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Links for UK Independent Singles+Single Download charts
Ukiss2ne14lyfe the links in the weekly charts table that you added in this edit
here from Oct 2018 for these 2 charts don't reflect the data in the table. SD doesn't appear on the Independent Singles Chart dd May 25, 2018 and the Single Download chart link just reflects the current chart ranking. I'm unsure which archive of the chart to search for as Spring Day doesn't show up in BTS chart history on the site either. --
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23:40, 12 July 2020 (UTC)reply
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"chart" is not needed at the end of the Billboard sentence since the chart has clearly been named
"The Ones Who Walk Away from Omelas" should be surrounded by speech marks and not italicised
Are you sure something shouldn't be written about what the video features?
A lot of metaphors are featured in the visual, so it's difficult to pinpoint one thing, but I'll look into it.
"symbolism and won" → "symbolism and was awarded"
"BTS promoted the song" → "BTS promoted "Spring Day"
"It was also included" → "The song was also included"
Are you sure set list should be wikilinked?
Any reason it shouldn't be targeted? I've seen a few GAs with the wikilink so I kept it that way.
I was thinking it was too obvious, but was kind of unsure so if I numerous GAs have the wikilink then you can keep it, I guess. --
K. Peake20:45, 1 September 2020 (UTC)reply
"of their second worldwide" → "of the band's second worldwide"
Done Everything else.
Background and release
"at number one on the" → "at number one on South Korea's"
"of 2016 in South Korea." → "of 2016 in the country."
"in January 2017, that a sequel" → "in January 2017 that a sequel"
"to be a part of the reissue, when the band" → "to be slated for release on the reissue when the band subsequently" to specify it was around that time
"On February 10 of that year, it was" → "On February 10, 2017, the song was"
"the first
single from the album." → "the
lead single from You Never Walk Alone." with the wikilink
[5] should not be invoked at this point since [4] backs up everything in the sentence
"main melody of the song. He wrote it between" → "main melody of the song, which he wrote between"
"and December 2016, during a walk" → "and December 2016 during a walk"
Should it be mentioned that the leaves were blown off trees or maybe change to "blown away"?
changed it to the former.
"are credited as songwriters. Production was solely handled by Pdogg." → "are credited as songwriters on "Spring Day", with the latter of the seven solely handling production"
Remove wikilink on South Korea as it's too obvious
"It was" → "The track was"
"Jeong Wooyeong, and Peter Ibsen," → "Jeong Wooyeong, and Ibsen,"
Remove wikilink on lead single
Are you sure [9] is needed here since it does not directly state the song was the lead single?
"lead single" is already backed up by that teaser article so mentioning it here is merely a repetition, does it still need to be covered here? Also, keeping [9] since it serves a secondary ref. for the release date, etc.
Yes it is fine since you are stating afterwards about the digital download and streaming release, so the repetition is not 100% identical --
K. Peake08:16, 2 September 2020 (UTC)reply
"(2017)." → "(2017) in the same language." since this is a lot better prose and we know "same language" refers to Japanese here
"It was also released" → "The single album was simultaneously released"
"in Japan on the same day." → "in Japan."
"The lyrics for the Japanese version" → "The lyrics for the Japanese version of "Spring Day""
Are you sure KM-Markit shouldn't be in all caps?
[15] does not back up that he wrote the song
Changed to
liner notes since an editor confirmed that the CD credits him.
"third Japanese-language studio album," → "third Japanese-language studio album"
Done Everything else here
Music and lyrics
"driven by
rock instrumentals." → "driven by
rock instrumentation." on the audio sample text
[20] needs to be added to the sample text for verifying the ballad statement
ref. [20] states that the song is a
power ballad: "With "Spring Day", BTS challenged that perception by analyzing grief and yearning in the form of a sweeping power ballad".
"best song and labelled it as an" → "best song, labelling the track an"
"it is " a classic" → "it is "a classic"
"acclaimed the song stating" → "acclaimed the song, stating"
"also of the same publication, described it" → "of the same publication, described the song"
""the ballad’s complex" → ""the ballad's complex"
Remove wikilink on K-pop
"songs of 2017." → "songs of 2017 on their respective lists." since otherwise, it sounds like they compiled only one list all together
"The former ranked it" → "The former of the three ranked it"
"of 2010s." → "of the 2010s."
Saying publication here is fine I guess, since it may read tiring to always instate magazine when not directly saying Billboard
"wrote that "'Spring Day'’s existence is" → "wrote that the existence of the song "is"
"representation of BTS’s artistry." → "representation of [BTS'] artistry.""
"on their list" → "on their 2020 list"
"won the Song of the Year at" → "won the Song of the Year award at"
Also, the above sentence and what follows it should be the sole para in prose for an awards sub-section in this section, which I will instruct below
The Best Music Video award belongs in the video's reception instead
Target to Music programs of South Korea should solely be on "weekly music programs" but keep the prose identical here
"due to its substantial success" → "due to the substantial success of the song"
For the awards subsection, it should have the two tables below the prose that I said to start it with and keep the tables separate; title the sub-section to Awards
The columns below the headers of the tables should not be centered
Are you sure the ones past the 9th Melon Music Awards don't have the numbered order of the first two?
Again, best music video should not be here so remove it from the first table
Done all, I think
Commercial performance
The chart crashing was the album not the song, also is [52] really needed here?
yes, reworded accordingly.
"number one on the" → "atop the country's"
"number-one hit." → "number one hit." though this "second" hit claim does not appear to be backed up by the source, unless it is in a sidebar or something that I've missed?
removed the second part.
"digital units in its" → "digital units in the"
"of the February 2017 issue" → "for the February 2017 issue"
Kyle Peake, pinging you, I think that I've addressed all concerns above but might have missed something out. Thank you for being patient and taking time reviewing this. You're very methodical with every review which I really appreciate. But it would've been probably best if I'd have submitted this article at the GOCE for a copy-edit before nominating.
--
Ashleyyoursmile!09:50, 3 September 2020 (UTC)reply
Ashleyyoursmile✓Pass time after fantastic work from you, massive well done on the amazing response time for all of the sections!!! I am glad you appreciate my reviewing, I believe it is my duty to give the best and most relevant comments possible consistently. --
K. Peake11:33, 3 September 2020 (UTC)reply
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Japanese credits
Carlobunnie, pinging you again, I'm confused about the Japanese credits of the song.
The Tower Japan ref. here doesn't credit
KM-MARKIT for the Japanese translation for "Spring Day", even though it does for other Japanese tracks on the album. The credits on
Tidal mentions just the original composers and producer. I have been looking for quite sometime to find an alternate source for it but to no avail; neither do I own the physical CD of Face Yourself. I'd be really grateful for your opinion. --
Ashleyyoursmile!10:40, 2 September 2020 (UTC)reply
Hey
Ïvana, would you mind terribly replacing the NCN ref for the 400mil views with Newsen or Daily Sports or somebody similar? It's not a bad source but those ones are better to use. --
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talk)
01:32, 5 April 2021 (UTC)reply
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Links for UK Independent Singles+Single Download charts
Ukiss2ne14lyfe the links in the weekly charts table that you added in this edit
here from Oct 2018 for these 2 charts don't reflect the data in the table. SD doesn't appear on the Independent Singles Chart dd May 25, 2018 and the Single Download chart link just reflects the current chart ranking. I'm unsure which archive of the chart to search for as Spring Day doesn't show up in BTS chart history on the site either. --
Carlobunnie (
talk)
23:40, 12 July 2020 (UTC)reply
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
"chart" is not needed at the end of the Billboard sentence since the chart has clearly been named
"The Ones Who Walk Away from Omelas" should be surrounded by speech marks and not italicised
Are you sure something shouldn't be written about what the video features?
A lot of metaphors are featured in the visual, so it's difficult to pinpoint one thing, but I'll look into it.
"symbolism and won" → "symbolism and was awarded"
"BTS promoted the song" → "BTS promoted "Spring Day"
"It was also included" → "The song was also included"
Are you sure set list should be wikilinked?
Any reason it shouldn't be targeted? I've seen a few GAs with the wikilink so I kept it that way.
I was thinking it was too obvious, but was kind of unsure so if I numerous GAs have the wikilink then you can keep it, I guess. --
K. Peake20:45, 1 September 2020 (UTC)reply
"of their second worldwide" → "of the band's second worldwide"
Done Everything else.
Background and release
"at number one on the" → "at number one on South Korea's"
"of 2016 in South Korea." → "of 2016 in the country."
"in January 2017, that a sequel" → "in January 2017 that a sequel"
"to be a part of the reissue, when the band" → "to be slated for release on the reissue when the band subsequently" to specify it was around that time
"On February 10 of that year, it was" → "On February 10, 2017, the song was"
"the first
single from the album." → "the
lead single from You Never Walk Alone." with the wikilink
[5] should not be invoked at this point since [4] backs up everything in the sentence
"main melody of the song. He wrote it between" → "main melody of the song, which he wrote between"
"and December 2016, during a walk" → "and December 2016 during a walk"
Should it be mentioned that the leaves were blown off trees or maybe change to "blown away"?
changed it to the former.
"are credited as songwriters. Production was solely handled by Pdogg." → "are credited as songwriters on "Spring Day", with the latter of the seven solely handling production"
Remove wikilink on South Korea as it's too obvious
"It was" → "The track was"
"Jeong Wooyeong, and Peter Ibsen," → "Jeong Wooyeong, and Ibsen,"
Remove wikilink on lead single
Are you sure [9] is needed here since it does not directly state the song was the lead single?
"lead single" is already backed up by that teaser article so mentioning it here is merely a repetition, does it still need to be covered here? Also, keeping [9] since it serves a secondary ref. for the release date, etc.
Yes it is fine since you are stating afterwards about the digital download and streaming release, so the repetition is not 100% identical --
K. Peake08:16, 2 September 2020 (UTC)reply
"(2017)." → "(2017) in the same language." since this is a lot better prose and we know "same language" refers to Japanese here
"It was also released" → "The single album was simultaneously released"
"in Japan on the same day." → "in Japan."
"The lyrics for the Japanese version" → "The lyrics for the Japanese version of "Spring Day""
Are you sure KM-Markit shouldn't be in all caps?
[15] does not back up that he wrote the song
Changed to
liner notes since an editor confirmed that the CD credits him.
"third Japanese-language studio album," → "third Japanese-language studio album"
Done Everything else here
Music and lyrics
"driven by
rock instrumentals." → "driven by
rock instrumentation." on the audio sample text
[20] needs to be added to the sample text for verifying the ballad statement
ref. [20] states that the song is a
power ballad: "With "Spring Day", BTS challenged that perception by analyzing grief and yearning in the form of a sweeping power ballad".
"best song and labelled it as an" → "best song, labelling the track an"
"it is " a classic" → "it is "a classic"
"acclaimed the song stating" → "acclaimed the song, stating"
"also of the same publication, described it" → "of the same publication, described the song"
""the ballad’s complex" → ""the ballad's complex"
Remove wikilink on K-pop
"songs of 2017." → "songs of 2017 on their respective lists." since otherwise, it sounds like they compiled only one list all together
"The former ranked it" → "The former of the three ranked it"
"of 2010s." → "of the 2010s."
Saying publication here is fine I guess, since it may read tiring to always instate magazine when not directly saying Billboard
"wrote that "'Spring Day'’s existence is" → "wrote that the existence of the song "is"
"representation of BTS’s artistry." → "representation of [BTS'] artistry.""
"on their list" → "on their 2020 list"
"won the Song of the Year at" → "won the Song of the Year award at"
Also, the above sentence and what follows it should be the sole para in prose for an awards sub-section in this section, which I will instruct below
The Best Music Video award belongs in the video's reception instead
Target to Music programs of South Korea should solely be on "weekly music programs" but keep the prose identical here
"due to its substantial success" → "due to the substantial success of the song"
For the awards subsection, it should have the two tables below the prose that I said to start it with and keep the tables separate; title the sub-section to Awards
The columns below the headers of the tables should not be centered
Are you sure the ones past the 9th Melon Music Awards don't have the numbered order of the first two?
Again, best music video should not be here so remove it from the first table
Done all, I think
Commercial performance
The chart crashing was the album not the song, also is [52] really needed here?
yes, reworded accordingly.
"number one on the" → "atop the country's"
"number-one hit." → "number one hit." though this "second" hit claim does not appear to be backed up by the source, unless it is in a sidebar or something that I've missed?
removed the second part.
"digital units in its" → "digital units in the"
"of the February 2017 issue" → "for the February 2017 issue"
Kyle Peake, pinging you, I think that I've addressed all concerns above but might have missed something out. Thank you for being patient and taking time reviewing this. You're very methodical with every review which I really appreciate. But it would've been probably best if I'd have submitted this article at the GOCE for a copy-edit before nominating.
--
Ashleyyoursmile!09:50, 3 September 2020 (UTC)reply
Ashleyyoursmile✓Pass time after fantastic work from you, massive well done on the amazing response time for all of the sections!!! I am glad you appreciate my reviewing, I believe it is my duty to give the best and most relevant comments possible consistently. --
K. Peake11:33, 3 September 2020 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
Japanese credits
Carlobunnie, pinging you again, I'm confused about the Japanese credits of the song.
The Tower Japan ref. here doesn't credit
KM-MARKIT for the Japanese translation for "Spring Day", even though it does for other Japanese tracks on the album. The credits on
Tidal mentions just the original composers and producer. I have been looking for quite sometime to find an alternate source for it but to no avail; neither do I own the physical CD of Face Yourself. I'd be really grateful for your opinion. --
Ashleyyoursmile!10:40, 2 September 2020 (UTC)reply
Hey
Ïvana, would you mind terribly replacing the NCN ref for the 400mil views with Newsen or Daily Sports or somebody similar? It's not a bad source but those ones are better to use. --
Carlobunnie (
talk)
01:32, 5 April 2021 (UTC)reply