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I moved your draft back to your sandbox because I felt it wasn't ready for mainspace yet.
several years ago...Not only should facts like this be specific, you also shouldn't use relative time periods in Wikipedia. Because Wikipedia articles aren't dated, "several years ago" might mean something very different to a reader in 20 years, and it's likely that they won't have any indication as to when this information was added.
The Ecolabel was just the beginning of France's environmental sustainability efforts- you can't make a statement like that and just end there. Cliffhangers don't belong in encyclopaedia articles. In addition, the statement lacks any sources.
French law and policy makers worked closely with environmental agencies to create a comprehensive, all-encompassing approach; terms like "closely" and "comprehensive, all-compassing" are not objectively verifiable, In addition, your sources here are primary sources and press releases.
The law is broken down into six sections as follows. A section shouldn't consist of a sentence fragment, and shouldn't only refer to what follows. There should be enough information in a section that a person who reads one section and nothing else learns something.
Ian (Wiki Ed) ( talk) 22:08, 27 March 2023 (UTC)
The Excellent New Editor's Barnstar | |
For your impressive work for a new editor. I do seriously hope you stick around! — Ixtal ( T / C ) ⁂ Non nobis solum. 12:12, 14 April 2023 (UTC) |
This user is a student editor in Northeastern_University/Online_Communities_(2023-1-Spring) . |
I moved your draft back to your sandbox because I felt it wasn't ready for mainspace yet.
several years ago...Not only should facts like this be specific, you also shouldn't use relative time periods in Wikipedia. Because Wikipedia articles aren't dated, "several years ago" might mean something very different to a reader in 20 years, and it's likely that they won't have any indication as to when this information was added.
The Ecolabel was just the beginning of France's environmental sustainability efforts- you can't make a statement like that and just end there. Cliffhangers don't belong in encyclopaedia articles. In addition, the statement lacks any sources.
French law and policy makers worked closely with environmental agencies to create a comprehensive, all-encompassing approach; terms like "closely" and "comprehensive, all-compassing" are not objectively verifiable, In addition, your sources here are primary sources and press releases.
The law is broken down into six sections as follows. A section shouldn't consist of a sentence fragment, and shouldn't only refer to what follows. There should be enough information in a section that a person who reads one section and nothing else learns something.
Ian (Wiki Ed) ( talk) 22:08, 27 March 2023 (UTC)
The Excellent New Editor's Barnstar | |
For your impressive work for a new editor. I do seriously hope you stick around! — Ixtal ( T / C ) ⁂ Non nobis solum. 12:12, 14 April 2023 (UTC) |