The list was promoted 23:18, 14 May 2008.
This is another of the Victoria Cross recipients lists. It follows on from List of Victoria Cross recipients by nationality and its "sublists" Australian and Canadian recipients, all FLs. Although not representing nationality, this list shows the recipients who served with the Indian Army, in much the same way as the FL List of Victoria Cross recipients of the Royal Navy It meets all the criteria as far as I can tell and it has built upon comments in previous FLCs. Thanks for your time. Woody ( talk) 22:23, 20 April 2008 (UTC) reply
I split the references into specific and general if you don't mind. Other specific comments:
Otherwise I can't see much holding it back. The Rambling Man ( talk) 15:48, 21 April 2008 (UTC) reply
Comments
Comma "because"—"as" is ambiguous; I try to avoid it. "Indian troops were not at first eligible for the VC, because since 1837 they had had access to the Indian Order of Merit—the oldest British gallantry award for general issue." Issue does sound like boots and garters, but maybe that's the term to use. Having abbreviated VC already, please use it always. Trying to avoid "eligible" twice; "access" is all I can think of. Juxtapose the elements that are now either side of the dash.
To summarise: redundant wording, underuse of commas, undesirable repetition—these are things you might keep in mind. TONY (talk) 12:37, 4 May 2008 (UTC) reply
The list was promoted 23:18, 14 May 2008.
This is another of the Victoria Cross recipients lists. It follows on from List of Victoria Cross recipients by nationality and its "sublists" Australian and Canadian recipients, all FLs. Although not representing nationality, this list shows the recipients who served with the Indian Army, in much the same way as the FL List of Victoria Cross recipients of the Royal Navy It meets all the criteria as far as I can tell and it has built upon comments in previous FLCs. Thanks for your time. Woody ( talk) 22:23, 20 April 2008 (UTC) reply
I split the references into specific and general if you don't mind. Other specific comments:
Otherwise I can't see much holding it back. The Rambling Man ( talk) 15:48, 21 April 2008 (UTC) reply
Comments
Comma "because"—"as" is ambiguous; I try to avoid it. "Indian troops were not at first eligible for the VC, because since 1837 they had had access to the Indian Order of Merit—the oldest British gallantry award for general issue." Issue does sound like boots and garters, but maybe that's the term to use. Having abbreviated VC already, please use it always. Trying to avoid "eligible" twice; "access" is all I can think of. Juxtapose the elements that are now either side of the dash.
To summarise: redundant wording, underuse of commas, undesirable repetition—these are things you might keep in mind. TONY (talk) 12:37, 4 May 2008 (UTC) reply