Hi, I will be reviewing this article tonight--
12george1 (
talk) 02:45, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
"Hurricane Harvey was the costliest tropical cyclone on record (tied with Hurricane Katrina of 2005), inflicting roughly $125 billion in damage across the Houston metropolitan area and Southeast Texas." - Considering that you do not mention this later in the article, you should add a citation
Added press release from NHC ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
"Harvey originated from a broad area of low pressure southwest of Cape Verde that was first detected on August 13. " - I think the word you want here is "monitored" instead of "detected". Surely with today's satellite technology it didn't go unnoticed until August 13
Fixed ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
In the lead, you linked tropical cyclone and Greater Houston twice (Houston metropolitan area redirects to Greater Houston)
Fixed ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
"and final landfall just west of Cameron, Louisiana on August 30 before" - Comma after Louisiana
Added comma ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
"On August 12, a tropical wave moved off the west coast of Africa;" - Considering that TCR elaborates on this, make sure you add about how it was accompanied by a "large convective mass"
Added the part in, along with a tidbit about a passing Kelvin wave that was also in the TCR. Realized I forgot to wikilink convection too ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
You probably should also mention where Harvey formed at 06:00 UTC on August 17, as it is more than 200 miles east of where the NHC began advisories
Added distance from Barbados as mentioned in TCR. ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
"An Air Force Reserve Hurricane Hunter aircraft investigating the disturbance from 18:00—21:00 UTC that day detected" - Mention August 17 again because now it's been three sentences since a date was last mentioned and now you're in a new paragraph
Good point. Added. ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
"towards the Caribbean Sea while the tropical wave moved further north" - Change further to farther because we're talking about distance
Fixed, that one gets me way too often. ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
"The center of Harvey crossed the coast near Cameron, Louisiana at 08:00 UTC" - Same as earlier with the comma after Louisiana
Added comma ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
Added the section ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
Why are Miami and the National Hurricane Center wikilinked on Ref 2?
Eh, I just removed all the wikilinks in the references since I wasn't really doing them consistently anyway. ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
Not a bad article. Just some mostly minor fixes needed to be fixed or addressed before I can pass--
12george1 (
talk) 02:45, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
Should be all done. Thanks for the review,
12george1. ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
I will now pass this article and list it as a GA. Nice work--
12george1 (
talk) 05:06, 3 July 2019 (UTC)reply
Hi, I will be reviewing this article tonight--
12george1 (
talk) 02:45, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
"Hurricane Harvey was the costliest tropical cyclone on record (tied with Hurricane Katrina of 2005), inflicting roughly $125 billion in damage across the Houston metropolitan area and Southeast Texas." - Considering that you do not mention this later in the article, you should add a citation
Added press release from NHC ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
"Harvey originated from a broad area of low pressure southwest of Cape Verde that was first detected on August 13. " - I think the word you want here is "monitored" instead of "detected". Surely with today's satellite technology it didn't go unnoticed until August 13
Fixed ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
In the lead, you linked tropical cyclone and Greater Houston twice (Houston metropolitan area redirects to Greater Houston)
Fixed ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
"and final landfall just west of Cameron, Louisiana on August 30 before" - Comma after Louisiana
Added comma ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
"On August 12, a tropical wave moved off the west coast of Africa;" - Considering that TCR elaborates on this, make sure you add about how it was accompanied by a "large convective mass"
Added the part in, along with a tidbit about a passing Kelvin wave that was also in the TCR. Realized I forgot to wikilink convection too ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
You probably should also mention where Harvey formed at 06:00 UTC on August 17, as it is more than 200 miles east of where the NHC began advisories
Added distance from Barbados as mentioned in TCR. ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
"An Air Force Reserve Hurricane Hunter aircraft investigating the disturbance from 18:00—21:00 UTC that day detected" - Mention August 17 again because now it's been three sentences since a date was last mentioned and now you're in a new paragraph
Good point. Added. ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
"towards the Caribbean Sea while the tropical wave moved further north" - Change further to farther because we're talking about distance
Fixed, that one gets me way too often. ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
"The center of Harvey crossed the coast near Cameron, Louisiana at 08:00 UTC" - Same as earlier with the comma after Louisiana
Added comma ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
Added the section ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
Why are Miami and the National Hurricane Center wikilinked on Ref 2?
Eh, I just removed all the wikilinks in the references since I wasn't really doing them consistently anyway. ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
Not a bad article. Just some mostly minor fixes needed to be fixed or addressed before I can pass--
12george1 (
talk) 02:45, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
Should be all done. Thanks for the review,
12george1. ~ KN2731 {
t ·
c} 10:54, 2 July 2019 (UTC)reply
I will now pass this article and list it as a GA. Nice work--
12george1 (
talk) 05:06, 3 July 2019 (UTC)reply