The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as
this nomination's talk page,
the article's talk page or
Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by
BorgQueen (
talk) 00:41, 18 April 2023 (UTC)
Comment. It wasn't the game that entered
administration, rather, it was the publisher RTL Games that did so.
Mindmatrix 16:34, 25 February 2023 (UTC)
@
MB190417: Article is new enough. Not quite long enough though - the
before version is 1458 chars, and it's currently around 4,230 (2.9x expansion, 7290 is the target). Possible additions: the Dragon's Den story, and the irony of her success after, might be expandable and interesting; a Reception section might be useful if possible; perhaps briefly describe some elements of gameplay variations in the most notable editions. Otherwise well written (I did small copyedits) and cited - the Amazon links seem fine, though
WP:RSPAMAZON suggests just citing the product itself. No QPQ needed; first nomination. As implied above, new suggestions for hooks are welcome.
Hameltion (
talk |
contribs) 03:58, 3 March 2023 (UTC)
Hi
Hameltion, thank you so much for your review and helpful copyedits to the article. I'm very sorry not to have checked the expansion rate: that was silly of me; I had assumed I had easily expanded by 5x! The article should now meet eligibility at 7362 B (
diff from your review), though further copyediting may be welcomed.
I've added further information across the history section, as well as a new paragraph on gameplay variations as you suggested. Unfortunately, I couldn't find much by way of a section on Reception, with surprisingly few comments in local newspapers that might have been expected to report on the launches of local editions (there were probably more sources 10 years ago when new versions of the game were being released, so I feel like we are constrained to a smaller pool!).
I wasn't sure how to interpret
WP:RSPAMAZON for a board game, seeing as the guidance seems to have in mind printed sources such as books rather than products; for disclosure, I've cited Amazon as a source in the new paragraph on gameplay variations, specifically using information from the image of the gameplay manual for Destination Hogwarts. But I think this is still in-keeping with the spirit of
WP:RSPAMAZON.
Once again, thank you so much for your review and copyedits, and I am sorry not to have been careful to check the expansion rate! _MB190417_ (
talk)
@
MB190417: No worries. Size approx. 7350+ now, the added material all looks good. Last thing basically is to propose one or more alternative hooks for me to sign off on.
Hameltion (
talk |
contribs) 23:46, 3 March 2023 (UTC)
Great, thanks! Here are a few:
ALT1: ... that the publisher of Destination, a bestselling taxi-based board game, entered administration after the film release of
Harry Potter and the Half-Blood Prince was delayed by eight months?
ALT2: ... that Destination became
Hamleys' bestselling board game three months after its investment pitch was rejected on television?
ALT3: ... that a
BBC investigation on bank irresponsibility changed the fate of Destination, a bestselling taxi-inspired board game? _MB190417_ (
talk) 01:56, 10 March 2023 (UTC)
Thanks. These are better, but want something snappier (either revision or new). Also, in ALT1 it's not clear that the delay caused the legal action, and "administration" is not familiar in the US; ALT2 is smart but it seems the episode
aired after the game came out, so maybe reword but keep the meaning; and ALT3 is fairly vague ("changed the fate").
Hameltion (
talk |
contribs) 02:12, 10 March 2023 (UTC)
My deepest apologies,
Hameltion; I'm afraid I missed your updates and have been away-from-desk for a while. Thank you for your kind reply and continued help; here are some revised hooks:
The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as
this nomination's talk page,
the article's talk page or
Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by
BorgQueen (
talk) 00:41, 18 April 2023 (UTC)
Comment. It wasn't the game that entered
administration, rather, it was the publisher RTL Games that did so.
Mindmatrix 16:34, 25 February 2023 (UTC)
@
MB190417: Article is new enough. Not quite long enough though - the
before version is 1458 chars, and it's currently around 4,230 (2.9x expansion, 7290 is the target). Possible additions: the Dragon's Den story, and the irony of her success after, might be expandable and interesting; a Reception section might be useful if possible; perhaps briefly describe some elements of gameplay variations in the most notable editions. Otherwise well written (I did small copyedits) and cited - the Amazon links seem fine, though
WP:RSPAMAZON suggests just citing the product itself. No QPQ needed; first nomination. As implied above, new suggestions for hooks are welcome.
Hameltion (
talk |
contribs) 03:58, 3 March 2023 (UTC)
Hi
Hameltion, thank you so much for your review and helpful copyedits to the article. I'm very sorry not to have checked the expansion rate: that was silly of me; I had assumed I had easily expanded by 5x! The article should now meet eligibility at 7362 B (
diff from your review), though further copyediting may be welcomed.
I've added further information across the history section, as well as a new paragraph on gameplay variations as you suggested. Unfortunately, I couldn't find much by way of a section on Reception, with surprisingly few comments in local newspapers that might have been expected to report on the launches of local editions (there were probably more sources 10 years ago when new versions of the game were being released, so I feel like we are constrained to a smaller pool!).
I wasn't sure how to interpret
WP:RSPAMAZON for a board game, seeing as the guidance seems to have in mind printed sources such as books rather than products; for disclosure, I've cited Amazon as a source in the new paragraph on gameplay variations, specifically using information from the image of the gameplay manual for Destination Hogwarts. But I think this is still in-keeping with the spirit of
WP:RSPAMAZON.
Once again, thank you so much for your review and copyedits, and I am sorry not to have been careful to check the expansion rate! _MB190417_ (
talk)
@
MB190417: No worries. Size approx. 7350+ now, the added material all looks good. Last thing basically is to propose one or more alternative hooks for me to sign off on.
Hameltion (
talk |
contribs) 23:46, 3 March 2023 (UTC)
Great, thanks! Here are a few:
ALT1: ... that the publisher of Destination, a bestselling taxi-based board game, entered administration after the film release of
Harry Potter and the Half-Blood Prince was delayed by eight months?
ALT2: ... that Destination became
Hamleys' bestselling board game three months after its investment pitch was rejected on television?
ALT3: ... that a
BBC investigation on bank irresponsibility changed the fate of Destination, a bestselling taxi-inspired board game? _MB190417_ (
talk) 01:56, 10 March 2023 (UTC)
Thanks. These are better, but want something snappier (either revision or new). Also, in ALT1 it's not clear that the delay caused the legal action, and "administration" is not familiar in the US; ALT2 is smart but it seems the episode
aired after the game came out, so maybe reword but keep the meaning; and ALT3 is fairly vague ("changed the fate").
Hameltion (
talk |
contribs) 02:12, 10 March 2023 (UTC)
My deepest apologies,
Hameltion; I'm afraid I missed your updates and have been away-from-desk for a while. Thank you for your kind reply and continued help; here are some revised hooks: