The article was archived by Graham Colm ( talk) 06:24, 5 September 2014 ( diff).
This article is about one of the main tributaries of the Susquehanna River in Columbia County, Pennsylvania. It started out as a two-sentence stub and has been steadily improving since 2012. After becoming a GA in early 2013, it failed FAC twice in mid-2013 and early 2014, mostly due to prose concerns. By the third FAC in May, this article was getting close to the standards (mainly due to work by the GOCE), but the prose still required more work. Now, I think that the prose finally meets the prose standards for FA. I am also certain that the other standards are met, as no major issues with these have been raised in recent FACs. Hopefully, it'll pass this time. -- Jakob ( talk) 13:06, 7 July 2014 (UTC) reply
@ Jakec: Hello, Jakob -- Your article looked interesting, so I decided to read it and see if I could help. It is well written for the most part. I just made a few minor copy-edits to correct spelling and punctuation, and add a few missing words. I rearranged the words in a few sentences to make them more concise and to improve sentence flow. There are just a few issues I'd like to mention here:
1) The last sentence in the section
Fishing Creek (North Branch Susquehanna River)#Oxbow lake is:
and the last sentence in the section Fishing Creek (North Branch Susquehanna River)#Biology is:
I'm pointing this out just in case this might be a duplication of information. If not, that's fine.
2) In the second paragraph in the section
Fishing Creek (North Branch Susquehanna River)#Geology is the following sentence:
The pronoun "it" at the end of the sentence is ambiguous. It could refer to "valley", but perhaps also to "creek". If it means "Fishing Creek valley", then I suggest the following re-wording, which will eliminate any ambiguity:
3) The second and third sentences in
Fishing Creek (North Branch Susquehanna River)#Recreation are:
Usually, when one uses the verb "features", what usually follows is an interesting or attractive highlight. "The remains of a concrete dam" does not conjure up an image of something attractive. I suppose it could be interesting, though. If you're happy with it, that's fine. It's just an unusual use of the verb. (There is another example with the same construction a few sentences below this.)
4) In the second-to-last paragraph of the article is the following sentence:
However, what follows, a colon (:) and "Big, Twin, Lewis, and Sullivan Falls" is described as..." does not make sense. Perhaps there are some words missing following "Waterfall Wonderland". Perhaps it should read,
Oppose pending referencing improvements. A number of the references are incomplete. GBooks or other web links are not an adequate substitute for complete citations. WP:CITEHOW includes some guidance if needed. Nikkimaria ( talk) 03:08, 19 August 2014 (UTC) reply
The article was archived by Graham Colm ( talk) 06:24, 5 September 2014 ( diff).
This article is about one of the main tributaries of the Susquehanna River in Columbia County, Pennsylvania. It started out as a two-sentence stub and has been steadily improving since 2012. After becoming a GA in early 2013, it failed FAC twice in mid-2013 and early 2014, mostly due to prose concerns. By the third FAC in May, this article was getting close to the standards (mainly due to work by the GOCE), but the prose still required more work. Now, I think that the prose finally meets the prose standards for FA. I am also certain that the other standards are met, as no major issues with these have been raised in recent FACs. Hopefully, it'll pass this time. -- Jakob ( talk) 13:06, 7 July 2014 (UTC) reply
@ Jakec: Hello, Jakob -- Your article looked interesting, so I decided to read it and see if I could help. It is well written for the most part. I just made a few minor copy-edits to correct spelling and punctuation, and add a few missing words. I rearranged the words in a few sentences to make them more concise and to improve sentence flow. There are just a few issues I'd like to mention here:
1) The last sentence in the section
Fishing Creek (North Branch Susquehanna River)#Oxbow lake is:
and the last sentence in the section Fishing Creek (North Branch Susquehanna River)#Biology is:
I'm pointing this out just in case this might be a duplication of information. If not, that's fine.
2) In the second paragraph in the section
Fishing Creek (North Branch Susquehanna River)#Geology is the following sentence:
The pronoun "it" at the end of the sentence is ambiguous. It could refer to "valley", but perhaps also to "creek". If it means "Fishing Creek valley", then I suggest the following re-wording, which will eliminate any ambiguity:
3) The second and third sentences in
Fishing Creek (North Branch Susquehanna River)#Recreation are:
Usually, when one uses the verb "features", what usually follows is an interesting or attractive highlight. "The remains of a concrete dam" does not conjure up an image of something attractive. I suppose it could be interesting, though. If you're happy with it, that's fine. It's just an unusual use of the verb. (There is another example with the same construction a few sentences below this.)
4) In the second-to-last paragraph of the article is the following sentence:
However, what follows, a colon (:) and "Big, Twin, Lewis, and Sullivan Falls" is described as..." does not make sense. Perhaps there are some words missing following "Waterfall Wonderland". Perhaps it should read,
Oppose pending referencing improvements. A number of the references are incomplete. GBooks or other web links are not an adequate substitute for complete citations. WP:CITEHOW includes some guidance if needed. Nikkimaria ( talk) 03:08, 19 August 2014 (UTC) reply