The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as
this nomination's talk page,
the article's talk page or
Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by
Cwmhiraeth (
talk) 06:25, 12 March 2019 (UTC)
Overall: Article created on January 21 and nominated the following day, therefor new enough. Length is adequate, and tone is neutral. No plagiarism issures detected. QPQ is not required since the nominator has only four credits. In that appointments section, a citation needs to appear at the end of the first paragraph. The citation for ALT1
above does not appear in the article. It should be added. Overall, article is well written and will pass with a couple minor changes.
Flibirigit (
talk) 16:07, 9 February 2019 (UTC)
Hey
Flibirigit, I added the two citations you requested (18 and 8 respectively). Thanks,
Toreightyone (
talk) 17:35, 9 February 2019 (UTC)
Great, thanks. Review approved with no preference of hook.
Flibirigit (
talk) 18:11, 9 February 2019 (UTC)
Returned from prep. Several new hooks
were suggested at WT:DYK but calling it a "cream" is not mentioned in the article. To avoid the claim of advertising, I suggest crafting a new hook.
Yoninah (
talk) 13:38, 13 February 2019 (UTC)
@
Toreightyone: Let's work on this here, and come up with some stronger hooks. Please look into incorporating the word "cream" into the article where it is applicable, and suggest a hook for shea butter cream. Also, some ideas for hooks were suggested. Please consider using the following themes:
immigrant and business entrepreneur (multiple possibilites here)
only child of 19 to go to school
the program was to promote STEM studies
reword ALT1 to be a bit less on definining Forum Afrique Expansion, and more about its goals.
I am open to other ideas as well. Thanks!
Flibirigit (
talk) 15:01, 13 February 2019 (UTC)
I got a few hooks that could work, --
Toreightyone (
talk) 18:17, 13 February 2019 (UTC)
ALT4: ...that Amina Gerba's (pictured) beauty-care companies hire and give a portion of profits to the 2,000 women of the Songtaaba Cooperative in
Burkina Faso?
I have made a slight tweak to ALT1 to make it flow better. ALT5 would not be appealing since it's a list of names without much context. ALT2 is not bad, but the word "created" does not appear in the sources, whereas "manufactures" does. ALT3 is suitable for a quirkly slot, but I would prefer the photo slot. I'm happy with ALT4. Before I approve, I want to offer you a chance to make any changes.
Flibirigit (
talk) 19:26, 13 February 2019 (UTC)
Sounds good to me! Thanks,
Toreightyone (
talk) 21:31, 13 February 2019 (UTC)
@
Toreightyone:, we need to rework this sentence in the article: "Kariderm (sold under Flash Beauté Inc., also founded by Gerba) is made with
shea butter and is the first of its kind to obtain
organic certification by
ECOCERT." It needs to sound more like ALT2 with manufactured, instead of created. I really prefer ALT2, but I cannot go ahead with it until the change.
Flibirigit (
talk) 04:28, 14 February 2019 (UTC)
Maybe: Gerba's company Flash Beauté Incorporated manufactures Kariderm, a skin care product made with
shea butter, and the first of its kind to obtain
organic certification by
ECOCERT." Does that seem accurate, as per this
Source?
Flibirigit (
talk) 04:31, 14 February 2019 (UTC)
We're good to go now with ALT1, ALT2, ALT3 & ALT4.
Flibirigit (
talk) 16:05, 14 February 2019 (UTC)
Thanks for taking this on,
Flibirigit. ALT4 is a great hook. The promotion will have to wait a few days so we won't have too many people images in a row.
Yoninah (
talk) 22:05, 14 February 2019 (UTC)
I notice that her birthday is March 14th. I think that would be an extra special occasion request considering Women's History month.
Flibirigit (
talk) 22:20, 14 February 2019 (UTC)
@
Yoninah and
Toreightyone: how do you feel about a March 14th special occasion request?
Flibirigit (
talk) 22:28, 14 February 2019 (UTC)
Great idea.
Yoninah (
talk) 22:29, 14 February 2019 (UTC)
Sure thing, whichever is more convenient! Thanks,
Toreightyone (
talk) 11:50, 15 February 2019 (UTC)
The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as
this nomination's talk page,
the article's talk page or
Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by
Cwmhiraeth (
talk) 06:25, 12 March 2019 (UTC)
Overall: Article created on January 21 and nominated the following day, therefor new enough. Length is adequate, and tone is neutral. No plagiarism issures detected. QPQ is not required since the nominator has only four credits. In that appointments section, a citation needs to appear at the end of the first paragraph. The citation for ALT1
above does not appear in the article. It should be added. Overall, article is well written and will pass with a couple minor changes.
Flibirigit (
talk) 16:07, 9 February 2019 (UTC)
Hey
Flibirigit, I added the two citations you requested (18 and 8 respectively). Thanks,
Toreightyone (
talk) 17:35, 9 February 2019 (UTC)
Great, thanks. Review approved with no preference of hook.
Flibirigit (
talk) 18:11, 9 February 2019 (UTC)
Returned from prep. Several new hooks
were suggested at WT:DYK but calling it a "cream" is not mentioned in the article. To avoid the claim of advertising, I suggest crafting a new hook.
Yoninah (
talk) 13:38, 13 February 2019 (UTC)
@
Toreightyone: Let's work on this here, and come up with some stronger hooks. Please look into incorporating the word "cream" into the article where it is applicable, and suggest a hook for shea butter cream. Also, some ideas for hooks were suggested. Please consider using the following themes:
immigrant and business entrepreneur (multiple possibilites here)
only child of 19 to go to school
the program was to promote STEM studies
reword ALT1 to be a bit less on definining Forum Afrique Expansion, and more about its goals.
I am open to other ideas as well. Thanks!
Flibirigit (
talk) 15:01, 13 February 2019 (UTC)
I got a few hooks that could work, --
Toreightyone (
talk) 18:17, 13 February 2019 (UTC)
ALT4: ...that Amina Gerba's (pictured) beauty-care companies hire and give a portion of profits to the 2,000 women of the Songtaaba Cooperative in
Burkina Faso?
I have made a slight tweak to ALT1 to make it flow better. ALT5 would not be appealing since it's a list of names without much context. ALT2 is not bad, but the word "created" does not appear in the sources, whereas "manufactures" does. ALT3 is suitable for a quirkly slot, but I would prefer the photo slot. I'm happy with ALT4. Before I approve, I want to offer you a chance to make any changes.
Flibirigit (
talk) 19:26, 13 February 2019 (UTC)
Sounds good to me! Thanks,
Toreightyone (
talk) 21:31, 13 February 2019 (UTC)
@
Toreightyone:, we need to rework this sentence in the article: "Kariderm (sold under Flash Beauté Inc., also founded by Gerba) is made with
shea butter and is the first of its kind to obtain
organic certification by
ECOCERT." It needs to sound more like ALT2 with manufactured, instead of created. I really prefer ALT2, but I cannot go ahead with it until the change.
Flibirigit (
talk) 04:28, 14 February 2019 (UTC)
Maybe: Gerba's company Flash Beauté Incorporated manufactures Kariderm, a skin care product made with
shea butter, and the first of its kind to obtain
organic certification by
ECOCERT." Does that seem accurate, as per this
Source?
Flibirigit (
talk) 04:31, 14 February 2019 (UTC)
We're good to go now with ALT1, ALT2, ALT3 & ALT4.
Flibirigit (
talk) 16:05, 14 February 2019 (UTC)
Thanks for taking this on,
Flibirigit. ALT4 is a great hook. The promotion will have to wait a few days so we won't have too many people images in a row.
Yoninah (
talk) 22:05, 14 February 2019 (UTC)
I notice that her birthday is March 14th. I think that would be an extra special occasion request considering Women's History month.
Flibirigit (
talk) 22:20, 14 February 2019 (UTC)
@
Yoninah and
Toreightyone: how do you feel about a March 14th special occasion request?
Flibirigit (
talk) 22:28, 14 February 2019 (UTC)
Great idea.
Yoninah (
talk) 22:29, 14 February 2019 (UTC)
Sure thing, whichever is more convenient! Thanks,
Toreightyone (
talk) 11:50, 15 February 2019 (UTC)