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...he was able to join the Green Bay Packers... sounds funny. Maybe just a simpler "he signed with the Green Bay Packers" or "he joined the Green Bay Packers"
In the team's rivalry game against Texas, he scored caught a pass to score the game-winning touchdown which was met with much controversy: delete the first "scored" and you can just end with a period instead of a colon.
He played no football that year and worked for an oil company; in the summer of 1939, he played for the Daytona Beach minor league baseball team as an outfielder. shouldn't this be moved to the next section? He graduated in 1938, thus his "college career" is over.
Professional career
chosen -> selected
The Packers went on to win the NFL championship. -> The Packers went on to win the NFL championship
that season.
Later life and death
I know its silly but you should clarify it is the US Military.
References
Some sources look like they are missing access dates (#1, 2, 3, 7, 8, 16, 24, 25)
Do you have a link for #7?
I downloaded it from
Rice's list of yearbooks. I would only be able to link to the page where you can download it - would you still like me to link it?
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...he was able to join the Green Bay Packers... sounds funny. Maybe just a simpler "he signed with the Green Bay Packers" or "he joined the Green Bay Packers"
In the team's rivalry game against Texas, he scored caught a pass to score the game-winning touchdown which was met with much controversy: delete the first "scored" and you can just end with a period instead of a colon.
He played no football that year and worked for an oil company; in the summer of 1939, he played for the Daytona Beach minor league baseball team as an outfielder. shouldn't this be moved to the next section? He graduated in 1938, thus his "college career" is over.
Professional career
chosen -> selected
The Packers went on to win the NFL championship. -> The Packers went on to win the NFL championship
that season.
Later life and death
I know its silly but you should clarify it is the US Military.
References
Some sources look like they are missing access dates (#1, 2, 3, 7, 8, 16, 24, 25)
Do you have a link for #7?
I downloaded it from
Rice's list of yearbooks. I would only be able to link to the page where you can download it - would you still like me to link it?
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.