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5x expanded by Gerda Arendt ( talk). Self nominated at 21:17, 4 April 2014 (UTC).
Hook starts a little slow, "... that Bach set a text mentioning ..." Just like the other article I reviewed for you, can you pep up the hook just a little bit? It's precise, but a bit dull... Perhaps "Bach mentioned prison and freedom...? Or something? - I don't want you to say anything inaccurate, of course, just say it a little peppier! Montanabw (talk) 23:22, 11 April 2014 (UTC)
The result was: promoted by
Victuallers (
talk) 16:29, 17 April 2014 (UTC)
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5x expanded by Gerda Arendt ( talk). Self nominated at 21:17, 4 April 2014 (UTC).
Hook starts a little slow, "... that Bach set a text mentioning ..." Just like the other article I reviewed for you, can you pep up the hook just a little bit? It's precise, but a bit dull... Perhaps "Bach mentioned prison and freedom...? Or something? - I don't want you to say anything inaccurate, of course, just say it a little peppier! Montanabw (talk) 23:22, 11 April 2014 (UTC)