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template for reference page numbers for each time you cite that work. For example, I gave up looking for that part of the source that supports Coelopa have been shown to maintain a 40 °C (104 °F) environment despite snow and ice on the beach they inhabit.and it is sufficiently vaguely-worded that it might mean they remain inside rotting vegetation (which stays warm) or that they can magically fly out into the snow, whilst still maintaining an incredibly high temperature in their bodies. This is going to need better clarification. And
C. pilipes lives in washed-up kelp on beaches before adulthood and can recycle decaying kelp by consuming it.also sounds odd - almost as if they're doing the beach authorities a favour by recycling litter for them, rather than actually utilising decaying kelp as a food source, which I'm sure is precisely what you intended!
"Other reported locations for C. pilipes residence include North Africa[8] and Australia, a more significant location."seems rather confusing. Could this be better worded?
Females lay eggs singly, as does Drosophila melanogaster.- what is the relevance of this statement? Why mention Drosophila at all? I would also point out that Fucus and Laminaria aren't seaweed varieties - they're genera, containing a number of species, so I'd avoid the term 'varieties' if you can. Overall, I feel a subtle reworking of the English will be needed right through this article if it is to proceed. Sorry to be a grinch - but these things can all be fixed with a little bit of tender reworking of sentence construction and careful consideration of what you're trying to say. Regards, Nick Moyes ( talk) 02:01, 4 November 2019 (UTC)
The result was: promoted by
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Created by Steelwull ( talk). Self-nominated at 15:12, 1 November 2019 (UTC).
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template for reference page numbers for each time you cite that work. For example, I gave up looking for that part of the source that supports Coelopa have been shown to maintain a 40 °C (104 °F) environment despite snow and ice on the beach they inhabit.and it is sufficiently vaguely-worded that it might mean they remain inside rotting vegetation (which stays warm) or that they can magically fly out into the snow, whilst still maintaining an incredibly high temperature in their bodies. This is going to need better clarification. And
C. pilipes lives in washed-up kelp on beaches before adulthood and can recycle decaying kelp by consuming it.also sounds odd - almost as if they're doing the beach authorities a favour by recycling litter for them, rather than actually utilising decaying kelp as a food source, which I'm sure is precisely what you intended!
"Other reported locations for C. pilipes residence include North Africa[8] and Australia, a more significant location."seems rather confusing. Could this be better worded?
Females lay eggs singly, as does Drosophila melanogaster.- what is the relevance of this statement? Why mention Drosophila at all? I would also point out that Fucus and Laminaria aren't seaweed varieties - they're genera, containing a number of species, so I'd avoid the term 'varieties' if you can. Overall, I feel a subtle reworking of the English will be needed right through this article if it is to proceed. Sorry to be a grinch - but these things can all be fixed with a little bit of tender reworking of sentence construction and careful consideration of what you're trying to say. Regards, Nick Moyes ( talk) 02:01, 4 November 2019 (UTC)