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Perhaps this article would benefit from a more informative infobox that summarized the forces (armour, artillery, etc) available on both sides, and indeed listed the outcome of the operation as one might expect for such a box. Overall the article could similarly benefit from additional overview to assist the reader who may be unfamiliar with the acronyms and historic details. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 19:16, 10 April 2013 (UTC)
Here's an example:
The HV concluded that the JNA offensive operations of April and May 1992 capturing Kupres and much of the Neretva River valley south of Mostar were aimed at capturing or threatening Croatian Port of Ploče and possibly Split, leading the Croatian leadership to deploy the HV to the area and assign General Janko Bobetko as the commanding officer of the "Southern Front" theatre of operations encompassing the area of Operation Jackal.
The quoted sentence has 71 words and at least 7 verbs. Its Flesch-Kincaid Grade Level is 33.0 (i.e. extremely few people can understand it), and its Flesch Reading Ease is 0% (i.e. extremely unreadable). I don't recall ever seeing a 0% on this measure before. I tried splitting it into 5 short sentences, giving an F-K Grade Level of 10.5 (i.e. a grade 10 school pupil can read it) and reading ease of 46.6%.
Perhaps it would be a good idea to scan the article for other sentences with complex structure. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 06:43, 11 April 2013 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Zawed ( talk · contribs) 11:16, 12 May 2013 (UTC)
I will start reviewing this one in the next few days. Zawed ( talk) 11:16, 12 May 2013 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
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The main issues detected relate to continuity, clarity and context. The GA toolbox doesn't want to work for me today, so I can't check disambig links or the external links at the moment. I also made a few minor tweaks to the text as I went along. Zawed ( talk) 22:43, 13 May 2013 (UTC)
Thanks for the review. I'll try to address the issues you raised right away.-- Tomobe03 ( talk) 22:57, 13 May 2013 (UTC)
![]() | This article is written in British English, which has its own spelling conventions (colour, travelled, centre, defence, artefact, analyse) and some terms that are used in it may be different or absent from other varieties of English. According to the relevant style guide, this should not be changed without broad consensus. |
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Perhaps this article would benefit from a more informative infobox that summarized the forces (armour, artillery, etc) available on both sides, and indeed listed the outcome of the operation as one might expect for such a box. Overall the article could similarly benefit from additional overview to assist the reader who may be unfamiliar with the acronyms and historic details. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 19:16, 10 April 2013 (UTC)
Here's an example:
The HV concluded that the JNA offensive operations of April and May 1992 capturing Kupres and much of the Neretva River valley south of Mostar were aimed at capturing or threatening Croatian Port of Ploče and possibly Split, leading the Croatian leadership to deploy the HV to the area and assign General Janko Bobetko as the commanding officer of the "Southern Front" theatre of operations encompassing the area of Operation Jackal.
The quoted sentence has 71 words and at least 7 verbs. Its Flesch-Kincaid Grade Level is 33.0 (i.e. extremely few people can understand it), and its Flesch Reading Ease is 0% (i.e. extremely unreadable). I don't recall ever seeing a 0% on this measure before. I tried splitting it into 5 short sentences, giving an F-K Grade Level of 10.5 (i.e. a grade 10 school pupil can read it) and reading ease of 46.6%.
Perhaps it would be a good idea to scan the article for other sentences with complex structure. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 06:43, 11 April 2013 (UTC)
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Reviewing |
Reviewer: Zawed ( talk · contribs) 11:16, 12 May 2013 (UTC)
I will start reviewing this one in the next few days. Zawed ( talk) 11:16, 12 May 2013 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
Start of review
The main issues detected relate to continuity, clarity and context. The GA toolbox doesn't want to work for me today, so I can't check disambig links or the external links at the moment. I also made a few minor tweaks to the text as I went along. Zawed ( talk) 22:43, 13 May 2013 (UTC)
Thanks for the review. I'll try to address the issues you raised right away.-- Tomobe03 ( talk) 22:57, 13 May 2013 (UTC)