I am glad that this article is being incorporated into the Forensic Entomology article. There have been a lot of social influences on the use of Forensic Entomology. The title may have been stated as "How society influenced Forensic Entomology." I also agree with the suggestions in your peer review. Karmijo37, April 15th, 2008. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Karmijo37 ( talk • contribs) 00:34, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
this article although interesting is not suffiecient enough to stand on its own and should definitely be merged with forensic entomology. the merger would really make this article more reputable and be a nice addition to the forensic entomology article. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Dansha4521f ( talk • contribs) 18:55, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
Forensic entomology and society received a peer review by Wikipedia editors, which is now archived. It may contain ideas you can use to improve this article. |
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Maybe add some pics to the article in regards to the movies. It will add a little more eye candy to the article. Otherwise, it was cool to see where forensic entomology has shown up in the entertainment industry. Dbw279 ( talk) 20:41, 24 March 2008 (UTC)
Most of this page has now been merged to Forensic entomology because the information given in this article is largely background in nature and flows more smoothly with the already established article of Forensic entomology. Thank you for everyone's input regarding the need for a merger. The rest of this article will soon be merged into other articles. entogirl88 ( talk) 14:39, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
Tangerines, why are you undoing our formatting? This is for a school project. In a month you can do whatever you want. Please let us at least try for a good grade... —Preceding unsigned comment added by Quatrevingtsix ( talk • contribs)
RHaworth is right--a major portion of this assignment is taking the suggestions and edits of the online community (remember how I talked about this in class?) and making the appropriate changes. If you don't like the changes, you need to actually have a intelligent discussion about it, not just ask why they are making the changes.
ABrundage, Texas A&M University (
talk)
04:07, 21 March 2008 (UTC)
Sorry if our initial comment seemed overly harsh or not thoughtful. It was definitely made out of in-the-moment frustration. It was not initially apparent to us, as we were working on the project, why the edits by Tangerine were made. This was most likely due to our inexperience with the wikipedia format. There was definitely a bit of a learning curve as we tried to figure out how everything works. entogirl88 ( talk) 16:32, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
As the author of the comment I too would like to apologize. It was a spur of the moment outburst catalyzed by sleep deprivation. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Quatrevingtsix ( talk • contribs) 01:54, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
Wow, a rather informal PR this is, but here are my comments nonetheless:
I notice that commas are pretty sparse here. That's all just style; its normal, but a few are needed to clarify meaning.
But, gee, I know I'm grilling you guys, but I just couldn't help myself. And good luck with your project; it's a real eye-catching topic.
By the way, what ultra-cool teacher encouraged you to write a Wikipedia article instead of some lame, hand-written essay? =) -- ~~MusicalConnoisseur~~ Got Classical? 04:44, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
A few more things added on top...
A really good improvement overall, though a few touch-ups might be needed to eliminate possible POV. Otherwise, grammar, style, etc. is A+.
Good luck on that grade; hope you guys pass with flying colors! -- ~~MusicalConnoisseur~~ Got Classical? 04:22, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
You talk about how the new television shows have altered juries. Is there evidence of this? And how are they affected? (Miss information on shows? Possible examples may be how long it takes to 'solve' the murder, the ease of the study of the crime, or how they know the scene before the shoot and how actual detectives do not, and more.) Also, pictures of the television shows or movies and other topics may help the reader to understand and break up the text some. Crosenbalm ( talk) 16:14, 9 April 2008 (UTC) I noticed as well did others that this topic is closely related to the Forensic Entomology original page. I think maybe changing the title or at least changing the intro to fit the main direction yall are trying to go. The intro is key to the reader and should be very distinct from other articles. Just a suggestion. Jbratz ( talk) 22:33, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
The introduction could be a little more clear- the introduction should essentially introduce the reader to the use of forensic entomology in society. Perhaps including a sentence about PMI estimation would be useful in outlining the article.
Csb14 (
talk)
15:30, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
I feel as though this topic should just fall under the broad spectrum of the Entomology article. i like the relative material and its information is interesting. i don't think it should stand alone, merging should be considered. -- heartbreaker5785 ( talk)
The article was very interesting. It is cool to see how much forensic entomology shows up in popular culture. I think it would be a good idea to merge the article to forensic entomology. How forensic entomology is used in society helps to elaborate on the subject of forensic entomology as a whole. In the section about movies, My Girl is not a good example of how forensic entomology is used in film. I noticed you mentioned how the film could be related, but I do not feel that it should be included in an article that is trying to demonstrate the practice of forensic entomology in society since the movie does not show or hint at it being used at all. This is of course just my opinion. Your article also needs a definitive closing paragraph to sum everything up. It really was a good read! garza_j_e ( talk) —Preceding comment was added at 21:04, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
I really enjoyed this article. I think you have made some great changes and are lucky to have been 'grilled' by a fellow wikipedian. It looks like you have taken some of his suggestions and worked them into your article. I do think that the article does need to be wrapped up in one way or another. It is left open and reads like another section should follow. Other wise I think you have chosen something unique and eye catching, good job! AMFaris ( talk) 17:26, 13 April 2008
I am glad that this article is being incorporated into the Forensic Entomology article. There have been a lot of social influences on the use of Forensic Entomology. The title may have been stated as "How society influenced Forensic Entomology." I also agree with the suggestions in your peer review. Karmijo37, April 15th, 2008. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Karmijo37 ( talk • contribs) 00:34, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
this article although interesting is not suffiecient enough to stand on its own and should definitely be merged with forensic entomology. the merger would really make this article more reputable and be a nice addition to the forensic entomology article. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Dansha4521f ( talk • contribs) 18:55, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
Forensic entomology and society received a peer review by Wikipedia editors, which is now archived. It may contain ideas you can use to improve this article. |
This article was the subject of an educational assignment that ended on 21 March 2008. Further details are available here. |
Maybe add some pics to the article in regards to the movies. It will add a little more eye candy to the article. Otherwise, it was cool to see where forensic entomology has shown up in the entertainment industry. Dbw279 ( talk) 20:41, 24 March 2008 (UTC)
Most of this page has now been merged to Forensic entomology because the information given in this article is largely background in nature and flows more smoothly with the already established article of Forensic entomology. Thank you for everyone's input regarding the need for a merger. The rest of this article will soon be merged into other articles. entogirl88 ( talk) 14:39, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
Tangerines, why are you undoing our formatting? This is for a school project. In a month you can do whatever you want. Please let us at least try for a good grade... —Preceding unsigned comment added by Quatrevingtsix ( talk • contribs)
RHaworth is right--a major portion of this assignment is taking the suggestions and edits of the online community (remember how I talked about this in class?) and making the appropriate changes. If you don't like the changes, you need to actually have a intelligent discussion about it, not just ask why they are making the changes.
ABrundage, Texas A&M University (
talk)
04:07, 21 March 2008 (UTC)
Sorry if our initial comment seemed overly harsh or not thoughtful. It was definitely made out of in-the-moment frustration. It was not initially apparent to us, as we were working on the project, why the edits by Tangerine were made. This was most likely due to our inexperience with the wikipedia format. There was definitely a bit of a learning curve as we tried to figure out how everything works. entogirl88 ( talk) 16:32, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
As the author of the comment I too would like to apologize. It was a spur of the moment outburst catalyzed by sleep deprivation. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Quatrevingtsix ( talk • contribs) 01:54, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
Wow, a rather informal PR this is, but here are my comments nonetheless:
I notice that commas are pretty sparse here. That's all just style; its normal, but a few are needed to clarify meaning.
But, gee, I know I'm grilling you guys, but I just couldn't help myself. And good luck with your project; it's a real eye-catching topic.
By the way, what ultra-cool teacher encouraged you to write a Wikipedia article instead of some lame, hand-written essay? =) -- ~~MusicalConnoisseur~~ Got Classical? 04:44, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
A few more things added on top...
A really good improvement overall, though a few touch-ups might be needed to eliminate possible POV. Otherwise, grammar, style, etc. is A+.
Good luck on that grade; hope you guys pass with flying colors! -- ~~MusicalConnoisseur~~ Got Classical? 04:22, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
You talk about how the new television shows have altered juries. Is there evidence of this? And how are they affected? (Miss information on shows? Possible examples may be how long it takes to 'solve' the murder, the ease of the study of the crime, or how they know the scene before the shoot and how actual detectives do not, and more.) Also, pictures of the television shows or movies and other topics may help the reader to understand and break up the text some. Crosenbalm ( talk) 16:14, 9 April 2008 (UTC) I noticed as well did others that this topic is closely related to the Forensic Entomology original page. I think maybe changing the title or at least changing the intro to fit the main direction yall are trying to go. The intro is key to the reader and should be very distinct from other articles. Just a suggestion. Jbratz ( talk) 22:33, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
The introduction could be a little more clear- the introduction should essentially introduce the reader to the use of forensic entomology in society. Perhaps including a sentence about PMI estimation would be useful in outlining the article.
Csb14 (
talk)
15:30, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
I feel as though this topic should just fall under the broad spectrum of the Entomology article. i like the relative material and its information is interesting. i don't think it should stand alone, merging should be considered. -- heartbreaker5785 ( talk)
The article was very interesting. It is cool to see how much forensic entomology shows up in popular culture. I think it would be a good idea to merge the article to forensic entomology. How forensic entomology is used in society helps to elaborate on the subject of forensic entomology as a whole. In the section about movies, My Girl is not a good example of how forensic entomology is used in film. I noticed you mentioned how the film could be related, but I do not feel that it should be included in an article that is trying to demonstrate the practice of forensic entomology in society since the movie does not show or hint at it being used at all. This is of course just my opinion. Your article also needs a definitive closing paragraph to sum everything up. It really was a good read! garza_j_e ( talk) —Preceding comment was added at 21:04, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
I really enjoyed this article. I think you have made some great changes and are lucky to have been 'grilled' by a fellow wikipedian. It looks like you have taken some of his suggestions and worked them into your article. I do think that the article does need to be wrapped up in one way or another. It is left open and reads like another section should follow. Other wise I think you have chosen something unique and eye catching, good job! AMFaris ( talk) 17:26, 13 April 2008