The result was: promoted by
Jack Frost (
talk) 01:13, 28 February 2021 (UTC)
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Moved to mainspace by Elliot321 ( talk) and P9schink ( talk). Nominated by Elliot321 ( talk) at 18:40, 3 February 2021 (UTC).
Hi
Elliot321, here is my review. The nominated article meets the criteria for being new enough and long enough, seems NPOV, is very well sourced. I personally think ALT1 is more interesting than the first hook, but the current wording doesn't make the meaning quite as clear as it could be. Firstly, "his election" doesn't tell you what position of authority Savit had to make that change, and I'm not sure about "ended cash bail", either. I suggest:
Let me know whether you are happy with ALT2 or propose further changes. Also, before I approve, this sentence was taken verbatim from source and need to be reworded - "He graduated from Kalamazoo College, where he was voted senior class commencement speaker." Rcsprinter123 (sing) 21:40, 19 February 2021 (UTC)
The result was: promoted by
Jack Frost (
talk) 01:13, 28 February 2021 (UTC)
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Moved to mainspace by Elliot321 ( talk) and P9schink ( talk). Nominated by Elliot321 ( talk) at 18:40, 3 February 2021 (UTC).
Hi
Elliot321, here is my review. The nominated article meets the criteria for being new enough and long enough, seems NPOV, is very well sourced. I personally think ALT1 is more interesting than the first hook, but the current wording doesn't make the meaning quite as clear as it could be. Firstly, "his election" doesn't tell you what position of authority Savit had to make that change, and I'm not sure about "ended cash bail", either. I suggest:
Let me know whether you are happy with ALT2 or propose further changes. Also, before I approve, this sentence was taken verbatim from source and need to be reworded - "He graduated from Kalamazoo College, where he was voted senior class commencement speaker." Rcsprinter123 (sing) 21:40, 19 February 2021 (UTC)