It looks like we are reerting each others edits to this article. Please visit the "Discussion" page before reverting my edits so we can come to an agreement as to what belongs and what doesn't belong. My problems with the article is its non-encyclopedic writing with the use of unnecessary adulatory language, sources that do not verify the information cited, and repetitive entries. Wkharrisjr (talk) 14:05, 19 July 2011 (UTC)
We need to both agree to this, i agree . Why can't we talk on this message board .. instead of the discussion board.. Did you have this problem with when you went to the edit page everything got erased so you had to rewrite everything ? anyway thank you for connecting with me. What i want is to have alot of finformation on Halim on this page but with what you said to have it in Encyclopedic writing.. so i want to still say most of the things there but in encyclopedic writing and proper writing language. I just find the the article when you edit it has very little information on Halim.. So can we expand on it .. i like us talking and agreeing to something ..
I want to keep these statements in the section " Musical Career" But say it in better way
Many stadiums were sold out and completely packed with people when Halim performed there.
He would encourage many new young artists and actors to become very successful.
Though Halim never released an album in his life he was purely a live singer he was still extremely famous and loved by everyone. Halim was naturally very charismatic.[5] He also played an various types instruments including the Oboe, Drums, Piano, Oud, clarinet, Guitar and more. Halim was known for his deep passion when singing, and his highly unique and powerful voice, (earning the name, "the nightingale"). Halim did performances in almost every country in the Arab world and he had numerous concerts outside of the Arab World (Paris, London etc.), at a time where only few could become that big.
and of course keep what other statements you like in this section. Now how can we say these statements and the statements you want to save better.?
I assume English is not your primary language? I say this because many of your edits (and reverts of my edits) are stilted. I tried to edit them to sound better, but I see many of themm have been changed back. I also notice that you are not using standard Wikipedia citation methods- at least surround your citations with the Cite error: There are <ref>
tags on this page without content in them (see the
help page). tags so they links will appear in the reference and not an external link, which is considered poor Wikipedia practice. Furthermore, sources like FindAGrave.com and blogs are not really good sources as these are not peer reviewed and tend to be non-objective. Please consider reading over
Wikipedia:Identifying reliable sources for a discussion of good sources and
Wikipedia:Referencing for beginners if you want this article to be taken more seriously. I've tried to help, but I feel like I'm beating my head against a wall.
Wkharrisjr (
talk) 18:02, 28 July 2011 (UTC)
You are right about English not being my primary language. Listen i know these websites are blogs, but i know some of the information they say and i put on Wikipedia from them are real. But because they came from books or people that knew him talk about it in interviews i cannot prove that on Wikipedia. I thank you for the help. But you do not have to. I will try to get better sources but may you please not take any information out of the article and if you want maybe just make them sound better or you can just leave it alone. I will try my best to make it more better Thanks.. I say non of this in a mean, mad or rude gesture at all.
Also i will take what you said and try to help the article get better by it. Thank you for the information.
I hope i have not disturbed you. If i have i am sorry. Thank you.
It looks like we are reerting each others edits to this article. Please visit the "Discussion" page before reverting my edits so we can come to an agreement as to what belongs and what doesn't belong. My problems with the article is its non-encyclopedic writing with the use of unnecessary adulatory language, sources that do not verify the information cited, and repetitive entries. Wkharrisjr (talk) 14:05, 19 July 2011 (UTC)
We need to both agree to this, i agree . Why can't we talk on this message board .. instead of the discussion board.. Did you have this problem with when you went to the edit page everything got erased so you had to rewrite everything ? anyway thank you for connecting with me. What i want is to have alot of finformation on Halim on this page but with what you said to have it in Encyclopedic writing.. so i want to still say most of the things there but in encyclopedic writing and proper writing language. I just find the the article when you edit it has very little information on Halim.. So can we expand on it .. i like us talking and agreeing to something ..
I want to keep these statements in the section " Musical Career" But say it in better way
Many stadiums were sold out and completely packed with people when Halim performed there.
He would encourage many new young artists and actors to become very successful.
Though Halim never released an album in his life he was purely a live singer he was still extremely famous and loved by everyone. Halim was naturally very charismatic.[5] He also played an various types instruments including the Oboe, Drums, Piano, Oud, clarinet, Guitar and more. Halim was known for his deep passion when singing, and his highly unique and powerful voice, (earning the name, "the nightingale"). Halim did performances in almost every country in the Arab world and he had numerous concerts outside of the Arab World (Paris, London etc.), at a time where only few could become that big.
and of course keep what other statements you like in this section. Now how can we say these statements and the statements you want to save better.?
I assume English is not your primary language? I say this because many of your edits (and reverts of my edits) are stilted. I tried to edit them to sound better, but I see many of themm have been changed back. I also notice that you are not using standard Wikipedia citation methods- at least surround your citations with the Cite error: There are <ref>
tags on this page without content in them (see the
help page). tags so they links will appear in the reference and not an external link, which is considered poor Wikipedia practice. Furthermore, sources like FindAGrave.com and blogs are not really good sources as these are not peer reviewed and tend to be non-objective. Please consider reading over
Wikipedia:Identifying reliable sources for a discussion of good sources and
Wikipedia:Referencing for beginners if you want this article to be taken more seriously. I've tried to help, but I feel like I'm beating my head against a wall.
Wkharrisjr (
talk) 18:02, 28 July 2011 (UTC)
You are right about English not being my primary language. Listen i know these websites are blogs, but i know some of the information they say and i put on Wikipedia from them are real. But because they came from books or people that knew him talk about it in interviews i cannot prove that on Wikipedia. I thank you for the help. But you do not have to. I will try to get better sources but may you please not take any information out of the article and if you want maybe just make them sound better or you can just leave it alone. I will try my best to make it more better Thanks.. I say non of this in a mean, mad or rude gesture at all.
Also i will take what you said and try to help the article get better by it. Thank you for the information.
I hope i have not disturbed you. If i have i am sorry. Thank you.