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Reviewer: JohnWickTwo ( talk · contribs) 16:55, 24 June 2018 (UTC)
This review may take a day or two to prepare. Meantime, could you take care of the cite requests at the bottom of the article, and possibly have a look at the paragraph breaks used in that same section with the cite request. The single sentence paragraphs look a little short and unbalanced. Let me know when you are ready to start.
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Shoot. Meant to say this earlier today. I'm going to be out of town tomorrow and most of Sunday. I will get right to it when I get back. I've got ideas on expanding per your request, but nothing quite ready to put in yet. dannymusiceditor oops 00:36, 30 June 2018 (UTC)
@ DannyMusicEditor: That looks good and I'll look for your new edits this evening. I think that your new edit should also be reflected into the lead section right before you introduce them going on tour in the second paragraph. After you try that, then it might be useful to start a third paragraph in the lede for the start of the promotional tour. You can decide what's best for the lede section in terms of 2 or 3 paragraph format once you try it. JohnWickTwo ( talk) 20:47, 10 July 2018 (UTC)
This article has received the benefit of a GOCE copy editing which has worked to its advantage. The nominating editor is knowledgeable of the band and its previous recording history, and has responded directly to edit requests made in this review by directly placing the edits into the article itself. The narrative of the article reads well and the images used are useful and all check out properly. The option of moving the lede to a three paragraph slightly expanded version may be useful if the article development is continued towards further peer review promotion. If the nominating editor has an interest in other article upgrades he may contact me on my Talk page. This article in now promoted to GA level. JohnWickTwo ( talk) 16:44, 15 July 2018 (UTC)
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Reviewer: JohnWickTwo ( talk · contribs) 16:55, 24 June 2018 (UTC)
This review may take a day or two to prepare. Meantime, could you take care of the cite requests at the bottom of the article, and possibly have a look at the paragraph breaks used in that same section with the cite request. The single sentence paragraphs look a little short and unbalanced. Let me know when you are ready to start.
JohnWickTwo (
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Shoot. Meant to say this earlier today. I'm going to be out of town tomorrow and most of Sunday. I will get right to it when I get back. I've got ideas on expanding per your request, but nothing quite ready to put in yet. dannymusiceditor oops 00:36, 30 June 2018 (UTC)
@ DannyMusicEditor: That looks good and I'll look for your new edits this evening. I think that your new edit should also be reflected into the lead section right before you introduce them going on tour in the second paragraph. After you try that, then it might be useful to start a third paragraph in the lede for the start of the promotional tour. You can decide what's best for the lede section in terms of 2 or 3 paragraph format once you try it. JohnWickTwo ( talk) 20:47, 10 July 2018 (UTC)
This article has received the benefit of a GOCE copy editing which has worked to its advantage. The nominating editor is knowledgeable of the band and its previous recording history, and has responded directly to edit requests made in this review by directly placing the edits into the article itself. The narrative of the article reads well and the images used are useful and all check out properly. The option of moving the lede to a three paragraph slightly expanded version may be useful if the article development is continued towards further peer review promotion. If the nominating editor has an interest in other article upgrades he may contact me on my Talk page. This article in now promoted to GA level. JohnWickTwo ( talk) 16:44, 15 July 2018 (UTC)