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... that the Mission Adaptive Wing of the General DynamicsâBoeing AFTI/F-111A Aardvark(pictured) was inspired by birds? Source: "Birds do it better: their wings can change shape in smooth curves exactly adapted to each flight condition. For many years aerodynamicists have wished to do the same ... Fortunately, the AFFDL found $20 million, and a contract for a pair of almost totally new wings was awarded to, of all people, the losing TFX finalist, Boeing-Wichita." (The Great Book of Modern Warplanes,
ISBNÂ
0-517-63367-1, page 325)
While it is over 1,500 characters of prose, some of this is the lead which is uncited and contains information not present throughout the rest of the article. I suspect there is room to expand as the current article doesn't really explain what the project is. I suspect it is more understandable with some implicit knowledge, but the average reader will lack this.
My main concern is both that this hook is a little on the long side, along with the fact that it might be a too technical for readers who are unfamiliar with aviation terms, but nothing else in the article strikes me as "hooky" so some variation of this direction seems to be the only reasonable option I could think of.
Narutolovehinata5tccsdnew07:12, 19 July 2020 (UTC)reply
ChipmunkdavisNarutolovehinata5 I've sourced and added to the body of the article the content in question. As for ALT1, it works with the source provided, but like you said, it might be a bit too technical for most readers. However, I think it is fine the way it is because the technical terms are linked. -
ZLEAT\C13:12, 19 July 2020 (UTC)reply
I think the detail on birds helps explain the technicalities in the article itself. I'm fine with ALT1, and it seems the most hooky part of the article. On the article however, could you take another look at the lead ZLEA? The first sentence is essentially a rewording of the article title. It should say that it's a modified F-111 plane, or an experimental plane, or something similar as a first sentence. A simpler statement about what the subject actually is.
CMD (
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13:34, 19 July 2020 (UTC)reply
Chipmunkdavis Done. I would like to point out a mistake in ALT1, "F-111A Aardvark" is the wrong designation. Here's the corrected version:
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... that the Mission Adaptive Wing of the General DynamicsâBoeing AFTI/F-111A Aardvark(pictured) was inspired by birds? Source: "Birds do it better: their wings can change shape in smooth curves exactly adapted to each flight condition. For many years aerodynamicists have wished to do the same ... Fortunately, the AFFDL found $20 million, and a contract for a pair of almost totally new wings was awarded to, of all people, the losing TFX finalist, Boeing-Wichita." (The Great Book of Modern Warplanes,
ISBNÂ
0-517-63367-1, page 325)
While it is over 1,500 characters of prose, some of this is the lead which is uncited and contains information not present throughout the rest of the article. I suspect there is room to expand as the current article doesn't really explain what the project is. I suspect it is more understandable with some implicit knowledge, but the average reader will lack this.
My main concern is both that this hook is a little on the long side, along with the fact that it might be a too technical for readers who are unfamiliar with aviation terms, but nothing else in the article strikes me as "hooky" so some variation of this direction seems to be the only reasonable option I could think of.
Narutolovehinata5tccsdnew07:12, 19 July 2020 (UTC)reply
ChipmunkdavisNarutolovehinata5 I've sourced and added to the body of the article the content in question. As for ALT1, it works with the source provided, but like you said, it might be a bit too technical for most readers. However, I think it is fine the way it is because the technical terms are linked. -
ZLEAT\C13:12, 19 July 2020 (UTC)reply
I think the detail on birds helps explain the technicalities in the article itself. I'm fine with ALT1, and it seems the most hooky part of the article. On the article however, could you take another look at the lead ZLEA? The first sentence is essentially a rewording of the article title. It should say that it's a modified F-111 plane, or an experimental plane, or something similar as a first sentence. A simpler statement about what the subject actually is.
CMD (
talk)
13:34, 19 July 2020 (UTC)reply
Chipmunkdavis Done. I would like to point out a mistake in ALT1, "F-111A Aardvark" is the wrong designation. Here's the corrected version: