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Reviewer: Cooljeanius ( talk · contribs) 03:47, 4 February 2024 (UTC)
LGTM
Cooljeanius ( talk) ( contribs) 03:47, 4 February 2024 (UTC)
sparinglyas per WP:PARAGRAPH, but other than that, I think this is really close to GA! And feel free to correct me if I'm wrong about any of this of course. - Dcdiehardfan ( talk) 02:58, 27 February 2024 (UTC)
Katherine was unable to walk on her own poweras "power" may be mistaken for that of the oil burner and recommend improving the encyclopedic tone on this part:
Arthur had no small part in contributing to Wonalancet's popularity. The renown for his sled dogs and his breeding program attractedMay I recommend something like
Arthur also contributed to Wonalancet's popularity, as his sled dogs and breeding program attracted ...or something to that effect? Dcdiehardfan ( talk) 03:49, 28 February 2024 (UTC)
American environmental conservationist, you could also pipe
conservationistto conservation movement
her moveCan a better word choice be found for "move", perhaps residency or something a bit more formal? And could you also provide more information regarding when this takes place? If I understood it correctly, I think it's 1890
and moving to nearbyDoesn't grammatically make sense, I think you might've just mean "move"
trapped the infirm KatherineAgain, the tone slightly irks me a bit, I would recommend brevity here and perhaps go for something like:
There, a fire broke out and trapped her insidesince you've already clarified she was debilitated beforehand
rescuing his wife→
rescuing her, the article is centered around the subject, hence she should be the primary subject of the sentence
fight the fire→
extinguish the fire
Katherine Sleeper Waldenin the very beginning
greater Boston→
Greater Boston
well respected→
well-respectedsince it's an adjective
avidly participated into avoid repetitive word usage
through these tripsto the end of the sentence OR
to visit family, and came to love ... through her trips.
on a trip, I think it reads better and avoids repetition of "on a"
Upon facing serious health complications and receiving a doctor's recommendation to leave the city [insert actual city here, prolly Roxbury], Katherine moved to Tamworth, New Hampshire in 1890, but this is by no means necessary.
high-pitched. And what does "very slight" mean in this context?
eventual husbandpart, don't jump the gun here
Her claims of youth are often attributed to Arthur. I'd say that the 10 yr age gap isn't notable, but if you feel it is, I'd recommend moving it to that last sentence in the 1st para
breed, which is now the...
the propertyand
the large propertywith Wonalancet Farm.
Sleeperin the first sentence →
Katherine
located in present-day Ferncroft, New Hampshireor something of the like would help
by an untapped tourism industry→
by accommodating a tourism industry
and so invited the AMC officers→
, and thus invited AMC officers
After persuading/convincing the town, AMC leaders and a group of local farmers met a few days later to work on the proposed Dicey's Mill Trail path.
Over the following years→
In the following years
In 1893→
In 1893,
and so→
and thus
Katherine's encouragement of tourism resulted in immediate success as reporters began praising Wonalancet Farm as the perfect summer resort.Also, if these are quotes, attribute them as so. If not, I'd recommend rewording that last bit to something like
a good summer tourist destinationsince "perfect" is a bit WP:PUFFERY
Katherine Sleeper married Arthur Treadwell Walden in 1902
widespread renown→
widespread fame/acclaim, I think "renown" is a bit of an awkward word choice
gained national renown attracted→
gained national renown and attracted
fame of Wonalancet through the modern day→
sustained fame/continuous popularity of Wonalancet today is somewhat/partially attributed to Arthur Walden's personal fame (highly recommend changing renown). I'd then also suggest that if a specific commentator or newspaper said that, definitely attribute it to them, so it'd read like
fame attributed to Arthur's clout by XYZ. Also note the consistency points above, be consistent to how Wonalancet and Arthur is referred to as.
Katherine's conservation of the Bowl and her leadership in protecting the region against New England's "Timber Barons" was considered among her most important accomplishments.I'd even recommend relocating it to Legacy as it'll help flesh out the section a bit more
By the 1880s rural→
By the 1880s, rural
A cycle began in which a wide area of forest would be clearcut, and logging/lumber companies would litter downed logs, dried brush, and slashings over large areas. Hot coals and sparks from nearby railways could potentially ignite the readily supplied kindling
In response to the crisis Congress→
In response to the crisis, Congress
three thousand acresbut use the actual convert template for other acre figures. Also, clarify what "option" refers to. Does it presumably refer to option fee or something?
and regarded as an important site for research. Also, this could be relocated to Legacy too, if you think about it. I'll let you give your two-cents on this one.
Her efforts were successful enough that the French government awarded Katherine an official recognition and award for her effortsVery tautological I think.
She received an official recognition from the French government for her efforts. Also, do you know what this recognition was?
until the early 1930s
Katherine and Arthur ran Wonalancet Farm until the 1930s, when they began facing financial difficulties due to the Great Depression and the automobile's impact on travel.
There are sources that claim→
Other sources claim, and I'd reword moving to smth like "relocation"
These sources claim→
They also allege/purport, eliminate "that", change
forced out of the farmhouse→
evicted from the farmhouse and forced into a small cottage,
over the infirm Katherine in Arthur's absence→
over Katherine during Arthur's absence
These sources further claim→
Moreover, they claimor
Furthermore, they state, no need to reintroduce Arthur as Katherine's husband,
the couple's belongings→
their belongings
In either case,→
Nevertheless,,
fell on hard timessounds really weird, definitely reword that somehow
and the trails link Chinook Trail→
and it links Chinook Trail, clarify that National Forest refers to the WMNF specifically
caused a fire which quickly spread→
caused a fire, which quickly spread
fight the firecomment from the Lede here, I'd also recommend
and was killed by the blaze→
, but was killed attempting to do so
church which she organized the reconstruction of→
church in which she organized the reconstruction of
now vibrant
American environmental conservationist, you could also pipe
conservationistto conservation movement Done
her moveCan a better word choice be found for "move", perhaps residency or something a bit more formal? And could you also provide more information regarding when this takes place? If I understood it correctly, I think it's 1890 Done
and moving to nearbyDoesn't grammatically make sense, I think you might've just mean "move" Done
trapped the infirm KatherineAgain, the tone slightly irks me a bit, I would recommend brevity here and perhaps go for something like:
There, a fire broke out and trapped her insidesince you've already clarified she was debilitated beforehand Done
rescuing his wife→
rescuing her, the article is centered around the subject, hence she should be the primary subject of the sentence Done
fight the fire→
extinguish the fireDone
Katherine Sleeper Waldenin the very beginning Partly done I'm torn on that due to Katherine's name at birth was different than at death due to marriage.
greater Boston→
Greater BostonDone
well respected→
well-respectedsince it's an adjective Done
avidly participated into avoid repetitive word usage Comment:I'm assuming you did this already?
through these tripsto the end of the sentence OR
to visit family, and came to love ... through her trips. Done
on a trip, I think it reads better and avoids repetition of "on a" Done
Upon facing serious health complications and receiving a doctor's recommendation to leave the city [insert actual city here, prolly Roxbury], Katherine moved to Tamworth, New Hampshire in 1890, but this is by no means necessary. DoneChanged the order of the sentence's clauses
high-pitched. And what does "very slight" mean in this context? DoneChanged it up a bit, let me know if it likely isn't worthy of inclusion.
eventual husbandpart, don't jump the gun here DoneFair, fair
Her claims of youth are often attributed to Arthur. I'd say that the 10 yr age gap isn't notable, but if you feel it is, I'd recommend moving it to that last sentence in the 1st para Partly done Changed a good amount, not sure if you still feel this necessary
breed, which is now the...Done
the propertyand
the large propertywith Wonalancet Farm. Done
Sleeperin the first sentence →
KatherineDone
located in present-day Ferncroft, New Hampshireor something of the like would help Comment:I'm not certain how best to make that clarification. Birch Intervale was the name of Wonalancet prior to the town's first post office. Meaning there is no Birch Intervale because it is just Wonalancet before it was connected via post
by an untapped tourism industry→
by accommodating a tourism industryDone
and so invited the AMC officers→
, and thus invited AMC officersDone
After persuading/convincing the town, AMC leaders and a group of local farmers met a few days later to work on the proposed Dicey's Mill Trail path.Done
Over the following years→
In the following yearsDone
In 1893→
In 1893,Done
and so→
and thusDone
Katherine's encouragement of tourism resulted in immediate success as reporters began praising Wonalancet Farm as the perfect summer resort.Also, if these are quotes, attribute them as so. If not, I'd recommend rewording that last bit to something like
a good summer tourist destinationsince "perfect" is a bit WP:PUFFERY Done WP:Peacock is an easy trap to fall into :(
Katherine Sleeper married Arthur Treadwell Walden in 1902Done
widespread renown→
widespread fame/acclaim, I think "renown" is a bit of an awkward word choice Done
gained national renown attracted→
gained national renown and attractedDone
fame of Wonalancet through the modern day→
sustained fame/continuous popularity of Wonalancet today is somewhat/partially attributed to Arthur Walden's personal fame (highly recommend changing renown). I'd then also suggest that if a specific commentator or newspaper said that, definitely attribute it to them, so it'd read like
fame attributed to Arthur's clout by XYZ. Also note the consistency points above, be consistent to how Wonalancet and Arthur is referred to as. Done I tend to find the most clear and pretty way to make a bold statement is to make the bold assertion and use a direct and clear citation to a verifiable source that says exactly that. So I tend to lean into the idea that perspective on a claim ought to be in the given citation where reasonable/possible.
Katherine's conservation of the Bowl and her leadership in protecting the region against New England's "Timber Barons" was considered among her most important accomplishments.I'd even recommend relocating it to Legacy as it'll help flesh out the section a bit more Partly doneI worked on implementing this fully but it was proving a difficult task to properly flow. So, while keeping much of the formatting and placement the same, I changed some phrasing and copied over what fit to the legacy section.
By the 1880s rural→
By the 1880s, ruralDone
A cycle began in which a wide area of forest would be clearcut, and logging/lumber companies would litter downed logs, dried brush, and slashings over large areas. Hot coals and sparks from nearby railways could potentially ignite the readily supplied kindlingDone
In response to the crisis Congress→
In response to the crisis, CongressDone
three thousand acresbut use the actual convert template for other acre figures. Also, clarify what "option" refers to. Does it presumably refer to option fee or something? Done
and regarded as an important site for research. Also, this could be relocated to Legacy too, if you think about it. I'll let you give your two-cents on this one. DoneI don't know location-wise to be honest. I think I like it as-is partly just because I'm uncertain where to put it in the Legacy section
Her efforts were successful enough that the French government awarded Katherine an official recognition and award for her effortsVery tautological I think.
She received an official recognition from the French government for her efforts. Also, do you know what this recognition was? DoneI do not. It is sourced twice that she received an award but I reckon that I'd have to physically visit the Wonalancet historical society's records for an answer. Even then they most likely still might not know.
until the early 1930sDone
Katherine and Arthur ran Wonalancet Farm until the 1930s, when they began facing financial difficulties due to the Great Depression and the automobile's impact on travel. Done
There are sources that claim→
Other sources claim, and I'd reword moving to smth like "relocation" Done
These sources claim→
They also allege/purport, eliminate "that", change
forced out of the farmhouse→
evicted from the farmhouse and forced into a small cottage,
over the infirm Katherine in Arthur's absence→
over Katherine during Arthur's absenceDone
These sources further claim→
Moreover, they claimor
Furthermore, they state, no need to reintroduce Arthur as Katherine's husband,
the couple's belongings→
their belongingsDone
In either case,→
Nevertheless,,
fell on hard timessounds really weird, definitely reword that somehow Done
and the trails link Chinook Trail→
and it links Chinook Trail, clarify that National Forest refers to the WMNF specifically Done
caused a fire which quickly spread→
caused a fire, which quickly spreadNot done
fight the firecomment from the Lede here, I'd also recommend
and was killed by the blaze→
, but was killed attempting to do soDone
church which she organized the reconstruction of→
church in which she organized the reconstruction ofPartly done
now vibrantDone
avidly attendedto
avidly participatedjust to vary the word choice and also gives a sense of her being active in the club rather than simply just being a member, as I assume she was more the former.
Often considered her most important and lasting achievement was her fight against the New England "Timber Barons" and her protection of the Bowl.to Legacy since it's definitely more of a retrospective and reflective declaration imo, and thus more fit for that section while the Conservation section objectively describes her actions in that time period.
The Bowl, now officially called The Bowl Research Natural Area, is one of the last untouched old-growth forests in the American Northeast and is thus regarded as an important site for research.I would also definitely recommend relocating this material to Legacy for the same rationale above, and connecting this to the sentence of her protection regarding the Bowl, all of this being in Legacy, as I think it'll flow well in the section.
three thousand acres (1,200 ha)Again, note consistency regarding the acreage figs. Good job on including the hectacre fig, but I believe it should be presented numerically, such that it reads
3,000 acres (1,200 ha). Similar thing for
84,000 acres (340 km2), which for some reason is converted to km^2 and not ha.
In 1914,for the centennial part, may I suggest
That same year,instead and also merging that part with the para ab the Bowl protection in that same section.
Love me some prose editing
avidly attendedto
avidly participatedjust to vary the word choice and also gives a sense of her being active in the club rather than simply just being a member, as I assume she was more the former. Done
Often considered her most important and lasting achievement was her fight against the New England "Timber Barons" and her protection of the Bowl.to Legacy since it's definitely more of a retrospective and reflective declaration imo, and thus more fit for that section while the Conservation section objectively describes her actions in that time period. Done
The Bowl, now officially called The Bowl Research Natural Area, is one of the last untouched old-growth forests in the American Northeast and is thus regarded as an important site for research.I would also definitely recommend relocating this material to Legacy for the same rationale above, and connecting this to the sentence of her protection regarding the Bowl, all of this being in Legacy, as I think it'll flow well in the section. Done
three thousand acres (1,200 ha)Again, note consistency regarding the acreage figs. Good job on including the hectacre fig, but I believe it should be presented numerically, such that it reads
3,000 acres (1,200 ha). Similar thing for
84,000 acres (340 km2), which for some reason is converted to km^2 and not ha. DoneOdd that it went to km2, not sure why that would happen. Maybe I misclicked?
In 1914,for the centennial part, may I suggest
That same year,instead and also merging that part with the para ab the Bowl protection in that same section. DoneNote that the paragraphs are not merged (yet)
|url-access=limited
, and I'd recommend wikilinking the relevant Evening Star the source is cited from since there are
multipleI would agree that it's not what I'd call a good source, but it is stating an uncontroversial fact which is substantiated by all other sources. While all of the information stated is also in other sources in this article, it is a more combined source. If you think it necessary this is an easy source to drop and replace.Kate Sleeper [...] opened an inn in Birch Intervale (later renamed to Wonalancet). She bought a 600 acre farm which was the property of the early settler Theophilous Brown.
— Chinook Trail Farm
|url-access=limited
parameter for Source 15's Boston Globe, I think depending on cache, you can either fully access the article or if not, you'll be paywalled. And on that tangent, I'd also highly recommend inserting in an archived version (but this isn't mandatory)|url-access=subscribed
parameter since it's Newspaper.com, and as you note, it's pricey lol. Ditto for Source 24.|via=
Newspaper.com
to maintain consistency with you how formatted those other refs and also add |url-access=subscribed
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Reviewer: Cooljeanius ( talk · contribs) 03:47, 4 February 2024 (UTC)
LGTM
Cooljeanius ( talk) ( contribs) 03:47, 4 February 2024 (UTC)
sparinglyas per WP:PARAGRAPH, but other than that, I think this is really close to GA! And feel free to correct me if I'm wrong about any of this of course. - Dcdiehardfan ( talk) 02:58, 27 February 2024 (UTC)
Katherine was unable to walk on her own poweras "power" may be mistaken for that of the oil burner and recommend improving the encyclopedic tone on this part:
Arthur had no small part in contributing to Wonalancet's popularity. The renown for his sled dogs and his breeding program attractedMay I recommend something like
Arthur also contributed to Wonalancet's popularity, as his sled dogs and breeding program attracted ...or something to that effect? Dcdiehardfan ( talk) 03:49, 28 February 2024 (UTC)
American environmental conservationist, you could also pipe
conservationistto conservation movement
her moveCan a better word choice be found for "move", perhaps residency or something a bit more formal? And could you also provide more information regarding when this takes place? If I understood it correctly, I think it's 1890
and moving to nearbyDoesn't grammatically make sense, I think you might've just mean "move"
trapped the infirm KatherineAgain, the tone slightly irks me a bit, I would recommend brevity here and perhaps go for something like:
There, a fire broke out and trapped her insidesince you've already clarified she was debilitated beforehand
rescuing his wife→
rescuing her, the article is centered around the subject, hence she should be the primary subject of the sentence
fight the fire→
extinguish the fire
Katherine Sleeper Waldenin the very beginning
greater Boston→
Greater Boston
well respected→
well-respectedsince it's an adjective
avidly participated into avoid repetitive word usage
through these tripsto the end of the sentence OR
to visit family, and came to love ... through her trips.
on a trip, I think it reads better and avoids repetition of "on a"
Upon facing serious health complications and receiving a doctor's recommendation to leave the city [insert actual city here, prolly Roxbury], Katherine moved to Tamworth, New Hampshire in 1890, but this is by no means necessary.
high-pitched. And what does "very slight" mean in this context?
eventual husbandpart, don't jump the gun here
Her claims of youth are often attributed to Arthur. I'd say that the 10 yr age gap isn't notable, but if you feel it is, I'd recommend moving it to that last sentence in the 1st para
breed, which is now the...
the propertyand
the large propertywith Wonalancet Farm.
Sleeperin the first sentence →
Katherine
located in present-day Ferncroft, New Hampshireor something of the like would help
by an untapped tourism industry→
by accommodating a tourism industry
and so invited the AMC officers→
, and thus invited AMC officers
After persuading/convincing the town, AMC leaders and a group of local farmers met a few days later to work on the proposed Dicey's Mill Trail path.
Over the following years→
In the following years
In 1893→
In 1893,
and so→
and thus
Katherine's encouragement of tourism resulted in immediate success as reporters began praising Wonalancet Farm as the perfect summer resort.Also, if these are quotes, attribute them as so. If not, I'd recommend rewording that last bit to something like
a good summer tourist destinationsince "perfect" is a bit WP:PUFFERY
Katherine Sleeper married Arthur Treadwell Walden in 1902
widespread renown→
widespread fame/acclaim, I think "renown" is a bit of an awkward word choice
gained national renown attracted→
gained national renown and attracted
fame of Wonalancet through the modern day→
sustained fame/continuous popularity of Wonalancet today is somewhat/partially attributed to Arthur Walden's personal fame (highly recommend changing renown). I'd then also suggest that if a specific commentator or newspaper said that, definitely attribute it to them, so it'd read like
fame attributed to Arthur's clout by XYZ. Also note the consistency points above, be consistent to how Wonalancet and Arthur is referred to as.
Katherine's conservation of the Bowl and her leadership in protecting the region against New England's "Timber Barons" was considered among her most important accomplishments.I'd even recommend relocating it to Legacy as it'll help flesh out the section a bit more
By the 1880s rural→
By the 1880s, rural
A cycle began in which a wide area of forest would be clearcut, and logging/lumber companies would litter downed logs, dried brush, and slashings over large areas. Hot coals and sparks from nearby railways could potentially ignite the readily supplied kindling
In response to the crisis Congress→
In response to the crisis, Congress
three thousand acresbut use the actual convert template for other acre figures. Also, clarify what "option" refers to. Does it presumably refer to option fee or something?
and regarded as an important site for research. Also, this could be relocated to Legacy too, if you think about it. I'll let you give your two-cents on this one.
Her efforts were successful enough that the French government awarded Katherine an official recognition and award for her effortsVery tautological I think.
She received an official recognition from the French government for her efforts. Also, do you know what this recognition was?
until the early 1930s
Katherine and Arthur ran Wonalancet Farm until the 1930s, when they began facing financial difficulties due to the Great Depression and the automobile's impact on travel.
There are sources that claim→
Other sources claim, and I'd reword moving to smth like "relocation"
These sources claim→
They also allege/purport, eliminate "that", change
forced out of the farmhouse→
evicted from the farmhouse and forced into a small cottage,
over the infirm Katherine in Arthur's absence→
over Katherine during Arthur's absence
These sources further claim→
Moreover, they claimor
Furthermore, they state, no need to reintroduce Arthur as Katherine's husband,
the couple's belongings→
their belongings
In either case,→
Nevertheless,,
fell on hard timessounds really weird, definitely reword that somehow
and the trails link Chinook Trail→
and it links Chinook Trail, clarify that National Forest refers to the WMNF specifically
caused a fire which quickly spread→
caused a fire, which quickly spread
fight the firecomment from the Lede here, I'd also recommend
and was killed by the blaze→
, but was killed attempting to do so
church which she organized the reconstruction of→
church in which she organized the reconstruction of
now vibrant
American environmental conservationist, you could also pipe
conservationistto conservation movement Done
her moveCan a better word choice be found for "move", perhaps residency or something a bit more formal? And could you also provide more information regarding when this takes place? If I understood it correctly, I think it's 1890 Done
and moving to nearbyDoesn't grammatically make sense, I think you might've just mean "move" Done
trapped the infirm KatherineAgain, the tone slightly irks me a bit, I would recommend brevity here and perhaps go for something like:
There, a fire broke out and trapped her insidesince you've already clarified she was debilitated beforehand Done
rescuing his wife→
rescuing her, the article is centered around the subject, hence she should be the primary subject of the sentence Done
fight the fire→
extinguish the fireDone
Katherine Sleeper Waldenin the very beginning Partly done I'm torn on that due to Katherine's name at birth was different than at death due to marriage.
greater Boston→
Greater BostonDone
well respected→
well-respectedsince it's an adjective Done
avidly participated into avoid repetitive word usage Comment:I'm assuming you did this already?
through these tripsto the end of the sentence OR
to visit family, and came to love ... through her trips. Done
on a trip, I think it reads better and avoids repetition of "on a" Done
Upon facing serious health complications and receiving a doctor's recommendation to leave the city [insert actual city here, prolly Roxbury], Katherine moved to Tamworth, New Hampshire in 1890, but this is by no means necessary. DoneChanged the order of the sentence's clauses
high-pitched. And what does "very slight" mean in this context? DoneChanged it up a bit, let me know if it likely isn't worthy of inclusion.
eventual husbandpart, don't jump the gun here DoneFair, fair
Her claims of youth are often attributed to Arthur. I'd say that the 10 yr age gap isn't notable, but if you feel it is, I'd recommend moving it to that last sentence in the 1st para Partly done Changed a good amount, not sure if you still feel this necessary
breed, which is now the...Done
the propertyand
the large propertywith Wonalancet Farm. Done
Sleeperin the first sentence →
KatherineDone
located in present-day Ferncroft, New Hampshireor something of the like would help Comment:I'm not certain how best to make that clarification. Birch Intervale was the name of Wonalancet prior to the town's first post office. Meaning there is no Birch Intervale because it is just Wonalancet before it was connected via post
by an untapped tourism industry→
by accommodating a tourism industryDone
and so invited the AMC officers→
, and thus invited AMC officersDone
After persuading/convincing the town, AMC leaders and a group of local farmers met a few days later to work on the proposed Dicey's Mill Trail path.Done
Over the following years→
In the following yearsDone
In 1893→
In 1893,Done
and so→
and thusDone
Katherine's encouragement of tourism resulted in immediate success as reporters began praising Wonalancet Farm as the perfect summer resort.Also, if these are quotes, attribute them as so. If not, I'd recommend rewording that last bit to something like
a good summer tourist destinationsince "perfect" is a bit WP:PUFFERY Done WP:Peacock is an easy trap to fall into :(
Katherine Sleeper married Arthur Treadwell Walden in 1902Done
widespread renown→
widespread fame/acclaim, I think "renown" is a bit of an awkward word choice Done
gained national renown attracted→
gained national renown and attractedDone
fame of Wonalancet through the modern day→
sustained fame/continuous popularity of Wonalancet today is somewhat/partially attributed to Arthur Walden's personal fame (highly recommend changing renown). I'd then also suggest that if a specific commentator or newspaper said that, definitely attribute it to them, so it'd read like
fame attributed to Arthur's clout by XYZ. Also note the consistency points above, be consistent to how Wonalancet and Arthur is referred to as. Done I tend to find the most clear and pretty way to make a bold statement is to make the bold assertion and use a direct and clear citation to a verifiable source that says exactly that. So I tend to lean into the idea that perspective on a claim ought to be in the given citation where reasonable/possible.
Katherine's conservation of the Bowl and her leadership in protecting the region against New England's "Timber Barons" was considered among her most important accomplishments.I'd even recommend relocating it to Legacy as it'll help flesh out the section a bit more Partly doneI worked on implementing this fully but it was proving a difficult task to properly flow. So, while keeping much of the formatting and placement the same, I changed some phrasing and copied over what fit to the legacy section.
By the 1880s rural→
By the 1880s, ruralDone
A cycle began in which a wide area of forest would be clearcut, and logging/lumber companies would litter downed logs, dried brush, and slashings over large areas. Hot coals and sparks from nearby railways could potentially ignite the readily supplied kindlingDone
In response to the crisis Congress→
In response to the crisis, CongressDone
three thousand acresbut use the actual convert template for other acre figures. Also, clarify what "option" refers to. Does it presumably refer to option fee or something? Done
and regarded as an important site for research. Also, this could be relocated to Legacy too, if you think about it. I'll let you give your two-cents on this one. DoneI don't know location-wise to be honest. I think I like it as-is partly just because I'm uncertain where to put it in the Legacy section
Her efforts were successful enough that the French government awarded Katherine an official recognition and award for her effortsVery tautological I think.
She received an official recognition from the French government for her efforts. Also, do you know what this recognition was? DoneI do not. It is sourced twice that she received an award but I reckon that I'd have to physically visit the Wonalancet historical society's records for an answer. Even then they most likely still might not know.
until the early 1930sDone
Katherine and Arthur ran Wonalancet Farm until the 1930s, when they began facing financial difficulties due to the Great Depression and the automobile's impact on travel. Done
There are sources that claim→
Other sources claim, and I'd reword moving to smth like "relocation" Done
These sources claim→
They also allege/purport, eliminate "that", change
forced out of the farmhouse→
evicted from the farmhouse and forced into a small cottage,
over the infirm Katherine in Arthur's absence→
over Katherine during Arthur's absenceDone
These sources further claim→
Moreover, they claimor
Furthermore, they state, no need to reintroduce Arthur as Katherine's husband,
the couple's belongings→
their belongingsDone
In either case,→
Nevertheless,,
fell on hard timessounds really weird, definitely reword that somehow Done
and the trails link Chinook Trail→
and it links Chinook Trail, clarify that National Forest refers to the WMNF specifically Done
caused a fire which quickly spread→
caused a fire, which quickly spreadNot done
fight the firecomment from the Lede here, I'd also recommend
and was killed by the blaze→
, but was killed attempting to do soDone
church which she organized the reconstruction of→
church in which she organized the reconstruction ofPartly done
now vibrantDone
avidly attendedto
avidly participatedjust to vary the word choice and also gives a sense of her being active in the club rather than simply just being a member, as I assume she was more the former.
Often considered her most important and lasting achievement was her fight against the New England "Timber Barons" and her protection of the Bowl.to Legacy since it's definitely more of a retrospective and reflective declaration imo, and thus more fit for that section while the Conservation section objectively describes her actions in that time period.
The Bowl, now officially called The Bowl Research Natural Area, is one of the last untouched old-growth forests in the American Northeast and is thus regarded as an important site for research.I would also definitely recommend relocating this material to Legacy for the same rationale above, and connecting this to the sentence of her protection regarding the Bowl, all of this being in Legacy, as I think it'll flow well in the section.
three thousand acres (1,200 ha)Again, note consistency regarding the acreage figs. Good job on including the hectacre fig, but I believe it should be presented numerically, such that it reads
3,000 acres (1,200 ha). Similar thing for
84,000 acres (340 km2), which for some reason is converted to km^2 and not ha.
In 1914,for the centennial part, may I suggest
That same year,instead and also merging that part with the para ab the Bowl protection in that same section.
Love me some prose editing
avidly attendedto
avidly participatedjust to vary the word choice and also gives a sense of her being active in the club rather than simply just being a member, as I assume she was more the former. Done
Often considered her most important and lasting achievement was her fight against the New England "Timber Barons" and her protection of the Bowl.to Legacy since it's definitely more of a retrospective and reflective declaration imo, and thus more fit for that section while the Conservation section objectively describes her actions in that time period. Done
The Bowl, now officially called The Bowl Research Natural Area, is one of the last untouched old-growth forests in the American Northeast and is thus regarded as an important site for research.I would also definitely recommend relocating this material to Legacy for the same rationale above, and connecting this to the sentence of her protection regarding the Bowl, all of this being in Legacy, as I think it'll flow well in the section. Done
three thousand acres (1,200 ha)Again, note consistency regarding the acreage figs. Good job on including the hectacre fig, but I believe it should be presented numerically, such that it reads
3,000 acres (1,200 ha). Similar thing for
84,000 acres (340 km2), which for some reason is converted to km^2 and not ha. DoneOdd that it went to km2, not sure why that would happen. Maybe I misclicked?
In 1914,for the centennial part, may I suggest
That same year,instead and also merging that part with the para ab the Bowl protection in that same section. DoneNote that the paragraphs are not merged (yet)
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, and I'd recommend wikilinking the relevant Evening Star the source is cited from since there are
multipleI would agree that it's not what I'd call a good source, but it is stating an uncontroversial fact which is substantiated by all other sources. While all of the information stated is also in other sources in this article, it is a more combined source. If you think it necessary this is an easy source to drop and replace.Kate Sleeper [...] opened an inn in Birch Intervale (later renamed to Wonalancet). She bought a 600 acre farm which was the property of the early settler Theophilous Brown.
— Chinook Trail Farm
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parameter for Source 15's Boston Globe, I think depending on cache, you can either fully access the article or if not, you'll be paywalled. And on that tangent, I'd also highly recommend inserting in an archived version (but this isn't mandatory)|url-access=subscribed
parameter since it's Newspaper.com, and as you note, it's pricey lol. Ditto for Source 24.|via=
Newspaper.com
to maintain consistency with you how formatted those other refs and also add |url-access=subscribed
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