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I forgot to add that this concept while quite influential in the 1970's has fallen to the sidelines since. Being that at one point it was quite influential, I still do believe it should be included here on Wikipedia. It still does have merit though, as it has illustrated the way how additional factors can influence memory encoding, specifically how forming connections with other information aids memory (as evidenced in the self-reference effect, where information is remembered better if it is related to the self, and retrieval cues), as well as the generation of information, and the organisation of information.
That said, this articles needs a fair bit of work, but I figured that I should at least bring some attention to it. Sorry for not writing it in a more "wiki" form, but I'm still new at this.
Mainly.generic 13:16, 21 September 2007 (UTC)
Brandi Carolyn Hull ( talk) 16:45, 19 October 2012 (UTC)
I like that the article started out with the necessary definitions. However in the definition section, there is an argument that only has one side told. I would like to see more information on the argument that suggests that the encoding process and retrieval processes are similar and also on the counterargument that isn’t mentioned. It makes the next statement confusing because the reader never sees the counterargument. This also makes it biased. Cut out “transfer-appropriate processing” and instead using TAP after the first definition. The experiments discussed in the definition section should be moved into the experiments section. Use the definition section as a type of introduction. There should be only key points and definitions to clear up any confusing or new words. Overall the structure is good, but could be improved. Breaking up the sections and adding a little more information can go a long way. The examples section is overall one that I would keep, but I don’t understand the Darwin reference and how it applies to TAP. More elaboration on that section would be useful. Finally I suggest beefing up the reference section. — Preceding unsigned comment added by TuesdayF ( talk • contribs) 17:15, 19 October 2012 (UTC)
• Lead: The lead for this article needs to be further condensed. My suggestion would be to move the lead to the beginning of the page (above the content table). Some of the research described in the lead could be moved to the experiments section.
• Structure: The structure is somewhat clear. I would suggest, besides moving the lead above the content table, to switch the experiments and the examples sections. Also, the examples could be enumerated or bulleted to organize that section better. Additionally, it might be better to space out the experiments so that the section doesn’t overwhelm the reader.
• Balance: The article’s balance needs to be improved. Clearly, the experiment section is the largest and takes over the rest of the article. Although, it still needs to describe in more detail the methods used during research. Also, it might be a good idea to expand the other sections accordingly. For instance, the example section needs to include more than two examples.
• Coverage: The article needs to work on its neutrality. It mentions there is an argument concerning encoding and processing and whether or not they are similar. However, it fails to provide a detailed account for both sides of the argument.
• Sources: The article has some reliable sources. However there are a few which might be questionable, I suggest looking into this.
• Warning Banners: The article has no warning banner.
• Language in the lead: The only problem I find in the lead is that it is too wordy. I feel like it could be condensed and some of the language could be changed in order to explain the concept more clearly.
• Opinions and Statements: I found an un-sourced opinion in the examples section. The comment about Guitar Hero seems to be made by the author and not found in reliable literature. Although it could be that it is just missing a citation.
• Unnamed groups of people: The article refers in numerous occasions to researchers as “they”. This wouldn’t be a problem if it identified their names first.
• Missing: There doesn’t seem to be any sections missing.
• Section length: There are no overly long sections. The experiment section is fairly long, but it is an important section. I would suggest though, expanding some of the other sections like the history and the examples.
• References: The article has few references. Like I said before, references need to be added in the examples section.
Copy-Editing Suggestions
Definition:
“Transfer-appropriate processing is a type of state-dependent memory which indicates that memory performance…” “Also, transfer-appropriate processing is an information-processing action that occurs in two stages…” “This means, that we stimuli are not process all at one time, but instead broken down into a series of responses.”[2]
History:
“…completed studies that went against the idea of multi-store theories…” “…explained that the theory of multi-store had very little evidence…”
Examples:
“This means the rabbit would excel at surviving because it has a wider range of qualities such as diet flexibility and fecundity.”
Experiments:
“…experiment done by Haline E. Schendan and Marta Kutas presents the neurophysiological evidence..” “The individuals were placed into an air traffic control simulator.”
Problems:
“…for the fact that they seem untestable and un-falsifiable.” JudithBrizuela 02:46, 20 October 2012 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by JudithBrizuela ( talk • contribs)
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Reviewer: Delldot ( talk · contribs) 06:21, 14 January 2013 (UTC)
Hi Bro47024, welcome to Wikipedia, thanks for helping to improve the project. I see that you have not made any edits to this article, so I'm not going to give this an in-depth review now, because I'm not sure anyone's going to act on my suggestions. However if you're interested in continuing to work on and improve the article at any point, leave me a message on my talk page and I'll be glad to help in any way you need. I'm going to list some of the things that stood out on my first pass through the article:
Again, thanks for your contributions to the project. I think this article has the potential to become really great, and I'm happy to help if editors are interested in making that happen, just let me know. delldot ∇. 06:21, 14 January 2013 (UTC)
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I forgot to add that this concept while quite influential in the 1970's has fallen to the sidelines since. Being that at one point it was quite influential, I still do believe it should be included here on Wikipedia. It still does have merit though, as it has illustrated the way how additional factors can influence memory encoding, specifically how forming connections with other information aids memory (as evidenced in the self-reference effect, where information is remembered better if it is related to the self, and retrieval cues), as well as the generation of information, and the organisation of information.
That said, this articles needs a fair bit of work, but I figured that I should at least bring some attention to it. Sorry for not writing it in a more "wiki" form, but I'm still new at this.
Mainly.generic 13:16, 21 September 2007 (UTC)
Brandi Carolyn Hull ( talk) 16:45, 19 October 2012 (UTC)
I like that the article started out with the necessary definitions. However in the definition section, there is an argument that only has one side told. I would like to see more information on the argument that suggests that the encoding process and retrieval processes are similar and also on the counterargument that isn’t mentioned. It makes the next statement confusing because the reader never sees the counterargument. This also makes it biased. Cut out “transfer-appropriate processing” and instead using TAP after the first definition. The experiments discussed in the definition section should be moved into the experiments section. Use the definition section as a type of introduction. There should be only key points and definitions to clear up any confusing or new words. Overall the structure is good, but could be improved. Breaking up the sections and adding a little more information can go a long way. The examples section is overall one that I would keep, but I don’t understand the Darwin reference and how it applies to TAP. More elaboration on that section would be useful. Finally I suggest beefing up the reference section. — Preceding unsigned comment added by TuesdayF ( talk • contribs) 17:15, 19 October 2012 (UTC)
• Lead: The lead for this article needs to be further condensed. My suggestion would be to move the lead to the beginning of the page (above the content table). Some of the research described in the lead could be moved to the experiments section.
• Structure: The structure is somewhat clear. I would suggest, besides moving the lead above the content table, to switch the experiments and the examples sections. Also, the examples could be enumerated or bulleted to organize that section better. Additionally, it might be better to space out the experiments so that the section doesn’t overwhelm the reader.
• Balance: The article’s balance needs to be improved. Clearly, the experiment section is the largest and takes over the rest of the article. Although, it still needs to describe in more detail the methods used during research. Also, it might be a good idea to expand the other sections accordingly. For instance, the example section needs to include more than two examples.
• Coverage: The article needs to work on its neutrality. It mentions there is an argument concerning encoding and processing and whether or not they are similar. However, it fails to provide a detailed account for both sides of the argument.
• Sources: The article has some reliable sources. However there are a few which might be questionable, I suggest looking into this.
• Warning Banners: The article has no warning banner.
• Language in the lead: The only problem I find in the lead is that it is too wordy. I feel like it could be condensed and some of the language could be changed in order to explain the concept more clearly.
• Opinions and Statements: I found an un-sourced opinion in the examples section. The comment about Guitar Hero seems to be made by the author and not found in reliable literature. Although it could be that it is just missing a citation.
• Unnamed groups of people: The article refers in numerous occasions to researchers as “they”. This wouldn’t be a problem if it identified their names first.
• Missing: There doesn’t seem to be any sections missing.
• Section length: There are no overly long sections. The experiment section is fairly long, but it is an important section. I would suggest though, expanding some of the other sections like the history and the examples.
• References: The article has few references. Like I said before, references need to be added in the examples section.
Copy-Editing Suggestions
Definition:
“Transfer-appropriate processing is a type of state-dependent memory which indicates that memory performance…” “Also, transfer-appropriate processing is an information-processing action that occurs in two stages…” “This means, that we stimuli are not process all at one time, but instead broken down into a series of responses.”[2]
History:
“…completed studies that went against the idea of multi-store theories…” “…explained that the theory of multi-store had very little evidence…”
Examples:
“This means the rabbit would excel at surviving because it has a wider range of qualities such as diet flexibility and fecundity.”
Experiments:
“…experiment done by Haline E. Schendan and Marta Kutas presents the neurophysiological evidence..” “The individuals were placed into an air traffic control simulator.”
Problems:
“…for the fact that they seem untestable and un-falsifiable.” JudithBrizuela 02:46, 20 October 2012 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by JudithBrizuela ( talk • contribs)
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Reviewer: Delldot ( talk · contribs) 06:21, 14 January 2013 (UTC)
Hi Bro47024, welcome to Wikipedia, thanks for helping to improve the project. I see that you have not made any edits to this article, so I'm not going to give this an in-depth review now, because I'm not sure anyone's going to act on my suggestions. However if you're interested in continuing to work on and improve the article at any point, leave me a message on my talk page and I'll be glad to help in any way you need. I'm going to list some of the things that stood out on my first pass through the article:
Again, thanks for your contributions to the project. I think this article has the potential to become really great, and I'm happy to help if editors are interested in making that happen, just let me know. delldot ∇. 06:21, 14 January 2013 (UTC)