List two:
List one:
Great Lakes Areas of Concern The Great Lakes are under attack from the many harmful chemicals and people that live and vacation in the area. Preservation attempts are being made by the US and Canada but the issue should be made more public since it is the public that is causing much of the damage. Much of the area's aquatic life is at risk and each lake has a different and delicate ecosystem that needs to be maintained. Because of this, the task of preserving them is difficult. There are a total of 43 areas that are designated as areas of concern and this number is far to high. 128.101.211.210 03:45, 16 April 2007 (UTC)
Discussions
Hey Kate. Here are three links for the editing part of the project. These links go to your group members' talk pages FOR THEIR ARTICLE. Find your name (Discussion: Kate) and write in that section items that you changed in their article (also you could ask quick questions there, too). 1013-andy 03:36, 29 April 2007 (UTC)
Hola Kate. So here's the summary I've got for you after reading your article.
Hi, I've nominated an article you worked on, Great Lakes Areas of Concern, for consideration to appear on the Main Page as part of Wikipedia:Did you know. You can see the "hook" for the article at Template talk:Did you know#Articles created on April 27 where you can improve it if you see fit. 1013-josh 22:15, 30 April 2007 (UTC)
Hey kate,
I thought you had a good paper with a lot of details. There was clear information that seemed to flow well with your topic. I felt that i kept up with your topic and became more knowledgable by reading your article. You had a few sentences that needed rewording, and a few grammar mistakes but other than that you have a well coming article. 1013-precious 04:01, 2 May 2007 (UTC)
...So I'm not sure what y'all have going on with workshop. Am I supposed to comment here? Or over at the article talk page? You seem to be doing a bit of both. I'll respond here. I think this is an excellent choice of topic, and you're on your way to a solid article. I think your delineation of causes and sources of pollution in the "Why Are They Areas of Concern?" section is very strong. A few things: 1. Use more in-text citations (footnotes). Whenever you have a fact or quote that you get from a particular source -- say, for example, that a new invasive species enters the lake every eight months -- throw a footnote up there to point us directly to the source. 2. I think you should bring the Great Lakes Water Quality Agreement up to the top to help you refocus your article as an encyclopedic entry on the Areas of Concern. One of the most important pieces of information for the reader to know right off the bat is WHO has designated these "areas of concern." You're not writing an article about Great Lakes pollution. You're writing an article about a bureacratic/regulatory structure that has been set up to deal with Great Lakes pollution by naming the "areas of concern." So that's a vital piece of information. 3. I think you should cut the "What You Can Do" section, as it is not encyclopedic and doesn't fit within the scope of this article. You could make an argument that it belongs in an article about preventing water pollution, or even Great Lakes water pollution, but that's not what you have here. You have an article focused on the very specific topic of Great Lakes Areas of Concern and the closer you can stick to that topic, the better your article will be. 4. You can also tone down language like "a major problem" to bring it within the WP:NPOV guidelines. Strive for a formal, encyclopedic tone. 5. As you begin to rework your article as an encyclopedic entry on the "Areas of Concern" you will find a lot of necessary information that is missing from this draft. For example, following this link from your references: I see (a) information about the protocol and agreement that established the term AOC, (b) criteria for inclusion in the AOCs, (c) RAP and LaMP management plans, (d) the IJC regulatory body, etc. All of that belongs in your article. Your job is to explain to us how AOCs are defined, regulated, and cleaned up. So you're off to a great start with what you have now, but focus your energies a little more closely on the AOCs and less on Great Lakes pollution in general. Does that make sense? 1013-josh 15:17, 2 May 2007 (UTC)
You're on the Main Page!
Hi Kate, your article is currently featured on the Main Page of Wikipedia in the "Did You Know?" fact box. It will be up there for the next 6+ hours. You may get some strangers stopping by your article as a result, so check the page history. 1013-josh 01:57, 4 May 2007 (UTC)
Final Edits
Okay, so I'm finished with contributing to your article and all of your last four sections of the article are completed and correctly formatted. Look at the article's discussion page for a detailed list of what I did. Good luck with the rest!
1013-andy 06:12, 4 May 2007 (UTC)
I am finding more infromation for the other members of my group. I will have to add everyone to my watchlist later due to technical difficulties. Last night I read thought everyone's articles and made some minor revisions on grammar and word choice. Today I gave Precious and Andy advice on what I thought of their articles but didn't get to Dan's, his will be later tonight. 1013-kate 17:04, 30 April 2007 (UTC) Last night I gave Dan comments on his article on the disscussion page. 1013-kate 21:36, 1 May 2007 (UTC)
I gave Dan an article about the most Earth like planet found to date that I think would be a good addition to his article. 1013-kate 00:29, 2 May 2007 (UTC)
I found an article for Precious and Andy to help them out. All of these links are on their disscussion pages for the articles. 1013-kate 02:33, 2 May 2007 (UTC)
My first homework assignment is complete. 128.101.211.210 03:46, 16 April 2007 (UTC)
Josh, I revised the most recent homework assignment becuase I did all external links because I thought that was what we were supposed to do. They are now all internal and are linked to their sites. Sorry about that! 1013-kate 00:16, 17 April 2007 (UTC)
Josh, I added a sentence to the Brokeback Mountain article. 1013-kate 20:08, 17 April 2007 (UTC)
Josh, I am fine with doing this project on Wikipedia. 1013-kate 19:55, 19 April 2007 (UTC)
Josh, the first 300 words of my article is on My Project page. 1013-kate 02:29, 23 April 2007 (UTC)
Josh the first 1000 words are written in My Project Draft. 1013-kate 22:53, 26 April 2007 (UTC)
Hi Josh, Ok I'm thinking my article is as done as it's going to be so I'm turning in my article! 1013-kate 20:19, 9 May 2007 (UTC)
Hey, I just posted some helpful research links; don't miss them! 1013-josh 21:34, 18 April 2007 (UTC)
Hey Kate, I just wanted to let you know that I created a talk page on Precious' article. This is where we could communicate with her (and her with us) about her article.
Follow this link: Talk:Black Belt (region of Chicago) and look for Discussion: Kate. This is where you will ask/answer your/her questions. (this unsigned comment left by user:1013-andy)
Wikipedians, if you're commenting specifically about the Great Lakes Areas of Concern article, feel free to chime in in the "Workshop" section above.
Hello, 1013-kate, and
welcome to Wikipedia. Thank you for
your contributions. I hope you like the place and decide to stay. If you are stuck, and looking for help, please come to the
New contributors' help page, where experienced Wikipedians can answer any queries you have! Or, you can just type {{helpme}}
and your question on your user talk page, and someone will show up shortly to answer.
Here are a few good links for newcomers:
We hope you enjoy editing here and being a Wikipedian! By the way, you can sign your name on talk and vote pages using four tildes, like this: ~~~~. If you have any questions, see the help pages, add a question to the village pump or ask me on my talk page. Again, welcome! -- Geniac 03:00, 24 April 2007 (UTC)
List two:
List one:
Great Lakes Areas of Concern The Great Lakes are under attack from the many harmful chemicals and people that live and vacation in the area. Preservation attempts are being made by the US and Canada but the issue should be made more public since it is the public that is causing much of the damage. Much of the area's aquatic life is at risk and each lake has a different and delicate ecosystem that needs to be maintained. Because of this, the task of preserving them is difficult. There are a total of 43 areas that are designated as areas of concern and this number is far to high. 128.101.211.210 03:45, 16 April 2007 (UTC)
Discussions
Hey Kate. Here are three links for the editing part of the project. These links go to your group members' talk pages FOR THEIR ARTICLE. Find your name (Discussion: Kate) and write in that section items that you changed in their article (also you could ask quick questions there, too). 1013-andy 03:36, 29 April 2007 (UTC)
Hola Kate. So here's the summary I've got for you after reading your article.
Hi, I've nominated an article you worked on, Great Lakes Areas of Concern, for consideration to appear on the Main Page as part of Wikipedia:Did you know. You can see the "hook" for the article at Template talk:Did you know#Articles created on April 27 where you can improve it if you see fit. 1013-josh 22:15, 30 April 2007 (UTC)
Hey kate,
I thought you had a good paper with a lot of details. There was clear information that seemed to flow well with your topic. I felt that i kept up with your topic and became more knowledgable by reading your article. You had a few sentences that needed rewording, and a few grammar mistakes but other than that you have a well coming article. 1013-precious 04:01, 2 May 2007 (UTC)
...So I'm not sure what y'all have going on with workshop. Am I supposed to comment here? Or over at the article talk page? You seem to be doing a bit of both. I'll respond here. I think this is an excellent choice of topic, and you're on your way to a solid article. I think your delineation of causes and sources of pollution in the "Why Are They Areas of Concern?" section is very strong. A few things: 1. Use more in-text citations (footnotes). Whenever you have a fact or quote that you get from a particular source -- say, for example, that a new invasive species enters the lake every eight months -- throw a footnote up there to point us directly to the source. 2. I think you should bring the Great Lakes Water Quality Agreement up to the top to help you refocus your article as an encyclopedic entry on the Areas of Concern. One of the most important pieces of information for the reader to know right off the bat is WHO has designated these "areas of concern." You're not writing an article about Great Lakes pollution. You're writing an article about a bureacratic/regulatory structure that has been set up to deal with Great Lakes pollution by naming the "areas of concern." So that's a vital piece of information. 3. I think you should cut the "What You Can Do" section, as it is not encyclopedic and doesn't fit within the scope of this article. You could make an argument that it belongs in an article about preventing water pollution, or even Great Lakes water pollution, but that's not what you have here. You have an article focused on the very specific topic of Great Lakes Areas of Concern and the closer you can stick to that topic, the better your article will be. 4. You can also tone down language like "a major problem" to bring it within the WP:NPOV guidelines. Strive for a formal, encyclopedic tone. 5. As you begin to rework your article as an encyclopedic entry on the "Areas of Concern" you will find a lot of necessary information that is missing from this draft. For example, following this link from your references: I see (a) information about the protocol and agreement that established the term AOC, (b) criteria for inclusion in the AOCs, (c) RAP and LaMP management plans, (d) the IJC regulatory body, etc. All of that belongs in your article. Your job is to explain to us how AOCs are defined, regulated, and cleaned up. So you're off to a great start with what you have now, but focus your energies a little more closely on the AOCs and less on Great Lakes pollution in general. Does that make sense? 1013-josh 15:17, 2 May 2007 (UTC)
You're on the Main Page!
Hi Kate, your article is currently featured on the Main Page of Wikipedia in the "Did You Know?" fact box. It will be up there for the next 6+ hours. You may get some strangers stopping by your article as a result, so check the page history. 1013-josh 01:57, 4 May 2007 (UTC)
Final Edits
Okay, so I'm finished with contributing to your article and all of your last four sections of the article are completed and correctly formatted. Look at the article's discussion page for a detailed list of what I did. Good luck with the rest!
1013-andy 06:12, 4 May 2007 (UTC)
I am finding more infromation for the other members of my group. I will have to add everyone to my watchlist later due to technical difficulties. Last night I read thought everyone's articles and made some minor revisions on grammar and word choice. Today I gave Precious and Andy advice on what I thought of their articles but didn't get to Dan's, his will be later tonight. 1013-kate 17:04, 30 April 2007 (UTC) Last night I gave Dan comments on his article on the disscussion page. 1013-kate 21:36, 1 May 2007 (UTC)
I gave Dan an article about the most Earth like planet found to date that I think would be a good addition to his article. 1013-kate 00:29, 2 May 2007 (UTC)
I found an article for Precious and Andy to help them out. All of these links are on their disscussion pages for the articles. 1013-kate 02:33, 2 May 2007 (UTC)
My first homework assignment is complete. 128.101.211.210 03:46, 16 April 2007 (UTC)
Josh, I revised the most recent homework assignment becuase I did all external links because I thought that was what we were supposed to do. They are now all internal and are linked to their sites. Sorry about that! 1013-kate 00:16, 17 April 2007 (UTC)
Josh, I added a sentence to the Brokeback Mountain article. 1013-kate 20:08, 17 April 2007 (UTC)
Josh, I am fine with doing this project on Wikipedia. 1013-kate 19:55, 19 April 2007 (UTC)
Josh, the first 300 words of my article is on My Project page. 1013-kate 02:29, 23 April 2007 (UTC)
Josh the first 1000 words are written in My Project Draft. 1013-kate 22:53, 26 April 2007 (UTC)
Hi Josh, Ok I'm thinking my article is as done as it's going to be so I'm turning in my article! 1013-kate 20:19, 9 May 2007 (UTC)
Hey, I just posted some helpful research links; don't miss them! 1013-josh 21:34, 18 April 2007 (UTC)
Hey Kate, I just wanted to let you know that I created a talk page on Precious' article. This is where we could communicate with her (and her with us) about her article.
Follow this link: Talk:Black Belt (region of Chicago) and look for Discussion: Kate. This is where you will ask/answer your/her questions. (this unsigned comment left by user:1013-andy)
Wikipedians, if you're commenting specifically about the Great Lakes Areas of Concern article, feel free to chime in in the "Workshop" section above.
Hello, 1013-kate, and
welcome to Wikipedia. Thank you for
your contributions. I hope you like the place and decide to stay. If you are stuck, and looking for help, please come to the
New contributors' help page, where experienced Wikipedians can answer any queries you have! Or, you can just type {{helpme}}
and your question on your user talk page, and someone will show up shortly to answer.
Here are a few good links for newcomers:
We hope you enjoy editing here and being a Wikipedian! By the way, you can sign your name on talk and vote pages using four tildes, like this: ~~~~. If you have any questions, see the help pages, add a question to the village pump or ask me on my talk page. Again, welcome! -- Geniac 03:00, 24 April 2007 (UTC)