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Surely not the so-called "plot". (But for example Chai Xianghua's actually might actually make use of it, I guess.) I already shortened the reception section (and it's kinda funny I just heard the reception is "not enough" still, allegedly, anyway). -- SNAAAAKE!! ( talk) 19:41, 24 August 2018 (UTC)
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Reviewer: QuicoleJR ( talk · contribs) 16:23, 22 March 2024 (UTC)
I will take this one. Ping me if I forget about it. This is my first GA review.
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@ Kung Fu Man: I have finished reading through the whole article, and here is my review. It is a pretty well-made article overall, but I do have a few issues that need addressing. QuicoleJR ( talk) 20:03, 22 March 2024 (UTC)
she first appeared in Soul Edge and its subsequent sequels, later appearing in various merchandise related to the series.How can she first appear in Soul Edge and its sequels? Also, the part after the comma is a different tense to the part before, and I would recommend either fixing that or making it into its own sentence.
She has received mostly positive feedback, often having been for noted her iconic status in the Soul series and regarded as one of the best female ninja characters in video games as well as one of sex symbols of the fighting game genre.This sentence needs to have a lot of grammar issues fixed. I would do it myself, but I can't tell what it is supposed to say.
Her design and concept were then built to revolve around it by designers Aya Takemura and Takuji Kawano, starting with gender, then physical measurements, and lastly background details.I'm not sure what you mean by “design and concept” here. I don't quite understand “background details” either. I assume “physical measurements” just means height?
Soulcalibur III director Katsutoshi Sasaki regarded Taki as his personal favorite character from the series.I'm not sure why this was placed in the middle of the paragraph about the character’s creation in Soul Edge, right before discussing changes made in Soulcalibur II. It should probably be moved somewhere else in the article.
From Soulcalibur II onward, her weapon was changed to a pair of kodachi, with alternatives such as kunai also available.What do you mean by “also available” in this sentence?
During Soul Edge's development, several ideas were considered for her gear, with a mask covering her face being a consistent theme between designs.I assume “gear” here means outfit? You might just want to say that.
When showing her face, the developers wanted her to display little emotion as a ninja.Does she usually hide her face?
her outfit tended to remain a red bodysuit with various degrees of armor, such as oni masks, meant to represent a symbol of exorcism.Does the bodysuit represent a symbol of exorcism, or does the armor? I can't really tell from the sentence.
In Soulcalibur VI, Japanese text from her ninja clan was added in bright pink highlights across it.Same issue as above. Did they add the text to the bodysuit or the armor?
Known as a demon hunter trying to purge the land of evil, she seeks a cursed sword, Soul Edge, to help her destroy it.This says that she wants to use the cursed sword to destroy evil, while the lead says that she wants to destroy the sword. Only one of those things can be true.
Taki helps defeat the sword's wielder, destroying one half of the blade in the process.This sentence does not have enough context. Who is she helping to defeat the sword’s wielder? Who is the sword’s wielder?
While searching for remaining shards of the sword,Where? Why?
several members of her clan become corrupted by its influence,How can the sword corrupt people if it has been broken into pieces?
including the clan's master Toki, who she defeats after he transforms into a demon.Hold on. You can't just transform someone into a demon without explaining why they transformed into a demon. This part is also unsourced, but that is fine since it is plot information.
Taki appears in every entry of the Soulcalibur series with the exception of Soulcalibur V, where the development team felt she was "too old" to continue being a ninja.This feels like it would fit better in the Conception and design section, since it discusses the development of Soulcalibur V.
She was also featured in a gamebook for the ecchi series Queen's Blade,Could you explain what role she had in the book? If not, that is fine.
A multitude of figures have also been released of the characters,Why is “characters” plural? I can't tell if this is a typo or intentional, and it needs more context if it is the latter.
This section impressively avoids relying on listicles, but I still have a few things to say.
Both images have valid non-free use rationales. Only a few minor comments here.
Picking a few sources at random:
Could not access one of the sources, but since I only found one minor issue, if you can even call my comment on source 26 an issue, I will say that this article passes a spot check.
@ QuicoleJR Addressed everything I could, let me know if there are still any hangups or things to fix.-- Kung Fu Man ( talk) 22:06, 22 March 2024 (UTC)
To this end they gave her an outfit that emphasized the contours of her body to give her a sharper look,Is “give her a sharper look” something the developers said?
Taki stands 170 cm (5 ft 7 in) and has a bust size of 90 cm (35 in).As of which game? You mentioned that the breast size kept increasing, so this statistic would vary depending on which design of the character was used.
The latter sentiment was echoed when she was excluded from Soulcalibur V, resulting in negative reactions from both fans and publications,I'm fine with the “fans” part, but one publication does not seem like enough for the second part of that clause.
along with an even larger version made exclusive for pre-orders only.Redundant and the grammar is bad. There are many ways you could fix this so I'm going to leave this one to you.
@ QuicoleJR Should be all fixed!-- Kung Fu Man ( talk) 04:55, 23 March 2024 (UTC)
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Surely not the so-called "plot". (But for example Chai Xianghua's actually might actually make use of it, I guess.) I already shortened the reception section (and it's kinda funny I just heard the reception is "not enough" still, allegedly, anyway). -- SNAAAAKE!! ( talk) 19:41, 24 August 2018 (UTC)
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Nominator: Kung Fu Man ( talk · contribs)
Reviewer: QuicoleJR ( talk · contribs) 16:23, 22 March 2024 (UTC)
I will take this one. Ping me if I forget about it. This is my first GA review.
QuicoleJR (
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16:23, 22 March 2024 (UTC)
@ Kung Fu Man: I have finished reading through the whole article, and here is my review. It is a pretty well-made article overall, but I do have a few issues that need addressing. QuicoleJR ( talk) 20:03, 22 March 2024 (UTC)
she first appeared in Soul Edge and its subsequent sequels, later appearing in various merchandise related to the series.How can she first appear in Soul Edge and its sequels? Also, the part after the comma is a different tense to the part before, and I would recommend either fixing that or making it into its own sentence.
She has received mostly positive feedback, often having been for noted her iconic status in the Soul series and regarded as one of the best female ninja characters in video games as well as one of sex symbols of the fighting game genre.This sentence needs to have a lot of grammar issues fixed. I would do it myself, but I can't tell what it is supposed to say.
Her design and concept were then built to revolve around it by designers Aya Takemura and Takuji Kawano, starting with gender, then physical measurements, and lastly background details.I'm not sure what you mean by “design and concept” here. I don't quite understand “background details” either. I assume “physical measurements” just means height?
Soulcalibur III director Katsutoshi Sasaki regarded Taki as his personal favorite character from the series.I'm not sure why this was placed in the middle of the paragraph about the character’s creation in Soul Edge, right before discussing changes made in Soulcalibur II. It should probably be moved somewhere else in the article.
From Soulcalibur II onward, her weapon was changed to a pair of kodachi, with alternatives such as kunai also available.What do you mean by “also available” in this sentence?
During Soul Edge's development, several ideas were considered for her gear, with a mask covering her face being a consistent theme between designs.I assume “gear” here means outfit? You might just want to say that.
When showing her face, the developers wanted her to display little emotion as a ninja.Does she usually hide her face?
her outfit tended to remain a red bodysuit with various degrees of armor, such as oni masks, meant to represent a symbol of exorcism.Does the bodysuit represent a symbol of exorcism, or does the armor? I can't really tell from the sentence.
In Soulcalibur VI, Japanese text from her ninja clan was added in bright pink highlights across it.Same issue as above. Did they add the text to the bodysuit or the armor?
Known as a demon hunter trying to purge the land of evil, she seeks a cursed sword, Soul Edge, to help her destroy it.This says that she wants to use the cursed sword to destroy evil, while the lead says that she wants to destroy the sword. Only one of those things can be true.
Taki helps defeat the sword's wielder, destroying one half of the blade in the process.This sentence does not have enough context. Who is she helping to defeat the sword’s wielder? Who is the sword’s wielder?
While searching for remaining shards of the sword,Where? Why?
several members of her clan become corrupted by its influence,How can the sword corrupt people if it has been broken into pieces?
including the clan's master Toki, who she defeats after he transforms into a demon.Hold on. You can't just transform someone into a demon without explaining why they transformed into a demon. This part is also unsourced, but that is fine since it is plot information.
Taki appears in every entry of the Soulcalibur series with the exception of Soulcalibur V, where the development team felt she was "too old" to continue being a ninja.This feels like it would fit better in the Conception and design section, since it discusses the development of Soulcalibur V.
She was also featured in a gamebook for the ecchi series Queen's Blade,Could you explain what role she had in the book? If not, that is fine.
A multitude of figures have also been released of the characters,Why is “characters” plural? I can't tell if this is a typo or intentional, and it needs more context if it is the latter.
This section impressively avoids relying on listicles, but I still have a few things to say.
Both images have valid non-free use rationales. Only a few minor comments here.
Picking a few sources at random:
Could not access one of the sources, but since I only found one minor issue, if you can even call my comment on source 26 an issue, I will say that this article passes a spot check.
@ QuicoleJR Addressed everything I could, let me know if there are still any hangups or things to fix.-- Kung Fu Man ( talk) 22:06, 22 March 2024 (UTC)
To this end they gave her an outfit that emphasized the contours of her body to give her a sharper look,Is “give her a sharper look” something the developers said?
Taki stands 170 cm (5 ft 7 in) and has a bust size of 90 cm (35 in).As of which game? You mentioned that the breast size kept increasing, so this statistic would vary depending on which design of the character was used.
The latter sentiment was echoed when she was excluded from Soulcalibur V, resulting in negative reactions from both fans and publications,I'm fine with the “fans” part, but one publication does not seem like enough for the second part of that clause.
along with an even larger version made exclusive for pre-orders only.Redundant and the grammar is bad. There are many ways you could fix this so I'm going to leave this one to you.
@ QuicoleJR Should be all fixed!-- Kung Fu Man ( talk) 04:55, 23 March 2024 (UTC)