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'Darkness' or 'The Darkness'
Throughout the article, the entity is referred to both as the Darkness and The Darkness. Is 'the' apart of its name? I say this because the article which it is linked to (Read:
The Darkness) refers to it without the capitalised 'The'. Just double checking, this is a real easy fix either way. Thanks!
--
Leiovus (
talk) 14:42, 16 March 2020 (UTC)reply
Edit: There seems to be an overwhelming usage of 'the Darkness' in the article, so I'm going to go with that and quickly patch this up. Feel free to correct me if needed, thanks again and sorry for seemingly answering my own question, but the point is absolutely still open to discussion if need be. Thanks again. --
Leiovus (
talk) 14:45, 16 March 2020 (UTC)reply
Staring a review of The Darkness II, will update with details shortly.
AntiGravityMaster (
talk) 02:41, 24 April 2020 (UTC)reply
Improvements by section
Lead
There's a single citation in the lead for "Demon Arms". This doesn't seem to be anything particularly likely to be challenged, it's verified later in the body by other sources, and the rest of the lead is absent of cites. I'd recommend removing it due to redundancy. See
WP:LEAD for more details.
AntiGravityMaster (
talk) 03:18, 24 April 2020 (UTC)reply
Done
If "Hell" is capitalized within the game (I'm assuming it most likely is) it should be capitalized here, and either way, it should be linked to the
Hell article.
AntiGravityMaster (
talk) 03:18, 24 April 2020 (UTC)reply
Done
Gameplay
Opening paragraph calls the Demon Arms "demon tentacles", then "demon tendrils". Stay consistent with the nomenclature. If what the Demon Arms are isn't obvious, I'd suggest introducing them as "...Additionally, he is armed with a pair of Demon Arms, which resemble tentacles and can be used to slash enemies or pick up various items within the environment..." or something similar.
AntiGravityMaster (
talk) 03:18, 24 April 2020 (UTC)reply
Done
These three sentences "When exposed to light, Jackie's health regeneration and Darkness abilities are disabled and the Darkling will vanish, leaving Jackie with firearms as his only defense. Jackie's vision will blur and he will experience a high-pitched ringing. The player must avoid directly exposing Jackie to light sources or disable them by shooting out lights or destroying power generators." should be rephrased/merged to be less fragmented. The second sentence is particularly jarring.
AntiGravityMaster (
talk) 03:18, 24 April 2020 (UTC)reply
Done - I have rearranged the sentences a bit.
"Collecting relics, which serves as collectibles, earn a small amount of Essence." should be "serve as" and "earns".
AntiGravityMaster (
talk) 03:18, 24 April 2020 (UTC)reply
Done
Some more links would be good, for things such as "samurai sword", "blunderbuss", and "...various firearms, such as submachine guns, shotguns, and assault rifles..."
Done
"Vendetta" is italicized here. Since Vendetta is not a large work, it should be put in quotes rather than italicized.
AntiGravityMaster (
talk) 03:18, 24 April 2020 (UTC)reply
Done - I put a quotation mark for the first instance of mention. I don't think we need a quotation mark every time we mention this mode, but I have remove the
WP:ITALIC.
Plot
This section is completely citation-free. While there may be some redundancy with previously listed citations, it's a bit jarring to go from a section with frequent citations into a section with absolutely none. The lead is an exception to this and generally does not need citations if the information therein is sourced later in the article, but the plot section should have some.
AntiGravityMaster (
talk) 03:18, 24 April 2020 (UTC)reply
We rarely have sources for this section per
WP:VG/PLOT
Development
"Vendetta" is in plain text here. Since Vendetta is not a large work, it should be put in quotes rather than italicized.
AntiGravityMaster (
talk) 03:18, 24 April 2020 (UTC)reply
Done
Reception
"Sales" section should either be expanded if there is more information on it or merged into one of the other paragraphs if not.
AntiGravityMaster (
talk) 03:18, 24 April 2020 (UTC)reply
Done - There isn't much information about the game's sales, so I have merged it to the reception section.
GA Review
GA review (see
here for what the criteria are, and
here for what they are not)
These issues aren't too major, but they're holding back the article from meeting the criteria. You can use the {{done}} tag to indicate when a concern has been met. Feel free to shoot me a message when you believe the article is ready for reconsideration. Good luck!
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'Darkness' or 'The Darkness'
Throughout the article, the entity is referred to both as the Darkness and The Darkness. Is 'the' apart of its name? I say this because the article which it is linked to (Read:
The Darkness) refers to it without the capitalised 'The'. Just double checking, this is a real easy fix either way. Thanks!
--
Leiovus (
talk) 14:42, 16 March 2020 (UTC)reply
Edit: There seems to be an overwhelming usage of 'the Darkness' in the article, so I'm going to go with that and quickly patch this up. Feel free to correct me if needed, thanks again and sorry for seemingly answering my own question, but the point is absolutely still open to discussion if need be. Thanks again. --
Leiovus (
talk) 14:45, 16 March 2020 (UTC)reply
Staring a review of The Darkness II, will update with details shortly.
AntiGravityMaster (
talk) 02:41, 24 April 2020 (UTC)reply
Improvements by section
Lead
There's a single citation in the lead for "Demon Arms". This doesn't seem to be anything particularly likely to be challenged, it's verified later in the body by other sources, and the rest of the lead is absent of cites. I'd recommend removing it due to redundancy. See
WP:LEAD for more details.
AntiGravityMaster (
talk) 03:18, 24 April 2020 (UTC)reply
Done
If "Hell" is capitalized within the game (I'm assuming it most likely is) it should be capitalized here, and either way, it should be linked to the
Hell article.
AntiGravityMaster (
talk) 03:18, 24 April 2020 (UTC)reply
Done
Gameplay
Opening paragraph calls the Demon Arms "demon tentacles", then "demon tendrils". Stay consistent with the nomenclature. If what the Demon Arms are isn't obvious, I'd suggest introducing them as "...Additionally, he is armed with a pair of Demon Arms, which resemble tentacles and can be used to slash enemies or pick up various items within the environment..." or something similar.
AntiGravityMaster (
talk) 03:18, 24 April 2020 (UTC)reply
Done
These three sentences "When exposed to light, Jackie's health regeneration and Darkness abilities are disabled and the Darkling will vanish, leaving Jackie with firearms as his only defense. Jackie's vision will blur and he will experience a high-pitched ringing. The player must avoid directly exposing Jackie to light sources or disable them by shooting out lights or destroying power generators." should be rephrased/merged to be less fragmented. The second sentence is particularly jarring.
AntiGravityMaster (
talk) 03:18, 24 April 2020 (UTC)reply
Done - I have rearranged the sentences a bit.
"Collecting relics, which serves as collectibles, earn a small amount of Essence." should be "serve as" and "earns".
AntiGravityMaster (
talk) 03:18, 24 April 2020 (UTC)reply
Done
Some more links would be good, for things such as "samurai sword", "blunderbuss", and "...various firearms, such as submachine guns, shotguns, and assault rifles..."
Done
"Vendetta" is italicized here. Since Vendetta is not a large work, it should be put in quotes rather than italicized.
AntiGravityMaster (
talk) 03:18, 24 April 2020 (UTC)reply
Done - I put a quotation mark for the first instance of mention. I don't think we need a quotation mark every time we mention this mode, but I have remove the
WP:ITALIC.
Plot
This section is completely citation-free. While there may be some redundancy with previously listed citations, it's a bit jarring to go from a section with frequent citations into a section with absolutely none. The lead is an exception to this and generally does not need citations if the information therein is sourced later in the article, but the plot section should have some.
AntiGravityMaster (
talk) 03:18, 24 April 2020 (UTC)reply
We rarely have sources for this section per
WP:VG/PLOT
Development
"Vendetta" is in plain text here. Since Vendetta is not a large work, it should be put in quotes rather than italicized.
AntiGravityMaster (
talk) 03:18, 24 April 2020 (UTC)reply
Done
Reception
"Sales" section should either be expanded if there is more information on it or merged into one of the other paragraphs if not.
AntiGravityMaster (
talk) 03:18, 24 April 2020 (UTC)reply
Done - There isn't much information about the game's sales, so I have merged it to the reception section.
GA Review
GA review (see
here for what the criteria are, and
here for what they are not)
These issues aren't too major, but they're holding back the article from meeting the criteria. You can use the {{done}} tag to indicate when a concern has been met. Feel free to shoot me a message when you believe the article is ready for reconsideration. Good luck!