The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as
this nomination's talk page,
the article's talk page or
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... that the arrest and incarceration of Johan Floderus in
Iran was first revealed by a New York Times report in September 2023? Source:
Original article from The New York Times;
Re-adapted from Il Post: "Since April 2022, Iran detains a 33-year-old Swedish diplomat who works as an EU official in a Tehran prison. The news surfaced on Monday, at a year-and-a-half since his arrest, thanks to a New York Times article."
Comment: Clearly, I want this nomination to be intended as a way to raise awareness about the diplomat's current case, rather than an attempt to "bank in" on the news. I hope the article and the hooks are all correct and accurate enough: moreover, I'm hoping to get my own QPQ review over the line as soon as possible.
Comment On a side note, like I already explained
elsewhere, I've inserted the "(diplomat)" specification to the article's title because, while working on it as a draft, I had realized there was
an eponymous philologist and priest who was also registered on Wikidata, so I wanted to avoid confusion.
Oltrepier (
talk) 14:35, 11 September 2023 (UTC)
Article is new & long enough, & seems well-written & neutral. I'm a bit dubious about the first hook - what the NYT did was to identify him. The Swedish government had announced that an unnamed man was detained a year earlier. Maybe refactor. Alt hook is ok. Earwig finds nothing.
Johnbod (
talk) 00:44, 28 September 2023 (UTC)
@
Johnbod: You're probably right, although it's not that simple to find a way out... What about this?
ALT0b: ... that in September 2023, a New York Times report publicly confirmed the detention of Johan Floderus in
Iran after a year-and-a-half since his arrest?
P.S. I must address I'm not a native English speaker, so sorry in advance if I'm articulating myself strangely...
Oltrepier (
talk) 10:27, 28 September 2023 (UTC)
That's essentially there, but "that in September 2023, a New York Times report publicly confirmed the detention of Johan Floderus in
Iran a year-and-a-half after his arrest?" is more idiomatic. As reviewer, I'm not supposed to propose ALT versions.
Johnbod (
talk) 03:37, 29 September 2023 (UTC)
@
Johnbod: That's fine, I can tweak it even further, and then we should be fine:
ALT0c: ... that in September 2023, The New York Times publicly confirmed the detention of Johan Floderus in
Iran a year-and-a-half after his arrest?
Oltrepier (
talk) 20:07, 29 September 2023 (UTC)
Yes, GTG, with ALT1 or, probably better, ALT0cJohnbod (
talk) 20:27, 29 September 2023 (UTC)
The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as
this nomination's talk page,
the article's talk page or
Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
... that the arrest and incarceration of Johan Floderus in
Iran was first revealed by a New York Times report in September 2023? Source:
Original article from The New York Times;
Re-adapted from Il Post: "Since April 2022, Iran detains a 33-year-old Swedish diplomat who works as an EU official in a Tehran prison. The news surfaced on Monday, at a year-and-a-half since his arrest, thanks to a New York Times article."
Comment: Clearly, I want this nomination to be intended as a way to raise awareness about the diplomat's current case, rather than an attempt to "bank in" on the news. I hope the article and the hooks are all correct and accurate enough: moreover, I'm hoping to get my own QPQ review over the line as soon as possible.
Comment On a side note, like I already explained
elsewhere, I've inserted the "(diplomat)" specification to the article's title because, while working on it as a draft, I had realized there was
an eponymous philologist and priest who was also registered on Wikidata, so I wanted to avoid confusion.
Oltrepier (
talk) 14:35, 11 September 2023 (UTC)
Article is new & long enough, & seems well-written & neutral. I'm a bit dubious about the first hook - what the NYT did was to identify him. The Swedish government had announced that an unnamed man was detained a year earlier. Maybe refactor. Alt hook is ok. Earwig finds nothing.
Johnbod (
talk) 00:44, 28 September 2023 (UTC)
@
Johnbod: You're probably right, although it's not that simple to find a way out... What about this?
ALT0b: ... that in September 2023, a New York Times report publicly confirmed the detention of Johan Floderus in
Iran after a year-and-a-half since his arrest?
P.S. I must address I'm not a native English speaker, so sorry in advance if I'm articulating myself strangely...
Oltrepier (
talk) 10:27, 28 September 2023 (UTC)
That's essentially there, but "that in September 2023, a New York Times report publicly confirmed the detention of Johan Floderus in
Iran a year-and-a-half after his arrest?" is more idiomatic. As reviewer, I'm not supposed to propose ALT versions.
Johnbod (
talk) 03:37, 29 September 2023 (UTC)
@
Johnbod: That's fine, I can tweak it even further, and then we should be fine:
ALT0c: ... that in September 2023, The New York Times publicly confirmed the detention of Johan Floderus in
Iran a year-and-a-half after his arrest?
Oltrepier (
talk) 20:07, 29 September 2023 (UTC)
Yes, GTG, with ALT1 or, probably better, ALT0cJohnbod (
talk) 20:27, 29 September 2023 (UTC)