The result was: promoted by
Panyd
The muffin is not subtle 01:13, 15 November 2011 (UTC)
Created/expanded by Violetriga ( talk). Self-nom at 13:42, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
There is no real way to put the name of the article as it stands. Hook rules say "The title of the new article must be in bold and linked to the new article." and assuming given this, it is acceptable to do that. (I could be misinterpreting. Some one feel free to correct me.)
Article expanded on date mentioned and to required length.
Format on all three hooks, title issues aside, looks good.
All three hooks appear neutral.
No plagiarism found in text surrounding hooks.
Suggested hook does not describe athlete as a refugee in the text. The SOURCE supporting it does, but the Wikipedia article does not. The hook would be acceptable if the article was changed to say he was a refugee. As this hook has a picture, I would suggest fixing that.
Picture used in hook has the no copyright problems.
All other pictures in article are fair use pictures or have no copyright problems.
Alt1 : It says person. Should say ATHLETE as text says athlete, and indicates other people carried the flag, even if these were unofficial. I'd change Irish to "Irish immigrant", as opposed to an American born person of Irish descent if this hook is being used.
sources are good though.
Alt2: Text says "The fact that the U.S. flag is not dipped can therefore be said to be a law rather than a tradition." and this is NOT cited. There is nothing in the "Flag dipping" section which mentions legality. Section cites tradition.
Conclusion: None of the three existing hooks work as they are because of wording issues, or citation issues coupled with text issues. --
LauraHale (
talk) 05:06, 13 November 2011 (UTC)
The result was: promoted by
Panyd
The muffin is not subtle 01:13, 15 November 2011 (UTC)
Created/expanded by Violetriga ( talk). Self-nom at 13:42, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
There is no real way to put the name of the article as it stands. Hook rules say "The title of the new article must be in bold and linked to the new article." and assuming given this, it is acceptable to do that. (I could be misinterpreting. Some one feel free to correct me.)
Article expanded on date mentioned and to required length.
Format on all three hooks, title issues aside, looks good.
All three hooks appear neutral.
No plagiarism found in text surrounding hooks.
Suggested hook does not describe athlete as a refugee in the text. The SOURCE supporting it does, but the Wikipedia article does not. The hook would be acceptable if the article was changed to say he was a refugee. As this hook has a picture, I would suggest fixing that.
Picture used in hook has the no copyright problems.
All other pictures in article are fair use pictures or have no copyright problems.
Alt1 : It says person. Should say ATHLETE as text says athlete, and indicates other people carried the flag, even if these were unofficial. I'd change Irish to "Irish immigrant", as opposed to an American born person of Irish descent if this hook is being used.
sources are good though.
Alt2: Text says "The fact that the U.S. flag is not dipped can therefore be said to be a law rather than a tradition." and this is NOT cited. There is nothing in the "Flag dipping" section which mentions legality. Section cites tradition.
Conclusion: None of the three existing hooks work as they are because of wording issues, or citation issues coupled with text issues. --
LauraHale (
talk) 05:06, 13 November 2011 (UTC)