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I'll review this, expect comments within a few days.--
AlexandraIDV 10:49, 29 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Infobox and lead
What's the reason for putting Goodby and Silverstein on the same row in the infobox but everyone else on their own?
When I first read this article, I did not realize what "It was later replaced by..." meant until getting to that part in the article body. I think being clear and saying something like "It was later taken down and replaced by" might be good.
Video
"Viewers can pick up elements" - if the ad is no longer available as an interactive thing, then this should be in past tense
Are there any sources you can cite for this section, considering the ad no longer exists in its interactive form (and thus can't really be used as a source for this)
Reception
This is one long paragraph - readability would be helped a lot by splitting it into two.
"acros" should be "across"
Images
The non-free use rationale calls the screenshot "cover art".
Other comments
Although not strictly necessary to meet the GA criteria, I would strongly suggest adding alt text to the image for accessibility reasons.
Does an official non-interactive video upload of this exist? If so, it would be helpful to add an external link to it.
Notes sections typically go before references, as footnotes (even if that is not the case here) themselves may contain references.
Not a lot of problems with this one! I'll put the review on hold for seven days - @ me when you have addressed the issues above, or if you have any questions.--
AlexandraIDV 14:51, 1 June 2020 (UTC)reply
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I'll review this, expect comments within a few days.--
AlexandraIDV 10:49, 29 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Infobox and lead
What's the reason for putting Goodby and Silverstein on the same row in the infobox but everyone else on their own?
When I first read this article, I did not realize what "It was later replaced by..." meant until getting to that part in the article body. I think being clear and saying something like "It was later taken down and replaced by" might be good.
Video
"Viewers can pick up elements" - if the ad is no longer available as an interactive thing, then this should be in past tense
Are there any sources you can cite for this section, considering the ad no longer exists in its interactive form (and thus can't really be used as a source for this)
Reception
This is one long paragraph - readability would be helped a lot by splitting it into two.
"acros" should be "across"
Images
The non-free use rationale calls the screenshot "cover art".
Other comments
Although not strictly necessary to meet the GA criteria, I would strongly suggest adding alt text to the image for accessibility reasons.
Does an official non-interactive video upload of this exist? If so, it would be helpful to add an external link to it.
Notes sections typically go before references, as footnotes (even if that is not the case here) themselves may contain references.
Not a lot of problems with this one! I'll put the review on hold for seven days - @ me when you have addressed the issues above, or if you have any questions.--
AlexandraIDV 14:51, 1 June 2020 (UTC)reply