The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as
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The result was: promoted by
97198 (
talk) 04:49, 13 September 2020 (UTC)
Created by
Binksternet (
talk). Self-nominated at 05:33, 30 August 2020 (UTC).
New enough, long enough, neutrally written, well referenced, no close paraphrasing seen. QPQ done.
Please link the films in the Filmography section.
You did a lot of research here, and it shows. But I was expecting something totally different after reading the hook; I thought Joni Mitchell was donating her time to a halfway house or something. If you would like to use this hook angle, please rewrite it; maybe put the bolded subject first. Alternatively, you have a lot of good detail to fashion a hook from in the article. Thanks,
Yoninah (
talk) 15:25, 7 September 2020 (UTC)
ALT1:... that music critic Jacoba Atlas reviewed many concerts including a "disastrous appearance" by
Joe Cocker? Atlas wrote, " Joe Cocker opened and closed at the Roxy Theatre and hopefully the talent that delighted so many people a few years back won't be thoroughly buried by this disastrous appearance."
[1]
Here are three more hooks,
Yoninah... Let's see how these work. I added refs and one wikilink to the filmography, along with some other minor expansion.
Binksternet (
talk) 17:57, 7 September 2020 (UTC)
Thank you. ALT1 has potential, though I don't see source verification for "many concerts"; each group of performers that she interviewed ends with a citation to the last one. I guess you could get around it by writing:
ALT1a: ... that among rock critic Jacoba Atlas's many concert reviews was a "disastrous appearance" by
Joe Cocker?
I would also change music critic to rock critic.
Yoninah (
talk) 18:17, 7 September 2020 (UTC)
Let's do it – 1a. Good stuff!
Binksternet (
talk) 19:00, 7 September 2020 (UTC)
Thank you. ALT1a hook ref verified and cited inline. ALT1a good to go.
Yoninah (
talk) 20:21, 7 September 2020 (UTC)
The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as
this nomination's talk page,
the article's talk page or
Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by
97198 (
talk) 04:49, 13 September 2020 (UTC)
Created by
Binksternet (
talk). Self-nominated at 05:33, 30 August 2020 (UTC).
New enough, long enough, neutrally written, well referenced, no close paraphrasing seen. QPQ done.
Please link the films in the Filmography section.
You did a lot of research here, and it shows. But I was expecting something totally different after reading the hook; I thought Joni Mitchell was donating her time to a halfway house or something. If you would like to use this hook angle, please rewrite it; maybe put the bolded subject first. Alternatively, you have a lot of good detail to fashion a hook from in the article. Thanks,
Yoninah (
talk) 15:25, 7 September 2020 (UTC)
ALT1:... that music critic Jacoba Atlas reviewed many concerts including a "disastrous appearance" by
Joe Cocker? Atlas wrote, " Joe Cocker opened and closed at the Roxy Theatre and hopefully the talent that delighted so many people a few years back won't be thoroughly buried by this disastrous appearance."
[1]
Here are three more hooks,
Yoninah... Let's see how these work. I added refs and one wikilink to the filmography, along with some other minor expansion.
Binksternet (
talk) 17:57, 7 September 2020 (UTC)
Thank you. ALT1 has potential, though I don't see source verification for "many concerts"; each group of performers that she interviewed ends with a citation to the last one. I guess you could get around it by writing:
ALT1a: ... that among rock critic Jacoba Atlas's many concert reviews was a "disastrous appearance" by
Joe Cocker?
I would also change music critic to rock critic.
Yoninah (
talk) 18:17, 7 September 2020 (UTC)
Let's do it – 1a. Good stuff!
Binksternet (
talk) 19:00, 7 September 2020 (UTC)
Thank you. ALT1a hook ref verified and cited inline. ALT1a good to go.
Yoninah (
talk) 20:21, 7 September 2020 (UTC)