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This is a stable and well-written article. 98.2% of authorship is by
SusunW. It is currently assessed as a B class article.
The text is clear and comprehensive.
It is written in a summary style, consistent with relevant
Manuals of Style.
The article is of reasonable length, with 2,350 words of readable prose.
The lead is relatively long at 409 words.
Text seems to be neutral.
There is no evidence of edit wars.
Earwig's Copyvio Detector states copyright violation is unlikely, with a score of 23.7%.
All accessible sources seem live.
Spot checks, of Cooper 1922, Cova 2022 and Pucci 2022 confirm that references are relevant.
References appear to be from generally reputable sources. I particularly enjoyed the contemporary voices, like the articles in the New York Times from 1887 and 1907, as well as the more recent as I feel they helped contextualise her.
The images seem appropriate and relevant.
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Review
Suggest amending the sentence "In one such initiative, she fought for the pardon of an Italian immigrant Maria Barbella accused of murder" to either "...she fought for the pardon of an Italian immigrant, Maria Barbella, accused of murder", "...she fought for the pardon of Maria Barbella, an Italian immigrant accused of murder" or something similar.
The sentence "For three decades after the first Brazza Lace Cooperative School opened in 1891, the main earnings of women in the region came from producing lace, or growing violets, which she encouraged her brother-in-law Filippo Savorgnan di Brazza to develop from a wild white violet to enable another outlet for women to earn money by growing and marketing the flowers." is very long. Suggest breaking it up.
I believe that it should be "whom" not "who" in "Barbella had been raped by her boyfriend Domenico Cataldo, who she murdered after he refused to restore her honor by marrying her."
simongraham Thank you so much for your insightful review. I truly appreciate your help in improving the article. I think I have made the changes you requested and I tried to trim the lede. She was a fascinating find. If I have time, I'm going to try to do her mother this month. Ping me if I need to look at it again.
SusunW (
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14:55, 6 March 2023 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
This is a stable and well-written article. 98.2% of authorship is by
SusunW. It is currently assessed as a B class article.
The text is clear and comprehensive.
It is written in a summary style, consistent with relevant
Manuals of Style.
The article is of reasonable length, with 2,350 words of readable prose.
The lead is relatively long at 409 words.
Text seems to be neutral.
There is no evidence of edit wars.
Earwig's Copyvio Detector states copyright violation is unlikely, with a score of 23.7%.
All accessible sources seem live.
Spot checks, of Cooper 1922, Cova 2022 and Pucci 2022 confirm that references are relevant.
References appear to be from generally reputable sources. I particularly enjoyed the contemporary voices, like the articles in the New York Times from 1887 and 1907, as well as the more recent as I feel they helped contextualise her.
The images seem appropriate and relevant.
All images have relevant PD tags.
Review
Suggest amending the sentence "In one such initiative, she fought for the pardon of an Italian immigrant Maria Barbella accused of murder" to either "...she fought for the pardon of an Italian immigrant, Maria Barbella, accused of murder", "...she fought for the pardon of Maria Barbella, an Italian immigrant accused of murder" or something similar.
The sentence "For three decades after the first Brazza Lace Cooperative School opened in 1891, the main earnings of women in the region came from producing lace, or growing violets, which she encouraged her brother-in-law Filippo Savorgnan di Brazza to develop from a wild white violet to enable another outlet for women to earn money by growing and marketing the flowers." is very long. Suggest breaking it up.
I believe that it should be "whom" not "who" in "Barbella had been raped by her boyfriend Domenico Cataldo, who she murdered after he refused to restore her honor by marrying her."
simongraham Thank you so much for your insightful review. I truly appreciate your help in improving the article. I think I have made the changes you requested and I tried to trim the lede. She was a fascinating find. If I have time, I'm going to try to do her mother this month. Ping me if I need to look at it again.
SusunW (
talk)
14:55, 6 March 2023 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.