Accidentally commented in the wrong area; I will attempt to do everything the best I can, although I'll likely be unavailable for several hours starting 3:30 PM (AEDT). Added alt text to the cover art and image.
Shadowboxer2005 (
talk)
04:10, 7 March 2024 (UTC)reply
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with
the layout style guideline:
B.
Reliable sources are
cited inline. All content that
could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
Overall looks great; but shouldn't the characters need a source for their presence in the video game?
No concerns about captions; though why not add alt text?
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
Comments
Sources cited inline
"Players can also collect rings scattered across the track; collecting a certain number of rings will cause their character to level up for the remainder of the race, increasing the strength of their abilities and extending their maximum air capacity." – I don't see a provided source for this.
"the remainder are unlocked through progression in the game's story mode and by winning Gold in both the World Grand Prix tournaments, in which players race through five consecutive tracks and attempt to get the highest overall score." – no source here, either!
Shouldn't the characters that appear in the video game need a source?
Prose
"intersect with one another: The "Heroes" story, focusing on Sonic, Tails, and Knuckles" – shouldn't "the" be not capitalized following the colon? Additionally, why not change "focusing" to "focused"?
"and the "Babylon" story, focusing on the Babylon Rogues, consisting of new characters" – try "and the "Babylon" story, focused on the Babylon Rogues and includes new characters".
"received many requests from fans for another Sonic racer" – how about "many" to "numerous"?
"never officially greenlit" – I'd use another word to better describe "greenlit".
I couldn't find anything relating to upgrades in-race from collecting rings, but I did find them referencing purchasing equipment with them, so I changed it to reference that.
Couldn't find references for the winning Gold part, removed.
While I could potentially find all the characters through enough reference digging, it'll probably be very annoying to do so, so I've expunged the section.
After doing some digging, I managed to find references from reliable sites for every character, and have re-added the section accordingly. --
Cyberlink420 (
talk)
23:44, 8 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Alright,
Shadowboxer2005, I think you've addressed most of my prose concerns! My remaining concern is that the re-wording to "picked up" – I think there still could be a better phrase/term to describe it, and to clarify how he never "picked up" on it. Otherwise, I'm still working on the source review and spotchecks; this'll be complete in the next several hours or so (I'm slightly busy at the moment). :) ~
TailsWx (
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me!)
17:31, 8 March 2024 (UTC)reply
"consisting of hover boards, hover skates, and hover bikes" – the Kidzworld reference doesn't verify the skates and bikes that appear in the game, though it does state that there are skateboards in the game.
"which will give them a sudden burst of speed at the cost of a significant amount of air" – the 1UP reference doesn't verify the significant air loss, though it does verify the speed boost!
"If a player boosts into an opponent, their character will attack and stun the opponent for a brief period" – reference 9 does verify the character attacking, though it doesn't mention how it stuns the opponent for a brief period.
"Only five tracks are accessible from the start" – reference 8 doesn't mention this.
Thanks! Almost good to go! I do, however, believe there is a possibility that there is a source for the character attacking and stunning an opponent for a brief period, and even the skates and bikes being used in the game. Pinging
Cyberlink420 for this since they did track down references to use for unsourced statements above! ~
TailsWx (
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me!)
03:12, 9 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Found an IGN hands-on that verifies the skates and bikes, as well as using attacks to "cast aside the other racer" (which I phrased as "slow them down", though I do wonder if that's the best word; "overtake them" might be closer to IGN's intended meaning and more accurate to
what actually happens). EDIT: Switching it to overtake; it's more accurate and fits with IGN's description. --
Cyberlink420 (
talk)
03:58, 9 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Accidentally commented in the wrong area; I will attempt to do everything the best I can, although I'll likely be unavailable for several hours starting 3:30 PM (AEDT). Added alt text to the cover art and image.
Shadowboxer2005 (
talk)
04:10, 7 March 2024 (UTC)reply
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with
the layout style guideline:
B.
Reliable sources are
cited inline. All content that
could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
Overall looks great; but shouldn't the characters need a source for their presence in the video game?
No concerns about captions; though why not add alt text?
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
Comments
Sources cited inline
"Players can also collect rings scattered across the track; collecting a certain number of rings will cause their character to level up for the remainder of the race, increasing the strength of their abilities and extending their maximum air capacity." – I don't see a provided source for this.
"the remainder are unlocked through progression in the game's story mode and by winning Gold in both the World Grand Prix tournaments, in which players race through five consecutive tracks and attempt to get the highest overall score." – no source here, either!
Shouldn't the characters that appear in the video game need a source?
Prose
"intersect with one another: The "Heroes" story, focusing on Sonic, Tails, and Knuckles" – shouldn't "the" be not capitalized following the colon? Additionally, why not change "focusing" to "focused"?
"and the "Babylon" story, focusing on the Babylon Rogues, consisting of new characters" – try "and the "Babylon" story, focused on the Babylon Rogues and includes new characters".
"received many requests from fans for another Sonic racer" – how about "many" to "numerous"?
"never officially greenlit" – I'd use another word to better describe "greenlit".
I couldn't find anything relating to upgrades in-race from collecting rings, but I did find them referencing purchasing equipment with them, so I changed it to reference that.
Couldn't find references for the winning Gold part, removed.
While I could potentially find all the characters through enough reference digging, it'll probably be very annoying to do so, so I've expunged the section.
After doing some digging, I managed to find references from reliable sites for every character, and have re-added the section accordingly. --
Cyberlink420 (
talk)
23:44, 8 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Alright,
Shadowboxer2005, I think you've addressed most of my prose concerns! My remaining concern is that the re-wording to "picked up" – I think there still could be a better phrase/term to describe it, and to clarify how he never "picked up" on it. Otherwise, I'm still working on the source review and spotchecks; this'll be complete in the next several hours or so (I'm slightly busy at the moment). :) ~
TailsWx (
🐾,
me!)
17:31, 8 March 2024 (UTC)reply
"consisting of hover boards, hover skates, and hover bikes" – the Kidzworld reference doesn't verify the skates and bikes that appear in the game, though it does state that there are skateboards in the game.
"which will give them a sudden burst of speed at the cost of a significant amount of air" – the 1UP reference doesn't verify the significant air loss, though it does verify the speed boost!
"If a player boosts into an opponent, their character will attack and stun the opponent for a brief period" – reference 9 does verify the character attacking, though it doesn't mention how it stuns the opponent for a brief period.
"Only five tracks are accessible from the start" – reference 8 doesn't mention this.
Thanks! Almost good to go! I do, however, believe there is a possibility that there is a source for the character attacking and stunning an opponent for a brief period, and even the skates and bikes being used in the game. Pinging
Cyberlink420 for this since they did track down references to use for unsourced statements above! ~
TailsWx (
🐾,
me!)
03:12, 9 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Found an IGN hands-on that verifies the skates and bikes, as well as using attacks to "cast aside the other racer" (which I phrased as "slow them down", though I do wonder if that's the best word; "overtake them" might be closer to IGN's intended meaning and more accurate to
what actually happens). EDIT: Switching it to overtake; it's more accurate and fits with IGN's description. --
Cyberlink420 (
talk)
03:58, 9 March 2024 (UTC)reply