Rather than saying 'Dermaptera, commonly called earwigs,' say 'Earwigs, which make up the order Dermapters', or something similar because the title should be the first word. Perhaps include the misconception in a later sentence and provide a brief description in the first sentence.
Though, earwigs are omnivores that are predisposed to hiding in warm humid crevices and as such do occasionally crawl into the human ear canal.→Earwigs are predisposed to hiding in warm humid crevices and do indeed occasionally crawl into the human ear canal.
I suggest, "Females will start mating in the fall around September"; "the beginning of the mating season" is redundant. This fact is already implied by "Females will start mating". —
TheEarwig@05:31, 28 November 2009 (UTC)reply
Reword The mother will also vigorously defend the eggs from predators, not eating unless an egg goes bad, she will also continuously lick and clean the egg to protect it from fungus.
"the wings will also start to develop, if the wings are present, the forewings are short and thick like elytra or shell over the wins on beetles, covering the hindwings." Grammar. Why wouldn't they be present?
"Out of about 1,800 species, only about 25 occur in North America, 45 in Europe (including the 7 in Britain), and 60 in Australia." So are all 1700 others in Asia? Also strike the 7.
Reword "Some of the traits believed by neontologists to be only of earwigs are not so for the earliest fossils, but adults had five-segmented tarsi (the final segment of the leg), well developed ovipositors, veined tegmina (forewings) and long segmented cerci, in fact the pincers would have not been curled and used as they are now."
Finally, change the ext links to be a name of a page, followed by the name of the site. "Earwigs eat through your brain" urban legend debunked → Bugs in the Ear urban legend from Snopes. Fantastic job!! Everything is well-referenced from academic sources and it has nearly everything I need to know.
Reywas92Talk01:07, 28 November 2009 (UTC)reply
Sorry if I'm unclear. If there's an arrow, it means to change the similar text in the article to what I've suggested above. "Here" is not a specific word and should be change to "there". The sentence ending with "the two suborders Arixeniina and Hemimerina" is very unclear, and add "the" before "1950s".
Reywas92Talk03:18, 28 November 2009 (UTC)reply
Red Links
Hi,
While it is not said so explicitly in
WP:WIAGA, GAs should not have
red links.
The MOS says :-
"To make a link more useful to readers when no article currently exists, it may be useful to create a redirect to a relevant existing article or section, or to create a stub for the new article (check similar articles for conventions on naming and categorization)."
So the Earwig editors are requested to please convert the red links to stubs, I'm clueless as far as Dermaptera are concerned.
Is that so! While reviewing, I used to ask editors to convert. The point was never contested. IMHO even if this is not a FA/GA requirement, this should be done. Red links give the impression that the articles are incomplete in some way. Let the stubs exist instead.
AshLin (
talk)
17:07, 28 November 2009 (UTC)reply
Which links, specifically? If you want to create nice little articles that's fine, but I'm vehemently opposed to the creation of crappy, redundant substubs just for the sake of having them.
Reywas92Talk18:59, 28 November 2009 (UTC)reply
Rather than saying 'Dermaptera, commonly called earwigs,' say 'Earwigs, which make up the order Dermapters', or something similar because the title should be the first word. Perhaps include the misconception in a later sentence and provide a brief description in the first sentence.
Though, earwigs are omnivores that are predisposed to hiding in warm humid crevices and as such do occasionally crawl into the human ear canal.→Earwigs are predisposed to hiding in warm humid crevices and do indeed occasionally crawl into the human ear canal.
I suggest, "Females will start mating in the fall around September"; "the beginning of the mating season" is redundant. This fact is already implied by "Females will start mating". —
TheEarwig@05:31, 28 November 2009 (UTC)reply
Reword The mother will also vigorously defend the eggs from predators, not eating unless an egg goes bad, she will also continuously lick and clean the egg to protect it from fungus.
"the wings will also start to develop, if the wings are present, the forewings are short and thick like elytra or shell over the wins on beetles, covering the hindwings." Grammar. Why wouldn't they be present?
"Out of about 1,800 species, only about 25 occur in North America, 45 in Europe (including the 7 in Britain), and 60 in Australia." So are all 1700 others in Asia? Also strike the 7.
Reword "Some of the traits believed by neontologists to be only of earwigs are not so for the earliest fossils, but adults had five-segmented tarsi (the final segment of the leg), well developed ovipositors, veined tegmina (forewings) and long segmented cerci, in fact the pincers would have not been curled and used as they are now."
Finally, change the ext links to be a name of a page, followed by the name of the site. "Earwigs eat through your brain" urban legend debunked → Bugs in the Ear urban legend from Snopes. Fantastic job!! Everything is well-referenced from academic sources and it has nearly everything I need to know.
Reywas92Talk01:07, 28 November 2009 (UTC)reply
Sorry if I'm unclear. If there's an arrow, it means to change the similar text in the article to what I've suggested above. "Here" is not a specific word and should be change to "there". The sentence ending with "the two suborders Arixeniina and Hemimerina" is very unclear, and add "the" before "1950s".
Reywas92Talk03:18, 28 November 2009 (UTC)reply
Red Links
Hi,
While it is not said so explicitly in
WP:WIAGA, GAs should not have
red links.
The MOS says :-
"To make a link more useful to readers when no article currently exists, it may be useful to create a redirect to a relevant existing article or section, or to create a stub for the new article (check similar articles for conventions on naming and categorization)."
So the Earwig editors are requested to please convert the red links to stubs, I'm clueless as far as Dermaptera are concerned.
Is that so! While reviewing, I used to ask editors to convert. The point was never contested. IMHO even if this is not a FA/GA requirement, this should be done. Red links give the impression that the articles are incomplete in some way. Let the stubs exist instead.
AshLin (
talk)
17:07, 28 November 2009 (UTC)reply
Which links, specifically? If you want to create nice little articles that's fine, but I'm vehemently opposed to the creation of crappy, redundant substubs just for the sake of having them.
Reywas92Talk18:59, 28 November 2009 (UTC)reply