USS Omaha (CL-4) has been listed as one of the
Warfare good articles under the
good article criteria. If you can improve it further,
please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can
reassess it. Review: August 31, 2017. ( Reviewed version). |
This is the
talk page for discussing improvements to the
USS Omaha (CL-4) article. This is not a forum for general discussion of the article's subject. |
Article policies
|
Find sources: Google ( books · news · scholar · free images · WP refs) · FENS · JSTOR · TWL |
A fact from USS Omaha (CL-4) appeared on Wikipedia's
Main Page in the
Did you know column on 22 September 2017 (
check views). The text of the entry was as follows:
|
This article is rated GA-class on Wikipedia's
content assessment scale. It is of interest to the following WikiProjects: | ||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||
|
Hello fellow Wikipedians,
I have just added archive links to one external link on
USS Omaha (CL-4). Please take a moment to review
my edit. If necessary, add {{
cbignore}}
after the link to keep me from modifying it. Alternatively, you can add {{
nobots|deny=InternetArchiveBot}}
to keep me off the page altogether. I made the following changes:
When you have finished reviewing my changes, please set the checked parameter below to true to let others know.
An editor has reviewed this edit and fixed any errors that were found.
Cheers.— cyberbot II Talk to my owner:Online 16:26, 11 February 2016 (UTC)
GA toolbox |
---|
Reviewing |
Reviewer: Parsecboy ( talk · contribs) 20:44, 1 August 2017 (UTC)
I'll take this for review.
Parsecboy (
talk) 20:44, 1 August 2017 (UTC)
A couple of initial impressions:
Will conduct a thorough read-through later. Parsecboy ( talk) 20:48, 1 August 2017 (UTC)
A few other comments:
Parsecboy ( talk) 12:21, 21 August 2017 (UTC)
I've just done a massive revert at USS Oglala (CM-4), then looked at another similar article with very poor tone, then at this one. It is awful, sorry. Too much detail, too biassed towards a US-centric tone and, more generally, just a poor tone. Things like the Hazards at sea section just make me wince.
These are major problems and the GAN should perhaps have speedily failed. - Sitush ( talk) 16:15, 23 August 2017 (UTC)
Random example: Omaha spotted a light on the horizon at 01:30, on 1 June 1942. The light, as it turned out, was from a small lifeboat with eight surviving crewmen aboard from the sunken British merchant Charlbury
As it turned out? Really? And does the precise time really matter? The entire paragraph needs rewriting and probably should start something like On 1 June 1942, Omaha spotted a small lifeboat carrying eight survivors from the sunken British merchant ship, Charlbury.
-
Sitush (
talk) 16:23, 23 August 2017 (UTC)
Or The ship identified herself as Willmoto, but did not satisfactorily identify herself to the American warships.
. We need to make our mind up - did it identify or not? -
Sitush (
talk) 16:51, 23 August 2017 (UTC)
If anyone is interested in the engines for this group a very detailed description, including diagrams, from a marine engineering point of view is available at: New Scout Cruisers of Immense Engine Power (Marine Engineering, v. 26, #2, February 1921 issue). Apparently the power to size ship ratio was notable at the time. 72.196.202.60 ( talk) 20:03, 4 November 2018 (UTC)
USS Omaha (CL-4) has been listed as one of the
Warfare good articles under the
good article criteria. If you can improve it further,
please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can
reassess it. Review: August 31, 2017. ( Reviewed version). |
This is the
talk page for discussing improvements to the
USS Omaha (CL-4) article. This is not a forum for general discussion of the article's subject. |
Article policies
|
Find sources: Google ( books · news · scholar · free images · WP refs) · FENS · JSTOR · TWL |
A fact from USS Omaha (CL-4) appeared on Wikipedia's
Main Page in the
Did you know column on 22 September 2017 (
check views). The text of the entry was as follows:
|
This article is rated GA-class on Wikipedia's
content assessment scale. It is of interest to the following WikiProjects: | ||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||
|
Hello fellow Wikipedians,
I have just added archive links to one external link on
USS Omaha (CL-4). Please take a moment to review
my edit. If necessary, add {{
cbignore}}
after the link to keep me from modifying it. Alternatively, you can add {{
nobots|deny=InternetArchiveBot}}
to keep me off the page altogether. I made the following changes:
When you have finished reviewing my changes, please set the checked parameter below to true to let others know.
An editor has reviewed this edit and fixed any errors that were found.
Cheers.— cyberbot II Talk to my owner:Online 16:26, 11 February 2016 (UTC)
GA toolbox |
---|
Reviewing |
Reviewer: Parsecboy ( talk · contribs) 20:44, 1 August 2017 (UTC)
I'll take this for review.
Parsecboy (
talk) 20:44, 1 August 2017 (UTC)
A couple of initial impressions:
Will conduct a thorough read-through later. Parsecboy ( talk) 20:48, 1 August 2017 (UTC)
A few other comments:
Parsecboy ( talk) 12:21, 21 August 2017 (UTC)
I've just done a massive revert at USS Oglala (CM-4), then looked at another similar article with very poor tone, then at this one. It is awful, sorry. Too much detail, too biassed towards a US-centric tone and, more generally, just a poor tone. Things like the Hazards at sea section just make me wince.
These are major problems and the GAN should perhaps have speedily failed. - Sitush ( talk) 16:15, 23 August 2017 (UTC)
Random example: Omaha spotted a light on the horizon at 01:30, on 1 June 1942. The light, as it turned out, was from a small lifeboat with eight surviving crewmen aboard from the sunken British merchant Charlbury
As it turned out? Really? And does the precise time really matter? The entire paragraph needs rewriting and probably should start something like On 1 June 1942, Omaha spotted a small lifeboat carrying eight survivors from the sunken British merchant ship, Charlbury.
-
Sitush (
talk) 16:23, 23 August 2017 (UTC)
Or The ship identified herself as Willmoto, but did not satisfactorily identify herself to the American warships.
. We need to make our mind up - did it identify or not? -
Sitush (
talk) 16:51, 23 August 2017 (UTC)
If anyone is interested in the engines for this group a very detailed description, including diagrams, from a marine engineering point of view is available at: New Scout Cruisers of Immense Engine Power (Marine Engineering, v. 26, #2, February 1921 issue). Apparently the power to size ship ratio was notable at the time. 72.196.202.60 ( talk) 20:03, 4 November 2018 (UTC)