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Nominator: BeanieFan11 ( talk · contribs) 22:49, 24 April 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 ( talk · contribs) 22:54, 24 April 2024 (UTC)
I'll review this tomorrow. « Gonzo fan2007
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American equipment manager? Would get ride of the consecutive linking and add in his ethnicity.
Noel attended Central Catholic High School in Wisconsin and while attending there enlisted in World War II at the age of 18.is a bit choppy. Maybe
Noel attended Central Catholic High School in Wisconsin; while still in high school, he enlisted in World War II at the age of 18.?
and a "lot of smaller things" needed by the team for each game-->
and a "lot of smaller things" needed for each game
as well as 30 balls for games-->
as well as 30 game balls
11 head coachesyou could link to List of Green Bay Packers head coaches
I don't know what in the hell I could've done more."[8]and
He served the team faithfully and well for a long time."[13]I think the period needs to go after the quotation mark
Looks good, putting on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 23:30, 25 April 2024 (UTC)
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Nominator: BeanieFan11 ( talk · contribs) 22:49, 24 April 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 ( talk · contribs) 22:54, 24 April 2024 (UTC)
I'll review this tomorrow. « Gonzo fan2007
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American equipment manager? Would get ride of the consecutive linking and add in his ethnicity.
Noel attended Central Catholic High School in Wisconsin and while attending there enlisted in World War II at the age of 18.is a bit choppy. Maybe
Noel attended Central Catholic High School in Wisconsin; while still in high school, he enlisted in World War II at the age of 18.?
and a "lot of smaller things" needed by the team for each game-->
and a "lot of smaller things" needed for each game
as well as 30 balls for games-->
as well as 30 game balls
11 head coachesyou could link to List of Green Bay Packers head coaches
I don't know what in the hell I could've done more."[8]and
He served the team faithfully and well for a long time."[13]I think the period needs to go after the quotation mark
Looks good, putting on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 23:30, 25 April 2024 (UTC)