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Rad! I'll get to it once all points are listed.
Krisgabwoosh (
talk) 15:42, 14 June 2022 (UTC)reply
There are still things that I haven't gone through yet, I'll try to finish them tomorrow.
Vacant0 (
talk) 21:32, 14 June 2022 (UTC)reply
@
Krisgabwoosh: I'm putting this on hold until these issues get fixed. I've gave it a good read, good job.
Vacant0 (
talk) 13:20, 15 June 2022 (UTC)reply
Thanks! I'll get to it right away.
Krisgabwoosh (
talk) 18:26, 15 June 2022 (UTC)reply
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Comments
General
Infobox: consider adding a caption → eg. Official portrait, 2004
I'm not a fan of adding "person in year" captions like that as they feel like clutter. It's also not really the official portrait, so I'm not sure if that'd be accurate. If you still feel that a caption is absolutely necessary, I'd be obliged to add one nonetheless.
Krisgabwoosh (
talk) 18:48, 15 June 2022 (UTC)reply
It's totally alright, captions are not necessary!
Vacant0 (
talk) 13:15, 16 June 2022 (UTC)reply
Journalistic career: "the group secured a small space on the fifth floor of the La Paz House of Culture from which to start their film archive" → "the group secured a small amount of space on the fifth floor of the La Paz House of Culture in order to start their film archive"
"The first addition to the collection was a short film directed by Jorge Ruiz Laredo about the violinist Jaime Laredo donated by the pianist Raúl Barragán" → "The first addition to the collection was a short film directed by Jorge Ruiz Laredo about the violinist Jaime Laredo, which was donated by the pianist Raúl Barragán"
Add "journalism" besides opinion and link it to
opinion journalism in the "The pair's presentational style evolved from simple news coverage to commentary and analysis and, finally, opinion" sentence.
Vice presidency (2002–2003): "In addition to Cajías, it was composed of a "petite cabinet" made up José Galindo, Jorge Cortés, and Alfonso Ferrufino" → "In addition to Cajías, it was composed of a "petite cabinet", consisting of José Galindo, Jorge Cortés, and Alfonso Ferrufino."
Presidency (2003–2005): I've noticed that Bs (Boliviano) appears throughout the article, although in the Journalistic career section, I've also seen b$, is b$ a typo or a different currency?
The current currency in Bolivia is the
boliviano (Bs). However, in the context of 1985, Bolivia was using the
peso (b$) which was discontinued the following year precisely due to the hyperinflation mentioned.
WP:CURRENCY says to "link the first occurrence of lesser-known currencies" so I've done that for the peso. Should I also do it for the Boliviano?
Krisgabwoosh (
talk) 18:48, 15 June 2022 (UTC)reply
Yes, that would be good.
Vacant0 (
talk) 13:17, 16 June 2022 (UTC)reply
Return to politics (2018–present): typo, "In the elections of 18 October, these factors contributed to the victory of the MAS and its candidate Luis Arce in the first round..", two dots appear at the end of the sentence
"modern liberal conservatism" is unsourced, including on MNR's page.
Should I add a citation on the MNR's page?
Krisgabwoosh (
talk) 18:48, 15 June 2022 (UTC)reply
If there are any, then yes.
Vacant0 (
talk) 13:20, 16 June 2022 (UTC)reply
If I shortened "liberal conservatism" to just "conservatism", would it still require the citation?
Krisgabwoosh (
talk) 20:06, 16 June 2022 (UTC)reply
Yes, since I don't see it to be sourced on this or MNR's page.
Vacant0 (
talk) 20:18, 16 June 2022 (UTC)reply
I've found one for you:
1, although it's from 1988. You can instead replace it with "centre-right":
1,
2Vacant0 (
talk) 20:21, 16 June 2022 (UTC)reply
"Though Mesa's moderate left-wing sympathies contrasted with centre-right policies of the MNR" for example
Vacant0 (
talk) 20:22, 16 June 2022 (UTC)reply
Thanks for the effort! I'll do just that.
Krisgabwoosh (
talk) 04:29, 17 June 2022 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
Rad! I'll get to it once all points are listed.
Krisgabwoosh (
talk) 15:42, 14 June 2022 (UTC)reply
There are still things that I haven't gone through yet, I'll try to finish them tomorrow.
Vacant0 (
talk) 21:32, 14 June 2022 (UTC)reply
@
Krisgabwoosh: I'm putting this on hold until these issues get fixed. I've gave it a good read, good job.
Vacant0 (
talk) 13:20, 15 June 2022 (UTC)reply
Thanks! I'll get to it right away.
Krisgabwoosh (
talk) 18:26, 15 June 2022 (UTC)reply
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the
Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed
Comments
General
Infobox: consider adding a caption → eg. Official portrait, 2004
I'm not a fan of adding "person in year" captions like that as they feel like clutter. It's also not really the official portrait, so I'm not sure if that'd be accurate. If you still feel that a caption is absolutely necessary, I'd be obliged to add one nonetheless.
Krisgabwoosh (
talk) 18:48, 15 June 2022 (UTC)reply
It's totally alright, captions are not necessary!
Vacant0 (
talk) 13:15, 16 June 2022 (UTC)reply
Journalistic career: "the group secured a small space on the fifth floor of the La Paz House of Culture from which to start their film archive" → "the group secured a small amount of space on the fifth floor of the La Paz House of Culture in order to start their film archive"
"The first addition to the collection was a short film directed by Jorge Ruiz Laredo about the violinist Jaime Laredo donated by the pianist Raúl Barragán" → "The first addition to the collection was a short film directed by Jorge Ruiz Laredo about the violinist Jaime Laredo, which was donated by the pianist Raúl Barragán"
Add "journalism" besides opinion and link it to
opinion journalism in the "The pair's presentational style evolved from simple news coverage to commentary and analysis and, finally, opinion" sentence.
Vice presidency (2002–2003): "In addition to Cajías, it was composed of a "petite cabinet" made up José Galindo, Jorge Cortés, and Alfonso Ferrufino" → "In addition to Cajías, it was composed of a "petite cabinet", consisting of José Galindo, Jorge Cortés, and Alfonso Ferrufino."
Presidency (2003–2005): I've noticed that Bs (Boliviano) appears throughout the article, although in the Journalistic career section, I've also seen b$, is b$ a typo or a different currency?
The current currency in Bolivia is the
boliviano (Bs). However, in the context of 1985, Bolivia was using the
peso (b$) which was discontinued the following year precisely due to the hyperinflation mentioned.
WP:CURRENCY says to "link the first occurrence of lesser-known currencies" so I've done that for the peso. Should I also do it for the Boliviano?
Krisgabwoosh (
talk) 18:48, 15 June 2022 (UTC)reply
Yes, that would be good.
Vacant0 (
talk) 13:17, 16 June 2022 (UTC)reply
Return to politics (2018–present): typo, "In the elections of 18 October, these factors contributed to the victory of the MAS and its candidate Luis Arce in the first round..", two dots appear at the end of the sentence
"modern liberal conservatism" is unsourced, including on MNR's page.
Should I add a citation on the MNR's page?
Krisgabwoosh (
talk) 18:48, 15 June 2022 (UTC)reply
If there are any, then yes.
Vacant0 (
talk) 13:20, 16 June 2022 (UTC)reply
If I shortened "liberal conservatism" to just "conservatism", would it still require the citation?
Krisgabwoosh (
talk) 20:06, 16 June 2022 (UTC)reply
Yes, since I don't see it to be sourced on this or MNR's page.
Vacant0 (
talk) 20:18, 16 June 2022 (UTC)reply
I've found one for you:
1, although it's from 1988. You can instead replace it with "centre-right":
1,
2Vacant0 (
talk) 20:21, 16 June 2022 (UTC)reply
"Though Mesa's moderate left-wing sympathies contrasted with centre-right policies of the MNR" for example
Vacant0 (
talk) 20:22, 16 June 2022 (UTC)reply
Thanks for the effort! I'll do just that.
Krisgabwoosh (
talk) 04:29, 17 June 2022 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.