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A fact from Patricia Banks Edmiston appeared on Wikipedia's
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The result was: promoted by
Vaticidalprophet (
talk) 03:03, 15 July 2023 (UTC)
Created by FormalDude ( talk). Self-nominated at 21:52, 1 July 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Patricia Banks-Edmiston; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.
From the request at Wikipedia:WikiProject Women in Green/20-Minute Article Assessments. I'll make notes against each of the Wikipedia:Good article criteria. BennyOnTheLoose ( talk) 12:52, 16 October 2023 (UTC)
Copyvio check: In my opinion, the level of similarity with The History Makers source is unacceptable, unless there is a suitable explanation such as that site taking content from Wikipedia. (See https://copyvios.toolforge.org/?lang=en&project=wikipedia&oldid=1179595926&action=compare&url=https%3A%2F%2Fwww.thehistorymakers.org%2Fbiography%2Fpatricia-banks-edmiston). Some of the phrases are fine per WP:LIMITED but the rest needs to be rewritten in line with Wikipedia:Plagiarism; also see Wikipedia:Close paraphrasing.
1. Well-written.
2. Verifiable with no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage and 4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio
BennyOnTheLoose ( talk) 12:52, 16 October 2023 (UTC)
Thanks for your work on the article FormalDude. Obviously the similarity with The History Makers source needs to be addressed. I'm happy to take another look after that. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose ( talk) 12:56, 16 October 2023 (UTC)
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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Reviewer: Thebiguglyalien ( talk · contribs) 15:19, 24 October 2023 (UTC)
I'll get this reviewed some time today. Hopefully we can get all of the Women in Green nominations reviewed before the event ends.
Thebiguglyalien (
talk) 15:19, 24 October 2023 (UTC)
FormalDude, the review is posted below. Thebiguglyalien ( talk) 18:24, 24 October 2023 (UTC)
She actively combated– "actively" doesn't add anything here.
paving the way– Avoid idioms
after seeking advice from Adam Clayton Powell Jr.– The reader should have a general idea of who this is and why he was involved without clicking the link.
as "they have 570 employed hostesses and not one is a Negro," in fact none of the airline's 1,350 persons employed in a flight capacity were– Is there a conjunction missing here? It might be best to rewrite this sentence.
On May 6th, 1960– Avoid ordinals in dates.
Beginning in 1970, Banks Edmiston served as a counselor at New York City's Addicts Rehabilitation Center until 1972– "Beginning in" and "until" are mismatched.
Emidston also dedicated her expertise as a member of the board of directors for the Black Flight Attendants of America.– I'm not sure what this is trying to say. Does her expertise mean her experience with the legal challenge?
Edmiston practiced Shotokan and is a black belt holder– Is this supposed to be past tense and then present tense?
Spot checks:
similar to other Black women at the time, encountered consistent rejections. The source says similar to other Black women in her predicament, faced rejection from them all.
Edmiston remembered facing violent threats following the verdict and had to seek law enforcement assistance to safeguard her well-being. The source says Banks-Edmiston recalled that she received threats of violence in letters after the ruling and needed protection from law enforcement to ensure her safety.
he pressure of needing to maintain a flawless record in order to preserve future prospects for other Black flight attendants, combined with the racial discrimination she encountered while flying in the Southern United States, exacted a significant emotional toll on Edmiston. The source says the constant pressure of having to be infallible so as to not ruin future opportunities for other aspiring Black stewardesses, coupled with the racism she experienced flying through the South, took a great emotional toll on her. She resigned a year later in order to further pursue her education
No issues.
No recent disputes.
Both images are public domain and suitably captioned.
Patricia Banks Edmiston has been listed as one of the
Engineering and technology good articles under the
good article criteria. If you can improve it further,
please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can
reassess it. Review: October 25, 2023. ( Reviewed version). |
This article must adhere to the biographies of living persons (BLP) policy, even if it is not a biography, because it contains material about living persons. Contentious material about living persons that is unsourced or poorly sourced must be removed immediately from the article and its talk page, especially if potentially libellous. If such material is repeatedly inserted, or if you have other concerns, please report the issue to this noticeboard.If you are a subject of this article, or acting on behalf of one, and you need help, please see this help page. |
This article is rated GA-class on Wikipedia's
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A fact from Patricia Banks Edmiston appeared on Wikipedia's
Main Page in the
Did you know column on 19 July 2023 (
check views). The text of the entry was as follows:
|
The result was: promoted by
Vaticidalprophet (
talk) 03:03, 15 July 2023 (UTC)
Created by FormalDude ( talk). Self-nominated at 21:52, 1 July 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Patricia Banks-Edmiston; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.
From the request at Wikipedia:WikiProject Women in Green/20-Minute Article Assessments. I'll make notes against each of the Wikipedia:Good article criteria. BennyOnTheLoose ( talk) 12:52, 16 October 2023 (UTC)
Copyvio check: In my opinion, the level of similarity with The History Makers source is unacceptable, unless there is a suitable explanation such as that site taking content from Wikipedia. (See https://copyvios.toolforge.org/?lang=en&project=wikipedia&oldid=1179595926&action=compare&url=https%3A%2F%2Fwww.thehistorymakers.org%2Fbiography%2Fpatricia-banks-edmiston). Some of the phrases are fine per WP:LIMITED but the rest needs to be rewritten in line with Wikipedia:Plagiarism; also see Wikipedia:Close paraphrasing.
1. Well-written.
2. Verifiable with no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage and 4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio
BennyOnTheLoose ( talk) 12:52, 16 October 2023 (UTC)
Thanks for your work on the article FormalDude. Obviously the similarity with The History Makers source needs to be addressed. I'm happy to take another look after that. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose ( talk) 12:56, 16 October 2023 (UTC)
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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Reviewer: Thebiguglyalien ( talk · contribs) 15:19, 24 October 2023 (UTC)
I'll get this reviewed some time today. Hopefully we can get all of the Women in Green nominations reviewed before the event ends.
Thebiguglyalien (
talk) 15:19, 24 October 2023 (UTC)
FormalDude, the review is posted below. Thebiguglyalien ( talk) 18:24, 24 October 2023 (UTC)
She actively combated– "actively" doesn't add anything here.
paving the way– Avoid idioms
after seeking advice from Adam Clayton Powell Jr.– The reader should have a general idea of who this is and why he was involved without clicking the link.
as "they have 570 employed hostesses and not one is a Negro," in fact none of the airline's 1,350 persons employed in a flight capacity were– Is there a conjunction missing here? It might be best to rewrite this sentence.
On May 6th, 1960– Avoid ordinals in dates.
Beginning in 1970, Banks Edmiston served as a counselor at New York City's Addicts Rehabilitation Center until 1972– "Beginning in" and "until" are mismatched.
Emidston also dedicated her expertise as a member of the board of directors for the Black Flight Attendants of America.– I'm not sure what this is trying to say. Does her expertise mean her experience with the legal challenge?
Edmiston practiced Shotokan and is a black belt holder– Is this supposed to be past tense and then present tense?
Spot checks:
similar to other Black women at the time, encountered consistent rejections. The source says similar to other Black women in her predicament, faced rejection from them all.
Edmiston remembered facing violent threats following the verdict and had to seek law enforcement assistance to safeguard her well-being. The source says Banks-Edmiston recalled that she received threats of violence in letters after the ruling and needed protection from law enforcement to ensure her safety.
he pressure of needing to maintain a flawless record in order to preserve future prospects for other Black flight attendants, combined with the racial discrimination she encountered while flying in the Southern United States, exacted a significant emotional toll on Edmiston. The source says the constant pressure of having to be infallible so as to not ruin future opportunities for other aspiring Black stewardesses, coupled with the racism she experienced flying through the South, took a great emotional toll on her. She resigned a year later in order to further pursue her education
No issues.
No recent disputes.
Both images are public domain and suitably captioned.