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Just finished copy-editing the article. I fixed everything mentioned on the previous FLC nom. Happy to be back on Wikipedia again. --[[ SRE.K.A.L.| L.A.K.ERS]] 02:35, 12 August 2010 (UTC) reply
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The biggest shortcoming I see with the list is its prose. It's grammatically correct and makes sense even to readers unfamiliar with the subject, but it's just not engaging. Some passages read like "Mike did this. He did that. Mike also did something else." Lots of short statements with no flow. I realize that the kind of information dealt with in the article makes writing brilliant prose fairly difficult, but not impossible. Anyway, I'm in weak support for now. Good raise 04:40, 25 August 2010 (UTC) reply
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The list was promoted by Dabomb87 22:09, 31 August 2010 [1].
List of BC Lions head coaches ( | talk | history | protect | delete | links | watch | logs | views)
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Just finished copy-editing the article. I fixed everything mentioned on the previous FLC nom. Happy to be back on Wikipedia again. --[[ SRE.K.A.L.| L.A.K.ERS]] 02:35, 12 August 2010 (UTC) reply
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The Rambling Man ( talk) 17:17, 24 August 2010 (UTC) reply
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The biggest shortcoming I see with the list is its prose. It's grammatically correct and makes sense even to readers unfamiliar with the subject, but it's just not engaging. Some passages read like "Mike did this. He did that. Mike also did something else." Lots of short statements with no flow. I realize that the kind of information dealt with in the article makes writing brilliant prose fairly difficult, but not impossible. Anyway, I'm in weak support for now. Good raise 04:40, 25 August 2010 (UTC) reply
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Resolved comments from Courcelles 19:14, 28 August 2010 (UTC) reply |
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Courcelles 15:37, 27 August 2010 (UTC) reply
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