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Done with the event. iMat thew 20 08 22:07, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
-- 13 of Diamonds ( talk) 21:36, 27 April 2008 (UTC)
Done with everything. iMat thew 20 08 10:35, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
This article is listed first on the Open Tasks lists, but it's been awhile since anyone's made any comments, and the first time this page has been opened, so I'll have at it, even though I know very little about wrestling. Please keep that in mind.
1. Unforgiven (2006) was the eight annual...
2. Edge had retained the WWE title against Cena at both Saturday Night's Main Event and SummerSlam.[6][7]
3. Forgive me, but I don't even understand the first paragraph, probably because I'm ignorant. For example, I don't know who Lita is and why she's important and why her throwing Cena's belt into the Long Island Sound is important. Are you trying to explain why the match happened, that it was due to these guys' rivalry? Perhaps that needs to be more clear, and perhaps you need to explain it so that someone dumb like me can understand it.
4. On the August 21, 2006 edition of Raw, as part of the storyline, DX vandalized Vince McMahon's personal jet plane, WWE headquarters, and McMahon's limousine.[9][13]
5. On the August 28, 2006 edition of Raw, The McMahons viciously attacked DX after their 3-on-2 handicap match with their SummerSlam opponents, Mr. Kennedy, Finlay and William Regal.[10] But before Vince and Shane proceeded to attack DX, Big Show attacked DX, giving the advantage to The McMahons.[10]
6. Moments after the assault,...
7. Melina, however, hit Hardy with her boot, giving the upper hand to Nitro as he pinned Hardy and retained the title.[19][20]
8. Kane performed a clothesline on Umaga...
9. back and forth action was seen by both teams.
10. ...as Mikey was able to pin Rory after a Facebuster, thus able to retain the World Tag Team Championship.[20][22]
11. gave the upper hand...
12. Back and forth action took place between the teams.
13. Stratus gained the early control, but Lita gained control after she threw Stratus from the top rope. Stratus won the match, after she locked in the Sharpshooter on Lita, who submitted to the move, giving the win to Stratus, who became Women's Champion for the last time.[23][24]
14. As the match came to a start, Carlito spat on Orton and momentarily was followed by a dropkick.
15. The match saw Cena sandwich Edge in a ladder, as he applied the STFU hold on Edge, to which Edge tapped out.
16. At one point, Cena began to climb the ladder, as he was moments away from retrieving the title, Lita, who interfered on behalf of Edge, tipped the ladder over, making Cena fall off the ladder and crash through a table at ringside.
17. What's an "FU"? Do I dare ask? ;) 18. Ah, now I see it, in the next paragraph. Be careful about your wikilinking; make sure that you link the first instance. 19. Thus ending the feud between the two.
20. The following week, Edge used an edition of The Cutting Edge to join forces with Randy Orton to form a team and began a feud against DX.
21. On the October 9, 2006 edition of Raw, where Kane and Umaga were scheduled in a "Loser Leaves Raw match", in which Umaga defeated Kane, sending Kane to the SmackDown! brand.[32][28] After being separated by different brands, Umaga and Kane had one final match at Cyber Sunday where Umaga again defeated Kane after fans selected him over Chris Benoit and The Sandman to be Umaga's opponent for the night.[33]
22. The angle between Johnny Nitro and Jeff Hardy continued, as the two were involved in another Intercontinental Championship match where Nitro retained the title.[30][34]
23. The following paragraph, about the Women's championship, needs a thorough copyedit. The wording is repetitive and the timeline it tries to describe is very unclear.
24. Cena, King Booker (SmackDown!'s World Heavyweight Champion), and Big Show (ECW's World Champion) engaged in a feud leading to a Triple Threat match at Cyber Sunday in November, with the viewers voting on which of the three championships would be placed on the line.[39]
25. At the same time, Cena became involved in a storyline with non-wrestler Kevin Federline when he began appearing on Raw with Johnny Nitro and Melina.
26. After getting into a worked physical altercation with Federline on Raw,[39] Federline appeared at Cyber Sunday to hit Cena with the World Heavyweight Title belt during the main event Triple Threat match, helping King Booker retain his title.[44]
I think that's it. Thanks for the opportunity; I now know so much more about professional wrestling than before! ;) -- Figureskatingfan ( talk) 04:36, 17 June 2008 (UTC)
The above review seems to have taken care of a lot of little issues. I really can't find any major faults with this ... a couple of places where something should be cited in addition to where it's been cited elsewhere, maybe, and that cutline on the DX guys which should be shortened. The information is already conveyed in the nearby text, and all it really needs to do is identify them at the event. Anytime your photo cutline's going on four lines or more, you either need to resize the image (not a good idea here) or tighten the cutline up.
Otherwise, it's well-written (keeps the narrative going and tells me what happened before, during and afterwards, without losing track of things and/or boring me, which since I haven't followed pro wrestling in years is something of an accomplishment), consistently sourced and cited properly, and smartly laid out. So there you go.
If you want to take this to FA, I'd suggest adding something on attendance and TV viewing figures as well. That would be truly comprehensive. Daniel Case ( talk) 18:18, 20 June 2008 (UTC)
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Done with the event. iMat thew 20 08 22:07, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
-- 13 of Diamonds ( talk) 21:36, 27 April 2008 (UTC)
Done with everything. iMat thew 20 08 10:35, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
This article is listed first on the Open Tasks lists, but it's been awhile since anyone's made any comments, and the first time this page has been opened, so I'll have at it, even though I know very little about wrestling. Please keep that in mind.
1. Unforgiven (2006) was the eight annual...
2. Edge had retained the WWE title against Cena at both Saturday Night's Main Event and SummerSlam.[6][7]
3. Forgive me, but I don't even understand the first paragraph, probably because I'm ignorant. For example, I don't know who Lita is and why she's important and why her throwing Cena's belt into the Long Island Sound is important. Are you trying to explain why the match happened, that it was due to these guys' rivalry? Perhaps that needs to be more clear, and perhaps you need to explain it so that someone dumb like me can understand it.
4. On the August 21, 2006 edition of Raw, as part of the storyline, DX vandalized Vince McMahon's personal jet plane, WWE headquarters, and McMahon's limousine.[9][13]
5. On the August 28, 2006 edition of Raw, The McMahons viciously attacked DX after their 3-on-2 handicap match with their SummerSlam opponents, Mr. Kennedy, Finlay and William Regal.[10] But before Vince and Shane proceeded to attack DX, Big Show attacked DX, giving the advantage to The McMahons.[10]
6. Moments after the assault,...
7. Melina, however, hit Hardy with her boot, giving the upper hand to Nitro as he pinned Hardy and retained the title.[19][20]
8. Kane performed a clothesline on Umaga...
9. back and forth action was seen by both teams.
10. ...as Mikey was able to pin Rory after a Facebuster, thus able to retain the World Tag Team Championship.[20][22]
11. gave the upper hand...
12. Back and forth action took place between the teams.
13. Stratus gained the early control, but Lita gained control after she threw Stratus from the top rope. Stratus won the match, after she locked in the Sharpshooter on Lita, who submitted to the move, giving the win to Stratus, who became Women's Champion for the last time.[23][24]
14. As the match came to a start, Carlito spat on Orton and momentarily was followed by a dropkick.
15. The match saw Cena sandwich Edge in a ladder, as he applied the STFU hold on Edge, to which Edge tapped out.
16. At one point, Cena began to climb the ladder, as he was moments away from retrieving the title, Lita, who interfered on behalf of Edge, tipped the ladder over, making Cena fall off the ladder and crash through a table at ringside.
17. What's an "FU"? Do I dare ask? ;) 18. Ah, now I see it, in the next paragraph. Be careful about your wikilinking; make sure that you link the first instance. 19. Thus ending the feud between the two.
20. The following week, Edge used an edition of The Cutting Edge to join forces with Randy Orton to form a team and began a feud against DX.
21. On the October 9, 2006 edition of Raw, where Kane and Umaga were scheduled in a "Loser Leaves Raw match", in which Umaga defeated Kane, sending Kane to the SmackDown! brand.[32][28] After being separated by different brands, Umaga and Kane had one final match at Cyber Sunday where Umaga again defeated Kane after fans selected him over Chris Benoit and The Sandman to be Umaga's opponent for the night.[33]
22. The angle between Johnny Nitro and Jeff Hardy continued, as the two were involved in another Intercontinental Championship match where Nitro retained the title.[30][34]
23. The following paragraph, about the Women's championship, needs a thorough copyedit. The wording is repetitive and the timeline it tries to describe is very unclear.
24. Cena, King Booker (SmackDown!'s World Heavyweight Champion), and Big Show (ECW's World Champion) engaged in a feud leading to a Triple Threat match at Cyber Sunday in November, with the viewers voting on which of the three championships would be placed on the line.[39]
25. At the same time, Cena became involved in a storyline with non-wrestler Kevin Federline when he began appearing on Raw with Johnny Nitro and Melina.
26. After getting into a worked physical altercation with Federline on Raw,[39] Federline appeared at Cyber Sunday to hit Cena with the World Heavyweight Title belt during the main event Triple Threat match, helping King Booker retain his title.[44]
I think that's it. Thanks for the opportunity; I now know so much more about professional wrestling than before! ;) -- Figureskatingfan ( talk) 04:36, 17 June 2008 (UTC)
The above review seems to have taken care of a lot of little issues. I really can't find any major faults with this ... a couple of places where something should be cited in addition to where it's been cited elsewhere, maybe, and that cutline on the DX guys which should be shortened. The information is already conveyed in the nearby text, and all it really needs to do is identify them at the event. Anytime your photo cutline's going on four lines or more, you either need to resize the image (not a good idea here) or tighten the cutline up.
Otherwise, it's well-written (keeps the narrative going and tells me what happened before, during and afterwards, without losing track of things and/or boring me, which since I haven't followed pro wrestling in years is something of an accomplishment), consistently sourced and cited properly, and smartly laid out. So there you go.
If you want to take this to FA, I'd suggest adding something on attendance and TV viewing figures as well. That would be truly comprehensive. Daniel Case ( talk) 18:18, 20 June 2008 (UTC)