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While I agree with the AFC reviewer that this seems too detailed, I don't think that is a valid reason for declining the article and leaving it to be deleted under G13. Too much detail is not really a valid reason for AFC decline and is a lot easier to fix than no detail. Spinning Spark 13:47, 28 December 2013 (UTC)
Parts of this article are obviously original research as the writer directly states things like "in my opinion" etc. Definitely needs a through cleanup job. Parts are at times too detailed and the article even describes the same events twice over in some places. Unfortunately, I don't have the skills to do the required editing. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 98.196.191.12 ( talk) 14:46, 27 May 2014 (UTC)
I have been attempting to edit this to change the tense from present to past as well as clean up some simple style errors, but I've also been running across some POV issues as well. The Pemmican War, and its culmination in the Battle of Seven Oaks, was a series of mistrusts, misunderstandings, competitions, disputes, and skirmishes between the Hudson Bay Company and the North West Company, in which both were at fault to varying degrees. I recognize some of the narrative here as coming from an anglophile history written early in the 20th century (it may have been copied from that) which blamed the North West Company and Métis almost exclusively, and held the Hudson Bay Company almost entirely blameless. This needs more than a grammar cleanup; it needs to have a POV cleanup. I'm not a regular enough contributor to know the intricacies of that part of Wikipedia. Can someone please mark this article as having a POV dispute?
-- Couillaud 18:44, 15 January 2015 (UTC)
On reading a little of the Pritchard and Boucher accounts certain passages might need to be removed or rewritten or explained like the following:
-- Kayoty ( talk) 18:41, 19 January 2015 (UTC)
Removed the following sections and reworded some sentences:
Not yet completed.-- Kayoty ( talk) 08:14, 3 February 2015 (UTC)
In the section "Attacks on the colony and the burning of Fort Douglas", the clause "...and John Warren was nearly killed when his wall gun bursts" makes no sense. I cannot fix it because I don't know what it's supposed to mean. Acwilson9 ( talk) 07:30, 7 December 2017 (UTC)
In the section about the Battle of Seven Oaks, the battle is said to have gone on for 25 minutes. However, in the Battle of Seven Oaks article, the battle is said to have gone on for 15 minutes. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 96.48.91.176 ( talk) 00:30, 27 February 2018 (UTC)
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While I agree with the AFC reviewer that this seems too detailed, I don't think that is a valid reason for declining the article and leaving it to be deleted under G13. Too much detail is not really a valid reason for AFC decline and is a lot easier to fix than no detail. Spinning Spark 13:47, 28 December 2013 (UTC)
Parts of this article are obviously original research as the writer directly states things like "in my opinion" etc. Definitely needs a through cleanup job. Parts are at times too detailed and the article even describes the same events twice over in some places. Unfortunately, I don't have the skills to do the required editing. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 98.196.191.12 ( talk) 14:46, 27 May 2014 (UTC)
I have been attempting to edit this to change the tense from present to past as well as clean up some simple style errors, but I've also been running across some POV issues as well. The Pemmican War, and its culmination in the Battle of Seven Oaks, was a series of mistrusts, misunderstandings, competitions, disputes, and skirmishes between the Hudson Bay Company and the North West Company, in which both were at fault to varying degrees. I recognize some of the narrative here as coming from an anglophile history written early in the 20th century (it may have been copied from that) which blamed the North West Company and Métis almost exclusively, and held the Hudson Bay Company almost entirely blameless. This needs more than a grammar cleanup; it needs to have a POV cleanup. I'm not a regular enough contributor to know the intricacies of that part of Wikipedia. Can someone please mark this article as having a POV dispute?
-- Couillaud 18:44, 15 January 2015 (UTC)
On reading a little of the Pritchard and Boucher accounts certain passages might need to be removed or rewritten or explained like the following:
-- Kayoty ( talk) 18:41, 19 January 2015 (UTC)
Removed the following sections and reworded some sentences:
Not yet completed.-- Kayoty ( talk) 08:14, 3 February 2015 (UTC)
In the section "Attacks on the colony and the burning of Fort Douglas", the clause "...and John Warren was nearly killed when his wall gun bursts" makes no sense. I cannot fix it because I don't know what it's supposed to mean. Acwilson9 ( talk) 07:30, 7 December 2017 (UTC)
In the section about the Battle of Seven Oaks, the battle is said to have gone on for 25 minutes. However, in the Battle of Seven Oaks article, the battle is said to have gone on for 15 minutes. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 96.48.91.176 ( talk) 00:30, 27 February 2018 (UTC)