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Summarizing: it seems crucial than the structure and content of this article should be greatly rethought before continuing with it. It might be a good idea if you talked to Mr Burdo about this.
I am sorry if my first comments are quite negative in comparison to those made to some of your companions, however I hope they serve to make you clear that article at the moment has important problems. You are still in time of fixing them. Bests.-- Garrondo ( talk) 15:03, 25 March 2011 (UTC)
I have posted general comments at User talk:NeuroJoe/BI481 Spring 2011: take a look to them since they might be of use. For example: in see also section there should not be articles that have already appeared and linked in the article: Policy is that when a link already appears in the article it should not appear also in the see also section. In this sense "see also" is the place for connected links not mentioned in text. Similarly there is no point in having "red links" in see also section, since the intention of the section its to point to other "existing articles". (I have fixed this one).-- Garrondo ( talk) 12:38, 28 March 2011 (UTC)
Per comments above I have moved the whole section on disease to this talk page, since at this point it makes no sense in article: If evolved making clear importance of excitatory synapses for these diseases it could be readded to the article. -- Garrondo ( talk) 13:02, 28 March 2011 (UTC)
Material is:
References
Annual Review of Biochemistry
was invoked but never defined (see the
help page).Neuroscience, 4th ed.
was invoked but never defined (see the
help page).Overall, you guys have done a good job explaining the primary functions of excitatory synapses and outlining the steps involved in transmission, but I think that there is room for improvement. I think some minor rearranging of the introductory section could make it more cohesive and give it a better flow. (Even just removing some of the spaces between individual sentence, especially the last two, would help strengthen the connections between them). As another minor point - make sure that the capitalization in your titles conforms to Wikipedia standards (no capitalization within the titles). In the chemical v. electrical synapse sections, you do a good job explaining what an electrical synapse is but do not explain what the function of a chemical synapse is. This was addressed in the opening paragraph but since you have a separate section for the two different synapses, I think you should further explain the distinction here. It might be beneficial to add a section describing how excitatory synapses were first discovered and the various studies that have been done relating to them. As for the section on disease that has been removed, perhaps you could add in a section such as "clinical implications" and there discuss excitotoxicity and briefly address the diseases in which dysfunction of excitatory synapses plays a primary role (without giving them separate sections or going into too much irrelevant detail). Great job so far, hope these suggestions are helpful. Kamilaosypiuk ( talk) 02:08, 7 April 2011 (UTC)
I think this article had all the necessary information in a nutshell. However, I think it would be better to have more details on all of subheadings. For instance, more of biochemistry and mechanisms involved in the chemical synaptic transmission would better elucidate the article overall. You can mention where electrical synapses are mainly found within our nervous system (to add to the chemical vs electrical synapses heading). You also mentioned that the first electrical synapse was discovered in crayfish and maybe you can add a research section describing the finding and discuss current ongoing related research. Also, I think you can add more links to your article to better accommodate the viewer. (e.g. NMDA receptor, AMPA receptor, G-protein coupled receptor, hypothalmus, etc.) Thanks, Young B. ( talk) 7:00 7 April 2011 (UTC)
Overall you've done a great job so far! Now for the critical comments. Firstly, I think you could add an "anatomical location section". This section could describe (statistics would be useful) what bodily areas (brain regions, organs etc.) excitatory synapses are more likely to be found. You might also want to consider doing this for individual excitotoxic neurotransmitters like serotonergic, dopaminergic "areas" etc. Another paragraph that you could add is a disease section, whereby you give a brief list of diseases involving the excitotoxic synapse. Be careful not to focus too much on the disease itself here, and instead center in on the excitotoxic synaptic mechanism(s). I would also recommend including a schematic diagram and/or mechanism picture for a general excitotoxic neurotransmitter like glutamate. Furthermore, when I read the introduction section, it seemed a little bit too detailed and long. I would shorten it to about four or five sentences. Phil J. ( talk) 06:01, 7 April 2011 (UTC)
So far this article is looking good, while there are a few areas of improvement. We may be able to learn from eachother's articles/topics, mine being "summation", which could potentially be a brief section of your page. I think your introduction could also be more concise, especially if you can consolidate it into a single paragraph or two. Also, in the second paragraph of your introduction you mention EPSPs between electrical synapses, which I found a bit confusing. I take it that EPSPs and IPSPs are an intrinsic modulatory characteristic of chemical synapses and not electrical ones, but I could be misinformed. Another potential addition would be a small section on excitotoxicity, instead of going into length with specific diseases. I also like how you guys brought receptors into the picture when describing neurotransmitters - maybe you can go further into depth about them, since they are ultimately what's exciting the neurons. A few more sources wouldn't hurt either. ( Amichael22 ( talk) 23:33, 7 April 2011 (UTC))
In general I thought the article is informative. I think the last sentences in the introduction could use some explanation on how it is related to excitatory synapses. The Chemical v. Electrical synapses section could be broken down into all of the types of synapses, such as gap junctions, ligand-gated ion channels, and metabotropic receptors. If possible some detail could be added to serotonin and histamine. I also agree with the comment that a section about summation would be nice. In addition, I suggest adding a section about excitotoxicity, current research and drugs and their effect on the synapses. Pictures would be nice also.( canesir ( talk) 21:11, 7 April 2011 (UTC))
Well done guys, you have greatly improved upon this article. However, I have some suggestions that could make it even better. The article could be greatly improved by adding some images, specifically of the structure of a synapse. An image of a synapse can probably be found in the Wiki commons so it will be painless to add to the article. The Responses of the Postsynaptic Neuron section is very dense with a lot of scientific terms and concepts that will be very difficult for lay people to understand. Although many of these terms are completely necessary, it may be a good idea to add a sentence that summarizes each concept to make it accessible to multiple demographics. Overall you have done a good job in providing a comprehensive view of the excitatory synapses. Keep it up!
Bsnawder ( talk) 03:33, 8 April 2011 (UTC)
Excitatory synapses are a complex topic, and I really enjoyed your recent edits to the page. However, I believe some improvements could be made in your discussion of Excitotoxicity. While there is clear emphasis on glutamate as the prime excitatory neurotransmitter, I recommend a brief mention of the Glutamate-Glutamine cycle, and its correlation with excitotoxicity. In addition, NMDA and AMPA receptors play a key role in postsynaptic stimulation in excitatory synapses. Their involvement in transmission and excitotoxicity should be mentioned as well. Although the article considers hypoglycemia, trauma, and seizures are possible mechanisms, its important to explain the consequences on the cellular level: such as the buildup of NO and reactive oxidative species that ultimately lead to cell death. I also agree with the previous peer review in that a few pictures would improve the article. Good work guys.
Robinsao ( talk) 08:08, 8 April 2011 (UTC)
Interesting topic which takes some careful explaining which I feel you guys did very well with. The information in your recent edit proceeds very organized and contains relevant links. I like how your broke apart paragraphs as well. I am uncertain whether or not it is most relevant to include excitatory neurotransmitters where you did, somewhere else in the article, or whether it might be better to abbreviate this section and link out, but this is something to think about. I do like how your broke down the types of synapses but agreeing with the other posters pictures would be very helpful. I am not sure how necessary it is to mention excitatory neurotransmitters or if it wouldn't be better to link out to another article on this and also abbreviate this section. Additionally the "other neurodegenerative diseases" section seems out of place as this is not an article which should be spending a lot of time describing neurodegenerative diseases. Also I would recommend integrating the see also section into their relevant sections. Great work otherwise, lots of good information. Reedyziw ( talk) 03:55, 9 April 2011 (UTC)
The article has made great improvement recently. I have some comments. The term presynaptic transmission doesn't make sense, and I'm not aware of its use in the literature. There should be some mention that catecholamine and serotonin are usually thought of as neuromodulators rather than excitatory neurotransmitters but in some instances like in the Aplysia nervous system, dopamine can act as an excitatory transmitter as well (this is the only instance I can think of off-hand but I am sure that there are many other instances in the animal kingdom). I also recommend that the page be reorganized. Here is a potential organization of the main sections.
There are also many nomenclature issues that need to be addressed. For instance, postsynaptic density is a component of the cytoskeleton and not the synaptic membrane. I don't think there is a consensus as to whether the receptors themselves are considered a constituent of the PSD, but it is my understanding that the PSD binds to the receptors. So, they are two entities. Hope this helps. Studentne ( talk) 04:35, 12 April 2011 (UTC)
Hi Sam, Rod and Gabriella, nice job with the article in general. It's in much better shape than before obviously. Just a few issues:
I have compared this version of the page, [1], from before the start of the project, with this version, [2], after.
Scale from 1 to 5
1 = most negative
5 = most positive
1. Is the prose clear and concise? 5
2. Does the article comply with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, and list incorporation? 2: Problems: The first mention of the article subject in the lead needs to be bold, not italic. The paragraph text of the sections should not be indented. Some of the inline citations are placed incorrectly (after spaces, or before punctuation), and look at the first sentence in the paragraph about Alzheimer's disease. Also some words (such as the names of the catecholamines) are improperly capitalized.
3. Is the article properly and adequately referenced? 5
4. Are in-line citations provided in accordance with Wikipedia:Scientific citation guidelines? 5
5. Does the article address the main aspects of the topic? 5, but see next point.
6. Does the article stay focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail? 2: The page has material in it that I don't think really belongs here. It's debatable whether Alzheimer's and Parkinson's diseases really have anything to do with excessive excitatory transmission, and most modern research would say that they really do not. And look at what you wrote about some of the neurotransmitters: if they open K+ channels, wouldn't they be inhibitory instead of excitatory? Several of them actually are!
7. Does the article represent viewpoints fairly and without bias? 4: I think a case could be made that some of the section on diseases violates WP:UNDUE by suggesting excitotoxic mechanisms that are not the majority view in the literature.
8. Is the article illustrated by images that are relevant and are tagged with their proper status? 5: I especially like the way high quality images have been added to the page.
Overall, I think the page has been expanded considerably and looks much better than it used to. I think that the major weakness (per item 6) is that there is material that was added indiscriminately and should not be here. -- Tryptofish ( talk) 20:04, 14 May 2011 (UTC)
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![]() | Excitatory synapse received a peer review by Wikipedia editors, which is now archived. It may contain ideas you can use to improve this article. |
Summarizing: it seems crucial than the structure and content of this article should be greatly rethought before continuing with it. It might be a good idea if you talked to Mr Burdo about this.
I am sorry if my first comments are quite negative in comparison to those made to some of your companions, however I hope they serve to make you clear that article at the moment has important problems. You are still in time of fixing them. Bests.-- Garrondo ( talk) 15:03, 25 March 2011 (UTC)
I have posted general comments at User talk:NeuroJoe/BI481 Spring 2011: take a look to them since they might be of use. For example: in see also section there should not be articles that have already appeared and linked in the article: Policy is that when a link already appears in the article it should not appear also in the see also section. In this sense "see also" is the place for connected links not mentioned in text. Similarly there is no point in having "red links" in see also section, since the intention of the section its to point to other "existing articles". (I have fixed this one).-- Garrondo ( talk) 12:38, 28 March 2011 (UTC)
Per comments above I have moved the whole section on disease to this talk page, since at this point it makes no sense in article: If evolved making clear importance of excitatory synapses for these diseases it could be readded to the article. -- Garrondo ( talk) 13:02, 28 March 2011 (UTC)
Material is:
References
Annual Review of Biochemistry
was invoked but never defined (see the
help page).Neuroscience, 4th ed.
was invoked but never defined (see the
help page).Overall, you guys have done a good job explaining the primary functions of excitatory synapses and outlining the steps involved in transmission, but I think that there is room for improvement. I think some minor rearranging of the introductory section could make it more cohesive and give it a better flow. (Even just removing some of the spaces between individual sentence, especially the last two, would help strengthen the connections between them). As another minor point - make sure that the capitalization in your titles conforms to Wikipedia standards (no capitalization within the titles). In the chemical v. electrical synapse sections, you do a good job explaining what an electrical synapse is but do not explain what the function of a chemical synapse is. This was addressed in the opening paragraph but since you have a separate section for the two different synapses, I think you should further explain the distinction here. It might be beneficial to add a section describing how excitatory synapses were first discovered and the various studies that have been done relating to them. As for the section on disease that has been removed, perhaps you could add in a section such as "clinical implications" and there discuss excitotoxicity and briefly address the diseases in which dysfunction of excitatory synapses plays a primary role (without giving them separate sections or going into too much irrelevant detail). Great job so far, hope these suggestions are helpful. Kamilaosypiuk ( talk) 02:08, 7 April 2011 (UTC)
I think this article had all the necessary information in a nutshell. However, I think it would be better to have more details on all of subheadings. For instance, more of biochemistry and mechanisms involved in the chemical synaptic transmission would better elucidate the article overall. You can mention where electrical synapses are mainly found within our nervous system (to add to the chemical vs electrical synapses heading). You also mentioned that the first electrical synapse was discovered in crayfish and maybe you can add a research section describing the finding and discuss current ongoing related research. Also, I think you can add more links to your article to better accommodate the viewer. (e.g. NMDA receptor, AMPA receptor, G-protein coupled receptor, hypothalmus, etc.) Thanks, Young B. ( talk) 7:00 7 April 2011 (UTC)
Overall you've done a great job so far! Now for the critical comments. Firstly, I think you could add an "anatomical location section". This section could describe (statistics would be useful) what bodily areas (brain regions, organs etc.) excitatory synapses are more likely to be found. You might also want to consider doing this for individual excitotoxic neurotransmitters like serotonergic, dopaminergic "areas" etc. Another paragraph that you could add is a disease section, whereby you give a brief list of diseases involving the excitotoxic synapse. Be careful not to focus too much on the disease itself here, and instead center in on the excitotoxic synaptic mechanism(s). I would also recommend including a schematic diagram and/or mechanism picture for a general excitotoxic neurotransmitter like glutamate. Furthermore, when I read the introduction section, it seemed a little bit too detailed and long. I would shorten it to about four or five sentences. Phil J. ( talk) 06:01, 7 April 2011 (UTC)
So far this article is looking good, while there are a few areas of improvement. We may be able to learn from eachother's articles/topics, mine being "summation", which could potentially be a brief section of your page. I think your introduction could also be more concise, especially if you can consolidate it into a single paragraph or two. Also, in the second paragraph of your introduction you mention EPSPs between electrical synapses, which I found a bit confusing. I take it that EPSPs and IPSPs are an intrinsic modulatory characteristic of chemical synapses and not electrical ones, but I could be misinformed. Another potential addition would be a small section on excitotoxicity, instead of going into length with specific diseases. I also like how you guys brought receptors into the picture when describing neurotransmitters - maybe you can go further into depth about them, since they are ultimately what's exciting the neurons. A few more sources wouldn't hurt either. ( Amichael22 ( talk) 23:33, 7 April 2011 (UTC))
In general I thought the article is informative. I think the last sentences in the introduction could use some explanation on how it is related to excitatory synapses. The Chemical v. Electrical synapses section could be broken down into all of the types of synapses, such as gap junctions, ligand-gated ion channels, and metabotropic receptors. If possible some detail could be added to serotonin and histamine. I also agree with the comment that a section about summation would be nice. In addition, I suggest adding a section about excitotoxicity, current research and drugs and their effect on the synapses. Pictures would be nice also.( canesir ( talk) 21:11, 7 April 2011 (UTC))
Well done guys, you have greatly improved upon this article. However, I have some suggestions that could make it even better. The article could be greatly improved by adding some images, specifically of the structure of a synapse. An image of a synapse can probably be found in the Wiki commons so it will be painless to add to the article. The Responses of the Postsynaptic Neuron section is very dense with a lot of scientific terms and concepts that will be very difficult for lay people to understand. Although many of these terms are completely necessary, it may be a good idea to add a sentence that summarizes each concept to make it accessible to multiple demographics. Overall you have done a good job in providing a comprehensive view of the excitatory synapses. Keep it up!
Bsnawder ( talk) 03:33, 8 April 2011 (UTC)
Excitatory synapses are a complex topic, and I really enjoyed your recent edits to the page. However, I believe some improvements could be made in your discussion of Excitotoxicity. While there is clear emphasis on glutamate as the prime excitatory neurotransmitter, I recommend a brief mention of the Glutamate-Glutamine cycle, and its correlation with excitotoxicity. In addition, NMDA and AMPA receptors play a key role in postsynaptic stimulation in excitatory synapses. Their involvement in transmission and excitotoxicity should be mentioned as well. Although the article considers hypoglycemia, trauma, and seizures are possible mechanisms, its important to explain the consequences on the cellular level: such as the buildup of NO and reactive oxidative species that ultimately lead to cell death. I also agree with the previous peer review in that a few pictures would improve the article. Good work guys.
Robinsao ( talk) 08:08, 8 April 2011 (UTC)
Interesting topic which takes some careful explaining which I feel you guys did very well with. The information in your recent edit proceeds very organized and contains relevant links. I like how your broke apart paragraphs as well. I am uncertain whether or not it is most relevant to include excitatory neurotransmitters where you did, somewhere else in the article, or whether it might be better to abbreviate this section and link out, but this is something to think about. I do like how your broke down the types of synapses but agreeing with the other posters pictures would be very helpful. I am not sure how necessary it is to mention excitatory neurotransmitters or if it wouldn't be better to link out to another article on this and also abbreviate this section. Additionally the "other neurodegenerative diseases" section seems out of place as this is not an article which should be spending a lot of time describing neurodegenerative diseases. Also I would recommend integrating the see also section into their relevant sections. Great work otherwise, lots of good information. Reedyziw ( talk) 03:55, 9 April 2011 (UTC)
The article has made great improvement recently. I have some comments. The term presynaptic transmission doesn't make sense, and I'm not aware of its use in the literature. There should be some mention that catecholamine and serotonin are usually thought of as neuromodulators rather than excitatory neurotransmitters but in some instances like in the Aplysia nervous system, dopamine can act as an excitatory transmitter as well (this is the only instance I can think of off-hand but I am sure that there are many other instances in the animal kingdom). I also recommend that the page be reorganized. Here is a potential organization of the main sections.
There are also many nomenclature issues that need to be addressed. For instance, postsynaptic density is a component of the cytoskeleton and not the synaptic membrane. I don't think there is a consensus as to whether the receptors themselves are considered a constituent of the PSD, but it is my understanding that the PSD binds to the receptors. So, they are two entities. Hope this helps. Studentne ( talk) 04:35, 12 April 2011 (UTC)
Hi Sam, Rod and Gabriella, nice job with the article in general. It's in much better shape than before obviously. Just a few issues:
I have compared this version of the page, [1], from before the start of the project, with this version, [2], after.
Scale from 1 to 5
1 = most negative
5 = most positive
1. Is the prose clear and concise? 5
2. Does the article comply with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, and list incorporation? 2: Problems: The first mention of the article subject in the lead needs to be bold, not italic. The paragraph text of the sections should not be indented. Some of the inline citations are placed incorrectly (after spaces, or before punctuation), and look at the first sentence in the paragraph about Alzheimer's disease. Also some words (such as the names of the catecholamines) are improperly capitalized.
3. Is the article properly and adequately referenced? 5
4. Are in-line citations provided in accordance with Wikipedia:Scientific citation guidelines? 5
5. Does the article address the main aspects of the topic? 5, but see next point.
6. Does the article stay focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail? 2: The page has material in it that I don't think really belongs here. It's debatable whether Alzheimer's and Parkinson's diseases really have anything to do with excessive excitatory transmission, and most modern research would say that they really do not. And look at what you wrote about some of the neurotransmitters: if they open K+ channels, wouldn't they be inhibitory instead of excitatory? Several of them actually are!
7. Does the article represent viewpoints fairly and without bias? 4: I think a case could be made that some of the section on diseases violates WP:UNDUE by suggesting excitotoxic mechanisms that are not the majority view in the literature.
8. Is the article illustrated by images that are relevant and are tagged with their proper status? 5: I especially like the way high quality images have been added to the page.
Overall, I think the page has been expanded considerably and looks much better than it used to. I think that the major weakness (per item 6) is that there is material that was added indiscriminately and should not be here. -- Tryptofish ( talk) 20:04, 14 May 2011 (UTC)