the lead, currently it sounds like the third engagement on the night of July 7-8, when you mean third engagement of the war.
This sentence appears to be missing a word: "However, the division was under strength, only two-thirds the size of its regular wartime size". I'd suggest adding "and was" after "strength";
some of the sentences are very short and stucatto, indeed it reads like a 2-3 round burst in places. An example is the last bit of the Outbreak of the war section. I'd suggest combining these two sentences;
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