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Hi vat, I'll leave some comments soon.
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Multiple new advancement systems are added, such as talent badges, which track sims' progress in business skills; business ranks, which measure a business's success based on its company loyalty; and business perks, gifts or skills granted to a sim for running a successful business.- After reading this sentence, I feel like the word "business" sounds strange to me. Anyway, I'd suggest adding "which are" before "gifts or skills" to match the sentence structure of the rest of the sentence.
building options- Like physical buildings?
amongst all platforms and installments- "Installments" being devices, I assume?
It expanded upon the original game's features, introducting elements such as an aspiration system based around short-term and long-term goals, expanded character and neighbourhood customization, and the ability for sims to raise families, age, and progress through generations- A few things here.
the in-game easel, which allowed sims to make and sell paintings- the easel being an object in the base game?
in in-game storylines- This wording sounds a little weird to me.
on community lots they own- So like a land lot?
due to its ability to let players control- "since it let players control"?
Talent badges are ranked as "bronze", "silver", and "gold"- I presume from lower to higher ranking.
Business Perks; perks include- I feel like this can be reworded as "Business Perks, which include" to avoid repetition.
conical roofs alongside existing flat ones- Unless these roofs are physically next to each other, I'd reword "alongside" to "along with".
conical roofs alongside, how about "in addition to"? – Epicgenius ( talk) 14:15, 18 September 2023 (UTC)
Since its release, Open for Business has seen use as an educational tool for business and mathematics students- Is this use particularly widespread, or are you saying that at least one school has used the expansion as a teaching tool?
Adams' reviewshould be "Adams's review" per MOS:POSS. Did Adams praise anything in this expansion?
Dave Kosack at GameSpy considered Open for Business so deep- Not sure if "deep" is the right word - this sounds a little off to me.
while the former proposed a housewares retail business- To clarify, this does not exist in the expansion? If not, that's a shame - this idea sounds cool.
In particular, several found the expansion failed to clarify that a business's opening hours are determined by manually flipping an open sign to closed and vice versa- If the sources go into this, I think it may be good to clarify whether the businesses are closed by default when a player creates a business.
third highest-selling PC game of 2006- Does this mean the third-highest-selling PC game (i.e. two PC games released in 2006 had more sales), or the third highest-selling PC game (i.e. prior to this expansion's release, two games held the title of "highest-selling PC game" in 2006, both of which were beat out by this expansion)? If it's the third-highest, I'd add a hyphen.
Since its release, Open for Business has remained the subject of critical attention.- You only mention one later review, though.
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Reviewer: Epicgenius ( talk · contribs) 00:21, 14 September 2023 (UTC)
Hi vat, I'll leave some comments soon.
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Multiple new advancement systems are added, such as talent badges, which track sims' progress in business skills; business ranks, which measure a business's success based on its company loyalty; and business perks, gifts or skills granted to a sim for running a successful business.- After reading this sentence, I feel like the word "business" sounds strange to me. Anyway, I'd suggest adding "which are" before "gifts or skills" to match the sentence structure of the rest of the sentence.
building options- Like physical buildings?
amongst all platforms and installments- "Installments" being devices, I assume?
It expanded upon the original game's features, introducting elements such as an aspiration system based around short-term and long-term goals, expanded character and neighbourhood customization, and the ability for sims to raise families, age, and progress through generations- A few things here.
the in-game easel, which allowed sims to make and sell paintings- the easel being an object in the base game?
in in-game storylines- This wording sounds a little weird to me.
on community lots they own- So like a land lot?
due to its ability to let players control- "since it let players control"?
Talent badges are ranked as "bronze", "silver", and "gold"- I presume from lower to higher ranking.
Business Perks; perks include- I feel like this can be reworded as "Business Perks, which include" to avoid repetition.
conical roofs alongside existing flat ones- Unless these roofs are physically next to each other, I'd reword "alongside" to "along with".
conical roofs alongside, how about "in addition to"? – Epicgenius ( talk) 14:15, 18 September 2023 (UTC)
Since its release, Open for Business has seen use as an educational tool for business and mathematics students- Is this use particularly widespread, or are you saying that at least one school has used the expansion as a teaching tool?
Adams' reviewshould be "Adams's review" per MOS:POSS. Did Adams praise anything in this expansion?
Dave Kosack at GameSpy considered Open for Business so deep- Not sure if "deep" is the right word - this sounds a little off to me.
while the former proposed a housewares retail business- To clarify, this does not exist in the expansion? If not, that's a shame - this idea sounds cool.
In particular, several found the expansion failed to clarify that a business's opening hours are determined by manually flipping an open sign to closed and vice versa- If the sources go into this, I think it may be good to clarify whether the businesses are closed by default when a player creates a business.
third highest-selling PC game of 2006- Does this mean the third-highest-selling PC game (i.e. two PC games released in 2006 had more sales), or the third highest-selling PC game (i.e. prior to this expansion's release, two games held the title of "highest-selling PC game" in 2006, both of which were beat out by this expansion)? If it's the third-highest, I'd add a hyphen.
Since its release, Open for Business has remained the subject of critical attention.- You only mention one later review, though.